FF: [SG] Dare You To Move- Last Part P.143

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ashred12

@ashred12

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Posted: 16 years ago

#451

wonderful.. u've combined both stories so well dat its impossible to seperate one fm d other.. i like ur idea of different pov for same scene..

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Aradhna

@Anhdara13

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Posted: 16 years ago

#452

Mimi! Wow, your story just keeps getting better and better with each part. It's hard keeping myself from spamming your thread with demands for more updates.

I loved the sisterly relationship between NuJan. It was realistic, sweet and simple. So effective in the straightforward way you'd represented them. And Mayank's friendship with Gunjan was also wonderfully portrayed. And the hints and shades of MayUr that you give us are also wonderful. They've got such an interesting and dysfunctional type relationship, that makes so much sense.

Samrat, here I thought he could change, he had changed, but he's too caught up about his image. That confrontation was wonderfully expressed. Am so glad Gunjan blew up at him, at least now he should know better.

Waiting for more!

Love,
Radz

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sosweetsumi

@sosweetsumi

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Posted: 16 years ago

#453

defiantly improvement have read a walk to remember thats why know what is coming.but with sajan its really beautiful as i can feel it.

do continue dear
bye sumi

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shrishti gupta

@shrishti gupta

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#454

A walk to remember is a gr8 book! And ur ff's also gr8! Good job! Update asap!

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mads

@mads

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Posted: 16 years ago

#455

ok...I read all the 6 parts together...and I actually have no words to describe this....its FREAKIN AMAZING!!!! 👏👏👏I hav already saved the fic on my comp...so that I can read it wenever I want to!! 😳 😃

u know..ur fic takes me into a totally different world....😍 its awesomeee!!! I seriously cannot hav imagined enjoying reading any other fic before...its truly amazing dear!!! and u kno wat...ur style of writing is jus amazing...the way its from ms tamana's point of view...n the way u alternate between their thoughts...its jus soo awesome!!! loved the way u hav marginally changed the story-line...its too good!!! seriously...u kno, ur style reminds me of chetan bhagat's style of writing.. its seems soo personal... all english wid some expressions n quotes in hindi.. its seems verry real..n natural...

oh wat can I say...I jus loved it totally...I hav no words to decribe how amazing this is....well, I cud do this a huge post wid every part that I liked n my analysis on it...but then, I dont think I hav the time rite now...so will jus end it wid one sentence - ur fic rocks dear...😳 I love the marginally new samrat n gunjan in ur fic...they are soo adorable!!! esp sammy..!!! and also love the way u hav included mayank and nupur in the fic.. mayank n nupur as the dialogue writers...so they will write those dialogues as if they are saying it to one another...😳 and SG will actually say them to one another....its all so dreamy n amazing...😍

ok..n one more thing, if that new lady in the car ( m guessing its a lady otherwise aisa end nahi karti tum 😉 )is gonna be sheena...then let gunjan spend more time wid purab...in ur fic atleast....😳 ok, now I sound like requesting scenes for PD...😆

oh and one more thing...plz add me to the list of ppl whom u gonna PM wen u update a new part... sure wud not want to miss this at any cost!!! 😳

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Larae

@Larae

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Posted: 16 years ago

#456

i love this ff toooooooooooooooooo much do continue youre doing an awesome job

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Shagufta

@JanuaryEmbers

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#457

awesome part cont soon plz!!!!!👏

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sayli

@saylithegreat

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Posted: 16 years ago

#458

hey congo on completing 50 pages🥳🥳

u knw i am so happy

gosh!!!!i am dancing!!!i am really very happy.ur ff completed 50 pages!!!!!!!!!

i want ma party huh😉

well cuming to this part

mimz tusi great ho!!!!!👍🏼

wht a update yaar!!!

i really loved d gunjan-nupuz convo!!!!😳

n yeah thanx for a MaJan convo!!!it was so sweet😳

typical jiju-saali!!!!!i really loved tht part so very much!!!!!d best way to express nupuz-gunjan relationship

cuming to d next part!!!!!well d way u hav explained samrat's lonliness is awesome

i actually felt so bad for him!!!!!

n d rehersals part

hmm must say mayur's lines hav improved!!!!!!!🤣

n benji!!!!i was imagining him yawning!!!!!🤣

uday's TAM-MAM was cute!!!!😳

n yeah tht dia is becum too rude!!!!😈

felt so bad for gunji!!!!!but i am happy becoz samrat too felt bad

everything is going in d correct way mimz

gosh!!!!!samrat is falling for her😍

n d last few lines of d update were awesome!!!!!👏

lookig forward for d next update now

n yeah loved d part when samrat's prepares his list of wrk

he is so cute!!!!!!!😍

n lastly off course d wrd ponytail brought tears to ma eyes!!!not actually ponytail but most of the things!!!!!now u knw why!!!!!

thanx mimz for letting me re-live ma fav couple's story again n again😛

lov ya.......................🤗🤗

update soon huh

bye!!!!!!!!!1

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-Grace-

@-Grace-

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Posted: 16 years ago

#459

firstly...amazing lines by gunjan...very strong and persuasive..lolz...and smarat chalo he has a heart...got feelings huh..lolz...jk..it was FAB as usual...and gunjan poor girl was having high hopes...lolz...

hope to see them together soon....

looks like samrat's chappar chappar is rubbing off on gunjan and her "feeling badness" is rubbing off on him....

congrats for crossing 50 pgs!!!

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astha

@Asthuox

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#460

Mimiii 😛

Oh my FREAKING GoOSh! That was Wonderful + Brilliant + Grand + + Fantastic + Awesome + Outstanding + Cuteeeee + Beautiful + Quite emotional + Enjoyable = PERFECT UPDATEEE!! It was way beyond words, seriously. Im blown away completely. What an update man! Wow, talk about being extra supercilious. 😳

Ok, I will start off with My baby. Samrat. AWEEEHH! He feels abandoned. I wonder if his parents have any idea what he is going through. It must be really hard. I guess he needs some emotional support😔. Gunjan?? Gunjan where are you?? HURRYYY😲!! Aw, looking into the year book. Landon! Eee; When he read Jamie's ambition quote. To see a miracle! 😳

Now..Gunpur😛. AWEEEHHH! The way you represented them. It's amazingly awesome. So realist. The way you portrayed their bond, it's so beautiful. I just LOVEED the whole act😃. That scene could be picture rise perfectly👏. The dialogues. Attitude. AWEEEHHH! PERFECT! Like I said before you are a FREAKING grand + suitable + bright = ideal WRITTER! 👏😳

MJHT team should seriously employee you BY GOD! Ideal expert. With dialogues (Love Dictionary, You define me🤣) + Majan moment. AWWEEEHHH! Adorable friendship! Traffic + Wonderful = Adorable + More Majan scenes! 😆

Bejan. LOL! They will seriously share such a cute devar, bhabhi pair😳. Adorable much! And omg omg oh goshhh! 😲😲

"What's all this fate crap you're always talking about Gunjan? He's not right for you, and that's final!" Benji says, yawning.

Gunjan?? Khushi yaar. LOL😆. For a moment I thought he was warning Gunjan in advance. After Samrat's behaviour, im kinda disappointed. I will get back to that in a bit. Eheh. I loved the rehearsal scene between Bejan😛

Sajan. I was expecting something different and you gave me something even better! 😳⭐️

First shot. Chashmish. AWEEEEEE! He called her Chashmish. XD!😳
Him asking for help! HAHA! Landon ghost hit him😆 his goofy smiles😆😆! I can sense parallels with the movie even more now. The Landon and Jamie magic😳 is what I can see in your FF! Beautiful. Its so cweetilicous to read Sajan moments that once were experienced by Landon and Jamie☺️.

Breathtaking graceful + Grand = Brilliantly written. 👏😳

OH GOSH😳! Give me a tissue😭. A walk to remember memories. I LOVE the movie to bits. The whole film was so beautiful, My gosh * tears * Im going to cry a river, Grab some buckets! The passion. The emotions.

And when Landon goes to Jamie.

"I love you" EEEEEEEEEEE i *deadd* ☺️ Then the kiss again😍

Also in the end. I had tears in my eyes again 😭

"Im sorry, I couldn't show Jamie a miracle" Landon, his face was low. 😒
"She did, it was you" * cry * Perfect! 😭😳

The emotion volcano going to explore. I better calm myself! But seriously I like the idea how you bring your own magic and use your writing skills so cleverly. It makes the moments between sajan seem fresh and new! I know your inspired by AWTR but I don't know why, par the scenes in your FF do remind me of Landon and Jamie but when imagining sajan they seem new! 😳😳

Its unbelievable😲 and honestly speaking its probably the way you write. You're a true rocking star in writing. 👏👏

The story line is going to be like a roller coaster. So many twist and turn now after Sajan confrontation. And by god! What scene cut piece. 😆

@Samrat. Fine, you are over obsessed with your image but seriously dude how can you just hurt and insult a girl like this. YOU asked for her help. She never came to you for crying out loud! Collage studs *sigh *

I LOVED gunjan in the whole scene. She is a strong girl. Im glad she gave samrat some attacking words, which felt like a SLAP across his face. He deserved it. I know he didn't mean it to go like this but he NEEDS to learn how to control his words. Im glad Samrat saw another different side of gunjan. WAY TO GO GIRL!

DAMMM😳! Ouch! I felt his pain there in the end. He feels abandoned again after Gunji went🥺. I just want to give him a tight bear hug and NOT let go🤗. I liked the way you portrayed his emotions. The pain could be felt😭. I really cant hate this guy. I LOVE the samrat in your FF! The real one! 😳😳

You ended it really fine girl. Samrat seeing his reflection in the puddle. He was trying to find the real samrat. The when who was reflecting wasn't him. Very Natural. LOVED the way you penned down the whole scene. 😛😃

"SPLASH!" A car rides over the reflection. The FAKE one is gone! Gone

Cant wait for Mimi's roller coaster ride to part 7. It's going to be quite emotional still😳. The confrontations between Sajan. There feelings. Samrat putting his image issues in the DUSTBIN! If his brain is not frozen and focuses on gunjan. Its going to be a interesting ride. Im so FREAKING excited😆

Okay. Another equation before I finish off.

Outstanding + Out of the world + Fabulous + Rocking = A perfect update like always. Im jelling as in jealous again.😆😳

Cant wait for the Sajan magic again Mimi XD!😛

Update soon! 😉

Loveee youuu 🤗

Edited by Asthuox - 16 years ago