Standing next to me*updtd*pg*16 - Page 7

Originally posted by: hira_123

Gunzi.......Naz......wah wah...what can I say....last time u gave us a lovely father-son scene and today u gave us a lovely mother-daughter bonding scene.......love u for it guys...superb...this FF is shaping up really well......cant wait when Shaan and Ria meet....

and the last bit when Ria said to her mum that she is getting old, and wrinkles are occurring on her face...so she needs to chill was A-MAZ-ING........xx...love u guys..xx....Keep smashing it...xx

Originally posted by: aparajhita

Hey Gunsy di and Naz.
This part was really good. Loved the part when she had a difficulty in changing her old habits.
The bonding between Mother-Daughter just rocked your update. Just loved it.
All through this part I was imagining myself and my Maa..

So, update soon girls.

P.S.- Since my school is reopening from 1st July so I'll may be unable to read and comment on your parts quickly. My late replies can be as late as 2 weeks or so, so please bear with my languid style of commenting and please don't kick me out of your PM list!
Apsy.

Part- 3

Ria is unloading some boxes from the wagon.......she goes inside and starts segregating them.......

Ria: Mum this belongs to you......where to keep it???

Mum: keep it in kitchen................

a person rings the bell ......Ria takes the door.........

Ria: yes

person: mam....everything's unloaded.....

Ria: oh okay.........here you go (she hands over money to him)

Mum: who was at the door?

Ria: oh Mumma.............woh mera purana dost tha.........??(She chuckles)

Mum: Ria........when will you grow up???

Ria: maybe.....never...........you only called me kid last night....remember (she smiles raising her eyebrows....)

Mum: did you clear his payment...?

Ria: yes Mumma I did.......now you sit and relax on this couch and I go and set things up....

Mum: will you be able to do it all alone???.......wait I'll help you.......

Ria: Mumma........... Don't worry I'll manage............you just take some rest!!!

Mum: okay as you say....m here only...if you need any help tell me.

Ria: ....okay!!!

she climbs upstairs......

Talking to her self

Ria: hmmm...... left one or right one???......confusion............which room to choose????

she's standing at the junction of both the doors along the narrow hallway............when she sees someone standing in the window!!!!!!

she goes near the window.......

the guy is just lost somewhere.........as if drowned in his own thoughts.......she feels a strange spark somewhere deep down inside her heart........

later in the evening...........

Ria reaches home by 10...............

Ria: Home Sweet Home...........10' o clock...... (She recalls looking at her watch).....aaj toh margayi beta tu!!!.......

She enters from the front door...........like a sneaking mouse...........slowly and softly putting her feet.....so that her presence is not felt..........but

"Ria, freshen up and turn to dinner table.....waisey bhi you are late!!!!"

"Mumma......not again!!! How do you always come to know that it's me.....???

Mumma: I need not, you are my daughter.....and I know you very well.

Ria: Mumma......m full.......I ate.

Mumma: no ways.......usse kya banega. You need proper nutrition, you are a growing-up kid......

Ria: Mumma.......not again....I'm 25 and you still refer to me as kid........Mumma.........When will I grow-up for you???

Mumma: never......you will be my same lil' daughter..........forever and ever...........

She hugs her Mumma sweetly........

Ria: love you.......Mumma...........

Mumma: Bas karo....I know you very well you will make me emotional and run away.......but not this time.......come and have dinner with me........

Ria: oho! Mummyji.....wait karoji m coming......... (She answers her Mum back in full kajol of k3g style)

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Ria and her mother are sitting and eating

Ria: how was your day???

Mumma: good… my new colleagues welcomed me very warmly, helped me with everything. It was good!!

Acha! By the way where were you 'Miss'???

Ria: umm…..me..... (Swallowing) Well I went on a little tour of the city……and found a lot many things

Mumma: Little…!?! (Referring to her home returning by 10 at night)

Ria: Okay bigger than the 'little'….

Mumma: okay that's better. So what did you find out???

Ria: A lot of things……I toured up many places from malls to street shops, lovely place! And I met an old friend here she insisted me on showing me her city so got busy with her and as a result I was late.

Mumma: great! So when are you giving me a tour!?

Ria: whenever you say! Madame (She answers in full dramatic-dialogue tone)

Ria finishes.....and gets up from the table....and heads towards the kitchen

Ria: ....Mumma...you need help with dishes???

Mumma: no mera bacha you go and take rest......I'll manage

Ria: are u sure??

Mumma: yes bacha!!!

Ria keeps her plate in kitchen and climbs upstairs.........

Ria's room

She gets inside..........goes to cupboard...........and fetches her night clothes.......

In bathroom. While brushing......she looks into the mirror.........and thinks............

Ria: Are there really any dream princes????.........because if yes then I must have found till now..........

Ah maybe............... those are just fairy tales to keep lil' girls busy in childhood in some dreams........ (She chuckles to herself)

Reaching to bed she falls loosely on those covers............

Finally!!!............ (She thinks).....what a tiring day it was..........

And slowly she gets into those covers.............