Breathless ~2~...Note! Page 34 - Page 3

Hey Shrinzii...

😃suprb nd awsome part ..love da way u write .....plz dnt disappear again .......

Plz add me to the pm list.
This ff is amazing.
I loved this soooooooooooooooooooooo much.........
AR are just amazing.

Hey!! I don't think you'll remember me cause I got to read your amazing fic only after you had finished thirteen chapters .. I was just randomly going through the forum and then suddenly I see breathless 2 and I am like when did that happen .. You won't believe how excited I got .. U finally updated .. Thanks a lot .. Coming to the update it was awesome like always .. How did you even think it won't be up to the mark .. I just love love the way you write .. The way u switch between scenes and incorporate all characters in our update is so amazing .. I think I have already mentioned this but I adore the one liners you give at the end of your updates and oh how can I forget your titles .. How do you come up with such lovey ones everytime .. Hope all is fine with your mom and your all settled-down .. Btw which course are you doing?? .. Please do pm me with your next update if possible .. Eagerly waiting for more and also for your replies .. Hope it's sometime soon .. Take care .. Loads of love neha 😊

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh! you finally updated, and what an update, the part was absolutely amazing!! please do continue soon gorgeous!!

nice ...part..but this time plz continue soon ....

thx 4 PM

congos 4 da new thraed!!!

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OMG, My net just had to go out when I went to go edit this comment. Okie, I need to go read it one more time 😆 I still can't believe you're back, and with such a bang! Your update wasn't disappointing at all..I PROMISEEE <3 AHH, you know what's really funny is for the past few days especially..I've been pressing refresh to see if you've updated..and I don't come online for a couple hours..and it's been updated!😆 AHH, but this was a nice surprise. Promise to come back soon with my comment :D
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Shrina, honestly I can't even tell you how amazing a writer you are! Everything in your fan fic just flows so easily and beautifully! The conversations. the characters, the interactions..it all feels so real..and I guess that's part of the reason I love your fic so much, is because in a way it's really realistic, and there's such subtle romance oozing from each line, each part! 😍

Okay, I've said this once before, but I can't help but repeat myself..I absolutely lovee the Riddhima in your fan fic. She has this spunk in her that I absolutely love!

"Did they spray viagra in the air or something?" Riddhima questioned,

That made me laugh so much when I read it. I could totally imagine them being stared down by the young, and some not so young guys at the gym! How do you come up with these lines? They're so witty! 😆 I loved how you added in the greasy afro haired guy..aha poor Muskaan!

Oh, and that's another character that I love. She has so much of the DMG Muskaan in her, yet she's so different at the same time, and I absolutely love that! She's feisty, and sexy, and it would be a sin if I didn't tell you how extremely cute I found the interactions between Rahul and Muskaan! But I'll tell you about that. when I get to that part :D

Riddhima took a deep breath and nervously glanced up to see what unfortunate soul she had just thrown her not-so-fresh self at. To her complete surprise, she was met by a smiling face with a familiar pair of sparkling grey eyes looking down at her.

Armaan?

I absolutely am in LOVE with the Armaan in your fan fic! You make him sound unbelievably sexy! 😳

Riddhima realized that she was still pressed up against his chest and started to back away when his hand shot out and brushed against her cheek. Her heart started beating wildly in her chest at the contact. She felt like she had just run the fifty yard dash, simply from his light touch across her skin.

Not only Riddhima's my heart started beating 423480291483 times faster too! 😆 I was like what did he say, what is he doing..? Until I read that he was only reaching over to tug her earphones out..but the way he made his hands deliberately brush over her cheeks like that before he tugged them out made me love him even more. It's those little gestures that you make him do that I absolutely love. They're obviously both crazily attracted to each other, and just these little things make it even cuter.

deep, smooth-as-silk voice in her ear.

AHH, I love the way you describe his voice!

Armaan scoffed at her last two words....Oh okay Riddhima.

Ha, I love him. He was obviously enjoying having her so close to him because she obviously would never press against his body like that deliberately..atleast not yet 😳


"Definitely definitely page 92." Armaan stated in between laughs. "Damn Anjali...we all know you'd be flexible in bed. You don't need to show it off to all your admirers."

LOLLL. Armaan, man he definitely lives up to his image! 😆

He reached over and took her bottle of water away from her in an attempt to meet here eye to eye.

Rahul and Muskaan are so extremely cute in your fan fic, and to be honest..I like them a lot better here than I did in DMG. The whole fidgeting with her water bottle out of nervousness, and then him take it away from her...the quiet nervous voices they talked in..and his comment about how she made him so happy and all..so so so cute! I especially loved how you ended the part with him asking her if she really just wanted a girls night out? I was hoping she'd ask them to join too😆 But it's okay, I'm sure you'll have something great for the next part too..and a girls night out is definitely always fun!



Shrina! I know I've said "I love, I love, I love" like a 1000 times in this comment already, but I really did LOVE how Riddhima thought about Armaan while taking her shower😳 That was so cute, and then the way he was waiting outside for her! I just love everything about AR, and their interactions and just everything in this FF😍 It gives me butterflies in my tummy just reading about them! This Casanova is definitely falling hard for Riddhima!

You're such an amazing writer, I honestly am a fan! This has to be the best FF on the forum, and I really hope we'll get an update soooon! But I'm just really glad you got this part up..it was definitely worth the long wait! 😃 There's just no words to describe how good you are, and perfect your FF is. It truly leaves me breathless


-Mira

p.s. sorry for the long comment but I couldn't help it 😳

Originally posted by: Kajenaliya

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Comment soon honey!

Originally posted by: oishi_ksg

Congratulations for the new thread..You really deserve it 😃👏 Your Breathless FF is really taking my Breath away......I Loved it This Part is also very Good😃. awesomeee. Keep it up & hope you'll be regular now to update😃

Thank you soo much! Haha...the title seems very fitting then! I'm glad you enjoyed the part and I'll definitely update more often now that I have time off! I really appreciate your comments! keep them coming xx

Originally posted by: pinkss

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Comment soon love!

Originally posted by: anitamalik

AHHH Shrina I'm so glad you updated! First off, congrats on your second thread :D Your FF is seriously one of the best..it has a proper storyline, and it flows so smoothly, and the characterizations are perfect to the dot! Thats what I look for in FF's! :D

Now coming to the part, if after seven months you give such an update, damn, I don't mind you disappearing every 7 months! LOL Okay I kid. I would die if you disappeared another 7 months, but this update was seriously amazing! I can't believe you thought that it would not be upto the mark!

I loved the whole Gym angle in this update and how you managed to jump from each of the characters..My fave bits were AR of course, but it was nice to see the interactions with RM, AA, and then the gang simultaneously.

You come up with some pretty clever lines! Some of my faves..this yoga scene was really funny, and totally imaginable! I love how you are consistent with the characters personalities, thats an amazing part of your writing!

"Because I've read Armaan's copy of the Kamasutra, and you Anjali, are the in-the-flesh replica of page 92." he chuckled.

"Definitely definitely page 92." Armaan stated in between laughs. "Damn Anjali...we all know you'd be flexible in bed. You don't need to show it off to all your admirers."

I loved the whole AR convo outside the locker room..that wittyness, oversmartness from both Ridhima and Armaan..trying to appear super cool from the outside and teasing each other, I love that a lot! It really helps to see a bond forming naturally between the two!

"I woke you up when you were on the chair and you kept whispering, "Take me Armaan, take me now." and when I said no you kept throwing yourself at me. When that failed you got in to my bed and tried to undress yourself, I stopped you and then you eventually fell asleep," he told the story animatedly, trying his best to conceal any inkling of what actually happened.


^^that was unbelievably funny!


Oh AND i absolutely love the little thoughts that go in everyones minds! lol very intriguing!

Your update has left me breathless again! <3 Loved it and hope you update super soon...my comment is like an essay :| but couldn't control myself😆

First off Miss Anita...apologies for not replying sooner. I saw your comments on thread one and loved them but I was on a race against time trying to get this chapter up so I couldn't reply. I'm getting to those comment slowly slowly. I'm so glad you came across this ff, I believe it was recommended to you? i might be mistaken! Anyway, you're already extremely valued by me! Your comments make me smile.
Now to this particular one...I'm trying so hard to make the story flow so thanks for noticing! it's really hard when you're chopping up your chapters with different scenes! Haha!! I don't plan on disappearing for that long again so don't worry. You're an AR fan I take it, you must have been somewhat happy with this chapter considering there was an extra focus on them after I got so many requests on 'more AR' lol. Hopefully the other couples were entertaining too!
The yoga scene is one of my favorites too! I don't now if you're familar with the story but I had actually written up chapter 14 months and months ago and somehow lost it on my computer, this was one the scenes I recreated from the original.
AR bonding was fun to write too...I'm trying to keep it as natural as possible! I love the way you quote my writing...it lets me know exactly what you like! Fantastic.
Your comment was not at all essay-like...I like them to be long!! Thanks for commenting honey and I will try to update asap!

Originally posted by: kavyaa

u updated?? like really?? m shocked & delighted at d same time...
resssssss😃.

Haha! That made me smile...oh yes I did!! Definitely come back and comment...I'd love to know what you thought! xx

Originally posted by: Prinnia

SHRINAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA🤗

OMG!!!😲😲😲...I am too shocked to see u Back with update😲😲
HAW!!😲😲..really man..Just believe me😲😳😆
I pinched myself to make myself believe🤣
Anyways😛....Firstly...CONGRATZZZZZZZZZZZ on new thread🥳 Ms.LL..U know late latif😛😆
😆And and...That part was a Back with a bang😉
Loved the Update😃
Totally funny😆😆..amazing and marvelous😛
Keep continue
and this time plzz soon man
will be waiting😉
Thanks for the PM😳

love ya
Prinz😛

Hey Prinnia honey! So nice to hear from you again! Haha...I'm back! I'm glad I was a pleasant surprise...don't pinch yourself too hard! LOL thanks for your congratulations...I'll take my new nickname happily!! 😳 Thank you for enjoying the part...I'm glad it made you laugh! I'll definitely continue as soon as I can...thanks for commenting. You know I love hearing from you! Love you xx

Originally posted by: Armaan-KSG

Omg i must be dreaming..PLEASE pinch me :| So i just read your update in a rush since its 5 in the morning and i know i should be n bed...so im gunna wake up up tomorro and read properly and then will you give you a LONG comment :D Sounds good?

and also from what i read...loved the lil collission of AR and theyre talk at the end..and also, the lil moment between AA and RM ;)

and cant wait for the girls/guys night out? :P im sure theyre going to bump into each other..LOL

Hey lovely! I'm really sorry for not replying to your comments earlier! Not cool...I know. I was just too busy finishing up Mission Chapter 14. I wanted to thank you for all the support and your comments...they made me smile everytime! You are NOT dreaming haha...it's here...FINALLY here. Took me long enough huh? Omg..I'm flattered that you bothered reading it at 5am! That long comment sounds fabulous!! Glad you liked all the scenes between the couples...and I liked your prediction for the next chapter!! Haha...my lips are sealed..lol. Thank you for your love and come back with a comment...I want to hear more from you! xx

Originally posted by: Tia_0810

loved it,......... after so many days or would say months.... loved it...

continue sooon plzzzzzzzz

Hey Tia! I know I've been gone for what seems like forever! I'm glad you liked this chapter..stay tuned for the next one...I'll update as soon as possible! Thanks for commenting xx

Originally posted by: AshiYuvi4life

SHRINZIE! that was 2 days you cheater! When we were chatting, I remember somebody saying, "I have a deadline for myself. It has to be done by tomorrow." Tomorrow my butt! rofl!

OMG OMG OMG! I loved AA in this soooo much! I keep saying this but I really wish Atul had been this bold in the show. It suits him somehow. His comebacks are hilarious and he's a great match-up to Anji's feisty-ness. LOL

R-M were equally rocking as well! I think Muskaan is more responsive to Rahul's forwardness. Not to mention that Rahul IS a bit more forward in this. Timid, but forward nonetheless. I love it! mwahahahaha!

YOU! we have some stuff to discuss! Wait for my phone call, missy! or we can just skype. or fb. whatever.

I LOVED this part btw! update super soon!

kisses!

-Komzie

Komziee!! Hey Girl!! Nooooo!! My internet's been dead slow over the past two days because of the snow! I had to use my iphone to surf the net...though I'd be lying if I said I didn't like the extra time I got to polish up the chapter!! lol
You loved AA?! Have you transformed in to Borna?! Haha!! Yeh I really wish Atul wasn't so immature in DMG...I didn't like his character at all. Yeh they're both a match made in heaven and hell it seems like from my FF..haha.
I like the flirting between RM...you're probably right about Muskaan, not forgetting she's always been a little bit more dramatic...including in my FF. I like flirty Rahul! He's sexy 😉
Ooohh fun...I'll tell you what...we'll skype. I'll catch you on fb some time and arrange a date? How about it? Thanks for the comment love :))