Zee's GM FF- You're Always With Me...UPTD PG 22! - Page 13

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Posted: 14 years ago
Hi Zee,
super story....I really really truly like it. Its very fresh and different. Can you addme to your PM list?
Do you really plan to keep us waiting for two more weeks for an update? Kuch karo na...
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Posted: 14 years ago

awesome update!!

cant wait for the next part!!
pls cont.soon and thnks for the PM
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Posted: 14 years ago
You seriously think this was enough for 2 weeks...😕😡 You are a bad girl but I still like you for giving us this ff and now Maan's entry...😳😉😛😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
long update
long update
long update
long update ..............................

zeeeeeeeeeeeeee dear very nice.. luv you jana.........plz make it long .... hugsssssssssssss
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey Zee,

Right, atleast Maan is here! Paro is so cute...Maan is gonna go gaga over her...

-Sona
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey girlies!!!😃
So i'm back with my BONONZA update girlies!!!😉😆😆😆
Guess how many chappies? And I've tried to make them long, since most of you have threatened me!😕😳🤣🤣🤣
3 CHAPTER'S GIRLIES!!!!😃
How happy are you lot about that news eh??? 😉😛 Anyway i'm doing this because a) it was Lekha's aka -Destiny's birthday yesterday, b) Sofnadi's aka Sofna birthday coming up on sunday😃, (happy birthday di! Hope you have a great day and that this update will last you till next week when i visit ya!😳😳😳) and c) it's my own birthday on mnday and thus this weekend i'll be out celebrating with my friends inshallah, and on monday i'll celebrate with my mum😳😃.
This means I won't be able to update the FF for another two weeks, since next weekend i'll be visiting my friend sofnadi!!!😳😳
ONTO THE CHAPTERS!!!😃
CHAPTER 5
Geet was looking around for Paro, who had run off to play with some other children her own age, when she turned her head and saw Maan. He stared at her, a mixture of sadness and happiness in his eyes and she froze, before closing her eyes and saying, "It's just your imagination Geet, just your imagination." She slowly opened her eyes and released a breath of relief when she didn't see him again. She went back to looking for her daughter, when she saw her crying and some children surrounding her, chanting something to her.
Geet frowned angrily, ready to save her daughter, despite not hearing what they were saying due to the background music and chatter. Just as she was about to walk over and protect her child, she saw Pinky grab Paro gently and shouting at the other children who looked ashamed and looked about to cry before running for their parents. Pinky then started walking to Geet, who still looked angry but by the time she got to Geet, she was smiling once more and shook her head at Geet's questioning look.
"It's okay Geet, I've handled it okay?" And Geet smiled at her in thanks before Pari came over to them, from behind Geet and thus turning Geet around to face her and said, "Pinky told me you started dancing classes a year ago and that you really good! Therefore I booked your group to dance for me....and since you're here and you're their teacher you can dance with them as well!" Smiling happily at Geet, who started stuttering, "But...Pari....I'm not.....is that....why?"
Pinky winked at Pari behind Geet's back and gave a thumbs up, to which Pari responded by nodding her head slightly. Geet sighed and said, "I really have to dance?" and Pari's face just dropped instantly. She started pouting, her eyes turned really sad and puppy like and in a sad, sort of childish tone in her voice, replied back, "You won't dance for me? Your good friend Pari?" and the tears started to glisten her eyes and threatened to spill and Geet sighed heavily, feeling guilty she made her friend cry before nodding her head and turned back to Pinky who was smiling madly and suddenly turned serious with a frown and said "Don't worry I'll look after Paro, you go and dance!"
Geet turned to face Paro, who looked at her mother happily and said "I love it when you dance mummy! Dance, please?" And that sealed the decision for Geet who still hesitated, even when she agreed as Pari started "crying". Geet gave one last look at Pinky and Paro before off to find her group of girls she taught, not noticing that as she went towards the study where it was a temporary changing room for the dance group, that Maan had watched her from his place across the room, or that Pinky and Pari had slapped hands together and said "Now the fun begins!" before Pari walked back to her fiance who was standing with her parents and Pinky had grabbed Paro to stand in a good position at the side of the room and watch the dance that was about to start.
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Edited by Zee89-Maneetfan - 14 years ago
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CHAPTER 6
Geet smiled at her group of girls she had been teaching for the past year and her smile turned brighter, imagining dancing in front of an audience and not only that, but for her friend Pari as well! "Right girls, you know the routine we practised during our classes for the song?" All her students nodded their heads in agreement, "That's what we'll be doing since Pari, the bride requested that I'd dance to, so you don't mind?" Geet asked slightly worried as she knew her dance group was excited about this performance they were asked to do. Her students shook their heads and giggled before finishing off their make and straightening their costumes, while Geet sighed in relief.
Geet peeked out of the door, towards the centre of the room where Pari was introducing Geet and her dance group and Geet gulped, her excitement had turned into nervousness and slight fear that it wouldn't go well as she would imagined. She jumped when she felt a hand on her shoulder and looked back to see one of her best dancers, Ayesha give her a supporting smile and whispered, "It'll be fine Geet, don't worry!" before gathering the rest of the girls to line up and enter the hall as soon as the music started. Geet took a deep breath and let it out slowly, before going to the front of the line and lowered her dupatta over her face like a bride and waited for the music.
As the background music of Saajan Ke Ghar Jaana started, Geet closed her eyes tightly beneath her dupatta because she knew every lyric by heart and what they meant to her personally, before opening her eyes and started dancing to the music as she lead the line of dancers to the centre of the hall, where all the guests were at the sides watching the girls take their places (in plain gold lengha's) and watch the main girl (Geet) in a gold and white lengha, with a nice big embroided pattern at the bottom of her skirt rising to and ending about her knees, start to rise her dupatta slowly and smile towards the crowd.
"Mehndi lagaake aayi (Haai)
Bindiya sajaake aayi (oye hoye, hoye, hoye)"
Geet danced to the gestures matching the lyrics, while Ayesha, her second dancer, came up to her and pretended to tease her before dancing away. Yet Geet was aware someone's eye were boring into her and thus she was distracted looking for those eyes, even though she couldn't see the audience because the helpers for the wedding had darkened the room for the dance, so that the only light was focused on her and her dance group.
"Mehndi lagaake aayi, bindiya sajaake aayi,
Choodi khankaake aayi, paayal chhankaake aayi,
Ho, ab geet Milan ke gaana hai (gaana hai, gaana hai)"
As Geet danced to the gestures matching the lyrics once again but in a faster pace, and twirled around to face the audience, after going towards Pari and her fiance for the last line of lyrics, she caught eyes with Dadimaa who stared at her, a blank expression on her face and then she moved away to her left and Maan stood in her position and Geet froze. Only did Shaz, another dancer of hers, managed to get Geet dancing again by nudging her slightly and giving her a What-are-you-doing? look before dancing away again to join in the chorus. Geet shook her head, smiled slightly at her fellow dancers and continued to dance.
"Mujhe Saajan ghar jaana hai,
Mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai,
Mujhe sajaan ke ghar jaana hai (mujhse saajan ke ghar jaana hai)"
As she danced to this, she saw Maan once again, nearer to the edge of the crowd where people had the best view of watching the group dance. He may have been in the dark, but she could never forget his height, breadth and stance of his body. Not since she kept dreaming of him every night, when she went bed to sleep and hoped that he would save her from the tricky situation she was in.
"Haan, mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai
Mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai,
Mujhe sajaan ke ghar jaana hai,"
As she twirled away from where he stood, she took a breath of relief when she turned around back to face him again only to see that he wasn't standing there. As she danced, she looked out for him because she wasn't sure whether she was hallucinating about him being there or not.
"Jamdiyaan mohe piya to paraaiyaan ho jaandiyaan,
Piya mar jaaniyaan"
She went towards Pari and her parents, dancing along with the lyrics and making Pari hug her parents, she didn't noticed Maan standing only a few metres away, behind her looking at her worryingly, because Geet had gone back into her past for a moment remembering her own fake wedding to Dev and saying goodbye to her parents. She closed her eyes briefly and opened them again when Ayesha and Shaz came and took her away back to the centre of the hall.
"Pal mein naata tod chali main, hoye
Pal mein naata tod chali main
Baabul ka ghar chhod chali main
Ab to piya ke des mein
Saara jeevan mujhe bitaana hai"
Pari hugged her father tightly while the rest of the girls danced in a circle around Geet, who stood there lost in her own thoughts of her father. The only one who had really protected her in the end to save the life of herself and that of her unborn child from the rest of her family.
"Mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai,
Mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai
Haan, mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai"
As she repeated the dance steps to these lyrics and twirled around a few times with one of her fellow dancers, she swore she saw Maan standing next Pari and her parents watching her. Yet when she finally stopped dancing, he wasn't there, only Pari still hugging her father.
"Oh oh oh, aah aah aah aah,
Beti Ki Taqdeer ka likha, haai
Beti ki taqdeer ka likha padhke mamta royi
Kisi ne isko janam diya aur le jaaye ise koi"
Geet couldn't even danced to these lyrics, instead she stood where she was miming the song, tears in her eyes while her fellow dancers looked at each worryingly, while trying to improvise the dance, as they usually followed Geet to the last verse. Ayesha managed to go up to her and moved close, by twirling around Geet over and over and whispering, "Geet, please dance! Remember the audience!" and Geet snapped out of her memories and danced once again, wiping her tears away secretly before they ruined her make up badly.
"Mujhe saajan ke ghar jaana hai,
Mujhe sajaan ke ghar jaana hai,
Mujhe Sajaan ke ghar jaana hai,"
As she danced to this, going round Pari and her fiance, both sets of parents and then finally the audience, weaving in and out, she smiled all the way, finally seeing Pinky and Paro standing next to a pillar, near the entrance and she winked at them before moving onto the next audience member to get them dancing and instead, it was Maan and Dadimaa.
She froze, her hands still on Maan's hands, slightly raised in the air to get him to dance and she stood there, staring into those dark, soulful eyes searching...
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Edited by Zee89-Maneetfan - 14 years ago
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Chapter 7
Geet stood still. Her hands were slowly releasing Maan's hands, and she didn't notice this or anything else for that matter, like for the fact that Pinky was looking slightly worried or that Dadimaa was eagerly watching the two of them or that Pari was standing up straight also eagerly watching, waiting to see what would happen next. All she knew her heart and body were dancing in joy that Maan was finally there, in front of her, while her mind was furiously telling her to do one thing, "RUN! RUN! RUN!" It kept repeating this command, because she was just scared. Every part of her was excited that she finally met Maan again but her mind was scared, because she still remembered those painful words he said to her when he had found out it was his brother who had betrayed her and left her alone at the airport.
She finally let go of Maan's hands and took a few steps back, "Geet, please!" Maan pleaded with her, as Geet's steps were going faster and other members of the audience came in the growing distance between them and Geet finally turned round and ran back to the changing room to get changed and get out of there! She bumped into Pinky, who said "Geet! What are you doing? Maan is back! Why are you running away from him??" Pinky looked into Geet's frightful eyes and realised, "Oh Geet!! Don't! Don't be afraid! He won't hurt you like that again! Please, don't go!" Geet just shook her head and said quickly, "Just say our goodbyes to Pari and make an excuse up to leave and I'll meet you outside! Make sure you get a taxi okay???"
As Geet went into the room and locked the door, she leant against it and hugged herself very hard, while her hand went to her necklace with both hers and Maan's initials and she whispered ever so softly, "You're back... you're finally back!" Before shaking her head and moved forward to get dressed. Half an hour later, she opened the door slightly to check Dadimaa's and Maan's whereabouts and frowned slightly when she couldn't see them. Once again she wasn't sure whether she was relieved or worried, but as she crept out and hid herself behind the pillars along the sides of the hall, she kept a look out just in case. She froze when she felt someone grab her hand and she closed her eyes, her breathing slightly shallow.
As she twisted her head, to see who grabbed her hand, she saw Maan in the centre of the hall walking towards her and she frowned, confused. She turned her head fully round and saw that it was a drunken guest and she gave a disgusted look before shaking the guy off and rushing off towards the entrance, glancing back every now and then to see where Maan was. Her eyes kept widening every time she looked back, because she swore Maan was getting closer each time and she cursed her short legs "Babaji, why now? Why do you have to do this now? I'm not ready yet!" she muttered to Babaji quite angrily, before finally going out of the doors and taking a few steps towards Pinky and her daughter who were not far away waiting next to a taxi.
Instead she felt herself being grabbed by the wrist and pulled to her left, before twisting round and banged against the wall and saw Maan right in front of her, so close he was to her, there was barely inches between their bodies. She looked down, to control her wayward hormones that started rising. Gosh being so close to him, she remembered those memories of them both, being in love and teasing each other and...She shook her head mentally to get rid of them. Once she controlled her mind, she looked back up to face Maan, who had this eager, yet slightly angry expression on his face. Geet just stared at him, waiting to hear to what he had to say.
"Geet. Listen to me! Look I know what I said to you three years ago hurt you and broke your heart, but you have to understand Dev is my brother and what you had told me that night-" he was cut off by Geet! "DON'T! Please, don't mention that night! It was painful for me the first time round; please don't let me go through that again!" And she looked up into those dark brown eyes, flashing with all sorts of emotions and her right hand twitched by her side, before rising so slowly. "I understand that you were angry with me, after what I told you-" She had looked away from those eyes, because the emotions she saw in them...it was looking into the window of a tortured soul and she looked away because her heart was crying in pain seeing them.
She looked over his shoulder and her hand stopped halfway between them when she saw the black, shiny car not far away from Pari's house and her face changed; from being nervous and a bit scared at seeing Maan, to downright fear. She quickly glanced back at Maan, and then back at the car, and seeing the tinted window in the back going down slightly and seeing a shadow of a man's head, she gulped, as her heartbeat doubled, and she started to sweat. "I....look I can't talk right now. This isn't the right time or place. I have to go please," pleading with Maan with her eyes when she finally made contact with his, and he frowned slightly. Her eyes were pleading, yet behind that he saw fear, the sort of fear where you had to run and hide to save your life if you wanted to live.
He moved away in total shock at seeing that fear, and Geet took the chance to quickly run to Pinky and Paro, picking Paro up in her arms and got into the taxi. She turned round to face Maan, where she left him and he just stood there, a lost puppy look on his face, because he just didn't understand what had happened at that moment. "Geet, what..." Pinky was clueless as to why Geet ran away from this chance and all Geet said to her in a deadened voice, while still staring at Maan wistfully, "Mano saab. Look out of your window, you'll see his car," and as Pinky looked out of the window beside her, her eyes widened in fear, she bit her lip quite hard and her hands clutched her purse really hard and she whispered, "Geet, he's following us."
And Geet looked away from Maan, missing his determined face to find out what is going on, and looked in the rear window of the taxi and seeing the black shiny car following them. Geet paled, and hugged Paro tighter in her arms, praying for help, as the taxi driver took herself, Paro, Pinky to her home, while Mano saab and his goons followed them.
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See you in two weeks times girlies!!
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Edited by Zee89-Maneetfan - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
amazing updates really amazing storyline luved it
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edited ::::
Firstly WOAH WOAH WOAH fab we get to see triple update after threatening you so much😆
The first part was short and sweet written beautifully !!!
The second chappie was magnifcent 👏👏 loved every bit of it and i loved how u used the song, written extremely well. oopps 4got to add loved shaz and ayesha little cameo😉😆
And the third chappie was heart killing ( is that even a word😆) loved it it was totally filled with all emotions, written so beautifully that whilst reading it i could imagine the movie going through my head😆 the credit goes all to ur creative mind !!!
btw WDF is mano saab. sum kind of don😆 totally left it on cliff hanger. try and update sooner if you can😳😳😳😳😳 pretty please😳😳😳
absolutely fabuously written girlie👏👏👏
luv ya keep rockin wid the fab work! x x x
Edited by salma434 - 14 years ago

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