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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Dreamy_Mystique

hiii reet...

its official i am goin to abduct u and make u tell stories for me.....like the arabian nights......

u r one of the rare species writer who just makes the hearts of their readers pound.........while reading

my heart skpped so many beats in midst of reading ur longggggggggggggggggg update....

but i am not complaining...........

its spectacular, marvellous, terrific and simply heavenly..........

beautifully expressed emotions...............

loved the convo between chotu and maan/chief........

luv mein akshay kumar se tushar kapoor ban jayega.............wow.....fantastic oneliner......completely cracked me up..........😆

overall an amazing yummylicious update

the best part of ur ff is the characters are intense.........something that suits my taste and appeals to my sensibilities......................

i am done with my pravachan..............

but i am completely bowled over,floored by ur ff, ur writing and mesmerising updates.....and awesome choice of songs that suits the moments.............

keep writing

love u and ur ff

take care

reva

cudnt help myself from quoting it ....
what shud i write ...? what ...? m clueless....i m vowing down to ur comment darling ....i dont know what shud i reply .....i m rendered wordless by ur comment .,.
do u feel the loads of thankx in this short reply ?
u are someone who makes me shy and proud at the same time....be always there for me ...plz....i want u as my inspiration
love is the only one thing i can give u in return
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: bluedreamz953

OMG Reet!!!

This was like the longest update ever!!!
When you wrote tehy were hugging each other,I was like OMG coz I was hoping they'd hug while the fighting sequence started...
They trusted each other,despite their hatred!!Awesome!!
They love each other ,do they?
They were depending on each other coz they had to take revenge on each other..LOL!...Ek dusre ko nahi marne dete,either because they hate each other or love each other!!
Hope she faints then he can't take out all his anger on her right NOW!! Kuch der ke liye bach jayegi!
Loved how Maan knew Adi was analyzing him..haha
Loved the tapori kids!!!That was cute!!
Loved the awesomely long update!!
Thanks a heap babes!!
Please update soon
Can't wait to read more!!
Please please please!!!
Love you loads yaar!!
Thanks again!
Shaila

thanx yaar shaila .....i loved it ...
naaa....she wont faint .....she had to face it ....she cant escape ...all the time....she cant run away like before....she had hit chief from her guilt consciousness .......
love u honey ...thanx a lot
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Posted: 14 years ago
@ SWATI -- darling ......twist .......they had to watch it ...they shud be embarrsd ....watch out honey ....and thanx a lottttttt...loved ur all comments
@ roops maanmeet1 ...i have gun thru ur pm .......thanx is a short word to acknowledge u......love u sweety .....i was missing ur replies and see u r back wid a bang .....loads of love
@ chubzy .....i had read ur comment ...and loved it so much ....bt now m nt able to find it ....thank you so much darl;ing ..bt i remember u had liked my song choice ....awww.........thanx again luv
@bulbul.....i have noticed ur comment after a long time.....loved to see u back ..thanx honey
@navpreet ...honey just love u ....thanx fr being first replier....loved ur comment ...
@ anu_luv_maan all the best fpr ur exam .....study comes first .....i will do with ur short replies ..and thanx honey ....
@ drashtee....u r always fantastic...thanx yaar
@afsaa naughty haan....u dint miss that part ....well thank god he cant read adi's mind totally ...warna uska to watt lag chuka tha....
@ankita -- honey ...i cudnt reply ur msg ....actually ...ok wait ..i will pm u ..thanx yaar
@uzma thanx a lot honey .....loved ur reply
i have come online fr 10 mins i gottogo now...chalo take care everyone
and please sweets write ur name u guyz have changed ur ids so i m nt able to recognise ur name.....plz do write ur real name in sign or under ur commnt
i m so touched by ur over whelming responses...love u so much guys......dont be angry on me if m nt able to reply u individually ......but i have gone thru all ur responses....the conclusions onto which u have reached...
hamein aur likhneki chahat na hoti ...
agar tum na hote....agar tum na hote.....
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Posted: 14 years ago
i m nt able to remember what part it is.......bit shorter .....will update next part soon bt plz go thru it
part -

Sunaina nudged aadi ....hey whats going on ....??!

Aadi just shrugged ...

Sunaina asked again ...are we supposed to stay here all night ..?

Aadi rolled his eyes at her ....mahn..!!! you are so unromantic.......!!

What the hell....whats so romantic about it ....?....why is that stupid girl clinging to our boss.......? she retorted in an irritated voice....

Aadi looked back at her ......and took a deep breath ...but remained mum...but sunaina was too engrossed to watch the drama going infront of her .....

She called him out ...boss.....its not safe anymore here ...

Her voice brought back chief into reality ....he pushed geet off from himself.... turning his back to geet he looked at sunaina to comprehend what she is saying .....

With the sudden push Geet had become conscious of what she was doing ....she pulled herself away ....

Chief embarrassedly avoided eye contact with sunaina and aadi .....fetch her inside......giving the order he was about to sit in the drivers seat of the jeep .

but geet had become aware of something ....what were they doing amidst of this dense forest ..why did they come here...?

as sunaina stood arrogantly crossing both of her arms against her chest aadi had to move forward .....and that made geet take her steps backward ......

don't near to me .....she managed to mouth while shivering profusely due to cold n uneasiness .......

hearing that chief stopped and turned back .....he saw geet taking her steps backward .....he saw her hands tied with the dupatta ......and her dress is torn....

he saw geet turning her back to them ......he understood.....

he looked at sunaina...who probably understood what order is going to come to her .....but before chief could say anything she stepped inside in jeep to sit in the drivers seat ...

chief looked at aadi.......he knew geet didn't meet aadi before....so she is not comfortable in that state of hers ...

chief opened his own waist coat and threw it to geet .....and taking out the knife he tore her dupatta to release her hands ....

geet hesitantly took his waistcoat ..and covered herself with it .... ........moving forward quite ruthlessly he dragged her to the jeep by her hand .....just to prove that he hates her ...............as if nothing had happened few minutes ago.....like he had forgotten the hand he is gripping under his strong clasp was clutching his shirt few minutes ago....and.............

geet tried to free herself from him......but gave up soon as she was feeling too weak to protest .....and moreover she knew that will be of no use .......after what she had done to him .....he is not going to forgive her .....

as chief shoved her inside the jeep she sat still on her seat ....as they had reached to the jeep chief saw aadi had already taken the front seat ...and sunaina the driver's seat ....

S you get down .....i will drive....

but sir you are injured .....sunaina pointed at his shoulder .....immediately geet looked at his shoulder .....he could feel her eyes on him ......

its just a bullet .....i m not unconscious yet .....and I have gone through bigger injury than this ............he purposefully added the last part ...while geet lowered her eyes.....

if you don't want to meet doctor riddhima again you just sit down sir....and do something to your injuries ........aadi couldn't control himself any longer and suddenly remarked bitterly...chief doesnt know what was actually bothering aadi .......but remained mum

well he had a little audacity to talk like this to chief ....being his right hand ...

common sir get up ....we are not safe here any more....cops may come anytime .....sunaina pestered ....

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click it to feel more....[one of ma fav vid mix on maneet]

chief noticed from the corner of his eyes that geet moving to the corner of the seat to give space to him .....he didn't go into further altercation and got up into the car ...to take the seat beside geet....

Ranjha ranjha kardi ve main
aape ranjha hoyi
Ranjha ranjha sabto ni
mainu heer na aakho koyi

the jeep ran through the darkness of the secluded highway.....no one spoke a single word...the silence was to heavy to bear ...and much more heavy to break it ..the sinners didn't move a little ....uttering something is out of question .... they were feeling too awkward to talk ....both of them secretly wished the others to forget that part ....

sunaina kept on stealing glance at the back seat through the back view mirror......she looked at aadi and thought.....now what might have happened to him ....looks like he is sulking over some matter ....

she again looked behind through the mirror......and the same scene again ....all she got to see.....two person sat at the two other corners of the seat with their eyes closed....she had no idea what all that happened there at the fight spot ....she had no idea why the dramatic scene took place .....why all of a sudden the girl rushed to cling to chief ...and why did he allow......he never did any such thing before.....

Oo ranjha ranjha na kar heere
jag badnami hoye
Patti patti jhar jaave par
khushboo chup na hoye

chief monologue

why did I do that ....once again I loosed myself....in front of sunaina and aadi I just let her hug me.....okay sunaina doesn't know what she did to me....but aadi knows.....and after that I just allowed her ...why man why ...? okay it was not me who pulled her into the hug ...but why did I even allow her .......and moreover and why did she hug me..?? looks like she has forgotten all what she did with me....i clenched my teeth .....i hate her ...i so hate her ...........why she passes that uncanny sensation through her touch ...i was tired with this fight inside me.......i leaned on the back seat and thought again about the moment ......few moments ago ...she had kept her head buried in my chest ....her fragnance is still lingering in my chest ......what the hell ...what m I supposed to think ..and what the hell I m thinking ......

i glanced at her ....she is shivering ..probably because of cold ....my eyes fall on her torn sleeve .....those bustards ...how dare they touch her ......i raised my eyes to her neck ...from those ruffled locks tresses of hers the stains of blood on her milky white skin is still prominent .....again anger throbbing in my head ...feeling like going back there and killing those corpses again ....how dare they .....i shut my eyes to control my anger ...they just tried to rape her ...what would have happened if I was late ....ohh god...i cant think more...i sighed and again glanced at her ...she had kept her face hidden in her hands...i took off my shirt and threw it on her ....i cant see her torn dress...torn by those bustards ........

Begunah pakda gaya (yaaro),
ishq mein jakda gaya (yaaro)
Aankh ke dosh mein dil (yaaro),
bewajah pakda gaya (yaaro)

Aankh se hatt ti nahin,

arrey hatt ti nahin,
arrey hatt ti nahin


Sotey sotey bolta hoon,
kabhi bolte bolte sota hoon


Kya jaane kya hota hai,
kabhi jalti aag dadolta hoon
Ek baar to aake dekhe woh bhi..............

geet was too traumatized to protest or speak up ...she just sat there in the seat......at first she had a hectic day their in pune .....then some filthy goons.....they just tried to rape her....and after that the most awkward thing happened......................................

Ranjha ranjha kardi ve
main aape ranjha hoyi
Ranjha ranjha sabto ni
mainu heer na aakho koyi
Oo ranjha ranjha na kar heere
jag badnami hoye
Patti patti jhar jaave par
khushboo chup na hoye

geet monologue :

.....i had almost died out of fear if HE wouldn't have reached there ........i can't imagine more what would have happened if he didn't turn up at right moment ........i shivered thinking about the situation I was in until HE showed up......

I hate to say it ..but he actually saved me today ....but then ..what did I do ....ohh babaji... ....i cant think of it anymore......i just hugged him .....ohh babaji .....why did I hug him all of a sudden .....what he must be thinking ... .....why did I do it ....i shut my eyes in despair .......why did I expect him to come and save me from those bustards ..why I was so relieved seeing another criminal to turn out my savior .....what's wrong with me ....babaji what the hell is happening with me .....i wish I could go back and delete those moments ......i hate myself... I touched him ....this time I did it .....how can I expect something from him ......the way I behaved ...like he is someone dear to me .....but HE IS MY ENEMY .....i stole a glance at him ...he is leaning on the side with closed eyes....he is wounded by the bullet injuries.....its very much painful....uhh and its because of me.....i gulped down the fact ......but no matter how much I deny ...he saved my life today .....but this is also the truth he is my enemy ....he too did things which didn't like....i paused thinking about the moments in the past ...the kiss..the last one...naaah..i wont think ...... I hate him ...from core of my heart ...... i wont think about it anymore.......no ....the more I will think I will get confused and that will be of no help

Uhh what it is......some thing has fallen on me.....i looked up to see what it is.....its a shirt ....its his shirt ......i looked at him ...i cant see his face ...he is looking outside....bt even if he was facing towards me ..i cant see his facial expressions ....as he hides himself behind the musk......i wonder what more this man hides behind the musk ....sometimes he is just not that bad ......wait a minute ....what did I just say .....i shut my eyes.....

Thanks.....geet mumbled in a low whisper ....he looked back .....and met her eyes....the eye lock continued for some fraction of seconds ...and then she tore it to move her gaze away .....away from him.....what was it in his eyes....question anger or sarcasm....geet couldn't comprehend .....

He again turned to see through the deep dark outside ...

Thanx......she mumbled again ........this time he didn't turn back...and for that she thanked him mentally...its really tough for her to bear his eyes on her ...

And sorry ....she completed after a little pause.....sorry for what I did ...

he turned back ...

I mean the hug ...she said while looking straight .......its just that ....it was a terrible time I was going through until u came ................she didn't know what to say more.......she paused indefinitely ....she was traumatized at that moment she sought for his support as she found the only known person their amidst of such circumstances.......she came to that conclusion ..and just hoped he buys it .....

She looked at him for some reaction ...but he kept his eyes closed leaning on the back seat ....he had nothing to say ....situation was too complicated to understand...to reciprocate....

Jal ja, jal ja ishq mein jal ja, jale se kundan ho
Jalti raakh laga le maathe lagey to chandan hoye
Ranjha ranjha kardi ve main
Ranjha ranjha kardi ve main aape ranjha hoyi
Ranjha ranjha saddo ni mainu heer na aakho koyi

Waqt katt ta bhi nahin, waqt rukta bhi nahin
Dil hai sajde mein magar, ishq jhukta bhi nahin
Bina tere raatein, arrey raatein kyun lambhi lagti hain
Kabhi tera gussa, kabhi teri baatein kyun achchi lagti hain
Yeh jalte koyle, arrey koyle ab rakhna mushkil hai

He arranged the set of events again ...first she hits him and runs away ...he comes back and rescues her from bunch of goons ...she hugs him ....he responds .....then pulls away drags ruthlessly ..then offers his waistcoat after that shirt ....now she is mouthing thanx and sorry ....sorry for hugging ....but not for trying to kill him.....what a joke....!!

He couldn't help to let out a small chuckle .....

Geet noticed that ...omg is he chuckling ......!! she had nothing to say ..literally She didn't find next set of words...so kept mum .....again that uneasy silence prevailed through the journey ...the journey was long enough to bear .....however the silence was stagnant .....until the jeep left the high way and took a narrow muddy lane through paddy fields...as geet noticed that ...she became panicked again ....where are you taking me to ...... her voice quivered....

TO HELL..........................................curt reply came from him.....the first word he has uttered after getting into the jeep.....he threw the words while resting her head in the back seat with eyes closed.....

Geet tried to protest but before she could say anything he spoke up again....... if u do a single drama u will be all tied up .......his coldest reply was enough to shut up geet ...

Geet sensed fire in his ice cold grave voice.........she sighed and leaned on the back wall....within sometime she just dozed off...

He glanced sideways........to find her tired face with closed eyes.............she has fallen asleep....he concealed a deep sigh......why hate is not oozing out of mind when i glance at her closed eyes.......why do i find it serene...innocent.........................chuck....!!!.......what s wrong with me...!!!!...... innocent and her ....!! hah...!! my foot...!!!

Ranjha ranjha kardi ve main aape ranjha hoyi
Ranjha ranjha saddo ni mainu heer na aakho koyi
Oo ranjha ranjha na kar heere jag badnami hoye
Patti patti jhar jaave par khushboo chup na hoye
Jal ja, jal ja ishq mein jal ja, jale se kundan ho
Jalti raakh laga le maathe lagey to chandan hoye

Chal, chal junoon chalte rahein, tu kahin theher nahin
Dil agar aa bhi gaya, woh tera shehar nahin
Bina tere saansein, arrey saansein kahin khatam na ho jaayein
Sabi teri yaadein, sabi yaadein kahin basam na ho jaayein
Sulagte koyle, arrey koyle ab bujhna mushkil hai

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She woke up with the rude touch cold water splashed on her face ......she opened her eyes to find chief standing in front of her with an empty bottle in his hand ....he blinked her eyes to confirm what she is seeing ..but it was not a night mare ..very much happening her real life...

Take her inside.............. throwing the order to aadi and sunaina who was standing behind him he disappeared in the thin air......

As she got inside.....well pushed inside by sunaina she found it was not that garage .....but some deserted farmhouse ......she pursed her lips...and sighed.....her life has turned into a complete mess......

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Edited by maanmeet_Reet - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
i dont think i will be able to pm u guyz now....will do later at night ....love u guyz
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Posted: 14 years ago
OMG OMG i cant believe u updateddd 😃😃😃 LOVEEE UU REEEEEET 😳😳😃😃😃😃

will comment later 😉😉😃😃

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Posted: 14 years ago

hi reet...

again a stupendously beautiful update.....

the songs completely mesh with turn of events or rather moments that you portray just transporting us to land of maan and geet...............

there was little interaction or convo yet so much is conveyed...........their eyes..........i can literally imagine the searing gaze of maan and the innocent, fearsome and questioning gaze of geet...

kudos to you for portraying the characters so beautifully...............

overall a marvellous spectacular update

waiting for the next part

plz cnt soon

reva

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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Reet🤗

I am so glad that you not only back but back with a bang!😃
Amazing updates!👏
I read the two parts back to back. The story is getting really intense.
YOu really know how to keep your readers hooked. I am just wondering what will happen next. How Chief is going to get back to her for hitting him last time. And how will she react.
Both of them are in a turmoil with themselves. BTW I feel Adi is gonna play a vital role in the coming updates.

I loved the last update a lot. I like your long updates😊
Independent Geet handling a case successfully and then the kidnap😲 For a moment I thought its Chief who has kidnapped her but then came to know that they were some goons. And then Chief's entry at the right time, the high voltage drama. It reminded me of the fight between Brij and Maan in the show when Brij tries to kill her.
And then the beautiful hug!😍
I loved this part a lot. No matter how much they admit that they hate each other but deep down they were happy to see each other after months. The pain, the anguish, the hatred, the complains, the love-they expressed everything through their hug. I felt that Geet actually hugged Maan and not the Chief.

And the latest update is fab too. The shocked expressions of Sunaina, the mixed expression of shock+understanding of Adi very well described👏
And then Maan's and Geet's monologue expressing their inner turmoil was too good.
I am just wondering what will happen next. Your updates are getting inquisitive with each update. I cannot help it but ask you to update soon😳😳

Reet, you write beautifully🤗
Love to read your work😊

Shivangi
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Posted: 14 years ago
hi reet.
brilliant part.loved it.
Sunaina looks confused,
adi know about geet.
let's see what will store for geet?
but I guess chief have some feeling for geet.
and geet also have some feeling for chief.
loved chief monologue and geet monologue.
update soon.

Edited by PrithviSanyo1 - 14 years ago
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yay!!!!!!!!,me commented..Kuchh karo in dono gadha or gadhi kaaa.......😆
And REET i am dying to talk to you.....send me a mssg at least ....i gave u my phn no....nd we can meet after 2nd jan if you want....😃

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