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@qazplm

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Posted: 14 years ago

#31

Firstly, a huge congratulations to you for opening a second thread👏🥳This FF truly in every sense deserves to complete as many threads as it wants to. The story, the characters, the writing, the flow, the pictures....absolutely everything is applaud worthy. Shrina, your my rockstar.🤗

This part was so so sooooo amazing. I loved so many parts...it's just hard to pinpoint one. RM are really interesting, but AA truly have some crackling chemistry in your FF. And then AR, where do I start? They have such an awkward beautiful connection going on...I can't help but blush in all their parts. Armaan is so my favorite character. (more of him pretty please in the next part)

Some of the parts I loved:

"Bye" Armaan caught her green eyes and she smiled back. She walked away with her long, glossy black ponytail bouncing behind her while her curvy hips swayed gently from side to side, mesmerizing him.

Damn.

This part could have seemed vulgar or crude...but it just comes off as very endearing. I love how Armaan's so mesmerized by her.

"Definitely definitely page 92." Armaan stated in between laughs. "Damn Anjali...we all know you'd be flexible in bed. You don't need to show it off to all your admirers."

The whole scene between the three was hilarious. Atul's comments and Anjali's retorts were making me go ROFL.🤣 And then the whole Kamasutra talk was just LFMAO😆

Her breath caught in her lungs when she turned a corner and looked up to find Armaan leaning against the wall outside the women's locker room, waiting for her.

And ofcourse the AR scene...their just too magical. Even a simple look between them makes me all giddy.

All in all, I love you and your FF so damn much. It makes me so happy when you update. And now that this update of yours has left me all breathless, please do the tiny favor of letting me know when your planning to update so that I can start breathing again?😳

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...Aphrodite...

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Posted: 14 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: aRohAAnGeL
SHRINAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!! YES IM SCREAMING! Thank you thank you thank you thank you soooooooooooooo dammnnn muchhh!!! finally ur back...and definately with a bang....shitt duddee!! hurry up with the next one before i decided i want to hunt u down and make u write with a danda on your head =]

SAMEEERRRAAA!! lol...thank you thank you thank you for commenting!! It makes me happy that you're soooo happy! Haha I'm back!! Thank you for liking the part honey!! Uh oh...I'm gonna have to get on Chapter 15 if I want my life! *starts typing...FAST*....It'll be here soon!! haha love you girl.

Originally posted by: krazzy4armaan
hey nyc update!
n congrats on ur second thread

Thank you!! I'm glad you enjoyed the part! xx

Originally posted by: -saBii-
WOOHOOO!!

The queen is back!
Welcome back missy.

& my goodness what a chapter it was. *sigh* I was missing the flirt Armaan is, and you just poured it all out for me. YAY.

Ooooh, Rahul & Muskaan... it's very different to what they were in the show, but considering there's just no chance you'll seperate 'em, I definitely like it.

& OMG. Atul is so much more FLIRTATIOUS! You go boy!!

Aphrodite.. my love for you is like being manhandled into a hug by Armaan Malik. :D

<3 sabs.

Hey girl...sorry for not replying earlier to the first thread! My bad!!....Chapter 14 took up alot of my time!! The 'queen'? I LOVE IT ... haha...I would never consider myself a queen on if but i'll take it! haha. Thank you! It's glad to be back! Haha...this was a good chapter if you are an AR fan...I got soo many requests for more AR so I obliged! I guess RM are different from the show...I like Rahul's flirty side...I think it's sexy. Oh and Muskaan's Miss Confident so I like their pairing.
Atul is SO much less immature in my FF and I love him that way....lol...he got a bit annoying in the show.
Oh my god...can I just say your little one liner at the end made me smile till no end! You're a natural!! I love it!!
Keep commenting honey...I look forward to hearing from you. Love you xxx

Originally posted by: simply.me
yeahhhhhh finally....i loved this chapter....armaan is absolutly hilarious😆 n so are the rest of the gang....plz update soonnn n thanks for the pm

Hey girl! Yes! lol...finally...I know I've been MIA for a while now. Thank you for liking the chapter!!...I love Armaan...being inside his head is a lot of fun!! I'll update as soon as I can and you're very welcome for the PM! xx

Originally posted by: shreyshrey
oh my gosh!!!!
hi aphrodite....

i was a silent reader for this fanfic AGES ago...

and i am sooo happy that ur back with a bang!!!

pls update soon and pm me.....

i have sent you a buddy request already...

keep writing...

love

shreya

Hey Shreya! Welcome to my FF lol...I should really be welcoming myself considering I was away for so long. I LOVE hearing from silent readers...I really do. Thank you for writing a comment...you didn't have to but you did anyway and I really appreciate it. I'm glad to be back! I will update as soon as possible and now that you're on my buddy list you should get a pm from me the next time I update! Thank you for your support...I look forward to your comment next time! xx

Originally posted by: sjain
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Comment soon lovely! 😊

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Surat

@mrs-sr

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#33

Hi Dear,

Finally u are back and updated

First congratz on new thread

And the part was just awesome

Such a funny part heheh.

But waiting when somehting is gonna happen between AR

hehe.

Loved Rahul-Muskaan part so sweet.

Thanku so much for the PM

And plz plz plz update soonnn!

LoveSurat.

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...Aphrodite...

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Posted: 14 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: Riddss
heyyy dear,
nice part
continue soon

love
Riddss

Hello!! I'm glad you commented...thank you and I'll update again as soon as possible :) xx

Originally posted by: Radhika Shah
Love the part!!!
Thanks for the PM and updating!!!

Hey Radhika! Thank you!! You're very welcome for the PM and I'll update as soon as possible! =)

Originally posted by: sweet.melody
OMG WOW!!! This is called coming back with a BANG!!

The chapter was so good! I love how you revolved all stories around one trip to the gym and yet made all three of the stories so different from each other!

Haha the girls being ogled at by like everyone in the gym..talk about awkward!

Riddhima and the shouting with the headphones in her ears.. God knows how many times I've done that in shops lol
And loving how Rahul wants to make sure Armaan realizes that Riddhima isn't just any other girl he can have a one-nighter with and all that. Totally sweet of him!

LMAO at Anji's position.. That too in the middle of the gym when she's already got all eyes on her!

And as for the RM part.. you know me.. totally dreaming about it! Loved how Muskaan is totally attracted to him, and giving excuses for being near him. And the attraction is completely reciprocated from the other side as well. Also I love how, Muskaan still had genuine concern for him about his past.
and the thought about I'm a female im supposed to appreciate the male physique.. LOL!

Ooo Girls and Guys night. sounds nice! Somehow I'm thinking it might get combined as the night progresses eh? *wink*

And once again, loved the RM moment at the end when he asked her if she is sure she doesn't want the guys to join, but she controlled herself. :)

As I said before... you seriously came back with a bang!! Amazing update.. and can't wait to see the story progress!
How is DE? That's where you are now right? Hope everything is going well.. Hope your mom is doing well too :)

- Shilpa

Aww I haven't heard from you for so long! THANK YOU for all the sweet words...it's nice to be back! This chapter was actually my hardest yet...so thank you for liking it! Oh god I've been there done that with the headphones lol...i just did it now with my parents! I love Rahul's protective side...he's really good at being firm but soft.
The crab asana is the only intricate yoga move I can do which is why i included it! haha...my friends at college make of me for it so that's where that came from! lol You're an RMian i know i know...I hope you liked thier development this chapter. There's a definite attraction! I like Muskaan because she can be completely crazy and dramatic but she's down to earth and caring as well. Haha..glad you liked the thought!!
I like your prediction for the next chapter!...haha...we'll see 😉
The ending! I just didn't know how to end this chapter! lol...i'm happy you mentioned it!
Aww thank you for your compliments...Ive been gone for so long that I'm not deserving! I like DE...I'm home for winter and can't wait to go back to college. Had a great semester =) everything's well and mummy is actually taking a nap as I type this so I'd say everything's well haha! Nice hearing from you...I love love love long comments! This was soo much fun to read...keep em coming xxx

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool
awesome part cont soon

Glad you liked it Jyothi! Thanks for commenting and I'll continue as soon as I can! xx

Originally posted by: shiv-gauri4eva
heyy..i read this FF a few months ago and fell in love with it..i am sooo glad that you decided to continue!!eagerly waiting for the next update!

Hey!! You're new to commenting right? I don't think I've seen your username before...if you are welcome! I'm glad you commented!! I did decide to continue...and I'll definitely continue soon. Thanks for the support...hopefully I'll see more of you! xx

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Nina

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Rocker

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Posted: 14 years ago

#35

SHRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

jana you BACK ?! :O

Im sooo happyy to see you back

CONGRATZ for the new thread *jhappiizz*

Wooowwww ouuttstanddiinngg update jana, like always , you left us "BREATHLESS"

Loved the way you described , Armaan's feelings/reactions and all, and same goes for Riddhima, and others ^^

It was sooo cuutee, loved their little scene, lol she couldnt hear anything, cause of her song :P

he was like mesmeriizzeeddd by her *dreamy*

loved the way he blackmailed her , for telling him the truth :P adorraablleeeeeeee <3

and lol Anji's part was sooooo fuunny lol , poor Armaan and his dirty sense of humour ROFL :P

Simplyyyyyy GREAAATTTTT

Totallyy looveedd itttt

ROCKING update

Welcome BACK once again

Cant wait for the next update <3

Love, Nina ^^

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Posted: 14 years ago

#36

amazing...u r bak with da bang...waiting for more updates...plzz dont make uz wait for da next 7 months:P...tc

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sweet.melody

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Posted: 14 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: ...Aphrodite...

Aww I haven't heard from you for so long! THANK YOU for all the sweet words...it's nice to be back! This chapter was actually my hardest yet...so thank you for liking it! Oh god I've been there done that with the headphones lol...i just did it now with my parents! I love Rahul's protective side...he's really good at being firm but soft.
The crab asana is the only intricate yoga move I can do which is why i included it! haha...my friends at college make of me for it so that's where that came from! lol You're an RMian i know i know...I hope you liked thier development this chapter. There's a definite attraction! I like Muskaan because she can be completely crazy and dramatic but she's down to earth and caring as well. Haha..glad you liked the thought!!
I like your prediction for the next chapter!...haha...we'll see 😉
The ending! I just didn't know how to end this chapter! lol...i'm happy you mentioned it!
Aww thank you for your compliments...Ive been gone for so long that I'm not deserving! I like DE...I'm home for winter and can't wait to go back to college. Had a great semester =) everything's well and mummy is actually taking a nap as I type this so I'd say everything's well haha! Nice hearing from you...I love love love long comments! This was soo much fun to read...keep em coming xxx

I knoww! been agess. Wanted to contact you.. but had no other way to contact you except through IF. But I'm glad your back now! Don't vanish on us now haha, or at least let us know you're alright!
Exactly, he is protective, but he isn't aggressive in his ways.. he is willing to hear people out before deciding what to do.
Ohh ok. I only know the surya asana.. and a few others, but don't know the sames lol. But I've never come across this on, shall check it out on Google.
I loved their progression in this chapter, and love how their story is moving perfectly. It started out with feelings for each other, and then Muskaan being there for Rahul as he trusted her with his past, and now the story is moving ahead. I absolutely LOVE it!!

Ohh don't be so modest.. if I hadn't written an ff for this long.. the part i came back with would be major crap! haha .. you you did a brilliant job of it! And one main thing I adore about your ff, is that you incorporate everyone! Generally the ff will have more of one couple.. and the other couples will only show up when needed.. but you give everyone equal space.. and each couple has a story of their own!

I used to live in DE before I moved to texas, and it's a nice place.. calm and quiet. Which uni do you go to? Glad to hear the everything is going well with you!
And about the long comments.. you just have so much in your ff that, I haveee to tell you about it all, and probably would have told more if I wasn't typing up the comment just as I woke up hehe.

Glad to have you back gorgeous! Keep writing and making us smile :)

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kd_luv

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Posted: 14 years ago

#38

omg omg omg i am soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo soooo sooo happy to see this an updae after like wat seemed lik ages !!!!

god i missed breathless...!!

grl u rock man this wwas gr8 ...plz dnt disappear again ..i cant deal wid the gap again !!

i loved the part .....super job !!

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liveforever

@liveforever

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#39

YAHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!! YOU"RE BACKKKK!!!!!!!!!!

Awesome PART!!!!!!

ReAlly well done!!

Please do update soon1

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@awarapan.

Rocker

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Posted: 14 years ago

#40

I'm sort of on cloud nine at the moment. I can't believe it, the 7 month wait is finally over! Oh my. I can't believe it :$ Thank you SO much for returning back to the FF and continuing it. It never felt like you ever left with Chapter 14 being so "Friggin fantastic" I'm in awe of your writing, I really, really, really am. Thanks so much for retuning and writing such an absolutely amazing update. Every aspect of it was so amazing, and it was so worth waiting for. Though I personally am craving for MUCH more, as I write. I've read the chapter about three times now, and I'll be reading it for the fourth very soon. You write so gracefully, so elegantly and so flawlessly, I'm sort of really jealous. I commend you; this update was top notch!

As for the details, it's my favourite part! :$
Don't get scared by my essay-like comment, please! Teheee.

I have to say, I love the way you give a brief but subtle overview on all of your characters, and that you don't forget them, nor do you sidetrack and only focus on one couple. I LOVE how you give an inside scoop of what they're actually thinking, and what they're feeling. I've come to love all of the characters individually, and as a couple, and gang. They're all portrayed so well, and I still do see some connections with DMG1, which I adore. I'm seriously in LOVE with this FF. I've been craving more for the longest time, and you updated. Thank you, once again!

Some of my favourite moments of Chapter 14: "See, while other girls turned to chocolate, ranting conversations with their best friends and excessive amounts of alcohol to relieve their stress... Riddhima worked out. Listening to good music, feeling the brisk air on her cheeks and enduring the burn in her legs was the way she released her frustration." - I love the way you're so descriptive and so intriguing! Your writing has a certain edge to it, which just makes me want so much more. I love love love that you made Ridhima not like every other girl out there, and that you gave Ridhima herself a subtle edge. I love that!

Another part which I absolutely adored was: His fingers looped around her head phones as he gave them a gentle tug, freeing the buds from her ears and sending loud music spilling into the air around them. He leaned into her. "Can you hear me now?" I really loved that. Just the subtle interaction between Armaan and Ridhima was so awe worthy! I seriously loved that little bit between the two. Their interaction doesn't have to be big, or anything like that, just a little touch gives the bigger picture, which is so amazing. I hope I'm making sense? I'm not too sure, I'm just thinking and writing, haha.

Another moment which I absolutely loveeeeed was: "Damn Riddhima...are you trying to make all the guys here pass out?" Rahul quipped as he looked around obviously noticing the attention she was receiving and shook his head. Riddhima laughed nervously, "I didn't know the guys in Goa were so.... attentive." Armaan rolled his eyes.... keep it in your pants boys.I swear that was SO hilarious, I was legit laughing super hard. I couldn't get over Armaan's remark, and it was so apt for the situation. Considering the Casanova Armaan is, I couldn't believe this was coming from him. Oh God, it was an awesome moment between the boys and Ridhima. I love love loveeeee they way you incorporate the gang's interactions so well. It's one thing we lost after the end of DMG1, and I love that it's alive somewhere.

"Definitely definitely page 92." Armaan stated in between laughs. "Damn Anjali...we all know you'd be flexible in bed. You don't need to show it off to all your admirers." Anjali gasped and within a split second she came crashing to the ground like a house of cards. "Woah soldier down!" Atul yelled as she writhed on the yoga mat in pain.LOLOLOLOLOLOL. Oh. My. Gosh. I was laughing so hard, omg. I LOVED that part. I definitely loved this part. Coming from Atul that was absolutely hilarious. I think I loved that part a bit too much. And just the fact that Armaan still can piss Anjali off so bad, is absolutely hilarious. Running in with his dirty sex jokes, and Anjali's fall, Oh godddddd - it was a completely epic moment! I loved this little bit between the three A's! Ah, so amazing.

"Oh and next time...try a tank top. You're more than a little distracting in that." He confessed playfully. I loved this little interaction between Rahul and Muskaan. I couldn't get over how much of a flirt they both are! Ah, it made me smile seeing some RM interaction after so long! I really liked the fact that they could be so serious, but so witty and playful all at the same time. It was a really cute moment, but the intensity behind Rahul's words were so awe worthy! I'm really in love with the way you write, hun. I cannot seem to get over it :$

"Are both of you hearing yourselves speak? We've got exhibit A walking around in her bra displaying a glistening set of abs." She heatedly pointed at Muskaan. "...and we've got exhibit B sprinting on a treadmill like she's on the set of Baywatch." She pointed at Riddhima who gasped animatedly." LOL, HAAHAHHAHHAHAHA. I love love loveeeeeee Anji's witty remaks. Oh my god. I was laughing throughout most of this chapter, and smiling like a fool while I read the sweet interactions. Your updates leave me breathless, they really really do! I was so shocked at Anji saying that to both Muskaan and Ridhima, and I couldn't agree anymore. Oh man, it was possibly one of THE best bits of this chapter! I love you so much! Ahhhh.

"I told him what happened...you took me in to your room, sexually harassed me and now I am forever scarred and will never be the same again." she said nonchalantly."I woke you up when you were on the chair and you kept whispering, "Take me Armaan, take me now." and when I said no you kept throwing yourself at me. When that failed you got in to my bed and tried to undress yourself, I stopped you and then you eventually fell asleep," he told the story animatedly, trying his best to conceal any inkling of what actually happened. Now THIS was my FAVOURITE part of the whole chapter. I couldn't get over how witty, smart and playful these two are to each other. Despite the sexual frustration between them both, their interactions are absolutely hilarious, and I commend you for that! I was in awe of this little bit, and I was laughing really hard. I was grinning like a fool as I read Armaan's inner thoughts of Ridhima, and vice versa. I loved loved loved the way they both have so much naughtiness, but at the same time, they're so childish! I love how Armaan gets hesitant and nervous around Ridhima, and how Ridhima just craves to be touching/feeling him! LOL. It was such a cute little moment between the two, and I'm craving so much MORE. Stop tarpoing us D:

I LOVE LOVE LOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE the way you write. I want to read so much more with the next chapter, PLEASE don't leave it for another 7 months, omg. I need some sort of relief from the stress of everyday life, please? I loved this chapter, it felt like you really never left! Update soon, love. I eagerly await another chapter! Thank you so much for this beautttt! <333

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