FF: Geet and Maan Love story...pt 16, pg 18 - Page 12

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Posted: 14 years ago
plz geet and maan all parts hindi written main bhejo
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Part 16

I think i made a mistake last time ... i accidently talked about Sasha when she is not in the story....so just ignore that and i shall fix it


G: ahhhh ... idea.. ...(goes to maan) sir aap darwaze ke piche jaa kar chup jayee ye... aur jab mein ishara karoon aap jaldi se chale jayee ye ....

M: (agrees and hides behind the door)

G goes and stands on the bed ... and screams really loudly ....M gets this wiered expression on his face...

Everyone down stairs hears her screaming and runs upstairs to see what is wrong

A: ggggggggG kya hua ...ttttttttuuuuuuuuummmmmm chhillayee kyun...

P: G tu thik hain na

G: wohhhhhh (points in a corner...) waha meine ek ..... uhhhhhhh....chooha dekha....(nope the cat is sleeping so no chooha)

Everyone goes to look in that place... when G sees that everyone is focusing a that place, she signals with her hands to M ....M quickly gets out of the room and before leaving gets a small glimpse of G.

G: chooha dikha?

P: nahi ....

G: lagta hain bhag gaya

A: haan shaayad tumhe dekh kar bhag gaya .....hahahahahah....

G: (stops smiling and gives a "not funny" look)

Every one slowly leave the room and go back to work.... when every one has left G gives a out a sigh of relief...

M on the other side enters the mansion ... he thinks "i have to prove that I am right about what i saw in G's eyes".... M is now in his room.... today i will make sure that she confesses her feelings.... The goes on with M doing work and G trying to avoid him ....

M calls G to his table and tells her about a project.... he tells her that she needs to talk to the clients about it.....

M: G ek kaam karo hotel Evergreen mein clients ko bula lo ... aur waha par unse sare chize discuss kar lo ... aur haa agar koi problem hui toh mujhe bula lena..... mein uss hi hotel mein Pa ke saath candle light dinner par rahoonga....

G: (shocked and sad) aap Pa ke saath dinner par ja rahe hain

M: haan kyun nahi jana chahiye ...

G: nahi ... apko jana chahiye waise bhi jab se woh aayi hain aap use kahi akele lekar nahi gaye ...toh bohhot acchi baat

M looks a bit stunned and sad

It's about 8:00pm and G is at the hotel with the clients and discussing the project when she sees M and Pa enter....she gets depressed and jealous seeing them together and seeing how nice M is treating her....

M and Pa sit at a table that isn't far and close to G's table.... Pa doesn't notice G there.....

The night passes.....M and Pa have ordered food, and are almost finished with it...M and G are both sneaking looks at each other ...G finishes her meeting with the clients and they leave.

G gets up and is about to leave when Pa sees G and asks her to come to their table.....G comes to their table....

Pa: Are G tum yaha?

G: woh mein yaha.... uhhh...client's ke saath meri meeting thi....

Pa: oh ... lagta hain meeting khatam ho gayee hain

G: haan mein abhi nikal rahi thi ....

Pa: ummmmmm G, ab jab tum yahi ho toh thodi der ke liya ruk jao na, hum sab saath hi challenge....

G: (looks at M, who has a very suspicious/naughty smile on his face) nahi mujhe jana chahiye...waise bhi yeh aap ka pehla dinner hain....

Pa: oh please G, humara toh almost ho gaya ...please wait karo na.....

Pa gives G a puppy dog face and seeing her like that G agrees....

G: thik hain leking mein waha (pointing to her table) behti hoon ...aap dono apna dinner continue kijiye....

Pa agrees....

After a while M and Pa finish up their dinner , and go to G's table.... they had just decided to leave ...right then the owner of the hotel starts to talk on the Mic (there is a large dance floor) ....

The owner says that "today they have a performance that is dedicated to the olden times and is being performed by a few college students.... so I would like everyone to stay and enjoy their performance"

Pa: wow Maan we should watch it (holds onto his arm).... hain na G

G looks at Pa holding M's arm and gets shocked

M: sure why not

M and G look at each other

The performers come on the dance floor.... there three people; one guy and two girls....

They start performing to the song "Kajra Mohabbat Wala"

Pa is enjoying the performance ... M and G are staring at each other while the performance and remembering all the moments together....

After the performance is over the performers ask the some volunteers from audience to perform to the same song. Pa happily volunteers and drags M and G.... M gets an idea and decides to perform....the performers explain each of them their parts....

{so here is how it goes}

(G singing this part to M) kajra mohabbat wala ankhiyo me aisa dala

kajre ne le lee meree jan, hai re mai teree kurban

(M to Pa ...trying to make G jealous) duneeya hai mere pichhe, lekin mai tere pichhe

( M holding Pa's hand) apna bana le meree jan, hai re mai tere kurban

( Pa singing this to M while pulling him away from G) kajra mohabbat wala ankhiyo me aisa dala

kajre ne le lee meree jan, hai re mai teree kurban

(G singing this to Pa) aayee ho kaha se goree aankho me pyar leke

chadhatee javanee kee pehle bahar leke

dehli shaher ka sara mina bajar leke

jhumka barelee wala kaano me aisa dal (remembering M placing the earring in her ear)

jhumke ne le lee meree jan, hai re mai tere kurban (M notice's G's jealous face and smiles)

( M to Pa.... G standing behind him getting angry) duneeya hai mere pichhe, lekin mai tere pichhe

apna bana le meree jan, hai re mai tere kurban

(G singing to M) motor na bangla mangu, jhumka na har mangu

dil ko chalane wale dil ka karar mangu

saiyan bedardee mere thoda sa pyar mangu

(M turns and sings to Pa) kismat bana de meree, duneeya basa de meree

kar le sagai meree jan, hai re mai tere kurban (G shocked and becomes very sad...gets tears in her eyes)

(Pa to M) kajra mohabbat wala ankhiyo me aisa dala

kajre ne le lee meree jan, hai re mai teree kurban

(G is about to leave when M holds her hand and brings her close to him)

(G sings to him) jab se hai dekha tujhko, ho gaye ghulam tere

apna bana le goree, aayenge kam tere

apna yeh jivan sara likh denge nam tere

kurta yeh jali wala, us par motiyan kee mala

kurte ne le lie meree jan, hai re mai teree kurban

(M lets go off G and turns to Pa and sings... G is sad again) duneeya hai mere pichhe, lekin mai tere pichhe

apna bana le meree jan hai re mai tere kurban

(Pa to M) kajra mohabbat wala ankhiyo me aisa dala

kajre ne le lee meree jan, hai re mai teree kurban

Seeing M and Pa together ...G leaves... M follows her.....Pa gets busy talking to the performers and doesn't notice them leave....

M stops G midway ... Now the conversation they have is the same as the one they had in the actual show (the conversation after M gets drunk, just a bit different... but the feelings are the same) ....

G leaves crying ... Pa sees G running away from M in tears .... she thinks that there is definitely something between them ..

Pa: lagta hain mujhe hi find out karna hoga ... aur shayad mein joh soch rahi hoon woh sahi ho

The next morning M is in his room all depressed. He decides that since she wants to stay away from him then that's what she will get......

M: mein use apne paas aane ka mauka hi nahi doonga

The next day Pa comes to the outhouse and plays that word game (that was shown in the show) with G ... and the figures out that G loves M.....

Now after that everything happens the same way as they showed in the actual "Geet" show... and comes to the part where G is wearing the sari and M is approaching her ....



Sorry guys , i probably disappointed u guys. But let me know what u guys think ...

I'm actually thinking of the Hoshiyarpur part so i wanted to lead to that section ....


Plzzzzzz do comment I would really appreciate it





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Posted: 14 years ago
lolz, i kindof found d song part being more funnier thn serious
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Posted: 14 years ago
wow it was so good i think geet and maan shd be to gether
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Posted: 14 years ago
Awesome update!! Loved it!!
Pls cont.soon!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
Veryyy nice part.
Plzz continue soon.
Thanxx for the pm.




Fatima
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Posted: 14 years ago
jst read both updates cant wait
for the nxt part
plzzzzzzzzzzzzz continue
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Posted: 14 years ago
Thats Awesome
Loved that Geet felt jealous
pls continue soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
i like d pt geet got jealous..thax 4 update.......
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey nice one.. luved the jealous geet.. do continue soon

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