Desert Love(Mayur,AR,Sajan)-update part 4 page 30

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Avinash

@lucario

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#101

It was very nice part.....i wanted some sajan scene also...means it will be their 1st meeting also na....i hope next update have some scenes......but in this part i liked mayur alot.....on their first meeting only they started fighting and that also without knowing each other.....and about your writing there were many small small mistakes were thr......i m telling u this sothat in next parts u can improve more....continue soon....thanks for PM.

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Nikki

@dmgmjht4ever

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Posted: 15 years ago

#102

nice part, continue soon.
there were a couple of mistakes but it's okay, not noticeable

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Dilbole_ShiOmRu

@Dilbole_ShiOmRu

Stunner

Posted: 15 years ago

#103

Nice part and Mayur fight was cute cont. soon

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zoya

@tingtingteeding

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#104

hey faria very sweet part.....plzzzz continue soon

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pari sharma

@kiarathediva

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#105

awesome part.... thanx for the pm..

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437810

Suspended

Posted: 15 years ago

#106

hey dear...
twas such a cute nd luvly upd8!!
well...ha! luvd mayank arguing wid his dad!!!
but aww...he finally had to go!
hey??!!! nupur was batting...twas a cool idea!!
oops...bechara mayank...tch tch tch!!!
hey bhagwaan...dey both really fight a lot..huh!!
twas overall n xelent upd8!!
nd ya...as u said...ur hindi was better!!
pls pls do cont soon...
thanx 4 d pm... =)

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jigisha kulkarni

@mayur_fan

Explorer

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#107

hey dear, lovely upd8, loved it..... mayur nok-jhok was soooooo cute..... thnxxxx 4 d pm.....

plzzzzzz upd8 soooon....

loads of luv,

jigi.

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Mahak

@FragranceOfLove

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#108

very nice part!
the nok jhok was too good........
continue soon......

Edited by mahaklovesmayur - 15 years ago

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jeni

@jeniluvmayur

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#109

😳am sooo happy today fariaaa....really thank u so much....

am so sorry for being late for commenting...hold my ears for that....u no am soo happy...

mmmh yet that was tooo short...ur hardwork was was shown with tremendous output buddy...

u and me😉😉😉

thats for making me happy with ur beautiful mayur first meeting luv u for that........

sooo keep giving rocking updates offcourse more of mayur....

when is ur next upd....do pm me always...👏

Edited by jeniluvmayur - 15 years ago

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prerna_agrawal

@prerna_agrawal

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#110

hey very nyc part dear!!!..........what i thought was tht mayank will look at nupur n will fall in love with her instantly not knowing tht she's nupur......but u got them into fighting......nyc!!....the initial mayur!!!.....nyc.......continue soon!!!