MAYUR OS!.....New OS Pg 6 updated 26/7/10!! - Page 6

amazing OS dear loved it ...................

Originally posted by: ash_sajan

wow fatima nice os dear!
i love reading things from your side
and especially if it,s on mayur and sajan.
Lovely one dear!!and thanks for the pm

I want to write a long comment...but one word suffices to explain what I feel.....

Originally posted by: sariska_mjht

res hey

loved it

do write more

yippee me first

Originally posted by: Sunshine Girl

res...........its so short.........😕

*Edited*

Awww beautiful.........awssm........u r such an amazing writer.........👏👏👏

Originally posted by: -Mansi-

Wow beautifully written!

Originally posted by: ght_sajan

nice os dear

Originally posted by: Naina2127

wow great os! superbly written :)

~Naina

Originally posted by: sharneel

wow...(lost for words now..lemme take a breather here) I read the whole thing holding my breath. Gosh the one thing that amazes me about your writing is the way you portrait your feelings. Must say..I always used to tell you that feelings can be wild, untamed and shackling those random thoughts with the right kinda words is never an easy thing. What adds to the complexity is what you express may not be interpreted the way you want it to be communicated across. But for this one...I believe I managed to touch your feelings...see you through your words. Great job...great progress. You have come a long way in such short period and I know for sure that you will turn out to be a great writer one day.

Just one feedback before I end it..whilst I was reading it for a while I didn't know whose thoughts were they? Nupur's or Mayank's until at the end where you used 'She'. Its easier to relate and make that connection if we know whose monologue it is right at the beginning...don't you think? 😊

For you baccha...👏 👏

-Neela