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Tyro

@Tyro

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+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#331

lovely....👏

i'm so behind commenting on this FF...uff.......what to do now...ita 10 parts...god bahut jyada lamba ho jaayega....😆

nahi nahi...chota comment for now....😆...will get back to my long comments afterwards....

all the parts were awesome.....right from her dad telling her that she is getting married to the train journey....fabulous...👏

loved all the marriage ceremonies n games....it was a new experience for me.....i didnt know much abt it...n it was surely informative n entertaining...😳 😆

the dhoti tieing, the papad war, the ring game, the one where she sits on his lap....there were so many....i think i have to make a list......😆

once again loved each n every bit....😃

the last update...abt the train journey....UNRESERVED......awesome.......👏

they both were wanting to talk to each other....especially geet i think....😳

loved the way they were teasing each other near the gate...woh passerby ko bhi jab hi aana tha😡..thoda baad me aa jaata...😆..but haan wo public place hai...to u have to control...😆

was glad that they found empty place to sit n talk...rather in their language....seducing each other....😉

now both of them will go to sleep thinking abt each other...like the past few days..no no...only 1 hi din to hua hai unki shaadi ko....i really need to concentrate on the update...😆

cant wait for the next part...update soon....

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johnangad

@johnangad

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Posted: 14 years ago

#332

as geet said, great "foreplay"!

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arabianpaki

@arabianpaki

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#333

I'm grinning and blushing at the same time!😳 I absolutely loved the update!
Talk about foreplay..Maan is definitely a tease. I think so is Geet, is her shy ways, so one can tell 😉 they're perfect for each other...its so surreal!
I had to read it twice, cause the first time around, I was holding my breath thinking someone was gonna come, considering she has cousins who don't mind interrupting...phew😆
This train ride is gonna be memorable ride! I've never been on a train, and I always wanted to ride in one ..and subways/metros don't count! Now I'm more anxious to travel on a train.. though I prefer traveling in one that doesn't have closed door ;)

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Limerance

@Limerance

Voyager

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Posted: 14 years ago

#334

Originally posted by: 6thElement

I guess the ritual part is a hit. I was scared that people will get bored as I get into the details, but its turning to be the other way round.

No this will be a short one...perhaps 30 updates. NY times is definitely different. And Rooftop is even more complex. Keep visiting and thanks for your comments.

Hasini

Yes these rituals are wonderful to read about. It's very different from most of the stuff on the forum. As are your other works like NY Times and Rooftop. I love the complexity as you said. It makes one think and process the writing rather than it being an easy read which I what I love about all of your FFs.

The latest update was amazing too. Maan is such a tease and Geet's attitude is adorable also. I wish I had time to write more but I have to get back to being productive. But thanks for the long update and keep writing!

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Hima

@Ramhari

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#335

Thank you for the awesome update.
The train journey was beautifully written.
Maan was teasing her so much and she was hitting back at him.
The choice of saree was beautiful.
Geet always felt his effect now she also knows what effect she has on him.
Good for her.
First kiss part was lovely.
The way she confessed and the way he wanted to make it special for her were too good.
Hope it happens soon.

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Hima

@Ramhari

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#336

Originally posted by: 6thElement

Thank you for the wishes. Glad you have liked them all.
The icing was my favorite too. Oh! yes he is such a sweet talker...I have made him that way...so yes he will be the same to Daadi and everyone.
Geet will have her own charm too.

Thank you for the reply.

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Antares

@Antares

Rocker

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Posted: 14 years ago

#337

Fantastic updates, Hasini!

Maan is such a tease.....but sweet as well. He though Geet was mad at him for bribing the pandit and suggested visiting her grandmother. The rituals were nicely penned.....so much fun to read. Their budding desires and also their attempts to win....lolz.

The train part was great as well. They finally got some time to spend together, alone. Teasing, conversing, romancing.....it was thoroughly enjoyable. I am really loving the way it's coming on.

Do continue soon.

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known

@mitzi11

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Posted: 14 years ago

#338

beautiful story & hilarious love it pls cont soonnnnnnnnnn thanks pm

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jenny

@ajenn

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#339

Beautiful.
I jst found dis FF.
Superb update. First from the part geet's dad propose d marriage alliance news till the current train journey. Totally luved every inch in it. U explained every details so well.
I luv reading all the marriage ceremonies. It kept me entertaining..
But i nvr had seen those kinds of games over at my country.
WIsh 'ey do play over here. would be really fun to see.
The last update on train.Beautiful train journey.
Loved the way 'ey tease each other. Or better to say as foreplay.
Hope ull b able to come out wif such scene in palghat as well. Its so fun to read.
BTW palghat is in Kerala rite. Could u add on some Boat House scene. 😉

Plz add me into ur PM list. Keep writing.. Its wonderful