MAYUR OS!.....New OS Pg 6 updated 26/7/10!! - Page 5

Hey Fatima,

wow great os! superbly written :)

~Naina

wow...(lost for words now..lemme take a breather here) I read the whole thing holding my breath. Gosh the one thing that amazes me about your writing is the way you portrait your feelings. Must say..I always used to tell you that feelings can be wild, untamed and shackling those random thoughts with the right kinda words is never an easy thing. What adds to the complexity is what you express may not be interpreted the way you want it to be communicated across. But for this one...I believe I managed to touch your feelings...see you through your words. Great job...great progress. You have come a long way in such short period and I know for sure that you will turn out to be a great writer one day.

Just one feedback before I end it..whilst I was reading it for a while I didn't know whose thoughts were they? Nupur's or Mayank's until at the end where you used 'She'. Its easier to relate and make that connection if we know whose monologue it is right at the beginning...don't you think? 😊

For you baccha...👏 👏

-Neela

Its beautiful....
cant say anything else
do write more...

that was beautifully expressed!

these are those words which touch unknown chords in your hearts...bam and peace!

Thank you for this!

-Akansha!

nice os dear.....a very unique one......

Wow dear
wonderful OS.
a verry different one
u wrote it beautifully
loved it so much

Wonderful OS!!^_^ i must say you're a very goooood writer :D!! Thx for the PM!

very nice OS plz do write more and thx alot for the pm