My First OS: Before The End

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Hey fellas!

This is my very first OS. This is inspired by a really special novel, one of the best ones I have ever read. Hope I do it fair enough. Please leave your comments and hit the LIKE tab. They would really mean a lot to me..


Before The End


This is the story of two sisters, one a donor another a recipient, one younger another elder, one dying to live another living to die. This is my story. And who am I?

Two years back..

I am Serena Keitherson, 13 years of age, residing in Texas, USA. I live with my family of five, my mom, Katy Keitherson, my dad, Robin Keitherson, my younger brother, Michael, me and my elder sister, Jane. Our life is not like the lives of a normal family in Texas or any other of the states.

My sister Jane is a patient of acute hemophilia. It is a rare genetic disorder in which a person's body does not form platelets, the cells which cause clotting resulting in ceaseless blood loss. I have studied about this disease in my school textbooks but I do not know much about it other than what I witness happening to my sister. She bleeds regularly from her nose and often vomits blood. Her hair is all gone and she considers herself to be ugly.

Jane's illness is not curable but treatable. She lives on the cells transplanted from my body to hers. That is the only reason I was made to be born. When Jane had first shown the symptoms about 12 years back, the doctors immediately advised my parents to mate and give birth to her sibling who could have the same bone-marrow as hers. So, my father gave his sperm to my mother and with the natural process of reproduction in humans, I came into this strange world.

Ever since that day, the 23rd of October, 1997, my body has facilitated a spare part shop for my sister. Blood, DNA samples, antibodies, bone-marrow and so many other tissues and products of my body have been transported to Jane's without any service tax paid to me. It may have been done with Michael as well but his bone-marrow did not exactly match Jane's luckily.

Jane's life has been miserable to admit very honestly. She has never been to school but has received good education from my parents. She spends most of her time in bed or in the hospital and her hobby is just reading. Her illness has changed the life all of us in the family. My Dad has settled with a small desk job turning down the offer of working in San Fransisco, my mom has resigned from the post of Senior Sales Executive in a private firm, my brother feels the most ignored of the lot and spends most of his time with his worthless friends. Actually, he suffered with Dyslexia for quite some time after his birth but that was too small a problem to be considered by my parents in front of Jane's life-taking illness. And as for me, I already described my value to my parents and my sister's life.

I never opposed any of the treatments met to me by my parents who regard me nothing more than a factory manufacturing the cells which keeps Jane alive. This was only because I love my sister whatsoever. I cannot bear to lose her. But today, I have decided to stand against the wishes of my parents. They are asking for one of my kidneys. I may have given it to them as always but when the doctor warned that this might leave me with a life-long "be cautious" tag, I am not going to do it for any sake. After all, I cannot sacrifice my freedom, freedom to jump, dance, eat junk food, party with friends and have many boyfriends for my whole life.

I love Jane a lot. But she has to die, its set and no one can change it whatsoever. We'll also remember her the way she remembers Mark.

Yes, not to forget, Mark was Jane's one and only boyfriend. Surprisingly, he suffered with the same illness as Jane did and they met at the hospital lying on adjacent beds. He was a great guy, handsome, charming, fair, tall and very understanding, the best a girl could ever wish for. They became friends at their first meet and an awesome couple in course of time. I remember Mark taking Jane to her once ever Prom four years back. They had kissed that night as Jane told me on her return. Those days were the only ones when we could see her laugh, play and enjoy like every other teen.

But, the days of joy could not stay along. Mark disappeared just the day after the Prom night. Jane was crushed, heart-broken. Mark betrayed her. But, this was something we thought, not the truth. Only two days later did we know that Mark did not betray Jane but life did betray him. Mark died on the night of the prom due to ceaseless blood loss in his car. This had happened just after he dropped Jane back home. This news was worse for Jane than Mark's treachery. She wept, yelled and almost went mad for days after. But, slowly she did come back to her senses though for no good as she had again lost her rare smile.

You may think that I am very selfish a person to not give my kidney to my own sister and save her life, but one who has to suffers knows it best. No matter what my parents say I would not give a single part more to Jane.


Days have passed and my sister has almost reached her last stage. My mother is mad at me for doing this to my sister. She has slapped me over 15 times and would have slapped more had my father not come to stop her. But, I would not move an inch from my decision. I have got my medical emancipation papers registered and now I legally cannot be forced to transfer any of my body parts against my will. I know my mother won't forgive me for this, may be she would forget that she ever had two daughters but still, I will stick to my thought. I know my Dad will understand me somehow and Michael is too small to know what I have done.

Since she is left with no other option but to see her beloved daughter go, Mom is inside the ward with Jane and is sharing with her, the most of her love and caress. They both need each other the most at the moment.



TODAY..

That date was 25th September, 2008. My sister died that day. All know that it was more or less my fault but what all know is not the complete truth. I have a secret, a secret wish, Jane's last wish. Jane Keitherson, my sister, wanted to die. She wanted to leave this world, the pain it has, but she knew that Mom won't ever let her do this to herself. So, I chose to be the one to do it, to relieve her of her pain, her stress. Though, today my Mom hates me and I live away from my family in an Orphanage, I still love Jane and I know she loves me. This is what, she told me, Before The End.

-Serena.


Hope you people liked it. Please please please comment and express your views on my very first attempt.

Cheers,

Nidzi. =)

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Posted: 14 years ago
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YAY!!! Am the first one to comment...!!

Yaar Nidhi you r just unbelievably awesome...Am actually in tears now!!!

Such a emotional ,sisters love kind of story!!..I really loved this OS of yours seriously..!! kya likha hai re....

I actually Envy you..such a great Writer...superb..!!!

Super Duper Like to this Os...>:D<
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: princess.anu

YAY!!! Am the first one to comment...!!

Yaar Nidhi you r just unbelievably awesome...Am actually in tears now!!!

Such a emotional ,sisters love kind of story!!..I really loved this OS of yours seriously..!! kya likha hai re....

I actually Envy you..such a great Writer...superb..!!!

Super Duper Like to this Os...>:D<


Aww!! Thanks a lot Anu. .. This comment means a lot to me. .What a great start to the response. .. Thanks a lot.

I hope main tujhe aise hi rulati rahun apni writings se! =D

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Awesome OS dear
just too good
it was amazing - i must sat
u made me emotional
loved it dear

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owww nidz really wonderful OS loved this concept and whole OS keep it up yar u rock 👏and thanks for pm
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Originally posted by: fariaa70

Awesome OS dear
just too good
it was amazing - i must sat
u made me emotional
loved it dear


Thanks a lot Fariaa! =D
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Originally posted by: aashizin

owww nidz really wonderful OS loved this concept and whole OS keep it up yar u rock 👏and thanks for pm


Thank you so much Aashish! =)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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*Edited*

This OS has left me with some weird feeling, probably worse than what I'd been feeling all day. But I gotta tell you one thing - this is perhaps one the best things I have ever read. It's a *blow you off* read, wonderful job done, Nidhi. In every sense of the word.


Even though it's a simple write up with quite an easy vocab, you've put it across magically. Serena died a real silent death, poor poor gals! Such is life! 😭


P.S.
Which novel is it?

Love you loads,
Kankshita

Edited by -Kanky- - 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Kanky-

*Edited*

This OS has left me with some weird feeling, probably worse than what I'd been feeling all day. But I gotta tell you one thing - this is perhaps one the best things I have ever read. It's a *blow you off* read, wonderful job done, Nidhi. In every sense of the word.


Even though it's a simple write up with quite an easy vocab, you've put it across magically. Serena died a real silent death, poor poor gals! Such is life! 😭


P.S.
Which novel is it?

Love you loads,
Kankshita

Aww! I so missed your comment yaar!!😃

Gosh, this line makes me feel on the top of the world "this is perhaps one the best things I have ever read" Seriously, I never thought it was so much.

Yea, I preferred a very simple language because it was so deep a feeling that you cannot modify the flow with vocab.. Thanks again. =D

By the way, the novel is My Sister's Keeper. Do read it. It is one of the best I have ever read.

Regards,

Nidhi. :)

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Posted: 14 years ago
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is this from my sister's keeper or did u write it yourself? omg its amazing.. i cried.. especially the last line... it just goes to show that there are so many people who love you but there are some who will go to any extent to see you happy.. her mom loves her.. but her sister gave up her life to see her sister happy..in peace... even tho that meant letting go of her family....

thank you for the pm. i would've missed something really great if you hadn't sent it!

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