Breathless ~2~...Note! Page 34 - Page 5

Congratulations on reaching your second thread!! I only started reading your FF sometime last week (well I caught up with the entire thing in like 2 hours LOL and then read it all over again few nights back too haha)... You're an amazing writer and Breathless has undoubtedly become my favourite FF!

AAAAH THE UPDATE :D First off...I can't say how excited I got to see that you updated LOLL I had a horrible and irritatingly interrupted sleep last night...and after 2hrs of finally falling asleep peacefully, I woke up to the sound of the hoover (as you can imagine that was NOT FUN LOL) but as soon as I checked my phone and saw 2-3 wallposts on my FB with everyone telling me BREATHLESS IS UPDATED..it saved me from killing someone LOL you saved my morning!!!! 😆 So I read the update on my phone this morning but the stupid thing wouldn't let me log into my I-F account...thus I had to wait to comment! -_-

Chapter 14: Sweat and Sports Bras

I love the way you've taken the setting of a GYM! I honestly dont think I've seen that one in an AR FF before =)) Atleast not one I've read. Love the relationship the girls sharee...it's so nice to see how Riddhima's fit in so well with the gang and she's already so friendly with Anj & Muski! I literally ROFL'd at Riddhima's question: "Did they spray viagra in the air or something?" 🤣

- - "while other girls turned to chocolate, ranting conversations with their best friends and excessive amounts of alcohol to relieve their stress... Riddhima worked out. Listening to good music, feeling the brisk air on her cheeks and enduring the burn in her legs was the way she released her frustration." -
^ Now THAT was quite inspiring 😆 I think I might just start making more use of that gym membership of mine! :D

I don't know what it is about the way you write, Aphrodite, but you really bring the smallest moments alive! Even something as simple as Riddhima drinking water or putting the lid on her bottle of water LOL it all seems so clear in my mind while reading...It's as though it's really happening. You have an amazingly natural flair for writing. AHH I can't help but randomly add a huge thanks to Mira here, for recommending this FF to me LOL!

I love how the slightest touch from Armaan makes her lose her mind 😳 I don't think I'll ever love a love story as much as that of Armaan-Riddhima...actually, I'm sure of it. And FF's like yours make me fall even more in love with them!!

The way you allow us to know what the characters are thinking and feeling, as well as what they're saying, brings them to life even more. I love how we know what's going on in their hearts and minds, even if it's different to what they're voicing!

"I'm hot and sticky and unbelievably gross."
Armaan scoffed at her last two words....Oh okay Riddhima.
^ THAT was um...REALLY HOT LOL!

Riddhima laughed nervously, "I didn't know the guys in Goa were so.... attentive."
Armaan rolled his eyes.... keep it in your pants boys.
^ LMFAOOOOOOOO!! One does kinda wonder whether Armaan's advice here is for the other guys or himself ;)

Seeing how friendly and easy Atul/Rahul are around Riddhima, and yet there's that slight tension between Armaan-Riddhima even though they have become friends...lights the chemistry between AR on fiiiire! I LOVE that tension!

Armaan-Rahul's convo, with Rahul being slightly protective over Riddhima and wondering what she was doing in Armaan's room, was adorable! Armaan & Rahul's friendship is really cuute and real!

"I know...as much as you like to think I'm some kind of sex fiend. I can control myself, believe it or not." Armaan rolled his eyes at him.
ROFL ROFL ROFLL!

"Definitely definitely page 92." Armaan stated in between laughs. "Damn Anjali...we all know you'd be flexible in bed. You don't need to show it off to all your admirers."
🤣 🤣

Atul-Anjali's segment was adorable and Rahul-Muskaan's track is even cuter! Honestly, I'm a diehard AR fan and never read FF's of other couples...However, I've read every word of Breathless! Including the parts on RM/AA/AN...and they're equally well written. So hats off to youu! I found the part with Anji doing yoga HILARIOUS 😆 I was in bed LOL'ing (like actually laughing out loud LOL)!

Riddhima thinking of Armaan in the shower was 😳 /tehe I'm guessing that she, like Armaan, will also start realising there are some feelings there now ;) I LOOOOOOVED Armaan & Riddhima's little banter outside the changing room...Especially Riddhima's lie/joke about what she told Rahul ROFL! Armaan reacting, to her asking how she ended up in his bed, in a comic way rather than seriously..was totally Armaan!!

The chapter had the perfect balance of cuteness and hotness ;) I laughed lots and yes, I blushed (credit to Armaan) LOL Thank you thank you thank youu for updating! And I hope you update a bit more regularly 😳 because this FF has become really special to me. I guess after DMG ended ('my' DMG ended back in Sept2009) Breathless is one of the few things keeping alive the undeniable and unmatchable magic of AR's love for me! Taaake care, lots of love and PLEASE be back soon LOL! xx

Originally posted by: AmaanKiDeewani

Shrina, Shrina, Shrina..

WHAT CAN I SAY?!

In your words , it was : friggin fantastic ;)

hehee :P

I totally LOVED it! I was laughing and smiling all the way thro this part! AHH it feels so good to READ this amazing FF! yes yes! I totally loved it!<3

All the couples, I swear are so cute! hehe I love them :D

Btw, you did leave me Breathless after this part..;)

Hope you can update soon! =)

Haha! Hey girl! Your comment had me smiling! I'm glad I could make you laugh...it felt so good to post this chapter up!! I'd be lying if I said I had fun writing all of it as I was so nervous! Couldn't get the hang of it...but certain scenes were a lot of fun to write. I'm glad you loved it nonetheless and I'll try to update as soon as possible! thank you xx

Originally posted by: bushrayou

havnet even read it yet but SOO EXCITED!! yay!! you're BACK! cant wait to read! guaranteed great read!

thanks for coming back!!

Haha!! I am back and I'm glad to be!! let me know what you think of it once you're done!! Thank you for commenting...it makes me happy that you're so excited lol!!

Originally posted by: pinkss

Hey Shrinzii...

awesummm update dear....

m really glad 2 see u back....

Breathless's one of ma fav. FF's....i'v been a silent reader of ur FF.....waiting eagerly 4 ur updates all the tym.....last tym i read it...u promised 2 give an update soon...but u neva showed up aftr it 😕

plzz update it more frequently....hope all's well now 😊

n if possible...do add me 2 ur PM list .....

tc....lots n lots of love

JIA 😊

Hey Jia! Thank you soo much...it feels great to be back! it's so flattering for me to hear that Breathless is one of your favorite ff's..there has to be thousands here on IF! I know..I got really busy after my last promise to update soon but don't worry! I'm here now! lol I'll try my best to update more frequently...are you not on my buddy list? I'll have to check that...i recognise your username...you should be on my PM list already. I'll take care of it...thank you for commenting Jia! xx

Originally posted by: diyaa1pk

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Comment soon Diyaa!

Originally posted by: asma_227

Plz add me to the pm list.
This ff is amazing.
I loved this soooooooooooooooooooooo much.........
AR are just amazing.

I'll definitely add you to my buddy list if you're not on there already! Don't worry about it! Thank you soo much for your love and appreciation...I can tell you're new. Welcome to Breathless! I love AR too...hope fully I'll see more of you over my future updates!! Thank you xx

Originally posted by: ahenseven

Hey!! I don't think you'll remember me cause I got to read your amazing fic only after you had finished thirteen chapters .. I was just randomly going through the forum and then suddenly I see breathless 2 and I am like when did that happen .. You won't believe how excited I got .. U finally updated .. Thanks a lot .. Coming to the update it was awesome like always .. How did you even think it won't be up to the mark .. I just love love the way you write .. The way u switch between scenes and incorporate all characters in our update is so amazing .. I think I have already mentioned this but I adore the one liners you give at the end of your updates and oh how can I forget your titles .. How do you come up with such lovey ones everytime .. Hope all is fine with your mom and your all settled-down .. Btw which course are you doing?? .. Please do pm me with your next update if possible .. Eagerly waiting for more and also for your replies .. Hope it's sometime soon .. Take care .. Loads of love neha 😊

I actually remember you very well believe it or not! I have a pretty good memory when it come to comments! Though I was shocked to see you weren't on my PM list...I took care of that straight away! lol Thank you for being so excited...i was excited to finally be here posting up a chapter. I try my best to make the story flow even though there are soo many scenes changes between the couples. Haha! The one liners and the titles are the most fun to create so thank you for appreciating them! My mum's a-okay...she's eating some spring rolls right now lol. I'm pretty much settled and I'm doing pre-medicine/biological sciences! Grr hard work! I'll try my best to reply as soon as possible to all the comments I got in the first thread plus updating the next chapter! Thank you for our support honey...I hope to see more of you! xx

Originally posted by: lil_desi_goddes

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh! you finally updated, and what an update, the part was absolutely amazing!! please do continue soon gorgeous!!

This is so funny! You were my first ever comment and you're still following my fanfic! Amazing! Thank you so much!! Thank you for appreciating it...I definitely appreciate you! I'll continue as soon as I can, thanks again for the support!!

Originally posted by: rising_angel

nice ...part..but this time plz continue soon ....

thx 4 PM

Thank you! I know..I was terrible for leaving Breathless. I'll continue as soon as I can..thanks for commenting!! xx

Originally posted by: Amona

congos 4 da new thraed!!!

love it

pls pm me nxt tym wen u upd8

thnx

AMOON

Thank you Amona! Are you new to Breathless? I don't think i've seen you comment before. If yes, welcome! I'll add you straight away if you're not already on my buddy list so you can get a message! Thanks for commenting! xx

hey shrinzie🤗

i read ur ff afew months back and its really gr8.................

AAAHHHH OMG THIS WAS LIKE OUT OF THE FREAKING WORLD

Originally posted by: ...Aphrodite...

First off Miss Anita...apologies for not replying sooner. I saw your comments on thread one and loved them but I was on a race against time trying to get this chapter up so I couldn't reply. I'm getting to those comment slowly slowly. I'm so glad you came across this ff, I believe it was recommended to you? i might be mistaken! Anyway, you're already extremely valued by me! Your comments make me smile.
Now to this particular one...I'm trying so hard to make the story flow so thanks for noticing! it's really hard when you're chopping up your chapters with different scenes! Haha!! I don't plan on disappearing for that long again so don't worry. You're an AR fan I take it, you must have been somewhat happy with this chapter considering there was an extra focus on them after I got so many requests on 'more AR' lol. Hopefully the other couples were entertaining too!
The yoga scene is one of my favorites too! I don't now if you're familar with the story but I had actually written up chapter 14 months and months ago and somehow lost it on my computer, this was one the scenes I recreated from the original.
AR bonding was fun to write too...I'm trying to keep it as natural as possible! I love the way you quote my writing...it lets me know exactly what you like! Fantastic.
Your comment was not at all essay-like...I like them to be long!! Thanks for commenting honey and I will try to update asap!

Aww don't worry about replying to those comments lol, I know you were trying to do so many things at once! And yes, this FF was recommended to me by Preeti_285 which was recommended to her by ..Mira.. LOL So it went from one person to the next..and I'm so glad I read this!😳 I really REALLY dislike reading FF's that aren't clear in story, that jump unpredictably, that have no purpose, and no consistency but this one has a really intriguing storyline, so I just have to say that the title of your FF, is so apt!! The chapters leave me breathless for real, believe it or not. By the end of it all, I want moree! 😆

Your chapters are beyond amazing, each chapter has something new to offer while the gang is in goa! Its really hatke! I love how you manage to remember all the characters personalities and keep them in check in your writing, it really shows that you understand those characters, and I value that! Yes, I'm a diehard AR fan so im glad the focus was on them a bit more😳, but I ABSOLUTELY love the other characters of DMG TOO! lol...So I really love how you transition so beautifully between RM and AA and then the girls and guy gang! I absolutely love reading each bit of this FF! It's like I imagine it in front of my eyes!😆


AND boy am i glad you included the Yoga scene LOL, that has to be my absolute fave bit from this update lol, cause Armaan was being his typical self and its LOL how Atul's read Armaan's books 🤣


Like I said, everything in this FF is amazingggggg..Im running out of words LOL! Everything is natural, and you have loads of talennnnnnnt! LOVED the GYM angle a lot here :D Can't wait to see what the next chapter focuses on!

Please don't make us wait 7 months lol

Okie, I updated my reply. But wanted to thank you for this part again.🤗

Please do update soon. Will be waiting anxiously.😳

oh and I hope the 'Breathless Beckons' make a comeback. Their my absolute favorite😳

I just went back and looked at the 'Breathless Beckon' picture your had posted for the gym...I could totally imagine all the action happening in there.😃

i love u soooooooo much for continuing and writing such a great part...keep them coming, and please dont go away for months again lol