MayUr OS Gallery: OS 19 - Upd Pg. 114 (5/7/2011)

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drmaha

@drmaha

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#771

awsome update akansha..........

i loved it.......the way u describe nupurs love gosh.......😍

pls do pm me urs nxt update.........

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Kankshita

@thegameison

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#772

Edited at last 😆 😆

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Sabah

@a little faith

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#773

Akansha,

Sorry Samrat

I like the dear diary motif of this OS, unlike anything I have read of yours before, which shows your versatility. ⭐️

is sinisterly handsome when he laughs.True, we become suspicious of anything that our heart's perceive contrary to what should be. However since it is our heart's perception, should we not seek its sinister motives, playing against our mind's understanding and our eye's sight? Clever preamble, where the central character is enamoured and yet cautious of her endearment.

having the most amazing doughnut that I have ever had.I love these little details that add depth to your prose but also simultaneously the characterizations. Excellent.

I liked the circular loop of your four reasons. ⭐️

She just seemed happy she had dated Mayank As I said, you have this wonderful ability to write into the narrative sharp characterizations, doing that in one sentence is extraordinarily fine. ⭐️

And this particular man called Mayank Sharma has "Be wary of me" written all over him.Excellent end for a cliffhanger.

...I love being insane. Very cute.😳

which has his name engraved in a beautiful plate. It's just majestic(if the word is right) and yet simple. Again that concise characterization. ⭐️

Later that night, I wonder about the smile that had formed on his face just from my sight. I smile. I don't think I am insane anymore. It truly is those little details, that we could easily miss in a blink, or the moment between two breaths shared by kindred, that we find that peace of mind from amongst those broken pieces of our heart. Nicely done. ⭐️

I have even tried to flirt with him, twice, both attempts ending in a disaster and earning me a "What's up with you" look from Mayank. & Good he reminds me I was mad because I sure didn't remember it. I was in his arms, remember? Endearingly woven in. 😳

Akansha, looking at when you wrote this, I can see how far your writing has come in such a short time. Do not misunderstand me, the OS is good, and I see within it those seeds that have now flourished. It makes me wonder at how far you will grow, soar. Best wishes for that adventure.
Love Sabah

Edited by a little faith - 14 years ago

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Archana

@a-little-hope

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#774

OMG, its been more than a month and I haven't commented on your OS.

Ghhooor apraadh hua hai madam ji... hamva maaf karee do.. *hiding face behind MIL's pallu... 🤣*

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You-Know-Who

@You-Know-Who

Dazzler

+ 6

Posted: 14 years ago

#775

*pulls you out from behind your MIL's pallu and gives you my ultimate stalker-cum-serial killer look*

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Archana

@a-little-hope

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#776

aaa bachao muze iss crazy serial killer se...

Sweetu, I know you love me so much... but dont give me that serial killer look... it scares the hell out of me...😔🤣

Sorry Samrat... oops.. Sorry Sweetu.. I will comment later... Im bherry buzzy... you know.. 😎

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Archana

@a-little-hope

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#777

Sweetu,

Its been a loonnng time I commented on your OS, isn't it? Im bad. Very bad. But no more execuses of being busy and inactive and all. I have a laptop on my lap, I have reliance netconnect and I have time rightnow. Yes, MIL is gone out and I'm free 😉 So why not read my favorite writer's OS and enjoy the evening? Yes, that's what I'm gonna do.

Plus.. now that my crazy stalker has given me a break from her serial killer looks, Im free and relaxed to read. (Did I tell you that I love my crazy serial killer to death? Ya...I'm pretty much insane like Nupur here. 😆 )

When I read this OS for the first time, I was smiling ear to ear. First of all, when you had told me that this OS was a little fluff, I didn't know what it would be like. But when I read it first time, I was fascinated by the style with which this OS is written. Very edgy... very unique!

Now I read it again! And Im blushing again. 😳 Why do I love Mayank so much when you describe him? I don't know, but you definitely have that hypnotizing style with which you write about Mayank, that it makes me feel all dreamy and crazy about him. 😍

Mayank Sharma is/was a Casanova, a rich spoilt brat, just that he was groomed well enough to sweep you off your feet.

I love this Casanova.. 😍

*coming back from the dreamland*

I loved loved loved this OS!

First of all Mayank...😍, secondly the title... and some references.. 😆

You know you are great at witty dialogues and I'm a fan of such witty stuff. I loved the conversation between MN having champagne.. especially Mayank's last line which made Nupur speechless...that small convo was awesome ⭐️

Imperfect Mayank... he forgets the date.. but he forgets his anger and a genuine smile forms on his face with a sight of Nupur... that's perfect Mayank.. a man every girl would love to date..!

You make me love and drool over every Mayank of your every FF, every OS. 😆

This is the cutest OS I read from your writings. Yeah.. I know you dont like cheesy words. But you are stuck with me, so you have to bear my poor vocab and cheesy words!😳😆

Well... what should I say more? I want to pat your back.. you are one perfectionist girl I'm very proud of!! You bring different varieties in your writings.. and you do that with a class. You never lose your special Akki touch. Its always a pleasure to read your writings... anytime.. everytime...!!

Love You! 🤗🤗

p.s. Now, can I get a hug from you? Waiting!

p.p.s. You will always be my Sweetu! *Cheesy line 😆 can't help it 🤣*

-Miffy!

Edited by ButterflyEffect - 14 years ago