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Posted: 15 years ago
#51
awwwww guys thanku soooooooooooooooooooooooo m uch 4 just this much amazing response
we both feel on top of the world nn we'll try to update as soon as [possible .. lov ya all loaDS
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Sorry for the late reply. Actually itni sari ff hai padne me time lagta hai. U guys are amazing. I love the way u narrate the story. Sammy and Mayank's part is the hilarious one. Sholay. and sammy mausi. 😆 They are going to shimla my fav place. Waise dolly simmi ko bolna apni reincarnation story ka ud de. Kitne dino se intezaar kar rehi hoon.
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awesome guys

loved it very much

plzad me to ur pm list

love pebbzzyy
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hi it was really beautiful mindblowing keep it up
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Posted: 15 years ago
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HI GUYSSS,
Me n dolly r really happy for such a briilant reponse from u guys and we r sorry too that we were not able to reply to each and everyone but now i promise i will surely reply to each and everyone.plz keep commenting and keep reading our updates.

MOHABBTEIN PART 2>>>
Scene 1>>
(BY DOLLY JAAN)
Samrat's house ,,

(by mayank)

Suhani== mayank mein tumhein bata rahi hun ,, papa kisi din bhai ka murder kar denge'

M== (sighing heavily) jaanta hun.. I hope murder karne k baad princy uncle sad na ho'

Su== mayank ,, tum jaante nahin ho kal raat ko meine bhai ko kaise sambhala hai.. itni pi huyi this usne,,, vo to acha hua k adhiraj samrat ko peeche k darwaze se chodne aaya tha''varna pata nahi agar papa use is haalat mein dekh lete to kya hota'

M== lucky him.. kahan hai vo??

Su== patanahin .. thodi der pehle papa ne unko bathroom se dhakke maar kar bahar nikala tha .. can u belive it .. he was sleeping on the flush seat n the washrooms door was not even bolted'.

I shook my head,, it was really lucky that he was still alive n was not already murdered by my principal n his father ..

M== princy uncle kahan hain??

Su== array haan mayank tumko batana bhul gayi, papa ko inter college meet k liye jaa rahi humari college ki team mein kuch changes karne the.. I think dia n benji will be cmg with us too..

I smiled wickedly'. Benji too was coming??? Good news ' that boy had to pay up for loads'..now I could kill him for what he did to us last night n dump his body down one of the hills at shimla.

Just then a horn honking from outside the house distracted me from my mental plans of devising ways to strangle benji'

Su== lagta hai raj aa gaya.. k bye mayank.. pls bhai ko le aana.. patanahi vo kahan chupa hua hai.. mein unka bag pack kar diya hai n mm taking that with me' giv me ur luggage to I'll take that with me tooo'

M== k..

Saying so I handed her my not so heavy backpack n watched her marching out of the house.. at least my bag would reach shimla even if I didn't'.

Then I walked hurriedly towards the store room ,I was damm sure that samrat was still there..

N bang on I was right..

The sight was funny .. samrat was sprawled over the broken chair kept besides the left side of the washing machine,, one of his foot was resting in a tub full of water.. n more then half of his jeans were drenched in the soapy water from the tub'..

His head was slumped across the cover of the washing machine..

I sighed n moved forward to shake him awake..

"twin wake up' hum pehle hi bahut late ho gaye hain.. wake up samrat"

The only response I got from him was a grunt n then a lopsided grin stretched across his face..

This was the expression he usually wore while talking to girls..

I couldn't believe it.. this guy completely high on booze from last night , sleeping on a washing machine ,almost about to miss the train to the competition he had been preparing for the past couple of months was dreaming about girls at this stupid time????????

I sighed heavily.. n then shook him violently once more'. He caught hold of my hand then , kissed it, n then hugging it went back to his sleep'

I was going to kill him before I killed benji, about that I was sure'

Just then I heard a whimper from the door to the store room, n turned around to see the house maid standing there flabbergasted holding a cloth basket'.

Something about her look made me wrench my hand back from samrat's grip'

Samrat grunted then , n I wanted to kick him real hard'.

I looked at the lady standing at the door , she was about thirty something n the way she was eyeing us made it clear to me that she was sure we two were going to be the lead pair in dostana part 2''

"aab bb aaap ko kuch chahiye yahan se??", I made myself ask.

"huh?? Haan vo yeh kapde dhonne the , lekin samrat baba machine k upar so rahe hain to mein'.."

I moved forward n took the basket from her hand,,, I had an idea, n it was a great way of shocking samrat out of his kumbkaran stupor'

I threw the clothes in the maching through the opening in front of it , poured a bucket full of water in it n then switched on the spin system of the machine'

Then I staggered away from it clearly grinning mischieviously..

The machine jerked once , b4 shuddering continuously n throwing samrat away from it,, he landed face down in a tub full of soapy water n dirty , wet clothes'

I couldn't stop myself n laughed really hard at the sight'

Samrat finally awake looked confuse.. n then he jerked his head out of the tub n looked at me,,,,,,,, angrily..

A wet sock was dangling from his one year' n he was completely drenched in the water'

The sight was really funny n it made me laugh even harder,,,,,,

"you '.i am not going to leave u mob"

Saying so he got up n lunched at me'

I fell back on the cardboard boxes n he was over me,,,

He was about to punch me when the shriek of the maid, distracted both of us'

We looked at the maid confused,, n saw her fleeing from the storoom giving us one more look of disgust..

Both of us straightened up quickly''

SCENE2>>>
(BY ME)
Gunur

Gunjan and nupur somehow managed to get taxi in 20 mins but to there surprise in btw the way the taxi got tyre punctued.

N:ab kya hua bhai sahab(she said in dam anger)

Auto wala:pata nahi

N:pata nahi matlab

Aw:pata nahi matlab pata nahi, aap ko hindi nahi ati kya

N:hindi nahi ati toh tujhsa hindi mai baat kaise karti ghade?

G:di shaanth ho jaye plz.

N:dekh iss ghade ko kaise baat kar raha hai hum se(than she noticed that he still hadn't gotten down to check what happened to taxi)arrey ab kis muharat ka intezaar hai tumhain .koi shubh ghadi par utar kar dekhoge ki taxi ko hua kya hai? vo rukh kyun gayi .tab se humain tukur tukur dekhe jaa rahe ho baad mai dekh lena hum kahin bhag nahi jaa rahe samjhe .offo baad mai bhi dekhna ki zarurat nahi utro (she shouted on top of her lungs causing taxi wala to come out of taxi in a single go)

Gunur came out of taxi and asked what had happened to taxi when taxi wala showed them pins on road due to which taxi got one of its tyres punchered.

N:par yeh pins kis ghade nah yaha dale

Stranger:maina

G:n:uday bhaiye aap na(gunur said in shock to see him their)

U:haan maina woh kya haina mai itni dair sa pagalon ki tarah tum logon ka peecha kar raha hoon oor joor sa cheek bhi raha tha but tum logon nah sunna hi nahi isiliye mujhe yeh rasta apnna pada

G:par aap humara peecha kyun kar rahe tha

U:kyun ki kyun ki(he got confuse)

N:kyun ki

U:kyun ki kya nupur

N:uday bhaiya aap hamara peecha kyun kar rahe tha

U:haan kyun ki tum logh yeh bag bhool gaye tha

N:kaunsa

U:yeh (uday said showing the bag)

N:hey bhagwaan uday bhaiya mai aap ka kya karun (she slapping her forehead with her hand)

G:kyun kya hua di

N:arry yeh bag phata hua tha .kal raat ko maina yeh bag khali kar ke khudh ek naye bag mai apni chijain daal liye the. uday bhaiya nah khali bag laye hain aur dekh kya kar diya beech sadak par humein la kar khada kar diye. hayye meri phuti kismet (she said crying)

G:koi baat nahi di uday bhaiya car mai aye honge hum uss mai chalete hain aur waise bhi unki koi galti nahi bichare humare liye yaha tak aye

N:haan sahi kaha chaliye uday bhaiya bag le lijiye aur humain station chodh dijiye

U:nahi chodh sakta

G:kyun

u:kyun ki(he moved a side when gunur saw a cycle)

N:yeh cycle ko hum baadmai dekh lainga car kahan hain chaliye

U:ma issi pa aya hoon

N:kyaaaaaaaaaaa(nupur was holding bag and in shock she drops it on her own foot)ouch''(she started crying fakely)

G:di shaanth ho jao koi na koi taxi mil jayegi

N:kya khak milegi iss sunsaan sadak par dam humare naseeb hi kharab hain

G:di shaanth ho jaye kuch nah kuch kar hi lenge

N:hmm par kya(just than they saw a lorry and nupur ran in btw the road and stood there waving her hands at the taxi)

G:di kya kar rahi ho di hatho

U:haan nupur hato kya kar rahi ho

N:stop stop stoppppppppppp(thelorry was not stopping. in horror they all kept their hands on their eyes after some time they saw that lorry got stopped)

N:phew rukh gayi

Lorry wala:oyye marna ka itna shaukh hai toh kissi aur di gadi neeche aa kar maro

N:sastriya kaal ji humari ttaxi idhar hi khabrab hogi hai zara tusin sanu lift de devo ji(guys I dontknow Punjabi but im still trying lol) (sanu u really don't know punjabi ..lols)

Lorry wala:oyye zarrur ji kyun nahi

N:chal gunjan bye uday bhaiya (they sat in lorry and zoomed towards station. After a lot of time they reached)

N:aap ks bahut bahut tanvad ji

Lorry wala:koi baat nahi ji..assin Punjabi hi Punjabi de kaam aavange na?? (lol he was thinking they r Punjabi by saying so he went off)

Gunur ran into the station they see that train is still there and it was late ..n will be going at 11:30 so they sighed in relief that they did not get late)

SCENE 3>>

In bhushan mansion

Dia cell started ringing

D:dam iss bhi abhi bajna tha hello(she sad irritately)

Princi:hello dia(dia jumped out of bed in horror)

D:yes sir

Prici:dia tumhain abhi meet ka liye nikalna hoga

D:WHAT matlab mai kuch samjhi nahi

Princi:well mujhe pata chala hai k samrat ki basketball team ka ek member shimla nahin ja paaega , n humare debate competition ki participant cj bhi nahi jaa payegi so u n benji too have too go to the meet' bye(sobefore could say anything after coming out of the shock, princi ended the call).

SCENE 4>>>
(BY DOLLY JAAN)
Samrat was destroying his room completely in search of the jacket he wanted to wear'

I was really getting impatient ' it was already 10:15 n we were still at his house..

"msb pls get ready ,, humarre pass time nahin hai,, n agar aaj train chuth gayi to princy uncle sirf tera hi nahin mera bhi murder kar denge'"

"dude meri lucky jacket ni mil rahi hai .. "

"ughhh samrat mein teri jacket dhundta hun u start changing clothes"

"kya changing clothes abhi to mein nahaya bhi nahin,, n my head is hurting so bad,,, u were right ,, mein bhi benji ka murder karne vaala hun.."

"vo kaam saath mein karenge,, abhi yeh nimbu paani n sardon ki tablet se kaam chala(I handed him the glass of cold lemonade n the tablet) aur jaldi tyaar ho.. tub mein gir k tu naha chukka hai,, aur nahaane ki zaruurat nahin.."

He took the tablet from me n swallowed it with the glass of lemonade..

Then he picked up the clothes ,that suhani had kept for him n went in the bathroom to get dressed .. while outside I ruined his cupboard in order to find his jacket '

"mayank.."

"haan???"

"meine suna hai k vo do morena sisters bhi saath aa rahi hain.."

"haan jaanta hun,, hadd hai vahan academic meet mein bhi unki vajha se chain se nahin reh payenge"

"matlab tu un dono ko jaanta hai kya???"

"nahin ' par vo nupur meri class mein hain,, n she keeps on talking n talking whole day long.. kabhi chup nahin karti ' upar se uday bhi meri class mein hai , n pura din dono ki bak bak se mera sir dard karne lag jaata hai by god'"

I could hear him laughing insanely from the bath room.

"by god??? Twin mujhe ni pata tha k tu morenna express k rang mein itna rang chukka hai?"

"shut up just shut up.. I hardly ever talk to her,, vaise uski behan us se better hai,, padhai mein bhi theek hai'kya naam tha uska???"

"gunjan,,, n she is in my class"

"oh'"

"meine us se kabhi baat ni ki,, bahut chup chaap rehti hai,, zyaada bolti bhi nahi n hasna to jaise use aata hi nahin, yeh bhi koi baat hai bhalla???"

"dia was right morenaa sisters humare his college mein kabhi fit ni ho payengi.."

"yup right'"

N then he came out of the washroom ,, finally completely dressed..

He looked hopefully at me..

"sorry samrat teri jacket nahin milli.."

his hopeful smile vanished''

"hmmm haan samrat tera bag suhani ne pack kiya hai na .. ho sakta hai k vo jacket le gayi ho??"

"haan shayad"

I looked ta the time on my watch thenn.. it was 10:30 already'

"damm samrat chal chalet hain.. time to dekh..

He too got panicked n we both rushed outside the house ..

Samrat kicked started his dad's scooter n I sat behind him..

We both looked at the bajaj classic scooter of his dad n scowled..

Princy un cle hadn't allowed us to take our bikes to station'

N since we were late n did not get to drive in adi's car when he came to pick up suhani.. the only option left to us was this disdainfull classic scooter of samrat's dad..

Pathetic I tell u'.

(BY ME)
Benia

D:dammn..!!!!!!!main itni jaldi ready kaise hongi aur aur aur mai uss benji ko call kar ka kya bolu no ways yukkkkks use kaun baat karega but zaruri hain(keeping a stone on her heart she dialed benji no.)(benji smirked seeing the name lashing on screen and smiled a bit and than gave an evil wink and than picked up his cell and said in mischevious tone)

B:oh my god yeh kya miss dia the diva nah mujhe call kiya benji ko I think this doesn't goes with ur image

D:zyada natak karne ki zarurt nahi hai.. I myself hate talking to u

B:toh call kyun kiya(than dia said about everything that princi had told her and she too ended the call before benji could reply.. benji was in still shock he turn to see time and its 10.30 he shouted in horror )mom mujhe jaana hain oh noooooooooooooooooooo.

kya BenIa puhanch payaianga waqt par station ? yeh chut jayegi unki train ? sayank bhi pahunche nahi hain abhi station kya chut jayegi unki bhi train ? kya morena sisters cool dude ka dil mai apna liya koi khaas ehsaas paida kar payainga iss trip par ?
A latest and mindblowing question by sayankgunur
Kya Sayank, benji ko murder karne ke plan main kamyab honge?
Bad rahe hain 6 logh shimla ki aur yeh trip in ki zindagiyan badal degi.jaan na ka liye wait kijiye mera aur dolly ka update ka.
lots of love
dolly and sana😳.
Edited by sana_sajan - 15 years ago
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hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii finally mm the first on yaar whooooooooooooooopppy dooooooopy snooooooooppy
ok mm shutting up
sabse pehleto u just .. just jusstttt stop makin me angry k?????????
kisne kaha logon ko bas mere parts pasand aate hain
go n read the replies again
by god dil to kar raha hai nupur ki tarhan tujhe mayank samjhkar tere upar chad kar baith jaun
literally😡😡😡😡😡😡😡😡
k now mm starting line wise on ur scenes skipping mine k????
sabse pehle to the way nupsi scolded that taxi valla
yaar by god usko uski naani yaad aa gayi hogi hana??????
i was really having a hard time controlling my laughter
poor poor poor taxi vala ...
n then ur punjabi 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
oh god i am going to teach u pu njabi seriously ....
but i really really liked ur attempt at it jaan it was sho shweet
n then the benia scene poor dia n poor benji
but thanks jaan tune humare ss ki sabse badi problem ko solve kar diya lols
n now cmg to my favourite part in the post ..
!!!!UDAY BHAYIA!!!!!!
by god vo ladka mujhe mil jaye ek baar i am goin to so so so much kiss hiom m
cycle pe vo nups ka khali bag dene aaya???
how can someone be soo januable yaar?? sho sho sho sho januable sho much januable????
i really really loved that scene from todays update
n sanu the best things abput ur updates
1)the diologues u right ..
they r the best they can capture anyone n everyone jaana at any moment
2)ur bg commentry i alwys liked reading them..
3)the way u get into te chracter completey abt whom u r writing jaan
i have never been able to do it
4)abt this i am not sure but there is sth in ur updates that binds the reader
seriously no idea what it is but its still there jaan
n u still think u r not a godd writer???????
loav u loads n loads n loads
dolly
Edited by dolly18 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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awesomeeeeeee updt guyzz...
luved it
omggg.. sam ws sleeping on d washing machine... 🤣 🤣
pllzzzzzzzz do cont soon..
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Posted: 15 years ago
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superb part!!!
thanx for the pm!!
plz cont soon!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey dolly and sana superb , awesome and fantastic part by both of you i loved your all parts specially gunur and sayank do continue soon and thanks for pm
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Posted: 15 years ago
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loved it
it was relly nice n funny
fabulous job guys
keep it up
plzzzz do continue soon

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