Maneet FF: You are always on my mind. AN on P 150 - Page 25

Originally posted by: AKANargis

OMG...what an awesome FF...its 3 am...and i just read all 15 parts in one go......Excellent is all i will say for now....since i need to sleep and get up in 4 hrs to go to the office............. I will post more comments tomorrow...and i am really looking forward to the next part!!!👏

Hi Polki....I am back for comments, now that am fully awake and semi functional...thanks to Maneet....otherwise i used to be fully functional!!

You have created a brilliant story from an entirely refreshing perspective....so different than any FF on the forum...and for KUDOS to you!! I love the characters you have added to present a whole new spectrum to this plot....still keeping its foundations in tact.

Your command of the language is excellent, hence the story is delivered in very succinct and believable fashion. I love Geeta....and of course Radha too, and Devi and Kate....what tight bond all these characters share. I love your Maan....but I was thinking about your story as I drove in this morning...and the one thing that bothers me a little is that the Maan we know in the serial has so much AKKADD and ZIDD....and so if you are staying true to his character in the serial....then I find it a little hard to believe that he would so readily accept his separation form Geet...the first time around 18 years ago as well as now.....when he left NYC.

Maan is famous for his ZIDD...i for one would like to have seen more of that trait weaved into your Maan........it would give an interesting twist to your story. Please do not take this as a criticism...as it is only my opinion...but more as a suggestion, for i have no intention to offend you.....I love to read your story...its very gripping......and thanks to it, i am now surviving today on just a couple hours of sleep!!

Looking forward to the next part......please add me to your OM list.

Thanks,

--Nargis!!

Holy moly. This is the absolute best ff I have read in a while. I love the way you portray the story through Geeta. The setting is great too. You have seriously captured the essence of NY. Please continue soon and add me to your PM list.

Originally posted by: desigurl953

When u told me that geeta is going to act like a detective i was confused but now i understand what u meant....really lovely....keep updating...can't wait for more

Dear Desigurl,

I hope you now understand that all your tears weren't wasted. Yeah! Geeta never felt any void for not having a father in her life, she is curious now because she feels like her mother is hiding something. What a treat it will be for her to find out that her father is alive and that he knows everything and the only reason he stayed away was because he loved her mother so much.

Lets see how she goes about finding out who the mystery man is and what her mother's past is?

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Originally posted by: sweet scorpio

awesome!

geet and maan's convo was sooo nice!....

so dadi doesn't know anything about geet's past!....and because of dadi they sacrifice their love!....poor them!....

i think now geet should tell everything to geeta and now shez a big girl!...so probably she would understand!

continue soon!

Dear Sweet Scorpio,

No dadi doesn't know anything about Geet's past and Dev's betrayal. But who knows if she will find out? Yeah! when you love someone you do things for them which to others may seem ridicules.

Is Geet tells everything to Geeta the story ends, do you want that? I think not because I am sure you want to read more updates of my FF. 😃

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Originally posted by: Maan_Mahi4Ever

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<div align="center">I wasn't late today na? Actually woh kya hai na ... I'm busy shopping for school ... you know about 3 weeks left till school starts 🤔.. dont wanna go back 😆</div>
<div align="center">Jaanti ho .. har kissi ka meri thara kismat nahin hoti jo thumari thara kadoos boos payi 😆</div>
<div align="center">Loooved this update soooo muuuchh! Geeta being Sherlock Holmes 😉😆</div>
<div align="center">And Geet's thanksgiving dinner is makin me go "yum yum" 😆</div>
<div align="center">cant wait for the next update!! 😊</div>
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<div align="center"><strong>-Mahi ❤️







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My pyari Mahi,

No you were exactly on time today, I was a little late, have been really busy, but I am still posting even if it is a few hours later.

Glad you like Geeta being a detective and that you loved the update.

Yeah! Thanksgiving is a few months away but I am so looking forward to it. I am feeling hunger pains just thinking of it. Yum. yum.

Back to school shopping, huh. I remember those days. I think I need to go shopping to get my mind of Maneet. 😃

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Originally posted by: maanmeet1

u have written it nicely, very practical approach, you have taken care of evry detail, past and present, used d incidents in ur story which actually happened.........

i tried to imagine geet in mid or late 30's bt i saw preeti zinta's face from Veer Zara.......doesnt matter bt still.....i culd c maan though........all his expressions, pinky, adi.........u missed sasha.........;)

bt i dont want dem to b separated for any reason............its just my POV.........i dont want a sad ending........

Dear Reet,

Glad you liked the update. I try to make the characters as realistic as possible so that the readers can imagine everything as they read. I try to use stuff that happens in the show to make it real, and since my FF is set 18 years in the future, it helps to connect the present and the future.

No worried if you can't imagine Geet in the futurte, she doesn't look any different only that she wears western attire. Remember she is still very young only 37.

I didn't miss Sasha, she hasn't made an entry yet, maybe in the future.

I write with so much love for Maneet and you readers I would never end it sad. We just have to see how we get to a happy ending.

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Originally posted by: lallulal2010

polki, plz update soon..........

Arreee Lallulal,

What did I tell you about being demanding? Forgot so fast, you can demand updates as long as you write a nice comment. yay kya, bus update soon, na nice update, na good job. Meere bhi to feelings hain. 😉

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Originally posted by: AKANargis

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Hi Polki....I am back for comments, now that am fully awake and semi functional...thanks to Maneet....otherwise i used to be fully functional!!

You have created a brilliant story from an entirely refreshing perspective....so different than any FF on the forum...and for KUDOS to you!! I love the characters you have added to present a whole new spectrum to this plot....still keeping its foundations in tact.

Your command of the language is excellent, hence the story is delivered in very succinct and believable fashion. I love Geeta....and of course Radha too, and Devi and Kate....what tight bond all these characters share. I love your Maan....but I was thinking about your story as I drove in this morning...and the one thing that bothers me a little is that the Maan we know in the serial has so much AKKADD and ZIDD....and so if you are staying true to his character in the serial....then I find it a little hard to believe that he would so readily accept his separation form Geet...the first time around 18 years ago as well as now.....when he left NYC.

Maan is famous for his ZIDD...i for one would like to have seen more of that trait weaved into your Maan........it would give an interesting twist to your story. Please do not take this as a criticism...as it is only my opinion...but more as a suggestion, for i have no intention to offend you.....I love to read your story...its very gripping......and thanks to it, i am now surviving today on just a couple hours of sleep!!

Looking forward to the next part......please add me to your OM list.

Thanks,

--Nargis!!</font>

Dear Lovely Nargis,

Welcome to my FF, glad you liked it.

I tried to make that characters as real as possible. The are older now so they have different relationships with people around them. Happy you liked the bonds between all of them, the new and old characters.

Maan is ziddi in the present but he has matured a lot and like he said in the show "I don't want her to loose anything on my account" is what he has adhered to all these years. His philosophy is if Geet is okay, I am okay. Also both of them know that their love is secure so even though they are not physically together in their hearts they know that no one will come between them.

He let Geet leave all those years ago because he didn't want her to feel the pain of having to deal with Dev, both Geet and him also didn't want Dadi's health to get worse, she means a lot to them both. We have only seen Maan up till now in the serial, we have seen him change from an angry man, to a man in love, in my story you see him as a person who will do anything to make Geet happy even if that means letting her go. Also as they say "if you love something let it go, if it returns to you, it was yours to keep." Also in a way his character is still ziddi, he didn't completely stay away, he followed them silently a few years ago and he never meant for her to see him at Harvard that too was supposed to be a clandestine event. So our Maan is still our Maan, just a little calmer.

He left so easily after 18 years because he didn't want to push Geet. He finally managed to get his foot in the door and he knows that eventually Geet will let him in completely, he doesn't know when and how but he knows. As you noticed in the last update, Geet is starting to loose her inhibitions regarding Maan, she is more comfortable with the idea of him. She only called him once in 18 years that too just to tell him she had become an architect, all other correspondence was through text messages. However, he comes for a few days and she is calling him already after only 3 months passing.

I hope this reply helps clear any questions you may have had, I find this Maan more realistic than majnu Maan, although I love majnu Maan. Don't worry about offending me, yes it is my story but in the end I write it for all of you. So what you think does matter. Since you just started reading this FF, you probably don't know but I take all the comments and try to make my FF better, in the beginning I made a lot of people cry and they told me that so I decided to make Maan and Geet meet, it wasn't in the original plan but you have to give the masses what they want. Do no worries, please feel free to say whatever you feel, in the end it helps me write a better FF and you all get to enjoy it more.

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Originally posted by: aangelis

Holy moly. This is the absolute best ff I have read in a while. I love the way you portray the story through Geeta. The setting is great too. You have seriously captured the essence of NY. Please continue soon and add me to your PM list.

Dear Aangelis,

Welcome to my FF. Thank you for the great compliment. I am glad you have enjoyed it so far. Yeah, I decided that just talking about Maan and Geet was getting boring. Ha ha, like that will ever happen but I wanted to bring the child into the picture too. Also there are many lovely FFs that have Geet and Maan together, some have killed off the baby, some are looking forward to Maan raising the baby, but I thought what if they were not able to stay together for some reason what would the story be like and I decided to give it a go. I am so happy that people are liking it and that I am getting new readers everyday.

I love NYC, I am a native from the concrete jungle, so I decided to pay homage to the most wonderful city in the world (in my opinion.) by using it as the place where Geet ends up and raises Geeta.

You have been added to the PM list.

Keep reading and commenting.

Polki

Part 16


It was the day after Thanksgiving- Black Friday is what they called in here in America Geet thought. She was not looking forward to shopping today, it was the bussiest shopping day of the year, the stores would be packed and just thinking about the crowds made Geet panic. What would she do, she had to take Geeta shopping because she had promised, she should have just given her the earrings, she was sure that Maan wouldn't have minded it. After all Geeta was his daughter and he would have understood Geet's predicament. But she had wanted to keep them, they were hers, for the first time she had decided to be selfish and it had come back to bite her in the behind.

Geet wearily got out of bed, and walked over to Geeta's room, once again she found both the girls on the floor, there were two perfect beds for them to sleep on, why couldn't they just use them. She bent down and shook Geeta, not wanting to wake Radha up. Geeta wake up, its 9am, we have to go shopping. On hearing the word shopping Geeta's eyes opened up in a second. She smiled at her mother and moved her head a little indicating that she was up.

Geet, "Baccha, wake Radha up too, okay. The two of you get ready and meet me in the kitchen."

Geeta, "Okay, Mamma. No worries." Seeing the look in Geet's eyes, she knew that her mother was concerned that she would go back to sleep.

Geet, left her daughter's room and went into the bathroom that adjoined her room, she got ready and was in the kitchen in 30 minutes. She was really hungry looked in the refrigerator, there were plenty of left overs from the night before, however she changed her mind. Knowing it would take the girls a while to get ready she decided she would make breakfast for the three of them. She made a huge breakfast with waffles, eggs, English muffins, juice and fruit. She was aware that once Geeta got into a store she would be oblivious to everything around her other than shopping, and was certain that Radha being Geeta's friend was probably the same. She didn't want them running around on empty stomachs.

The girls came down an half an hour later. Seeing all the food in front on them made their eyes pop. Food at Harvard wasn't bad but eating 'fresh just made' food was amazing.

Radha looked at Geet, "Thank you so much Auntie, all this food looks great. But you didn't have to do this, we could have had the left overs from last night. You made so much food, you could have fed an army."

Geeta, "Ya, mamma, Radha is right. Not that I am complaining, the waffles are soooo gooood"

Geet, "It was no bother, I just wanted breakfast to be a good meal, after all we have a long day ahead of us." You could see the anxiety in her face.

Geet, "Radha, do your parent's know you are here? We are going shopping are you okay with that?" sorta indirectly bringing up money, she didn't want Radha to feel weird when they were buying stuff and wanted to make sure that she had the funds, else Geet would have taken care of her. She didn't want to embarrass Radha by asking her directly about money.

Radha, "I mentioned my coming here to my parents, they are fine with it. Plus I have been going all over Europe since I was 16 so now it is time to explore the big old US of A." she grinned "and about the shopping I am okay with that too, no one comes to NY and leaves without shopping. When I told my parents that I was coming to NYC, they automatically transferred money into my account. So no worries."

Geet was relieved, she looked at Radha and thought, "this girls maybe 18 but it seems to be really mature, I guess it is from all the travelling she has done. I am surprised her parents are so liberal with her going places. I could never let Geeta go without asking a million questions."

Once they were done with breakfast they put on their coats and proceeded to 5th Avenue. First stop Tiffany's. Geet bought Geeta a pair of earrings just like hers. Radha was just mesmerized by all the shiny stuff as she called jewelery. She questioned Geet why people were so into buying expensive jewellery when all they did was put it in a box. Geeta hearing Radha's question jumped in and said that wasn't true, and talked about the earrings her mom had worn the night before. She was trying to get a reaction out of Geet, but failed. Radha understood and said "yeah but it is different when you buy them for yourself."

After Tiffany's it was Bergdorf's. There was a lot more to buy here and the girls went crazy, Geet just stood on the side feeling claustrophobic. She decided enough was enough and went to customer service pulled out her black card and drew the attendant's attention to Geeta and Radha by pointing in their direction. She said, "I want you to assist them and get them out of your store as soon as possible. I love your store but it is just too crowded today and I promised my daughter I would bring her here today."

The attendant looked at her card and noting her name said "Ms. Khurana do not worry, we will try our best to accommodate your request." She left after saying that.

Geet waited for another hour at the desk and finally saw Geeta and Radha coming towards her. They had smiles that would put a kid in a candy store to shame. They started to talk to her at the same time about the stuff they had bought and Geet had to stop them before they did her head in. They girls were so happy with their purchases that they decided to give Geet a break and not drag her along with them to any of the other stores they wanted to go into. Geet made sure that Geeta had her credit card on her and said goodbye to the girls.

Radha and Geeta proceeded to all the stores along 5th Avenue.

Radha smirked and said, "Geeta, I wish I found something that would let my parents give me free range on their credit card, even if just for a day."

Geeta, "Trust me this doesn't happen, ever, why do you think I am making the most of it? I am going to take her to the cleaners." Geeta laughed. "I am not trying to be evil, but she needs to know that she can't lie to me. I am too smart for her." Geeta winked at Radha.

Radha just laughed at Geeta's silliness. By the time they got home it was already dinner time and they were starving. They ate leftovers from the night before and were stuffed to the brim. Geeta actually suggested that Radha roll her upstairs to her room. Geet looked at her daughter and her friend and laughed, she was happy that Geeta had found a friend who was more like a sister than a friend.

Radha and Geeta went upstairs with all their bags and started going through their purchases once again. They had forgotten just how much stuff they had bought.

Radha looked at Geeta and said, "How am I going to get this all to Harvard?, I should have controlled myself, its all your fault, I got caught up in your silliness."

Geeta, "Try to fit in as much stuff you can into your bag, the rest leave here, I'll ask my mom to bring it when she comes to pick me up when the semester ends."

Radha, "Okay" going through her bag, Radha found the study abroad form and gave it to Geeta, "You might as well have your mom sign this before you forget."

Geeta agreed and went downstairs. She approached Geet who was still cleaning up the after dinner mess.

Geeta, "Mamma, I could you please sign this form, I need to turn it in when I return to Harvard."

Geet who was still engrossed in her work asked, "What is the form for?"

Geeta, "It is the financial aid form for a study abroad program, I am going to Delhi next fall, well actually next summer because the semester starts early there."

Geet almost had a heart attack on hearing Geeta wanted to go to India, no Delhi she corrected herself for study abroad. She started to think what to say to dissuade Geeta from going to Delhi. She had to be careful so as to not have more questions directed towards her.

Geet, "Before I sign anything and end up paying for something, tell me why you want to study in Delhi when there are so many other options. I want to make sure that you have looked into all the options available to you."

Geeta, "Once you hear my reasons you will be more than happy to sign the form." she paused and continued, "where do I start, 1. I am studying architecture and all the other countries where I can study are so passe, 2. people for generations have already studied the architecture in these countries, 3. the forms of architecture found in France, Italy, Germany, etc have already been emulated by various architects. 4. The old architecture in India was innovative centuries ago and is still fascinating since it combines both Mugal, western and Indian aspects. 5. Also the new buildings are full avant-garde since they have to provide services in a country with a huge population. 6. Urban planning is what I want to concentrate on eventually so what other place can be better for me to study than India."

Why did her daughter have to be so smart, for the first time Geet wished Geeta wasn't so bright. Geeta's reasons were well thought off, she couldn't really argue against them, so she decided to take another approach.

Geet, "You were right, I heard your reasons and I am more than happy to sign your form, but you haven't left this country in almost 18 years, you may have a problem with the food. Also not everything is easy like here, plus every monsoon there is always an out break of malaria, that is the season in which you are going to be there, what will you do if you get sick?" Geet was sure that Geeta would decide against going to India, she was afraid of doctors and hated getting sick.

Just then Radha walks in and said, "Oh, aunty no need to worry about all that, the university makes sure that all students studying in high risk areas take proper steps. When it comes to Malaria if you take the medication before going to India you are 99 percent safe. As for the 1% you just have to leave it to God. Also the university has a liaison office in Delhi that helps in case of emergencies."

Geet gave Radha an almost fake smile and murmmered to herself, "Naam to hein devi ka, par abhi to meere liya bilkul raksheshni hain, eis ke pass sab cheezai ke answers hain." Looking at the sky she continued, "Babaji, ab mein kya karo?"

Geet, "I am still not sure, you girls have all the answers to my questions, but it isn't so easy for me to let you go (looking at Geeta). This would be the first time you would be leaving the country so I want to do some more research before I sign that form. Whatever my decision I will let you know before you leave. Is that okay?"

Geeta, "It's fine." She sounded sad and Geet wasn't happy seeing her baby dissapointed.

Geeta and Radha returned upstairs and for the first time in three days they went to bed early in their own respective beds. Both were certain that there was absolutely no reason for Geet to say no.

Geet after talking to the girls went to the study with a heavy heart. What was she going to do? She had never really contemplated the idea of Geeta ever wanting to go to India, after all NYC was her home and she had lived here happily for so many years. Also she wanted to go there to study, it wasn't like Geeta had asked to go to India as a tourist, Geet couldn't really realistically deny Geeta a chance to study in India. She decided to call Maan. It was 6:30am in India and she was sure he was awake. She dialed his number and waited for him to answer.

Maan, "Hello, are you fine?" 2 calls in 2 days, he hoped everything was fine.

Geet, "Yes, I am fine"

Maan, "Well than can I ask what is the special occasion that I have the honor of receiving 2 calls in 2 days from you" he smiled.

Geet could hear his smile, if that was possible and in an annoyed voice said, "Your daughter wants to go to Delhi to study. I don't know what to do to stop her."

Maan, "Did you ask her to give you reasons for her wanting to come to Delhi."

Geet, "Of course I did, I am not that stupid. But she is too smart for my own good, she gave really valid reasons. I even tried to scare her, by telling her about the food, and services and malaria."

Maan started to laugh, "Geet, we have food here you know and in 18 years a lot has changed, we have really good services too and really malaria?, you couldn't think of anything else?"

Geet, "It's not funny, I was taken by surprise by her request. I just said what came in my head. And her friend decided to help her and told me not to worry about malaria since they have preventive medication for it. Since when did children become so smart." she ended with an attitude.

Maan, "I am sorry to hear your problem, but she isn't a child anymore she is a grown woman. If you stop her from coming to India, she will get suspicious and may ask you why?"

Geet, "What do you want me to do then?"

Maan, "Let her come to Delhi, she will study for a semester and return back to you. Its like holding sand tightly in your palms. The tighter you hold, the more sand escapes. When you hold it loose it stays right in your palms. She will come back to you just with a little more knowledge of Indian architecture."

While they talked, Geet decided to check her credit card balance, she wanted to know exactly how deep a financial hole Geeta had dug with her shopping spree.

Geet, "Oh my God!"

Maan, "What now, you didn't like my suggestion?"

Geet, "No, that is not what I am shocked about, your suggestion is good, I am just shocked because I just saw my credit card balance. You know the saying is true nothing in life is free."

Maan, "What are you talking about?"

Geet, "You know those earrings you gifted me, Geeta found them and she thought I bought them for her. I wanted to keep them so I lied to her and told her that I bought them for myself and that I would buy her a new pair, she took advantage of me and asked if we could go shopping. I didn't know what to do and I said yes, I couldn't take the crowds today so I let her go shopping by herself with her friend and guess how much your daughter spent in one day."

Maan, "How much?"

Geet, "18,000 dollars. I have the money but how they hell does one spend that much money? and this amount doesn't include the stuff I paid for at Tiffany's and Bergdorf's. Your present was very costly."

Maan, "You deserve it, you should have just given her the earrings, I would have bought you new ones. You lied and now you have pay for it. How about this because everything happened due to the earrings I bought you, I'll pay the amount she spent."

Geet, "No Maan, I have provided for her all this time, I will pay the bill. It was nice of you to offer though." she smiled.

Geet, "It's getting late here, I should get going, I am really tired. Good night, no wait good morning"

Maan, "Good night, my love. I love you"

Geet, "I love you too." she hung up the phone.

What a crazy day she thought to herself. So she was going to let Geeta go to India, Geeta was finally going to go to the land of her birth, to the land that held so many good and bad memories for Geet. Geet went to her room and got ready. She slipped under the covers and prayed that nothing would go wrong while Geeta was in India.


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Happy Birthday- now try to guess whose birthday




Dear lovely greedy readers in Maneetland,

Once again I come bearing gifts, well okay only one gift in the form of a long long long update. I am very happy today, the episode was so so, but the pre-cap was amazing. And as Polki is happy today, you all get a nice update too.

I hope you all enjoy the update. I am a little late than usual but I think that is okay.

Also I have decided since you all know how to be greedy but don't know how to share, starting tomorrow I am going to punish you. I have already warned you all in the past that if you all didn't comment I would come after you all (ones who don't comment) with a danda and beat you up. But it seems you all didn't take me seriously, why would you, it's not like I can come through your internet connection and beat you up.

So I have decided that everyone who has commented before but has gotten lazy will see their names published in my letter to you tomorrow. Yes if you don't comment you will find you name here for everyone to read.

Not fair you may think, well it isn't fair to write a long update and not have people comment either. I need motivation too you know.

Also we have new readers, so I welcome them to this FF. Remember to tell your friends about this FF.

Until tomorrow, keep reading and commenting.

Polki