FF: Maan&Geet: 120, Chandini's Rooftop - CLOSED

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ursrithika

@ursrithika

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Posted: 14 years ago

#141

waiting for the next part dear... keep writng dear....

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shivangi783

@shivangi783

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Posted: 14 years ago

#142

Beautiful update with Sach-Jhooth game.

Its amazing how they both are opening to each other despite of trying hard not to. Both have a dark life-they are MK and Chandini to the whole world but they are being Maan and Geet to each other unknowningly!

And I see a completely different style of writing here. This has a lot of dialogues and its pretty tough, I guess, as compared to writing monologues.

Also, take ample care of yourself. Health comes first.

Get well soon😊

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Hetal

@ibelieveinpink

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Posted: 14 years ago

#143

Part 3: Lock and Key: I've told you na, that I love your titles!!! Lock and key…a perfect fit…I hope I'm on the right track!!

AHHH!! He felt her hand….so cute! Geet in a flat tone asks him to leave her hand…that's so chweet!!! I love how lost he gets into her eyes!!!

Manisha scene was kind of funny!!! I liked how she calls him "chikna"….and Maan's disgust and then he questions why he didn't feel disgusted with Geet since he's been with her for a lot longer than Manisha!! Kuch hone laga hai….YIPPEEE!!!!

This was a very beautifully written line: "deepest a man had ever touched her with his eyes still yielding to speak to her soul."…..so immensely beautiful!! I swear…I just loved this!!!

Both are attracted to each other….so nice…I wonder how they'll ever be together b/c they so different…complete opposites of each other in background, status, and thoughts! Their union seems so impossible, but I love the fact that both are trying to fight off the attraction, it means it's a super strong pull towards each other!!!!

I loved the question game….quite an entertaining read!!! I love the wrist grabbing…nice intensity!!! Maan and Geet are similar…they hid their true selves from the world! Geet is Chandni and Maan is MK…I think both are guarded! I don't know why but I think both are afraid of getting hurt and afraid of feeling vulnerable b/c they don't have someone in their life that truly understands their true self.

The whole you aren't bored bit was really cute and funny!!! I loved the ending where he treis to untie her dupatta…awwww!!! And then he wants to hear her voice….and the best part he's medication was wearing off, so he was fully conscious!

"Another day had passed; bringing them closer for no reason they could comprehend. A random game of chance played in that room and for now they cared that they had become each other's key for the locks of their life that spun lies around them."

I loved the last 2 sentences….just plain old perfect! They're going closer together and it's so awesome!! That growing attraction and attachment…the 4 days will pass and hopefully they realize their feelings!!

Sorry for commenting so late! I really loved this part! I hope there's more heart to heart between them….loved the questions game and wished it had continued!! Excellent chapter and very nicely and descriptively written!! Well done!!

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sailaa

@sailaa

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Posted: 14 years ago

#144

Hi Hasini,

Just read the entire FF in one go. And boy! am I impressed!!! You have a great talent in story telling. I am really glad to have come across this FF.

The way your are building the extremely palpable tension between Maan and Geet is superb. The allure of love stories with star-crossed lovers has always been great - be it Romeo and Juliet or Great Gatsby and so on. This FF is no different. Maan and Geet's situations in life are so intriguing that that in itself sets the stage for a great love story. I love the scenario in which Maan and Geet have found themselves - alone for 5 days with nothing to do. What better way to spend time than to discover the other person (or shall we say their own selves). And their game of truth and dare is fantastic. They are really testing their boundaries since they know that they have nothing to lose. If anything, they may have something to gain. But they don't know that yet. How they come to that realization is what will keep us all on tenterhooks and addicted to your FF.

Get well soon and please keep giving these wonderful gems.

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kasturi11

@kasturi11

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Posted: 14 years ago

#145

hi great n different ff

do pm me for next update

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princess163

@princess163

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Posted: 14 years ago

#146

Hi hansini!

first of all, wish u a very very happy and prosperous new year!

though I am a late in wishing, but better late than never!

I had left a comment already but, not a long one so decided to leave one more!

I really appreciate the fact that you posted even though you are not well!

please take care and get well soon!

lots of good health wishes fom my side!

I am a regular reader of your fan fics(rooftop and new york times), well from the time I have found them which was a little under a month!

Though I don't really comment much but you can count me in your silent regular readers and appreciators!

the point behind not commenting much is that I will become repetetive because everytime I would be writing that the fan fic is awesome and you are an amazing writer which is the truth!

You have captured the feelings of both the lead characters really well here!

I know there are still a few days left for Maan to be at the rooftop, and I am looking forward to them, but, I am more eagerly awaiting the time when Maan will be out of here and then what his thought process will be about Geet!

Please get well soon!

We are waiting for our great Hansini-the storyteller to come and feed us with another dose of Chandini's Dillema and MSk's attitude(despite being all broken and injured, but he is MSK after all!)

Take care!

love,

Swati