iS tHiS lOvE? (Mayur Based Part9 updated Aug. 23) - Page 5

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Posted: 16 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: Mayur4ever



I know rite. Couldn't help it their characters demanded it.

I hope it didn't sound like a rushed thing. I was trying to exploit how both were trying to ignore their infatuation towards each other. Its like 1st meet love, but they don't know yet. That's how I felt when i started mjht.

Mayur always had an attraction for each other even in the show. I am trying to keep it close to the show but they mingling in different situations. I hope I made sense there. lol.

no its not at all sounding rushed thng...infact i am lovin' it
continue soon😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#42
superb part yaar.. mayu-mom interaction was just superb.. pls continue soon..
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Posted: 16 years ago
#43
HIII JUST READ THE FF!!
ITS FABOULOS!!
LOVED ALL PARTS!!
WANT TO KNOW WHAT WILL HAPPEN!
CNT SOON WHEN U WANT!!
SEE YAA
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Posted: 16 years ago
#44
hey too good yaar loved it!!!!!!!!especially these lines!!!!!
Never before a girl talked to Mayank like Nupur did. She was completely transparent, she was vulnerable inside yet encased in a shield that covers her innocence, like me
hats of to u!!!!!👏👏👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 4

Mayank's mother heads to the kitchen with a smile thinking her son is falling for someone, while mayank thinks to himself that he over reacted over such a trival thing. How stupid of him? He wanted to call Nupur but couldn't since he didn't have her number. He thought "Would she call me? Knowing her just this day, he was certain that she'll call him. I hope she does he thought."

MM: (Mayank's mother asks mayu from the kitchen) Mayu, toh kaisi hai teri yeh Nupur?

M: (In a dazed state answered) Meri Nupur bahut inncocent aur chulbuli ... (He realized what he just said as his mother came running out the kitchen to catch his expression, Mayank looked at his mother) kya?

MM: kya? (starts singing) kuch to hua hai kuch ho gaya hai.

Just then the Mayank's phone rings. Ring! ..... Ring! .... His heart raced and thumped harder. Could it be her? It has to be her? Or maybe its from mom's work? No it can't be, it has to be Nupur. She probably needs some help --- should I apologize to her? Ummmh.... God plz let it be her.

MM: Mayu tu phone uttayaga ya goorta rehege.

M: uh! ha woh mein jaa hi raha hoon ma.

MM: toh jaa na. (She turns and goes to the kitchen ).

M: (picks up the phone still in a turmoil of thinking if it is her) h ... he.... hello? (He hears nothing but silence .... its her, i know its her).

On the other line Nupur was in the same turmoil as Mayank as she dialed his number. Should i say sorry? I hope woh mujhse aur gussa nahin hoga. Waise lagta toh nahin hai aisa woh. Nupur calm down phone dial kar aur sorry bol. She dialed the number and after several rings she was about to hang up when she heard his breath before his voice. Its him! her heart jumped in excitement. That same voice that she wanted to hear for some reason, she loved the sound of his voice. It was with her throughtout the day and she started to adore this voice--- I like the sound of it. She wanted to be lost in his sweet words, even though they weren't really sweet but something clicked in her heart when he talked --- her crave to hear his voice. Those words that were driving her crazy today. Even though she kept brushing such thoughts from her head, but they kept on creeping up on her. She gathered up her courage to reply to his hello.

N: (she knew it was him but said in a questioning manner) hello, Mayank?

A slight relief smile spread across his face. As his heart skipped a beat. It was her! I knew it! Its her. I am so reliefed. His heart rate increased, he couldn't believe it was her. It was Nupur. That sweet voice that he heard all day. He heard it again, he was craving for her voice. If only I could also see her, those magical eyes that talk to me. She.... she... she... called me! Mayank felt on top of the world. He kept ignoring his feelings because he didn't want to ask himself why he wanted to be with her, hear her, why he was happy that she called him.

Both Mayank and Nupur kept drowing their feelings because they did not want answer questions that arose in their heads from such feelings. Why were they feeling a tug toward each other, that too after meeting a person for only a day? What is it between them that pulls them close? Are they attracted to each other? Never before in thier lives, such feelings arose for some one else. Little did the two know that cupid's arrows have pierced thier hearts, love has started its course in thier lives.

M: (Mayank smiled like never before knowing who it was but being Mayank questioned) kaun?

N: Nupur

M: (in a low tone voice) hi Nupur.

Hearing Nupur, Mayank's mom came out of the kitchen to catch her son's expressions. She stood far away looking at him smiling. Something is up with my son, look at him smile at the person he was mad at few minutes ago. Is Nupur se toh milna hi padega. Jis ka jaadu mere beta par sar chadke bol raha hai.

N: M.... M... Mayank woh mein, mein woh ummhh...

M: Help chahiya thi, kaunsi assignment mein help chahiya?

N: (Nupur smiled at Mayank's reply) By God mayank! tumhe padhai ke alwa (she stopped).

There was a brief silence on the line both thinking how to apologize to each other. After few seconds both spoke at the same time.

M&N: I am sorry! Mujhe maaf kar do.

Hearing each other, both laughed together.

M: Oh so Ms. Nupur ne sorry ke liye phone kiya tha.

N: ha, woh mujhe over react nahin karna chahiya tha.

M: are baba over react to maine kiya na.

N: Mayank tumne nahin, maine.

M: nahin maine.

N: maine.

M: main, nupur.

N: main.

After this main-main they laughed hard again, because the conversation was going no where.

N: acha mayank mein phone rahkti hoon, hum kal milenge. Mujhe assignments start karni hai.

M: thik hai. Help chahiya toh mujhe phone kar dena.

N: thanks. Tumse kal pooch lungi. Bye!

M: (Smiling to himself) Bye! nupur.

Mayank hangs up and smiles at the phone saying to himself By God! Mazaa aa gaya! . When he looks up he sees his mother smiling at him and raising her eyebrows at him, Mayank stops smiling.

M:kya? aap mujhe aise kyun dekh rahi ho?

MM: (she simply turns going into the kitchen smiling and sings again) kuch toh hua hai kuch ho gaya hai.

Nupur felt content after talking to Mayank. He is so sweet, he also wanted to apologize to me. Mayank on the other hand confirmed that he knew this transparent Nupur well. I knew she would call and she did. Both lost again in each other's thoughts subconsciously went to sleep after completing their college work.

Mayank liked her innocence. Nupur liked his cuteness. She is sweet. He is adorable. Her eyes haunt me. His smiles is addictive. They felt really eager to see each other tomorrow again.

Beep.... Beep.... Beep....

Nupur woke to the noisy sound of the alarm.

Part 5; Page 11

Edited by Mayur4ever - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#46
awww..it was awesoem yaar yaar
i was actually imagining the expressions on mayank-nupur's face when nupur called him
u described it soo beautifully....
awww...i am in love with ur FF now...
okk ..loved the convo..it was really chweet
there heart dancing now...wowiee..love to visualise it
then loved ur last para..it totally blew mo off..awesome work yaar
loved it
i didnt recieve pm ..but i thnk i read it before..[hehehee]
so thanx in advance
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Posted: 16 years ago
#47
AWESOME YAAR........I LOVED THE PHONE CONVO SOOO MUCH👏....MY GOD THEY SOOO EAGER TO MET EACH OTHER.....AWESOME WORK.......PLZZZZ UPDATE SOON...CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART.....👍🏼PM ME.THANKS FOR THE PM
Edited by AMMY LUVS RIDZ - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Awesome yaar loved it 😛
it was a very well written scene loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!👏👏👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
#49

Originally posted by: ruchimayur

awww..it was awesoem yaar yaar

i was actually imagining the expressions on mayank-nupur's face when nupur called him
u described it soo beautifully....
awww...i am in love with ur FF now...
okk ..loved the convo..it was really chweet
there heart dancing now...wowiee..love to visualise it
then loved ur last para..it totally blew mo off..awesome work yaar
loved it
i didnt recieve pm ..but i thnk i read it before..[hehehee]
so thanx in advance




Oh! You did read it fast 😆. Glad that you liked it though. I thought mayurians might like to see Mayur heart dancing 😳 that Mayur r good at hiding. lol.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: AMMY LUVS RIDZ

AWESOME YAAR........I LOVED THE PHONE CONVO SOOO MUCH👏....MY GOD THEY SOOO EAGER TO MET EACH OTHER.....AWESOME WORK.......PLZZZZ UPDATE SOON...CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART.....👍🏼PM ME.THANKS FOR THE PM



Thanks! 😃 LOL, i know they r eager to see each other, but as I mentioned to Ruchi, Mayur are good at hide n seek.
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