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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 13 years ago

#111

Originally posted by: Nirvrithi
Hey Neela...

I was so surprised :) You still didnt forget me.

Sorry for being silent for so long..just got busy with my little bundle of joy :) She keep me busy always.. Still I just peek through the PMs and stories here whenever I get a break.. but not enough time for replying or even to press Like.. so sorry for that.. Hope you can understand..

Seriously,I dont remember asking for a horror story.. Did I? might be.. looks like anesthesia really worked on me.. thank god I didnt forgot you and other friends here :)

Thanks a lot for remembering me on ur thread.. Keep in touch.. Abt the story - more than horror, I felt a pain.. and you always manage to do that..

haaye main mar jawaaa Nivi...aakhir me tumhe bula hi liya na mehfil me 🤗 kya Comeback comment diya hai...this is what I miss...kab aaogi yaar...jaldi se settle ho jaao. aur haan...horror ka nahi kaha kya?? 😕 arre ki farq painda hai ji...tussi aaye aur chhaa gaye...kam se kam iss dedication k bahane jhalak to dikhaya na...kaafi hai. and all worth it 😊

aur ilzaam lagana bandh karo ji...I cause pain? 😆 puraanay din yaad dil diya...miss you yaar...jaldi wapas aao..

-Neela

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.SilentPrincess

@.SilentPrincess

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Posted: 13 years ago

#112

Analysis of Ashna, Rehguzar & Baraf Baari.
Written by Monal aka Kasurbest.

It was done for a dare.. you might have seen the truth and dare thread? Anyways I thought of posting it here too. :) Posting on behalf of Monal, she's being shy! 😳

1. OS 'Aashna' written by Neela on Mayank and Nupur from the show MJHT. Story of two lovers. Where the bride is married off to some one else but on the first night after her marriage he comes to know, and they elope together. Where they marry yet not marry. They stay together, become each with the sindoor of her beloved's blood. Neela proficiently writes in urdu setting on how much rules, regulations, rituals, respect of elders is main part of life. But love over rules every thing. Love is one thing that needs no rules, no rituals, no regulations, no respect. Only thing it needs is understanding and courage to face it, to embrace it, to fall for it. Even after 25 years their love stays the same. No matter the gape of years, the wrinkles on skin, the white hair. Love is always young and eternal.

2. OS 'Rehguzar' written by Neela on Mayank and Nupur from the show MJHT. Story where two strangers meet at a Airport. That one small meeting becoming the a moment to cherish forever. Nothing unique, no fantasy - simple pure real coincidence. Neela points that every event happen for a reason. You meet some one in just not just for one meeting, may be you might meet them again. May be you were going to, but for some reason you missed that chance. Like in this one small shot it portrays about this kind of moment that comes and goes my many people's life. So over look it, some think about it, some jot it down in their journal, some keep the moment in their heart giving it a special place.

3. OS 'Baraf Baari' written by Neela on Mayank and Nupur from the show MJHT. The cold winter night, where a stranger steps at your door. It happens a lot. Where snow is falling endless, it is white all around, late a night, you are sipping hot coffee, beating the cold as you grieve our the sad past - and you hear a knock. Stranger seeking help. Though its a regular thing is that you help them and the next this is offer coffee of hot chocolate. Neela writes the cold night in such a lovely way. Leaving a note in the end that was it all a dream or a reality? Dream - no trace of any one in the house. Reality - Only one thing changed. What can it be?

Enjoy! :)

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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 12 years ago

#113

Its dark in the room when Nupur wakes up to hear some muffled voices coming from the dining area. Her worries are growing into a panic feel as she realises that Mayank is not at home. He called earlier to inform her that he needs to attend a meeting offsite and may not return till early morning. And there is no one else in the house! So what's with that voice ?'she asks herself and what happened to all the lights! Scared and shaken by the growing sounds of the whispers from the other room, she starts scrounging for her mobile phone but no luck! Having no other choice, she grabs hold of anything that she can in the dark, in this case a hairbrush (not really understanding how it would help her fight against whatever it is out there) and muttering all her prayers that she could gather in her mind at that state, she walks into the dining area and switches the lights on..at the split of a second she hears a small crowd saying something on top of their voice but before she could grasp any of it..she literally screams the life out of everyone in fear and in anticipation. As she turns around and tries to make a run for her life, she hits her face on his broad chest who holds her tight and whispers into her ears.."Happy Birthday Nupur!" Even though she can't see, as her face is completely sunk in him, she does not fail to recognise his touch, his heartbeat ..his hold on to her..its Mayank! She grabs on to him tight as gradually her fears dissipate and is overshadowed by the sense of protection and warmth she feels in his arms. It takes a minute or two before her sense of logic returns and she looks back to find all their friends, Samrat, Diya, Uday, Abhi, Gunjan gathered around the dining table with a cake in front of them, smiling and wishing Nupur a happy birthday. A somewhat embarrased Nupur realises what a fool she made out of herself and deducing the fact that none other than Mayank was behind this mischievious plan, she turns to him and with all the strength that she was left with after this ordeal, she tries to hit him with that hairbrush when suddenly out of nowhere she is blinded by the foam that is being sprayed all over her face by Mayank! "Stop it Mayank..kya hai..stop it.." and she wakes up in that state! She looks around her to realise that the room is not dark..the dim light is creating a certain ambience through the small apartment'there is no sound coming from the other rooms. And then just out of her habit, as she starts searching for him beside her in the bed, she realises that he is not there! Hasn't been for quite some time. She has been sleeping in this bed all alone for an eternity it seems. Gosh! must be a dream 'she says to herself running her fingers thru her hair. Yes, she was dreaming'more of a flashback of her subconscious mind as it seems ..memories from her birthday last year. Its been exactly a year now'and its her birthday again today. For the past 3 years that she has been married to Mayank, he has never failed to surprise her on her birthday. Every year, just when she thinks she is prepared for his cunning plans and nothing can shock her this time, there he is with something so out of the box! How can someone like him, who is so mature and subtle in nature, serious about his career, passionate about his profession, committed to his mother and family has so much time in hand to assert so much of an effort for her birthday..an ordinary day that he makes so very special not only for her but for both of them'how? she asks herself and with a smile replies to the same. "Yeah..that's my Mayank"

11th September: 0530 Hrs

Its 5.30am in the morning and she heads off to the washroom. As she sees herself in the mirror, she recalls those days with him. Mayank screaming on top his voice..NUPURRR! and a naughty smirk comes on her face as she enters the washroom to see Mayank staring at himself in the mirror.

M: yeh kya haiii! kya hua meri muchhon ko?? kahan gayi'? (as he tries to feel for the missing half of his moustache)
N: tch tch..lagta hai chuhay le gaye
M: (grabs her tight) to tumhari harqat hai yeh!
N: arre maine kya kiya! woh dekho..(she points to the floor where half of his tache is lying around)
M: Oh GOD! main tumhe nahi chhorunga..ruko..(as she flees from there chuckling along)

eventually he catches her and holds her tight in his arms.."ab isski saza to tumhe milegi hi.." He tries to kiss her lips when she suddenly points to the floor and says.."woh dekho baaki aadha bhi gayah.." and as he tries to feel for his tache again on his face, she escapes. Getting out of her trance, Nupur starts smiling as she looks at herself in the mirror'such a child he is! She freshens up and heads off to the kitchen. She makes 4 slices of toast, pours juice in 2 glasses and makes 1 cup of tea and 1 cup of coffee and sets the table for breakfast. She sits on her chair with her 2 slices of toast, juice and tea, the rest is laid out colse by, on the side of a table that has an empty chair. She reads the newspaper whilst having her breakfast and when done, she clears the dishes from the table, washes them and returns back to her room to get ready.

11th September: 0800 Hrs

Driver opens the door for her as she enters the car on her way to the clinic. Its been more than 3 months since she joined this private clinic upon a special request to be transferred from one of the most famous and internationally recognised hospital in the world to this relatively smaller, quiet place which is quite out of the way from the main city and takes approximately 45 mins drive to reach. As the car passes by the familiar route, Nupur leans back on her seat and starts gathering all her memories together..life has added another year to her sorrows and grief. She tries to take herself back to those days when she was the happiest girl in town! A daredevil with a damn care attitude. She was like that forbidden fruit that no men were supposed to touch or even think about. As she walked thru the alleys of the streets of her town, it seemed like she had this label attached on her face "Off Limits". So no men had the guts to say or do anything to her..at the same time she was the reason of envy for the girls of her age. If only they could be as smart, intelligent, brave and ambitious as Nupur! And Nupur..she doesn't give two cents to those girls who walk their grounds as they own the world but have nothing to show for themselves. There's only 3 things that matter to her, 1. her father..who takes great pride in his daughters and have high hopes and expectations from them, 2. Her career, her ambition to become a doctor. A very successful one and 3. Mayank, an ex senior student of the same medical college she attends and who is now an Assistant Lecturer at the same place. For the past 3 years, since she has been in 2nd year of her medical degree, she has been drooling over him! Whilst she has the 1st two of her priorities all sorted out, this 3rd and her latest passion seems to be out of control! Is it her or her ego that is not allowing her to be close to him and confess her hidden feelings for him. And Mayank'ufff the most talented, popular, award winning plus handsome medical student..every girl that she sees around her is trying to woo him. "Look at them", she says to herself..is that a new outfit Annie is wearing!! Why..what's the occasion? oh yes..Dr. Sharma is coming over for a lecture today. And what's with all that make-up on Riya!! Could that skirt be any shorter!!! aaaghhh 'how cheap!" As she walks thru the corridors of the campus cursing the brats around her, to her great surprise guess who she clashes on to..none other than Dr. Mayank Sharma. For a few seconds, Nupur felt like she was frozen or something..with all her will power and force, she can't seem to be able to move away from him or free herself from his hold on to her. She is cursing herself constantly.."you fool'at least say sorry..he is your professor'kya soch rahe honge.." After 2 lifetime and perhaps a few minutes, she manages to say "Sorry'woh humnain dekha nahi aapko.."

M: itnay saal lage aapko humain dekhnay me? inteha hogayi hamari intezar ki..
N: jee'(as surprised and shocked as she is but still not looking at him)
M: jee'bas issi lamhe ka to intezar tha k aap yun hi hamare aghosh me honge kisi din aur nazar jhuka ke kuch kehne ki chakkar me kuch aur keh jayengi aur dekhiye aaj kismet ne wohi lamha mutthi me thama gaya
N: aap..matlab hum..yaani k hum ..I mean..kya kaha?
M: hahhaaa'aapko kuch kehne ki zaroorat nahi. bas zara apne chaaron orre dekhiye. yahan pe har ek larki kisi na kisi tarha se apne aankhon me aik chaha, ek talab liye ghum rahi hai. hum innse nazrein nahi mila paate kyun ki inki aankhon me woh hayaa nahi jo utthe to qayamat dhaaye aur jo jhukay to dil doob jaaye..unki labon per woh khamoshi nahi jo kuch baghair kahe hi sab kuch keh jaaye'innke lehje me woh ada nahi jo humain fida kar jaaye. aisi larki poori university me saalon se bas ek hi dekha hai humnain aur woh iss waqt hamare baahon me hai (he smiles at her)

And that's how their journey started and they never looked back since that moment. They have been together always' thru thick and thin and nothing could ever separate them. Mayank became one of the most talented and well known neurologist in the country being admired across all his patients and colleagues. Nupur graduated from medical college and went for further qualification and research in psychiatry. After seeing each other for nearly 2 years, they get married. 3 years have passed by now and Mayank's love for Nupur seemed to grow each day. Nupur remembers how everyday he used to wake up before she did and talk to her while playing with her hair. Sometimes, although awakened by him, she would still keep her eyes closed so that he can say his heart's piece..she recalls that one moment when he was as usual talking to her in her sleep..

M: abhi mat uttho'thori dair aur dekh lene do. Let me stop the sun from rising..let the day not start..let the worldly matters not separate us from each other, let the moon still be hanging..waiting to disappear but always be with us..I love you..everyday you give me a reason to live and every reason that I have to live for..is YOU (he kisses her forehead and goes to the washroom to freshen up)

Everything was like a dream come true for her'a never ending dream..their life was a stolen piece of paradise. Everything seemed perfect until one day'.

The car makes a sudden stop at the signal which takes her out of her past. She is nearly there now'so she gets herself ready..

11th September: 1030 Hrs

Upon arrival at the clinic, she completes the paperwork as per her daily routine and soon after that, goes to see her patients. She is standing in front of a patient's cabin now but before entering she wonders'"will he remember today?" she takes a deep sigh and with all her hopes, enters the cabin where he is lying on his bed facing the other way.

N: Mayank'
He slowly turns around and sits up. Staring at her white apron and glaring into her eyes, after couple of minutes he breaks his silence..

M: Good Morning doctor. How are you today?
N: I am fine..aur aap? (she smiles..its a good sign, he does remember...)
M: Good I guess. So are you new here?
N: (she freezes..all her hope is crushed into pieces..he doesn't remember! But she does not allow her sadness to show on her face. She takes a deep breath and hiding that tear that just rolled down from the corner of her eye, she continues with the conversation) Yes..I am new here. aaj hi join ki hai. tabiyet kaisi hai aapki ab? (although this wasn't the truth because as a doctor, she has been seeing him for the past 3 months every single day but with Mayank's condition, its not a good idea to confuse him any further and fiddle with his memories)
M: thik hai bas..not sure why I am here though! I have a very important seminar to attend but they say I can't leave! zara aap hi samjhayye..I am Mayank Sharma, the neurologist who performs complicated surgery on patients and walks out successful. yahan pe kyun humain qaid karke rakkha hai?
N: hmm sahi kaha aap ne'aapko yahan kyun rakkha hua hai? koi to wajah hogi na 'shayed aapki tabiyet thik nahi aur aap to khud ek doctor hai..aap se behter kaun jaanta hai k hum kisi ko baghair koi marz k admit nahi karte hospital me
M: oh c'mon look at me! kisi bhi sirhe se hum beemar lagte hai kya? Why don't you check me? C'mon..

...so she comes and sits next to him and starts her check up..heart rate, pulse rate, bp..)

M: (suddenly completely out of context and with a confused tone in his voice) pata nahi kyun aap bohat jaane pehchane se lagte ho. have we met before?
N: accha! aapko kya lagta hai?
M: aapka chehra'seems very familiar. Can't remember...
N: (seeing Mayank becoming restless as he tries to remember, Nupur intervenes) yes'we have. My name is Nupur, Nupur Bhushan Sharma aur hum ek doosre ko acchi tarha se jaante hai
M: really!! no wonder shakal kaafi pehchani si lagti hai. to hum kahan mile the pehle? koi medical conference?
N: nahi (she smiles). We studied in the same medical college, 6 years ago.

And she reminds him slowly'how they met and how they used to be close to each other. Those days when they used sneak their way round to see each other as it was not allowed for staff to date students, those movie dates, popocorn fights in the hall, pizza competition (no one could beat Nupur when it came to Pizzas)

M: accha..to hum bohat close the ek doosre ke? sirf dost hi the ya usse bhi zyada..?
N: yeh baat aap apne dil se poochiye..aapko pata lag jayega.

She ends the conversation at this stage and waives a "see you" to him as she needs to check on other patients leaving him behind to find his trail on to the story forward.

11th September 1330 Hrs

Yes, this is how her life has been for the past 3 months now and she knows at what stage too much information can become harmful for Mayank to absorb thru his mind. Everytime, he has an attack, he would forget his life, parts of it, even Nupur and everytime she would be there to remind him, in a way that is prescribed by medical science but with a heart that is full of love and hope. That's how it is with Mayank now'eversince he has been diagnosed with Alzheimer's disease 9 months ago. He wakes up some days and starts acting as if he is somewhere else, in a different time zone with bunch of strangers! This phase of temporal amnesia lasts from one hour to sometimes even weeks with him. And trying to remind him in a way that does not cause pressure on his nerve cells has now become the only therapeutical treatment that is keeping him alive from having a major stroke caused by the sudden friction of his neurones. To carry forward such treatment successfully, Mayank has been transferred to this clinic where the atmosphere is fresh and new to his mind and not too many familiar faces are hovering about causing him stress and tension. Nupur also took a transfer from her previous place to be with him, not only as his psychotherapist but of course as his sole companion, his beloved wife.

After completing her round of seeing all her patients, Nupur returns to her office and as she gazes thru the window, she recalls that horrifying moment when all this began..about 9 months ago..

Mayank was shouting at his junior staff members in his office when one day Nupur came round to pick him up from work to home..

M: itni laparwahi!! This is Neurology department'yahan aisi ghaltiyon ki bhugtan kaisi hoti hai you guys have any idea??? agar sahi waqt pe hum surgery na karte then we could have lost that patient! Where do you guys live? kahan rehte ho aap log? apni zimmedariyon ka ahsaas hai k nahi? agar ilaaj nahi karna chahte marizon ka to jao kisi nukkad me jaake dukaan khol k baith jao aur muft me ilaaj karo logo ki..you are not needed here in my department. Now get out of here'
One of the student: sir..humnain aapko bataya tha..aapko page bhi kiya tha aur aap ne kaha bhi tha k prep kare patient ko. But you didn't show up..
M: What rubbish! mujhe aisa koi call nahi aaya! Listen..if you want to be a responsible doctor, then try to be honest and take ownership for your mistakes. kisi aur per blame dene se marizon ka na ilaaj hoga na aapki zimmedariya khatam ho jayegi. So plz..stop this bullshit and go back to your work. And remember, aainda aisi ghalti hui to I will suspend you all.

Nupur sees them walking out of Mayank's cabin and all of them are muttering something about it wasn't their fault..Mayank is in fault here. Nupur enters the cabin and asks Mayank what's going on. It seems like one of his patients had a major stroke at night and Mayank was paged to attend when he advised his juniors to prepare the patient for surgery as he would be arriving soon. But all afternoon Mayank was attending a seminar and the patient was not attended. When he returned he was advised about the critical state of the patient and promptly Mayank operated on him but now he is mad at his juniors as he does not recall them calling or paging him on the patient.

N: per Mayank, tum to subhe subhe hi nikal gaye the issi surgery k liye. tumhe call aaya tha aur tumne khud humain kaha k kisi patient ki critical state hai. Hospital nahi aaye to kahan gaye the?
M: kya keh rahe ho Nupur. Main to waqt pe hi nikla ghar se aur seedha seminar pe chala gaya.

That's the first time Nupur realised something was wrong but then again she waived it off as a one off incident as it happens to everyone at some stage of life especially someone like Mayank who has so much on his plate lately. Stress can often lead you to being forgetful and tensed. But soon enough, the reoccurrance of these incidents were creating some disturbances in their lives. When Mayank booked a table for their anniversary dinner but did not show up and kept Nupur waiting. And when she returned home, she found Mayank very angry who was blaming Nupur for forgetting their anniversary and coming home so late on this special day especially when he took half day off from work. And then one day, this one incident just shook the grounds off her feet..when she woke up in the middle of the night, saw he was missing from bed and as she walked to the study room, noticed him busy doing something..

N: kya kar rahe ho Mayank'itnay raat ko
M: woh shaadi k kuch tayari kar raha tha. Nupur ne kaha tha kuch venues select karne ko phir hum dono mil ke unhe dekhne jayenge. shaadi ko time zyada nahi hai'main bhi na bhool jaata hoon (and he gets busy with his work)
N: (with shaken hands she caresses his hair) Mayank..
M: (before she could say anything) tum so jao. main Nupur ko phone karta hoon..kal tayar rahe to hum venues dekhne jayenge

Looking at his eyes, Nupur realises the harshest truth of her life, Mayank can't recognise her. Not only that, he has lost sense of time as well.

11th September 1500 Hrs

Consistent knock on her cabin door brings her out of her flashback. The office boy is here to inform her that Mayank has had a severe attack and has been taken to the main hospital in the city by the ambulance. Nupur rushes to her car instructing the driver to head towards the hospital. It can't get any worse..she mumbles to herself. How can her life be so complicated..she cannot hold herself together anymore and breaks into tears. Upon arriving in the hospital, their senior colleague advises Nupur that Mayank had a severe trauma attack but has been sedated to calm his nerves down. No one should disturb him until he wakes up and he performs a full check up on Mayank to make detailed observations on his mental state and prescribe the right medications. Nupur waits outside for hours'.looking thru those windows of his cabin door, she recalls the day when her fate was sealed with a single piece of terrifying news'how can she forget that ominous day..

when as usual, Nupur comes home and reaches for her bedroom to freshen up when she hears scuffled noises coming from the studyroom. When she enters, she finds the entire room turned upside down..books, papers, broken glasses all over the floor and Mayank is on his chair with his head down on the table. Is he weeping..? Nupur rushes to him and embraces him.

N: kya hua tumhe?
M: (holding her tight) sab kuch khatam hogaya Nupur..sab kuch..as he continues to weep
N: kuch khatam nahi hua..sab thik hai. bas tum aise rona bandh karo'its not you. aao room me chalo..thori dair araam kero hum baad me baat karte hai

She takes Mayank with her to the bedroom and resting his head on her lap whilst she caresses his hair slowly, he falls asleep. Soon after, she receives a call from the Head of his Dept summarising what happened in the hospital when Mayank froze in the middle of a complex brain surgery and the patient went to coma due to excessive bleeding. The department has suspended Mayank until a full check up on his health condition is completed. He also added the possibility of Mayank suffering from Alzheimer's disease which was confirmed a week later after few tests. It was the very same hospital where she is now, it is where Mayank's career took a hike, it is where he was diagnosed with the disease. Mayank could not handle the bitter truth of his life and his aggressive reaction to the repetitive attacks lead him to the clinic where he is far far away from his friends and family. As she looks at his senseless body in the hospital bed, she realises what Mayank has lost..a promising career, a prospective life with so many dreams and hopes, his confidence and his will to live. It seems the only thing he has not yet lost is Nupur'her unconditional love, her prayers and her hopes have given Mayank the strength to fight but then again to her great dismay, the only person whom he loves, relies upon, in one single attack he wouldn't even remember her!

Sitting at the bench outside his cabin, Nupur holds onto that last string of hope. Closing her eyes and folding her hands together, she prays for no more agony for Mayank and a piece of happiness for them both. Her exhausted body can no longer handle the stress and before she realises, she doses off.

11th September 2000 Hrs

When she wakes up, its late in the evening and she looks thru the cabin door windows to find no one in the room! In haste, she enters the room and checks everywhere and he is nowhere to be found!! She enquires the staff, thereception but no one knows anything!!! She calls their senior colleague who was off duty at that time and he promises that he will do everything to find Mayank plus such irresponsibilities in the hospital will not be tolerated as strict actions will be taken against the ones who have shown such negligence in this matter. He instructs her to go home whilst he checks the matter urgently.

11th September 2200 Hrs

A clueless, lost of all hopes Dr. Nupur Bhushan Sharma returns home shattered in pieces..worried as to what happened to Mayank, where did he go in this mental condition? And what could possibly happen to him if he is out there!'as she enters the apartment and closes the door behind her, all the worries and concerns overtake her soul and just as she is about to break down on her knees in tears, she is held by someone..! In splits of a second she knew who it was'his hold, his touch, his strong grips and as he pulls her up towards him, his scent, his throbbing heart gives it away! Without even looking, she embraces him and starts weeping. Holding her even closer to him, he caresses her hair, kisses her head and says.."I can forget the whole world'even you sometimes but this day when God made you..for me and me only..how can I forget this day? Happy Birthday Jaan"

Although tears still rolling down her cheeks, she has a smile on her face..this is the best birthday present she ever had. One long lost moment from the only Love of her life...

-Neela-

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maria

@Maria.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#114

B-E-A-U-T-F-U-L OS

the way you showed Nupur love for Mayank it was so beautiful and in the last Mayank's words took my breath for a moment..

Amazing piece of writing.

loved it

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bhargavi

@gopi06

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Posted: 12 years ago

#115

beautiful one
thanks for the pm

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AWonderfulChaos

@AWonderfulChaos

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Posted: 12 years ago

#116

OMG this was jusy mindblowing!! gave me shivers all through out!! you are a wonderful writer Neela !!! really m teary :) keep writing more and more...:) take care !!