'Qayenaat' a MaYur FF - Completed

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Sonam Mathur

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Posted: 15 years ago

#31

oh ... it's wonderful .... hope mayur meet soon ... love ur poetic diction ....

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Asmara.

@Asmara.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#32

lovely one.....

eagerly waiting for next part....

continue soon....

and plzzzz add me to u r pm list....

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Divya

@myownarea

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Posted: 15 years ago

#33

Interesting Interesting ..very interesting

The character description of Mayank was uncannily like me :S Seriously for a sec I was like 😲 thats so like me :) ok, I loved it :)
I also loved the beautiful imagery u create with ur wonderful words!!
well done Neela..keep writing!!:)

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Mariyam Ghaffar

@..Mariyam..

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Posted: 15 years ago

#34

both parts were greattttt....

update it s000000n......

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Mahima

@Mahima_13

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Posted: 15 years ago

#35

phir se itna chota update

par update rocking tha

toh mayank ki notebook nupur ke pas hai

continue soon

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bhargavi

@gopi06

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#36

nice ff
plz add me in your pm list

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-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#37

@achoose glad you liked the beginning and its always nice to see the lovely comments from u..thanx

@mina..🤗kitne dino k baad...parhte rehna..yeh waala kaafi interesting honewala hai 😉

@mahi what do I say? 1st one to comment on part 1 woh bhi itna ishtyle me..thank u hun. per 2nd update to kaafi bara tha..ab isse zyada kya likkhooooon 😭

@kulsum tumne to abhi tak 2nd part parha hi nahi 😭 pasand nahi aaya kya? agar aisa hai to bata de na ...writer hone ka faaida hai..changes are possible..😆

@nidhi yeah..Mayank woh bhi romantic aur woh bhi poet. can u imagine how far my imagination can go 😉 very difficult...asli mayank ko dimagh se hatana but as u said this is going to be interesting

@ fariaa tumi abar formal hoye gecho? mar danga kothabarta gulo khub miss korchi bhai. mone hoy rege acho amar upor kintu ami to shei kokhon theke shada potaka jhulaye dariye achi. Tumpi o gayeb hoye geche...but honestly ami kintu chai tomra poro..tomader honest opinion means a lot.

@Divya ...kya comment karti ho...u just puzzle me but ur comments no matter on what topic and what form I always love 'em. interesting she says...aage aage dekhiye hota hai kya 😉

@maria thanks sweety. more updates coming soon. Keep reading

To all the new joiners who have joined me on this new FF of mine i.e. sonam, sariska, favorite, dpk (sorry guys dont know ur names), gopi, Alini...welcome on board. Hope you enjoy this journey with me. Please keep reading and do comment, good or bad everything is wholeheartedly welcome.

Hope I have not missed anyone but if I have than apologies but thanks for reading and commenting.

-Neela

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adi_gupta

@adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#38

wow yaar lovley ff
and lovely words
just add me to your pm list and plz pm me whenever you update

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-SharNeela-

@-SharNeela-

Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#39

~~~~~~~~~~~~Part 3: Lost and Found~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So…couple of days have passed by and Nupur has read Qayenaat so many times that few of the lines she can utter without a glimpse of the book. She has absolutely fallen in love, not only with Qayenaat or the whole concept of 'sher-o-shayeri' but also with the 'shaayer' himself whom she has no idea about yet. One of these days, she is sitting in the classroom surrounded by her class fellows. Class has not started yet but Nupur is on a roll with her newly found so-called talent of "shaayeri"

N: to arz kiya hai…

bas do pal yun hi aap mujhme samaaye raho
bas do pal yun hi khamosh raho aur kuch na kaho
bas do hi pal ki ahsaas ho tum…humain inhe chhooN lene do...
Khuda ke liye humain yeh do pal jee lene do

and the class goes…WAH WAH !!! WAH WAH…..one more, one more…

Nupur is over the moon. The whole class thinks that she has written these lines but its only Diya, Suhaani and CJ who know the actual truth but they have rather decided to be quiet and let Nupur have some fun.

CJ: yeh Nupur kuch zyada hi bhao khaa rahi hai. kisi din lapete me aajyegi
D: whats lapete??
S: rehne de yaar…per iss tarha kisi ki notebook se sher churaake phir usse apna bataana…mujhe kuch sahi nahi lag raha
D: Suhaani tu kabhi nahi badlegi! Ussne kab kaha k yeh usske sher hai..ab log agar aisa samajhte hai to issme Nupur ki kya ghalti hai?
S: phir bhi..usse clear karna chahiye na!
CJ: arre..tu to aise bol rahi hai jaise imtihaan me nakal kar rahi hai woh aur pakar jaane ki darr hai. take it easy yaar…this is just for fun!

On the other hand, Nupur is enjoying her fan following in the class who are demanding more to hear from her.

N: to suniye..

kadmon me dil rakh diya hai ...hatheli par jaan
har dhadkaan se aaha nikalti hai...har aaha se armaan
de ijaazat mujhe to yeh gunaah bhi kar jaaooN...
teri ankhon par lutaa du zindagi tamaam

While the class is busy wow'ing Nupur and Nupur being busy enjoying the fame, Mayank was passing by the classroom and overheard her. He instantly stood still to really understand if he heard this right! Isn't that something he wrote himself? Who is quoting these lines?? So he decides to take a peek into the room and watches Nupur perform. Initially, he was shocked which he overcame as soon as he solved the mystery of how this girl is reading his poems…yeah..Qayenaat is with this 'ajnabee, anjaan larki'. Then he is appalled to see that how she is enjoying the fame from his creations but soon after, as he is standing there watching Nupur, he finds the whole thing quite interesting and kind of cute! He is smiling to himself and decides to stay quiet for a while and play along. Nupur has just finished quoting yet another one from his book when Mayank steps inside the classroom…

M: wah..wah..kya baat hai! kya aap ne likkha hai yeh?
N: jee…hum hi ne likkha hai (Mayank can see the pride in her eyes)
M: lag raha hai…itne khubsoorat jazbaat itne pyaare alfaazon me to koi aap sa hi bayaan kar sakta hai
N: jee…sahi farmaya aap ne. by the way, aap hai kaun? hamare class ki to nahi lagte

Before Mayank can introduce himself, CJ intervenes

CJ: Nupur…yeh Mayank Sharma hai. Hamare senior hai, final year.
N: to hamare class me kya kar rahe hai? parhane aaye hai kya?
M: jee nahi…parhne.
N: haan??
M: I mean..aap ki itni acchi shaayeri sunn ker kadam khud ba khud ruk gaye. aap waqai me bohat accha likhti hai. hum to pehli hi nazar me aap per fida hogaye
N: kya?
M: I mean…aap ki shaayeri per fida hogaye. agar aap ijaazat de to agli baar jab aap yeh mushayre ki mehfil sajaaye, to hum bhi aana chahenge.
N: hum apne fans per koi rok tok nahi lagate. aap beshakk aasakte hai (she hides her face behind CJ and giggles)
M: jee bohat shukriya. Phir milenge…

Mayank leaves the classroom with a grin on his face. He doesn't know why but he is feeling quite relieved and happy at the same time. Relieved because he found his Qayenaat and happy because his Qayenaat seems to have fallen in the right hands. As Mayank leaves the classroom, CJ gives a detailed introduction of Mayank as the university topper, smart, intelligent, romantic, good-looking, dashing young man and usually does not talk to anyone whereas girls wait for days when he would just look at them let alone talk to them. After hearing all this from CJ, Nupur cannot help but laugh away thinking how she made a complete fool out of a senior and a university topper.

-Neela

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adi_gupta

@adi_gupta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#40

neela hats of to you
yaar itna achi words or shayari bhi bahut jayda achi hai yaar itna achi wrding bus dil ko chu gayi
or nups yaar quite interesting maynk find his ......
and nupur ws thinking she can fool maynk
wow lovely yaar
thx for the pm
i love to read more soon update

"aap ke shabd dil ko chuu gaye
rooh mein utter ker muje kho gaye
kya kahe or kya na kahe
hum to aap ke hunar ke kayal ho gaye"

Edited by adi_gupta - 15 years ago

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