Lifeline... An RM FF... Pt. 7 pg 17 - Page 4

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Posted: 16 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: N786

Hi!


Really Rapi? You thought it was good? Thankyou so much! 🤗... Any ideas on improvements etc?
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look everyone thought that it was good.. 😃 u've got a unique style, i don't think i can give any idea for writing but if u indeed need some suggestions, i guess our other FF writers can be better help than me.. 😉

looking forward for next update.. 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#32

nice fanfic nayab!!

please do continue soon!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#33
hey
nice part
do cont soon :)
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Posted: 16 years ago
#34
plz update..

story sounds rly good!👏

love RM
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Posted: 16 years ago
#35

Hey Nayab! Just read this yaar. Maine toh dekha bhi nahi aur tumne bhi toh PM nahi kiya. Rocking job! Loving it so far! My sweetu Atul is a cutie as always! Update soon! Aur mujhe PM karna okay? Love ya!

Komz
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Posted: 16 years ago
#36
Part 3
Walking down the corridor towards Rahul's room Muskaan smiled to herself thinking of how close she had grown to him in the past few weeks, she laughed remembering her first day at Sanjeevani and how nervous she had been talking to him, now it felt as if her day was incomplete without talking to Rahul.

Lost in her own thoughts, Muskaan didn't even realise she had reached Rahul's room until Sister Lovely, who had been passing by, commented on how lost she looked.

'Oh Jee, Muskaan Jee aap tikh toh hai na?' She asked worried, Causing Muskaan to snap out of her thoughts.

'Err... Jee Sister Lovely main bilkul tikh hu' She said flashing her a smile. 'Lekin agar Dr. Keerti ne mujhe yahaan kadhe baatein karte dekh likya na toh...' She trailed off over-dramatically.

The mere mention of Dr. Keerti's name had Sister Lovely running down the corridor in a frenzy.

Chuckling to herself Muskaan walked in to Rahul's room.

'Phew... Mujhe toh laga tha woh kabhi nahin jayegi' Muskaan sighed, seating herself into the chair near Rahul's bedside.

'I mean don't get me wrong Rahul, Sister Lovely boht he sweet hai but she loves to gossip... Chohti si baat ka patangadh bana deti hai. Abhi takh pure hospital main mere aur tumhari so called 'relationship' ke charche hote...' She grinned.

'Khair chaddo, So kaise ho tum' she smiled.

The monitors beeped in response.

'Good good, Main agayi hu toh tum acche hi hoge' She laughed.

'You won't believe aaj Riddhima kitni khush hai' she smiled remembering her friends beaming face. She hadn't seen her this happy in almost a year.

'Akhir aaj Armaan jo London se wapis aa raha hai... '

The machines continued beeping steadily, every now and then.

You know Armaan na... Uska boyfriend...' She said cheerfully, as if Rahul was an old friend.

'She's lucky you know, Use itna pyaar karne wala jo mila...' Her tone suddenly changing, her eyes filled up with tears.

There was a knock at the door.

'Come in' Muskaan squeaked, quickly wiping away her tears.

'Oh Niki tum?' Muskaan said, struggling to keep her voice normal.

' Good morning Miss Chaddha' Niki walked in. 'Time for your check-up Mr. Grewal'

Muskaan stared at Niki with a weird expression on her face.

Miss Chaddha? Mr. Grewal? Aaj Niki ko kya hogaya... She's never been so formal...

'Umm Niki...' Muskaan started, only to be stopped before being able to complete her sentence.

'Don't worry Miss Chaddha I'm sure he's fine' She said a little too loudly.

Muskaan raised her eyebrows. What was up with Niki today?

Dr. Keerti... Rounds' Niki mouthed as she removed her stethoscope and placed it on Rahul's chest.

'Oh' Muskaan whispered.

No wonder Niki was acting so weird, Gabbar was on her rounds.

'Thankyou Dr. Malhotra, you've lifted a weight off my mind' Muskaan glanced sideways, sure enough Dr. Keerti had arrived and now stood observing their interaction. A few minutes later she disappeared.

'Phew...' Niki sighed, leaning against the wall. 'What a lucky escape'

'Main bhi sochoon ki aaj tumhe kya hogaya' Muskaan laughed aloud

'Haan yaar, tu bhi na... Niki... Niki kar rahi thi... Mujhe laga aaj toh main gayyi'

'Sorry yaar' Muskaan smiled apologetically touching her ears.

'Waise Rahul, main tumhare liye kuch layi hu' Niki grinned.

Getting up she walked out the room, coming back a while later with a bouquet of flowers in her hand.

'Niki!' Muskaan gasped 'Mujhe nahin pata tha ki tum aise karogi'

Niki looked at her confused, 'Kya kiya maine?'

Tum Rahul se pyaar karti ho aur mujhe bataya hi nahin?!' Muskaan said overdramatically, Itna bada dokha? Muskaan couldn't resist teasing Niki.

'Kya Muskaan tu bhi na' Niki Punched Muskaan playfully on the arm. 'Yeh main nahin layi woh delivery boy Rahul puch raha tha yeh dene ke liye jab main yahaan arahi thi toh maine uss sey le liye'

'I know yaar... Main toh aise hi tumhari thaang keech rahi thi, Boht mazaa aya' She grinned 'Tumhari shakaal dekhne wali thi' She made a face.

'Ok ok... Boht hogaya yeh pakad' She handed Muskaan the bouquet.

'Mujhe jaana hai... Dusre patients ka check-up bhi toh karna hai' She made her way out of the door. 'Main ward-boy ko vase laney ke liye bol dung ok?' Bye!'

'Bye' Muskaan smiled, Niki had become one of her best friends, They'd met in the canteen on the day Muskaan had joined Sanjeevani, Since then there was no looking back. Niki and Muskaan were more like sisters than friends.

'Main bhi toh dekhun yeh phool kisne behje hai...Koi secret girlfriend?' She asked Rahul glaring at him playfully. Opening the card, Muskaan read the message inside.

Happy Birthday Rahul Beta,

Sorry we couldn't be there.

Get well soon.

Mum and Dad.

'Wow... Aaj tumhari birthday hai Rahul?' She looked puzzled. Yeh kaise parents hai jo apne bete ki birthday par bhi usey milne nahin ate? She thought.

'Happy Birthday Rahul!' She went over and squeezed his hand.

There was a knock at the door.

'Maam yeh vase...' The ward-boy said.

'Wahan rakh do please' She pointed towards the windowsill.

Smiling at Rahul she got up to put the flowers in the vase. Turning towards the windowsill she felt something tug at the hem of her kurti.

'Muskaan, tu bhi na... Looks like my kurti's caught on the bedpost again' She mumbled.

Turning back towards the bed, she stumbled, almost losing her balance. She couldn't believe her eyes.

Rahul was awake.

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Posted: 16 years ago
#37
wow! thanks for updating!

very awesome part!!!

Rahul is awake!! yay!!

please continue soon... phirse yeh lamba wait nahi saha paaongi... 😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
#38
that was seriously great nayab.. u made us wait for a long long time but when i read it finally, felt like all this was worth it.. just in one part u managed to bring out d bond that grew up b'n these two.. very effective.. 👏
and that perfect cliffhanger.. what happened next? don't take that long again, dear but if d next part is as rocking then m eager to wait.. 😃
however have to say, do continue soon.. so much suspense is not good for health 😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
#39
wowww nayaabbbb lovedd the updatee!! cant wait to read moreee, wohooo rahul is awakeee:D :D
continue sooon :)
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey babe! I'm so happy! Firstly you updated!!! I was waiting for it! YAY!
Second, he's awake! I'm so glad he's getting better. Woh bhi on his birthday! Sweetu! Muskaan is so cute! Talking to Rahul is like a part of her daily routine. Awww. Yaar update jaldi jaldi! Especially now! Cliffhanger! UGH! I hate those!
love ya!
Komz

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