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Posted: 14 years ago

#51

nice ff n awesome part n add me to the pm list i loved it

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Hafsah Qamar

@c00l_girl

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#52

hye friends!! thanks alooot for liking my update n commenting..🤗 ur comments mean alooot to me.. wiyhout wasting ur time, here's the update, hope u like it..😃 so read n enjoy:

PART- 4

geet and maan were standing in the principal's office.. unhon ne dobara ladai shuru kar di..
Geet: ye sab tumhari galti hai.. tumhari wajah se mujhe bhi punishment mil gayi.. huh
Maan: meri wajah se?? tum samajhti kya ho apne aap ko?? galti pehle tum karo aur sara ilzam bhi mujh pe daal do..huh
ek dum se principal ne murr ke dekha to wo log chup ho gaye..
Principal: ab batao k kis wajah se tum logo k beech jhagra ho raha tha..
Geet: sir main ne kuch nahin kia.. ye sab es ki galti hai. main to college mein new hoon..
Maan: sir meri wajah se kuch nahin hua.. sab es k attitude ki wajah se start hua..
Principal: ab tum dono phir se shuru matt ho jao.. silence!! agar ab main ne tum logo ko ladte hue dekha to tum log soch bhi nahin sakte k kya punishment milegi..
Geet n Maan: sorry sir!!
Principal: ok! now lets go both of u to ur classes.. aur ab mujhe koi complaint nahin milni chahiye..
Geet n Maan: ok sir!!
Principal: now go..
maan aur geet, dono boht gusse mein principal k room se nikle..
Principal: en bachon ki wajah se kisi din main pagal ho jaunga..
maan aur geet jab class mein pohnchay to pata chala k dono ek hi class mein hain.. aur unhon ne dekha k sab boht ache friends ban chuke thay..
Geet: naintara, arjun! tum log yahan kya kar rahe ho??
Maan: (taunting): han khud ko to kuch nazar ata nahin hai aur doosron ki aankhon ko button kehti hai..
Geet: main jin k mounh nahin lagti.. i dont care what u say!
Romeo: guys! ab tum log bas bhi karo ge?? now stop fighting..
Arjun: ek dusre ko ek moka to do..
Naintara: ho sakta hai k tum log best friends ban jao..
Geet: yeh aur mera best friend??? no chance..
itne mein teacher came..
Students: good morning sir!!
Teacher: good morning students.. now sit n open ur books..
class teacher came..
Class teacher: students! i have an important announcement for you.. dance ka intercollege competition hone wala hai aur hum har class se do jodis ko select kar rahe hain so jo bhi es competition mein part lena chahta hai, wo apna naam parsun tak mujhe de dey.. kyunki parsun last day hai.. ok students??
Students: yes sir!!
Class teacher: thats good.. now continue ur studies..
Students: thank you sir!!
Teacher: to hum kahan thay??
Romeo: class mein hi thay sir..
the whole class started laughing..
Teacher: behave urself romeo.. now students open chp 1 of ur book n start reading..
after sometime, students were reading n the bell rang..
Romeo: thank god ye period guzra..
Arjun: romeo, tum sab teachers ko yunhi tang karte ho??
Dev: abhi to yeh kuch bhi nahin tha.. aage aage dekho, hota hai kya!
Naintara: really?? phir to boht maza ane wala hai..
maan n geet were walking with them silently n were also in angry mood..
Romeo: maan tu bhi kuch bol le..
Naintara: han geet tum log itne khamosh kyun ho??
Geet: tum log jo bol rahe ho to mujhe bolne ki kya zarurat hai..
maan to itne gusse mein tha k woh kisi se baat hi nahin kar raha tha..
Dev: yar maan ab gussa thook bhi de..
Naintara: nahin nahin yahan matt thookna, ganda ho jayega
Arjun: naintara ye sirf ek kehne ki baat hai..
all were laughing n maan aur geet k faces per bhi smile ayi..
Romeo: hey guys! dekho maan aur geet hanse..
Maan: mujhe aisi fazool baaton pe hansi nahin ati.. huh
All friends: nahin nahin tum hanse thay, hum sab ne tum dono ko smile karte hue dekha.. ab bas bhi karo na plz..
the bell rang.. aur chutti ho gayi..
Maan: im going home..
Geet: main bhi ja rahi hoon, naintara tu nahin ayegi??
Naintara: geet yar plz thodi der bas..
Geet: main to bhool hi gayi thi k ab tere new friends ban gaye hain.. unhi k sath ghar chali jana..
Naintara: geet!!
Arjun: dont worry naintara... abi wo gusse mein thi es liye aisa bol gayi.. kal tak theek ho jaegi.. tu to janti hai na geet ko..
Dev: han naintara! dont worry.. chalo hum tumhein ghar chor dete hain..
Naintara: (sad)ok!!
maan reached home..(gusse mein)
Dadi maa: maan beta aap aa gaye??
Maan: g dadi maa..
Dadi maa: kaisa raha aap ka din??
Maan: dadi maa plz college k bare mein to kuch na poochein..
Dadi maa: kyun beta kya hua??
Maan: dadi maa! aj ek ladki ki wajah se sara din mera bura guzra.. sara din mera mood off raha..
Dadi maa: kon thi wo ladki?
Maan: pata nahin dadi maa.. koi ne student thi.. pata nahin kya samajhti hai apne aap ko.. churail
Dadi maa: acha maan beta ab gussa matt kijiye.. aur ja k fresh ho jaiye, main nakul se khana lagane ko kehti hoon..
Maan: theek hai dadi maa!
on the other side, at geet's home:
Geet: good afternoon dadaji..
Dadaji: geet puttar!! tu aa gayi.. college ka pehla din kaisa guzra?? teri shakal dekh k to lag raha hai k aj k din tujhe bilkul acha nahin guzra..
Geet: dadaji! aj ka din aur acha?? huh uski shakal dekh k kabhi kisi ka din acha guzar sakta hai..
Dadaji: geet beta!! kya hua??
Geet: dadaji!! subha subha ek ladke se gate pe takkar ho gayi aur boht ladai hui.. phir us k friends ne mere friends ko bhi cheen lia.. aur uski wajah se college k pehle din hi mujhe principal k office mein principal se dant khani pari..
Dadaji: friends se yaad aya.. naintara kahan hai??
Geet: naintara ki to aap baat hi matt kijiye.. main us se boht nara hoon..
Dadaji: beta ab us ne kya kia??
Geet: us ne new friends bana liye..
Dadaji: beta! new friends banana koi buri baat to nahin hai.. tumhein bhi banana chahiye.. tabhi to tum college mein mazay kar sako gi na!
Geet: par dadaji..
Dadaji: par war kuch nahin..
Geet: ok dadaji.. i'll try!!
Dadaji: ye hui na baat!! ja beta tu hath mounh dho le, phir khana kha le..
Geet: ok dadaji!! main abhi aati hoon..

friends, abi tak bas itna hi.. if u wanna give any suggestion, u r most welcome!😊 if u like it then plz dont forget to press the like button n also do comment.. n if u dont like it then feel free to criticize..😃
thanks,
hafsah

Edited by dollie16 - 14 years ago

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Deepa

@spvd

Trailblazer

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#53

part 4
nice part................Maan aur Geet hate each other's attitude...................par i think they will be best friends..................cont soon...............

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Sanzy|Sanz

@felicitysmoak.

Trailblazer

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#54

awesome update di

loved it

cant wait 4 da next part

con soon

thanks 4 da pm

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CrazzyBusy

@CrazzyBusy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#55

Awesome udpate dear
poor Maaneet both had a bad day coz of each other
update soon

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Debolina

@debomaaneet

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#56

hi hafsah!!!
i knw m vry late.,.bt at last i've found d URL of ur FF..
der se hi sahi...i wl cmnt 4 each of ur update. :)
first of all----a heartiest congratulation 4 ur 1st FF!!!&d name of dis ff is so alluring,Magical Dreamland...its really very dreamy!! :-D i lkd it so much..
n b/w dere r so many twists,omg!!dev is maan's bf n naintara is geet's....it was totally unxpctd..bt dkhkar a66a v laga..:)

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Debolina

@debomaaneet

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#57

chapter-1
vry nice update...geet's new avatar...like in dis avatar nvr imagine her..u r d 1st hafsha!! :-)

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Debolina

@debomaaneet

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#58

part 2 was shrt bt nice...
n part 3,long n outstanding!!!
love maaneet's fight n hw dev,arjun,naintara,benji/romeo hv bcm frnd..
bdw...in character u've introduced benji as romeo bt here in part 3-u said benji..
bt i'd nt any prblm 2 identfy him.so its ok...
n benji naam hi rakhna cz romeo se benji naam hi a66a lagega as a clg stdnt.

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Debolina

@debomaaneet

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#59

part-4
awsome update!!!!
i vry mch like ur story telling method...it is like..some1 is c ntng 4m background..n den nxt maaneet action is happening..
well done...vry vry nice.
ok updt soon...wl eagerly wait 4 nxt update.

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Hafsah Qamar

@c00l_girl

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: debomaaneet
part 2 was shrt bt nice...
n part 3,long n outstanding!!!
love maaneet's fight n hw dev,arjun,naintara,benji/romeo hv bcm frnd..
bdw...in character u've introduced benji as romeo bt here in part 3-u said benji..
bt i'd nt any prblm 2 identfy him.so its ok...
n benji naam hi rakhna cz romeo se benji naam hi a66a lagega as a clg stdnt.

hye.. dear!! thank u soooo much for ur compliments!!😉
n sorry for writing the wrong name..😕
i was feeling that i have written something wrong..😆