Sajan (Raj-Naina) - Part 7A on Pg 24 - 09/08/09 - Page 3

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Posted: 16 years ago
#21
well casting look quite interesting
and waiting eagrly to read it soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Nice part. Sad to knw dat Raj's father doesnt pay him attention but its gud dat his massi is his best frnd. Very true but there is a reason behind it...

Happy dat Rahul (Ankur) is here in the ff n also a frnd of Raj. Though I dont like any bonding of him wid Naina, but I guess it'll be sorted out.
When I was planning - I knew I needed Ankur with Rajeev... and don't worry about his bonding with Naina cause the suspense will be revealed soon or later.

Glad dat Abhi is not a gud character here. I dont quite like him actually. And I may take sumtym to remember the other characters' relations wid each other.
I personally never liked his character in the show - I kind of wished Ankur and Rajeev shared the stage together in Left Right Left and made him the real killer of Navin instead Raj shooting him.

Anyways, pls continue soon.



I will for sure soon...

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Mickey P

Edited by Mp_Desigirl - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: manatated

Hmmm....nice cast. waise samajhne mein thoda time lagega! so in ur fic Dr.Mishra is Positive and Abhimanyu is kameena...anywayz i never used 2 like him in LRL also.Yes, to spice up the story I had to make few changes....

Yaar but yeh rahul-naina-raj mein triangle mat karwana....kya haina, cant imagine any one else wid naina! There isn't any love triangle between Rahul-Naina-Rajveer....
Mayank alekh ka twin brother! wow !! ek alekh hi itna rockking tha and evn mayank is good ;toh ab dono saath hai toh kya baat hai! Yep, I can not image having both of my all-time-favoutie Mayank and Aalekh together in one fan fiction....
Now pleeeeeeeeeeeease update soon...



Surely will update "ASAP"

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Posted: 16 years ago
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I'll be waiting to hear from you and your reply.

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Mickey P

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Posted: 16 years ago
#25
Thank you so much fellow friends for the encouragement... also there were many suggestion by the readers, but I couldn't take the request because than i'll have to change my plans and it won't match the title I've given so please bare with me. If there is a problem than please do let me know....

Thank you

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Mickey P



Part 1 ~ Naina arrives at her New Destination.

Rainy Night

Naina is walking on the deserted road with her suitcase. Naina doesn't have a place to stay anymore because she was forced to leave from her house by her community members in her neighborhood; because of the stain on her family name. Hardly no one can describe or notice Naina's tear which is washed away by the rainy night - in fact god himself is crying along with Naina.

Naina finds a bus stand.

She goes over there and stands until the rain stop for awhile, but god had something else planned for Naina.

Two or Three drunk idiots notice Naina standing at the bus stop.

Her clothes are totally drenched by the rain and revealing her bra-outline. Naina begins hugging herself while they walk by, but they stopped and look at her.

Frightened Naina picks up her suitcase and starts walking, but they keep on following her.

Naina begins to panic when her duppata gets caught on a corner of panipuri stall. Naina keeps on looking backwards while trying to free her duppata. In hesitation she rips the corner of her duppata, but luck was never apart of her destiny.

Those drunk guys caught Naina and surrounded her from every angle. Feared Naina keeps on moving backwards until she bumps into the wall.

"Stay away" Naina shouted.

They continued moving toward her.

Naina hugs herself in order to protect her while she cries out loud for her brother.

(Scene changed)

Dusty, old, cage, type, prison is showed from far angle of
Kanchanjunga Military Academy - closer we get to the prison area - we see a person chained up in chains and he is Capt. Navin Singh Alluhwalia. Navin feels like his life, his sister is calling him for help. Navin opens his eyes in fear and tried breaking free from the chains which are chained on him. Navin closed his eyes with tears streaming down in fear and keeps on shouting non-stop.

(Scene changed)

Jeep drives pass Naina who shouts for help.

Naina's only help drives away.

Naina on the spot cursed herself and her destiny.

Suddenly
, same jeep passed away,

takes u-turn and stops in front of Naina (who has her eyes closed in fear) she heard a male-voice saying "leave the girl".

"And if we don't want to leave her than what" said by those drunk guys.

"Then have it your way" he gave a direct punch on the first guy. They ganged up on Rajveer, but Rajveer ditched all their moves on him.

Also knocked them out of their sense.

(Scene Changed)

Navin takes a deep breathe in relax mode.

Rajveer walks toward Naina and covers her with his jacket (mini eye locking session happens, but Rajveer doesn't know that Naina is crying because again it continues to rain hard than before).

Naina thanked him.

"There's no need to thank me, but you should not be out here so late on the street. Anything could have happened like few minute ago. Anyways, can I drop you anywhere?" Naina looked into his concern eyes which touched her the most and spoke "yes, you may drop me at a near by hotel because I don't have a place to live anymore."

Rajveer also looks into her eyes filled with innocents.

Rajveer guides Naina into the jeep and picks up her suitcase from the ground by panipuri stall.

Naina watches Rajveer with sudden hopes filled into her tiny little world.

Rajveer notice Naina starring at him for long time after he placed her suitcase in the back area.

"Silly of me" Raj told himself by hitting his head with one hand while driving.

Raj stops the jeep on the side and says "I'm Capt. Rajveer Singh
Shikhawat", puts his hand forward.

Naina stares at him for awhile then re-thinks of every single events took place in her life and blurts out "I'm Sunaina Singh", by shaking his hand.

"Nice to meet you Sunaina, but Naina would have sound sweet and better", Rajveer told her.

Naina smiled.

Rajveer also smiled back.

Rajveer re-start the jeep and it was a complete silent drive toward Naina's new destination chosen by Rajveer himself and god itself.

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Please do comment....


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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey...liked the update very much!

poor naina...i feel bad for her....

God, sabhi musibat ek saath hi aani thi jo gundo ko bhej diya?

Hey! Navin bhai zinda hai! chalo achcha hai...Nahi toh sabhi fics mein Navin bhaiya bhoot bhai bankar reh gaye hai....😆😆

Luvd heart to heart connection betn Navin and Naina....
Lo agaya sadda Raj😳 ek zabardast entry ke saath!!👏👏 aur saare gundo ka safaya! 👏👏👏Navin bhai bhi relax!
Raj toh pehli hi nazar mein 'silly' ban gaye!
Naina ne apna naam sunaina bataya but raj likes 'naina' as it is sweeeeet...hmmmm..😳😳
Aree bhaai parr inhe koi batao....yeh toh naina hi hai...simple and sweet!😳😛
Ab jaldi update karo!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!!

Naina is forced to leave her house by the community members in her neighbourhood!!!!!!

Kisi ne sach ki kaha hai ke musibaat jab aati hai toh charo aur se aati hai!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔

The rain complimented the scene very well!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏

Navin is alive but in such a condition!!!!! I hope he is proven innocent this time!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

I loved the heart to heart connection between Navin and Naina!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj ne kya zabardast entry maari!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏Saare gundo ka safaya kar diya!!!!!👏 👏 👏 👏Navin also relaxed!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Filmy very filmy!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj and Naina have a mini eye locking session!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Haaaiiii!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Naina watched Raj and felt hopeful!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊Well she is right in this case!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj pehli hi nazar mein silly ban gaya!!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😛 😛 😛 😛

Naina ne apna naam Sunaina bataya but Raj prefers 'Naina' as it is sweet!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Arre koi isse batao ke yeh toh Naina hi hai ............ uski Naina!!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😊 😊 😊 😊


Edited by Shaina_b - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: manatated

Hey...liked the update very much! Thank you

poor naina...i feel bad for her.... Don't worry soon everything will go fine in her life after she enters KMA.... 😉

God, sabhi musibat ek saath hi aani thi jo gundo ko bhej diya? I wanted a thrilling entry for Rajveer....

Hey! Navin bhai zinda hai! chalo achcha hai...Nahi toh sabhi fics mein Navin bhaiya bhoot bhai bankar reh gaye hai....😆😆 Yes... Navin Bhai is alive and Naina will sense that once she enters KMA because of their heart to heart connection.

Luvd heart to heart connection betn Navin and Naina.... I wanted to share a true brother
Lo agaya sadda Raj😳 ek zabardast entry ke saath!!👏👏 aur saare gundo ka safaya! 👏👏👏Navin bhai bhi relax! Yes, Raj needed a awesome entry and everything worked out of my plans... Yep, Raj needed to show his skills by beating them up....
Raj toh pehli hi nazar mein 'silly' ban gaye! Yep, but his sillines will connect their relationship soon or later...
Naina ne apna naam sunaina bataya but raj likes 'naina' as it is sweeeeet...hmmmm..😳😳Yep, because of how she was treated in her community.... and you know Samrat's nature will spoiled everything.... 😉
Aree bhaai parr inhe koi batao....yeh toh naina hi hai...simple and sweet!😳😛
Ab jaldi update karo!



I can't promise but I will

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Mickey P

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Posted: 16 years ago
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woww... nice start....
so RN ki first meeting... with action packed scene.... woww...
navin is alive...gr8888...
waiting for the next part....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shaina_b

The character sketch is very nice!!!!!! Thanks

Sad to know that Raj's mother passed away and his father does not give him attention!!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 Well he has his GM...

Atleast he has his maasi who is his best friend!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Naina's parents committed suicide ater Navin was accused!!! Thats so sad!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 I know that's why I kept Navin alive....

Mayank is Aalekh's twin here and Naina mixes up the two!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Interesting!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 Surely, see will!

I am so happy Prem is here and is engaged to Heer!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊I just love Prem!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Surely, they are, but for how long? 😉😆

I am glad that Abhimanyu is negative here!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊I never liked him!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 I personally never liked him....

Rahul and Naina have an emotional bond!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊I hope that does not create problems between Raj and Naina!!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 Rahul will not create problems between Rajveer and Naina only one person will...

I am looking forward to Raj and Naina's love story!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 Thank you, but I am very sorry I couldn't adapt some of your suggest...




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Mickey P

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