Paradise- A non-anything story - Page 2

Wow a really interesting start! I love your writing style, I find it a bit intricate to write in first hand when writing fiction so I always commend people who are able to do it so brilliantly.

extremely well written Neha
and superb concept
i loved it
continue asap
and do pm me.

-baz

Daaamn! I love your writing style! I just...love it!

The prologue was beautifully written. The way you portrayed the character was even more beautiful. The prologue was very well-written.

Every line, every single word, pulled me into the story even further until there was a point that I couldn't cross. And it's not only the fact that the story and it's characters were wonderfully carved, but it's also that it's based on an issue that almost everyone can relate to.

The protagonists opinions are very admirable. We definitely need more people like that in the world. One thing I loved about her was that she wasn't afraid to speak her mind. Not like other girls, who speak their mind, but they're very rude at the same time. No, she wasn't like that. She spoke her mind, but so politely, and so respectfully.

The parents, and her brother were completely in character. The girl was out-of-the-ordinary, but the parents, not so much. They were average, just like you and me, but she wasn't. Normally, in these stories, a person supports the protagonist, but you decided to take a different route. You're going to show her do everything on her own two feet, and make all her decisions at her own accord. Without anyone there to help her, and that's what's going to make her character even stronger.

Your writing style give me the chills, and it gives you a dose of reality. Even though I have only read a chapter, I know it's going to be an awesome story.

Whoa! First time, that I wrote such a long reply! :)

PM me when you update, please? Thank you! :)

I don't usually sign my posts, but you know what, I'll do it this time! :D

-- xxdevilishxx :]

Originally posted by: bhavana92

amazing concept Neha!
so glad ur back....
i love the way u've beautifully sketched the protagonist's character...
Aastha Trivedi is a normal girl, yet with a persona which is as unique & out-of-the-normal as one can find...
also, it's the way i can relate to her in a no. of aspects that amazes me!
maybe destiny has plans a bit different for her than what she has set for herself....

Thank you so much bhavana!I love the fact that you always take time to comment on the parts- It really means a lot to me.And I am glad that you can relate to here.As for destiny having plans for her- I dont know about that but I do have some plans for her- different or not I dont know!

Originally posted by: khwahish.e.arsh

hey neha ...a very beautiful prologue to what seems to be a very beautiful story ...loved it to the core ...totally relatable ....liked how u sketched the character of Astha ....a mordern girl like u and me wid dreams and aspirations ..and also in possession of courage to turn those dreams into reality ...completely believable...continue as soon as u can ....loved it!!!

-- khwahish 😊

I am so glad you liked the prologue so much.I am really glad you liked Astha so much- yes she is much like you and me.I hope I can do justice to your expectations.

Originally posted by: one_ashi

Wow a really interesting start! I love your writing style, I find it a bit intricate to write in first hand when writing fiction so I always commend people who are able to do it so brilliantly.

Very realistic stock characters and I liked the slight humour thrown in subtetly at places. If you are going to have a pm list then please do add me to it and do continue soon! ;)

I am glad you liked the characters- cuz this was indeed mostly about how they are rather than what they do- Thanks a bunch for liking it.

Originally posted by: xxdevilishxx

Daaamn! I love your writing style! I just...love it!

The prologue was beautifully written. The way you portrayed the character was even more beautiful. The prologue was very well-written.

Every line, every single word, pulled me into the story even further until there was a point that I couldn't cross. And it's not only the fact that the story and it's characters were wonderfully carved, but it's also that it's based on an issue that almost everyone can relate to.

The protagonists opinions are very admirable. We definitely need more people like that in the world. One thing I loved about her was that she wasn't afraid to speak her mind. Not like other girls, who speak their mind, but they're very rude at the same time. No, she wasn't like that. She spoke her mind, but so politely, and so respectfully.

The parents, and her brother were completely in character. The girl was out-of-the-ordinary, but the parents, not so much. They were average, just like you and me, but she wasn't. Normally, in these stories, a person supports the protagonist, but you decided to take a different route. You're going to show her do everything on her own two feet, and make all her decisions at her own accord. Without anyone there to help her, and that's what's going to make her character even stronger.

Your writing style give me the chills, and it gives you a dose of reality. Even though I have only read a chapter, I know it's going to be an awesome story.

Whoa! First time, that I wrote such a long reply! :)

PM me when you update, please? Thank you! :)

I don't usually sign my posts, but you know what, I'll do it this time! :D

-- xxdevilishxx :]

Wow!
Thank you so much.I just loved reading what you wrote .I read it about three times already.I hope I can deliver what you expect - getting nervous now.