Pablo's Muse [I] -AR- Pt. 25/Pg 143 May 9, 11 - Page 93

Firstly, thank you for the PM, and secondly, sorry for the late reply (I don't even have a good excuse)!

I have to say that I really do empathise with Riddhima; her current situation is far from ideal. And I think that it's because of this dramatic irony, that Armaan's almost sudden anger took me by surprise, initially, at least. But when I actually thought about it, it made sense. Here was his lady love distancing herself from him for no apparent reason, refuting that it had anything to do doubts about 'them,' and simply putting them on hold, even when he was giving her space. And when I looked at it from that perspective, his reaction really did fall into place.

Armaan's "just like your father...boom! Just jump to a conclusion..." was a nice touch, I felt. Evidently, Riddhima's father is a touchy subject for her at the moment, given the circumstances. And I loved how you brought that out with Riddhima's response, and yet gave nothing away to him regarding the 'issues.'

This is quite a random point, but the "his girl" in the phrase of "a man snubbed by his girl" made me smile. I'm not entirely sure why, but it did. And I thought I should let you know. 😛

But most importantly, I loved NJ's entry. You mentioned her name, and the atmosphere of the whole part just changed completely! It suddenly felt a lot more vibrant; a lot more NJ-ish.

"I can't believe the Dude's finally been Doodled!" – This was such an NJ thing to say, and it made me laugh!

In short, this part was amazing, as your parts always are. And not that NJ's arrived, I'm getting the sense that it's going to be even better (if that's even possible)!

Nikhi

Originally posted by: Nikhi...

Firstly, thank you for the PM, and secondly, sorry for the late reply (I don't even have a good excuse)!

I have to say that I really do empathise with Riddhima; her current situation is far from ideal. And I think that it's because of this dramatic irony, that Armaan's almost sudden anger took me by surprise, initially, at least. But when I actually thought about it, it made sense. Here was his lady love distancing herself from him for no apparent reason, refuting that it had anything to do doubts about 'them,' and simply putting them on hold, even when he was giving her space. And when I looked at it from that perspective, his reaction really did fall into place.

That smile could be because we've seen Armaan smile in the show numerous times thinking about 'his' Riddhima :) I don't quite know why, but it makes me smile too :)

Armaan's "just like your father...boom! Just jump to a conclusion..." was a nice touch, I felt. Evidently, Riddhima's father is a touchy subject for her at the moment, given the circumstances. And I loved how you brought that out with Riddhima's response, and yet gave nothing away to him regarding the 'issues.'

This is quite a random point, but the "his girl" in the phrase of "a man snubbed by his girl" made me smile. I'm not entirely sure why, but it did. And I thought I should let you know. 😛

But most importantly, I loved NJ's entry. You mentioned her name, and the atmosphere of the whole part just changed completely! It suddenly felt a lot more vibrant; a lot more NJ-ish.

"I can't believe the Dude's finally been Doodled!" ' This was such an NJ thing to say, and it made me laugh!

In short, this part was amazing, as your parts always are. And not that NJ's arrived, I'm getting the sense that it's going to be even better (if that's even possible)!

Nikhi

Originally posted by: spln

i want to say i meant t point out those two lines - esp the doodle - but now i'd sound like a whinny kid who came second in a race!

but i really did!

you just took me by surprise with the entire 'new entry' 😆 and then i was smiling silly and thinking none to comment smart!

next time nikki - i shall beat you! *looks competitive*

🤣


aite, i'm thissssssss close from getting AoL done, and this time i intend to keep my word to prathi, so scooting off again!

awesome ff

loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeee ittttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt

please continue soooooooooooooooooooooooooon

for update

Originally posted by: sweetanu2314

nice ff..........do continue soon....do pm me when u update next.......