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debby thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
@ruky: hey... Im glad u liked Mayank and Nupur.. thanks so much! 😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
debs simply outstanding yaar.loved every bit of it.u r truely genius.
Edited by ghtk1 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
well, usually i don't make any comment, but i am a regular reader of your ff... i just loved your witting style, and loving they way Radz, adi & dia's story going....

waiting for your update.... please update your next part soon.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
i love the way the story is going on..... waiting for your next part........ please update soon....
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Posted: 16 years ago
@Pallabi: thanks a lot jaani... I am glad you liked it. 🤗

@sejusej: hey, thanks a ton for commenting; it makes a great deal of difference! Will surely update soon. Thanks once again. 😃

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Posted: 16 years ago
YAYYYYYYYYY Part 68!! *dances around the room* HOLYYY SH*** Debbyjee you're at part 68!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LOVEDDDD the update! :D :D
LOL at Nupur maze le-ing about the Ranbir dude. OOO this line had me lol-ing too "Ranbir yeh bhi koi naam hua" LMAO sounds like a pretty normal name to me Mayank. The things that bother you about people when there's jalan haina? That was a cool touch Debbyjee.
👍🏼
EEEEEEEEEEEEEE the Radz and Adi part!! Totally lol-ed at Rahul and Radz's "hahaha". HAHAHAHAA...lol...Aww bichara Rahul...*offers him a cookie*. Totally saw the Radz mistaking Adi for Rahul scene..so cool the way you set that up Debs. :D :D :D
Awwwwwwwwwwwww the Benjy and Samrat scene! It's SOO cute the way misses Samrat! LOL at their cute-si nautanki. And the sisters wala short sa scene was adorable as well. YAYYYYY Nupur knows. I HATEEE secrets! So ya....YAYYYYY!! :D
LOVEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Adi's spontaneous "kyun nahi" to Radz marriage wala sawaal. WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEE He's in loveeee!! 😍 And then his "reflex reaction", as you put it, wala smile bhi. EEEEEEEEEEEE....love those spontaneous moments like that.
And wohooo I see patake phoding (bole toh, sparks flying....mannn aaj kal ke angrez log *shakes head*) between Abhay and Dia. Aww and that was a super cute moment between Dia and Dodo too. Hmmm toh that's what Mayank was going "towards Abhay" for. I was like whaaaa.....akhir KYUN???? when I read that....are Mayank and Abhay jigri dost now?? Yeh kab hua bhai???MAYBE THEY'RE BACHPAN KE BICHDE HUE JIGRI DOST!!!!!!!!!!! :O :O :O :O :O :O.......but it all made sense in the end...hehe... I shall never doubt your story again Debbyjee *geeta pe rakh ke kha's kasam*
Aww and the last MN scene was super cute too. Loved how you described Mayank's face going sadder as Nupur went on about Ranbir. Awwww....and how Nupur teases him about Ranbir in the end mein too. They're adorable. "as he gears up to chase Ranbir dreams away".......LOL hayeeeeeeeeeeeee....😍
AWESOMEEEE update Debs! *gibes ju jor daar ki jhappi* 🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: cute2stay

YAYYYYYYYYY Part 68!! *dances around the room* HOLYYY SH*** Debbyjee you're at part 68!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Hey Pallojee *hugs* True, part 68 seems a long way from anywhere 😆 I cant believe this is still going on.. thanks to you guys! *clears throat for Filmfare speech* 😳😳😆
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LOVEDDDD the update! :D :D Thank you hai jee!!
LOL at Nupur maze le-ing about the Ranbir dude. OOO this line had me lol-ing too "Ranbir yeh bhi koi naam hua" LMAO sounds like a pretty normal name to me Mayank. The things that bother you about people when there's jalan haina? That was a cool touch Debbyjee.
👍🏼
Hayye, to know you noticed that! That was exactly the point; jealousy makes us cringe at pretty normal things. Glad you liked it yar. 😃
EEEEEEEEEEEEEE the Radz and Adi part!! Totally lol-ed at Rahul and Radz's "hahaha". HAHAHAHAA...lol...Aww bichara Rahul...*offers him a cookie*. Totally saw the Radz mistaking Adi for Rahul scene..so cool the way you set that up Debs. :D :D :D

LOL @ the hahaha. 😆 😆 I am glad this Rahul person wasnt too bad to read.
Awwwwwwwwwwwww the Benjy and Samrat scene! It's SOO cute the way misses Samrat! LOL at their cute-si nautanki. And the sisters wala short sa scene was adorable as well. YAYYYYY Nupur knows. I HATEEE secrets! So ya....YAYYYYY!! :D

Oh me too, especially between siblings/friends. Secrets make things uncomfortable.
LOVEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Adi's spontaneous "kyun nahi" to Radz marriage wala sawaal. WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEE He's in loveeee!! 😍 And then his "reflex reaction", as you put it, wala smile bhi. EEEEEEEEEEEE....love those spontaneous moments like that.

He's in love? *heaves a sigh of relief* he better be now that he has taken quite some footage in this story and forced me to stretch it out. 😆

And wohooo I see patake phoding (bole toh, sparks flying....mannn aaj kal ke angrez log *shakes head*) between Abhay and Dia. Aww and that was a super cute moment between Dia and Dodo too. Hmmm toh that's what Mayank was going "towards Abhay" for. I was like whaaaa.....akhir KYUN???? when I read that....are Mayank and Abhay jigri dost now?? Yeh kab hua bhai???MAYBE THEY'RE BACHPAN KE BICHDE HUE JIGRI DOST!!!!!!!!!!! :O :O :O :O :O :O.......but it all made sense in the end...hehe... I shall never doubt your story again Debbyjee *geeta pe rakh ke kha's kasam*

😆😆 You have an eye for detail, I must say. I am sure no one noticed the 'going toward Abhay' part. It was intended just as something for him to do at that point but later, Dia made it seem sensible. They're college mates after all; they became friends on the last 'academic meet' they went to. 😆 😆 *hugs you for the geeta wali kasam* so sweet you are Pallojee!!


Aww and the last MN scene was super cute too. Loved how you described Mayank's face going sadder as Nupur went on about Ranbir. Awwww....and how Nupur teases him about Ranbir in the end mein too. They're adorable. "as he gears up to chase Ranbir dreams away".......LOL hayeeeeeeeeeeeee....😍

AWESOMEEEE update Debs! *gibes ju jor daar ki jhappi* 🤗

Thanks sooooooooo much Pallojee. 😃 Make sure you collect all your pending hugs when you come over to India next week. 😉

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Posted: 16 years ago
Hey Debby!!!!
Sorry for the late reply but
your update was rocking as usual....all the
small small scene 2gether formed a real gr8 update
The SaJan in the beginning, the MayUr, the Radz and Rahul scene
The Dia Abhay scene....even Adi and Radz scene
I loved The MayUr, the way you wrote the jealousy,
and Nupur's nautanki, Oh i forgot even the Benji-Samrat scene
And even Nupur and Gunjan, were so sweet. Did Adi just ask
Radz to marry him unknowingly....hmm.....and Abhay Dia are
also on the track of love.........Loved it as usual
Do write more soon....
Luv
Tina

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Posted: 16 years ago
@Tina
Hey Tina!!
Thanks a lot yar... I am glad u liked the small-small scenes put together.. ;)
Will surely continue soon...

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Posted: 16 years ago
Part 69:

"Pari pari ek pari, aasman se aa giri
Mujhe usse pyar ho gaya...
Haye, mujhe usse pyar ho gaya!"

The Excel College Campus is all ears to Samrat's romantic song which he croons in rather uneven tones, distracted by a blushing Gunjan, walking by his side. In a reflex action, one of his arms go around her waist and the other is about to twirl her around, when she manages to escape by a hairbreath.
Gunjan: (looking around) Samrat? Tum apna dimaag Lonavala me hi chod aaye kya?
Samrat: kya chashmish, itna acha gaata hu main, dance toh banta hai na! (attempting to hold her again)
Gunjan: (brushing him off) bilkul nahi, aur yaha toh hargiz nahi. College hai Samrat.
Samrat: toh kya hua? Mera mann kar raha hai ke chilla chilla kar pure college ko bata du ke (raising his voice) I LOVE YOU..!!
The world around pauses awhile and many hearts audibly stop beating. Benji, having just arrived at the scene, rushes up to Samrat and gives him a tight hug.
Benji: I love you too dude! (smiling at the crowd and nodding) I love you too.
Samrat: (heaving him off) huh?
Benji: (watching the crowd disperse) dude, awaz kam pad rahi hai toh mike leke aayu?
Samrat: kya Benji tu bhi, main toh bas chashmish - (smiles at her even as she glowers)
Benji: Gunjan don't worry. Thoda time aur do, pura train kar dunga. Abhi bhi Samrat breed thodi si wild hai -
Samrat: oh hello? Kya matlab? Main toh bas gaana ga raha tha.
Benji: gana? Kaunsa?
Even as Gunjan gestures to Benji to talk him out of the subject, Samrat is all smiles at having been indirectly asked for an encore. The campus is all musical again.
"Pari pari ek pari'."
The library is still immune from the musical fever and Mayank is busily glancing through shelves, looking for a particular title. He turns when someone taps him on the shoulder. Its CJ, grinning at him with her usual buoyant air.
Mayank: (grinning back) hey CJ. Tumhari cousin ki shaadi kaisi rahi?
CJ: achi thi dude. Jaise shaadiyan hoti hai..pretty boring. Aur tumhari trip?
Mayank: (smiling in recollection) trip toh bahut.. (clearing his throat) I mean achi thi.
CJ: (chuckling) achi toh hogi hi, Nupur jo saath gayi thi.
Mayank: Lonavala ko credit dena padega CJ, wo saath thi phir bhi trip achi rahi.
CJ: (shaking her head) tum kabhi nahi sudhroge na?
Mayank: tum toh intelligent ho CJ, ab socho jiski company me rahunga wo - (noting a change in CJ's expression) kya hua?
"Main batati hu na kya hua, abhi batau ya, akele me?", Nupur says from right behind him, in a clear and articulate voice.
Mayank: (looking at CJ) main toh bas CJ ko yeh keh raha tha ke trip me humne kitna enjoy kiya.
Nupur: oh? Acha?
Mayank: acha kya, uh.. CJ se hi puch lo. Kyun CJ?
CJ: haan Nupur, Mayank tumhari tareef kar raha tha.
Nupur: (smiling) chalo acha hai, subah se shuru hoga toh jaake raat tak itni tareef kar sakta hai jo mere liye kaafi ho. (raising an imaginary collar) Aakhir Nupur Bhushan ban na itna aasan nahi.
Mayank: (softly) aasan? Mumkin hi nahi. Kam se kam normal logo ke liye.
Nupur: kuch kaha?
Mayank: nahi toh.
CJ: guys, Shukla ki class ke liye der ho rahi hai. Chalte hai nahi toh lecture sunne ko milega.
As CJ walks a bit ahead, Nupur and Mayank look at each other and burst out laughing till the librarian gives them a piece of her mind.
It's a big day for Chinu. The canteen has been renovated in the vacations and much to the delight of people like Uday, lots of new food has also been included in the menu. He is busy rushing about, taking orders and currently preparing iced tea for Dia and her gang.
Annie: (observing her nails) vacations kitni jaldi khatam ho gayi na babes?
Chacko: (giggling) toh kya pure saal chalti Annie? (to Uday) de taali!

Uday is busy with a hamburger and unsure about how to proceed with a highfive.

Uday: kaise du taali Chacko? Yeh mera burger - (cheering up and smashing the burger onto Chacko's hand) burger taali dude!
Annie: (disgusted) shut up guys! Jaake dekho na iced tea bani ya nahi.
Chacko: (glancing at the counter) kaise banegi, waha toh Chinu baato me laga hai.
Annie: (looking in the same direction) aur woh bhi us Abhay ke saath. Suna raha hoga use bhi lecture. Huh!
Dia: come on Annie, itna bura bhi nahi hai woh. (smiling) Actually, kal raat usne bahut sweetly meri help ki.
Annie: what are you saying? Sach me? Maine toh pehle hi kaha tha he likes you!
Dia: (shrugging and smiling at Abhay when he meets her eye) who knows.
As Abhay picks up his order and walks up to his seat, Sid gives him a knowing smile.

Abhay: (self conscious) kya hua?
Sid: yeh toh aap batao, kya hua?
Abhay: matlab?
Sid: matlab.. tere aur Dia ke beech.. you know?
Abhay: (sighs) tu aur tera one track mind. Dia aur main? Hum toh -
Sid: han haan tum toh chalk and cheese ho, usse nafrat karte ho etc etc..
Abhay: nafrat kyun karunga yar par -
Sid: (wide eyed) nafrat nahi karta? Tune hi toh kaha tha ke -
Abhay: shh, dheere toh bol loud speaker. Matlab, mujhe aisa lagta hai ab k she's actually a nice girl..
Sid: (coughing) yeah.. and?
Abhay: (looking away) rehne de.
Sid: (laughing) ok ok dude. Relax. Kitna laal ho gaya hai tu! I am just glad ke you dont hate her anymore. (sipping his coffee)
Abhay: (to himself, smiling) I never did.
Later that night
"Tu bhi chal na mere saath Gunjan. Kabhi bhi nahi maanti tu!" Nupur throws her just carefully ironed dupatta on the bed. Gunjan smiles, picks it up and wraps it around Nupur's neck.
Gunjan: sorry di, aaj nahi aa paungi. Please naraaz mat ho.
Nupur: (making a face) aaj nahi, kal nahi. Kya tu seedhe meri shaadi par milegi aunty se?
Gunjan: (brightening up) yeh acha idea hai waise! (giggling at Nupur's angry look) sorry di, aaj tum jaao na, bahut pyari bhi lag rahi ho. Next time main pakka aungi. Promise.
Nupur: (relenting to smile) thik hai. Achi lag rahi hu kaha isliye maaf kar rahi hoon.
As Gunjan nods seriously, Nupur chuckles and gives her a tight hug.
Nupur: toh main chalti hoon Gunjan, tu aaram se baat kar lena haan.
Gunjan: (stunned) kya di?
As Nupur winks and leaves, Gunjan smiles to herself.
Gunjan: yeh di bhi na, sab jaan leti hai. Ab Samrat se baat karne ka yahi toh time hai. College me na jaane din kaise beet gaya. (looking at the phone) ab 8 baje bola hai toh kya 10 minute pehle nahi kar sakte call? (hits herself lightly on the head, picks a book and sits by the phone)
At Mayank's home
A black forest cake on the table announces "Congrats Mom!". There are two candles lighting it up. As the Mom in question blows them out, both Mayank and Nupur rush to be the first one to feed her some cake. With her faster reflexes, Nupur succeeds and gives Mayank a smug look.
Nupur: congrats Aunty! Waise apka project toh successful hona hi tha. Aap bekaar tension me thi.
Mom: acha? Aisa kyun?
Nupur: arey aunty, yeh apka beta subah sham apke kaano me project project chillata hoga toh kaam toh ho hi jayega na.
Mom: (giggles) haan beta, yeh toh hai. Neend me bhi project project karta tha pehle. Ab toh -
Mayank: (cutting in) acha Ma, aap baitho. Main aur Nupur khana lagate hai.
Mom: (sternly) main aur Nupur matlab? Tu laga khana, kitne dino se Nupur se thik se baat bhi nahi ki maine.
Nupur: sachi aunty. Par main iski madad kar hi deti hoon. Phir plates tak toh isse uthayi jaati nahi. Aap baitho, main chutki bhar me aayi.
Mom: (smiling) thik hai beta.
Nupur follows Mayank into the kitchen and starts ordering him about.
Nupur: acha Mayank, yeh dishes bahar le jaayo. Aur haan waha se salt bhi utha lena. (spotting some split water) kya pani girate rehte ho tum? Glass bhi nahi uthayi jaati? (attempting to pick up glasses herself)
Mayank: oh madam, jo karna hai khud karo. Wo toh shukar hai khana maine banaya hai. Warna ek baar jo tumne roti banayi thi, mujhe laga rubber hai.
Nupur: (walking upto him indignantly) kya matlab? Wo aata kharab tha toh main kya karu? (lowering her eyes) jab dekho meri galti dhundte ho.
Mayank picks up a tissue from behind him and smiles at Nupur's cute little nose that is slowly reddening with irritation. When Nupur looks up slightly, to see if Mayank's expression has changed, he instantly pulls her closer to him. Completely taken aback, Nupur looks directly into his eyes. From experience she knew it was a mistake for she could never resist him, no matter how much she tried otherwise. Nupur lets her arms go lightly around him as his face draws closer. Mayank loved listening to her heartbeats, always wildly acclerated when he was close to her. He smiles a little when her breathing goes uneven. For him too, Nupur meant the world but as was the plan, he couldn't let himself be distracted. When Nupur closes her eyes, he allows himself to look at her for just a while before opening his mouth to speak.
Mayank: (very softly) Nupur?
Nupur: (with her eyes still shut) haan?
Mayank: wo, cake.
Nupur: (her eyes snapping open) kya?
Mayank: (bringing out the tissue) wo tumhare face pe cake laga hai.
Nupur is flustered and disheveled as she draws away from him and accepts the tissue. Mayank tries very hard to suppress a giggle and thinks it better to quickly pick up a few dishes and leave the kitchen.

The frame dissolves and fades for a moment before clearing up again to reveal Adi and Radz, sitting beside each other, with the blue waves of the Mumbai ocean in the background.
Radz: (smiling) kuch rishte sach me khuda hi banata hai, hai na Adi?
Adi: bilkul. Ab kisne socha tha ke Mayank aur Nupur ek dusre se itna pyar karenge? Koi unhe pehle dekhta toh sochta ke yeh zarur agli world war ki tayyari kar rahe hai! (laughs)
Radz: aur Gunjan ko hi dekh lo. Mujhe kabhi nahi laga tha ke Samrat ko itni akal hai ke ek itni pyari aur suljhi hui ladki se pyar karega.
Adi: Samrat tumhara bhai hai aakhir. Aur phir, pyar sochke thode hi hota hai. Hume hi dekh lo.
Radz: haan rehne do, bahut dekh chuki hoon tumhe. (giggling at his startled look) Waise Adi, hamari kahaani bhi koi kam interesting nahi rahi, kyun?
Adi: interesting toh kya, tumhe yaad hai wo - (raising an eyebrow questioningly when Radz puts a hand over his mouth)
Radz: shh, abhi nahi. Kuch kahaaniyan agli mulakat ke liye bhi chod deni chahiye.
Adi: (smiling) haan, aakhir, phir milenge hum tum!
Stories never end. But there are times we have to tune out. Presently, I leave Mayank and Nupur to enjoy their black forest cake and Gunjan to talk the night away with Samrat. Since Dia is already asleep, lost in pleasant dreams of the last night at Lonavala, I wish her all the best. Years down the line, may the rest of Dia's gang gain some sense but on second thoughts, the world needs all sorts of people. There is space for a food-crazy but big-hearted Uday, a loyal ande devoted Benji and even a pea brained Chacko. As for Radz and Adi, as they promised you themselves, theirs is a story that will be told at another place, in another time.

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A big thank you to all my readers for being loyal to this story. All your comments have always meant a lot to me.
Radz, I hope you don't mind the way I have written you too much. 😆 Lotsa love.
Likewise for you Pragya. Forgive me. 😳
Pallojee - thanks so much for your lovely feedback which has always made me smile. I love you.
Ayesha, Amber, Tina, Ruchi, Sunita, Pragya, Sanah and everyone else who has ever read any of this - Thanks a big bunch.

🤗
Adieu.

Edited by debby - 16 years ago

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