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Jessi

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Posted: 16 years ago

#261

Sorrry don't have time for a lengthy reply!

But just loved the chapter!

The best scene was karan and deepalis!

Their so cute together!

and i was glad to read the mention of aisha, i hope her and yusuf's part comes soon!

and this zeenat seems like a freak, haha poor rehaaan!
but great work! keeep it up!

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Rabia

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Posted: 15 years ago

#262

A note to everyone: Chapter 10 should be ready in a couple of days, which means only a little more than two weeks after Chapter 9. Much better than I've been doing lately, na? 😃

Originally posted by: PaNa4ever
Rabia! Borna!

I don't have time to leave such a lengthy reply, but I thoroughly enjoyed reading, as always! 😃 It's so funny that it ended up being pretty long anyway 😆

Aww, I loved the entire sequence of events at the Mehta household! Adi's longing for his own parents was something that popped up a few times in this chapter, but it must have been especially sad for him watching Neelam and her parents together - such a close-knit family...

The Adi-Neelam scene or scenes, I should say, were very sweet. One of the things I love most about the way you write their scenes is that through something as simple as conversation, the bond between them is growing...There's something so genuine about that...That holds true for all of the couples and characters in this story, I know, but since Neelam is a very quiet girl by nature, her conversations and reactions around Adi are more heartwarming, at least for me. There's only a tinge of attraction, just the slightest bit, which is completely natural...I always end up smiling so much whenever Neelam starts feeling awkward around Adi...I can totally picture Sanaya and Mohit in my mind's eye! How adorable... I really hoped you would enjoy these scenes, since you're a SaJan fan....I tried my best to bring the essence of SaJan into the interactions and conversations of Adi and Neelam.

I just have to put in a few words for Karan-Deepali here! They were so funny and cute! LOL, Karan's "I'll have to spend even more time looking at HER face?" Hahaha, I LOVED that line! God, these two and their verbal sparring...I never get tired of it! Lol! I thought that line was a little too mean at first...but then I decided to put it in. It fit well. 😆

Rehaan's story just made me sit here at my laptop with my mouth hanging wide open...I honestly have no words to describe my reaction to Zeenat's baseless accusation. And now that she's going to be landing up at Penn...Well, I am not looking forward to seeing her after reading about her moodiness...I will cope with it, though, because it will definitely make things more exciting. A new twist in the tale! Yeah, Zeenat's accusation was baseless all right. That's the problem with her...she's possessive and impulsive. But believe it or not, ultimately she's not supposed to be someone you hate...I'm sure at some point in the story you'll start to pity her a little.

Speaking of twists, the scene where Hina saw Todd and that other guy...What was that all about?? Things are getting so mysterious! Can't wait to find out more about that! My lips are sealed for now...but whatever is going on will have some serious repercussions for several characters.

And as for Zaid and Samira...Right when Adi mentioned that Samira looked unnaturally fragile, a red flag went up in my head. Leave it to Adi's keen perception to catch things like that...Zaid's reaction, followed by Samira's anger in the section after Rehaan's story, didn't do much to ease the tension! Signs? Is she ill? You'll find out in chapter 10...I have this fear that some readers might not like where I go with this. I hope I'm wrong...😕

So much mystery! And now I have to wait to find out what happens next!

Fabulous, fabulous update Rabia! Will be eagerly awaiting Chapter 10!

Thank you!!!

PS - I guess this turned out to be a pretty long reply after all...Longer that what I'd intended, at least! No harm in that, eh?

Lol! Of course not. 😉

Originally posted by: nimrah

Originally posted by: saher_90
Lovely work honey very well written..:))

Thanks Saher!

Originally posted by: -Neelam-
Awesome part! Loved it! Continue soon! Will answer the questions later!

Thank you so much Neelam!

Originally posted by: shinz
i simply looved the karan deepali part

I'm so glad you did! Thanks.

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Aradhna

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Posted: 15 years ago

#263

Rabia, I'm in love with this FF. I read it before, but never commented, but now, now I absolutely have to.

Firstly, I love the realism in all the characters, and the developments already showing. The relationships you have created are so real, and so in depth, and meaningful. The way you write has woven magic.

Now, to the questions. I've always liked the way you've written Adi-Neelam, it's very realistic, the burgeoning friendship and attraction between them. Neelam seems the type that takes time to fully get close to someone, especially a male someone, so this interaction, with the hesitance and awkwardness on her side is all the more endearing.

I honestly expected something more for Rehaan-Zaanat's story. Like, because of the promise he made to her dad, she cheated on him? But this makes more sense really. I think Rehaan would have been more shattered and less approachable if she had cheated on him. I don't like her, and I cannot wait for a Samaira-Zeenat confrontation!

I personally think Aamir wasn't the only one in the family with cancer. That may partially be why Samaira so passionately wants to become a doctor? She lost her cousin to the disease and she may lose herself to it. That bit where she looked into the mirror and saw the subtle changes makes me think she went into remission, but the cancer may be coming back. It's intriguing, and I'm sure whatever happens will be worth the wait.

I loved this chapter. You write so well. The Deepali-Karan scene was awesome. I think you write them superbly. Rehaan will see the sparks first I think, not just the chemistry, but maybe later the potential for so much more than just dance partners between them. I like the development there. Very well-done.

I also really like how you're handling everyone's reactions to the whole accident and the Todd thing. I'm guessing he's dealing in drugs? And Hina's going to get entagled somehow, though I hope she shares things with one of her friends first so that they'll be there for her and to fight for her.

Rabia, I hope you know how spectacular your work is, and you keep writing.

*edit add*

Please add me to the PM list!

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Love,
Radz

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Tania

@Sadaf.B

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Posted: 15 years ago

#264

Soo sorry for not commenting for such a loong time!! But awesome, awesome! chapter loved it!! 😃

Sorry for the very short comment, but just wanted you to kow that i'm still reading.. kabhi kabhi thodi der ho jati hai but i still read .😉

Tania

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Rabia

@SuhanaSafar

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Posted: 15 years ago

#265

Originally posted by: Bollywood_chic

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time? (I really hope so)

It was sweet and simplistic, reminded me alot of MJHT. it was realistic and just like samrat and gunjan. Adi was just like samrat is in MJHT, helpful and always tries bringing the best out in people.

Thanks so much Sonia! I remember you saying that you wanted my romantic scenes to be more obvious. I'm glad you like them more this time.

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?
Yes completly, though i had kind of thought of something to do with their relationship. Zeenat's very..quick at jumping to conclusions and doesn't have much trust.. poor Rehaan, hopefully him and Samira will be close when zeenat arrives, she can get jealous then.

Yes, Zeenat is not good for Rehaan at all...yet, she won't stop trying. Things are definitely about to get interesting when she comes...

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?

Something to do with an illness?? im guessing, haha.. but i guess im wrong. Maybe the death caused emotional problems etc

The second one is actually a closer guess...although the first is not completely wrong either. Confused? You'll see when I post the next chapter.

4. What did you think of the chapter?

Loved it, it was after ages did u actually update tho.
:P

I know, but I'm making it up to you guys this time!

Deepali and karan was cute, her little dancing at the start reminded me of Step Up.. Karan does remind me of Mayank at the start of the talent parade his sarcasm and just his personality.

I haven't seen Step Up, but I definitley had the talent parade in mind when I wrote this part...

Overall.. great part, do cont soon n thanks for the PM

Thanks Sonia!

Originally posted by: _Naima1994_

Hey Rabia, Awesome Chapter again!

Thanks Naima!

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time?

Excellant! 👏 👏 👏

Loved the Adi-Neelam scene, Neelam is starting to trust Adi, and hes made it his duty to get her through this presentation. Awesome!

Loved the hand touch, i could imagine Neelam's reaction to Adi touching her, very well described and written!

Yay! So glad you enjoyed it.

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?

Yes actually! I didnt expect this coming up but it was cool.

i guess he did right in dumping Zeenat, she was too possessive and selfish anyway.

I kind of felt sorry for him that he changed his entire way, stoped talking to his friends that are girls and all, just to be accused of sleeping with some one else.

waiting to see what happens when Zeenat arrives.

Definitely the right decision by Rehaan...but will he be able to stick to it?

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?

I seriously have no idea, no lie.

I guess Samira was very ill, thats why Zaid is so protective about his sis.

the story is starting to unwrap slowly, Im really eager to know what happens.

I feel this secret will have a big impact on Adi-Samira relationship. perhaps Zaid-Adi too, since Zaid didnt mention it to Adi.

Secret will be revealed in the upcoming chapter!

4. What did you think of the chapter?

Awesome! 👏 👏 👏

Very well written and described!

The karan-Deepali scene at the beginning was so cute, Deeepali and Karan's little fights are so adorable. looks like Rehaan is gonna play cupid for them. Quite right! 😃

Loved the photo album scene with Adi-Zaid, it was cool.

They define true friendship, hope the Samira secret dont effect their rapport or relationship in any way. Hmmm...I'm not sure if I'll take that path or not...

Who is the guy with Tod mitchel???

That scene was very mysterious, Hina trying to overhear, hiding in her friend's room was all good.

Is Tod Mitchell drug dealing? coz reading "white paper bag" only gives me the thought of drugs, dont know why. Haha, you're very perceptive...yes, drugs is the answer!

Omg loved the Neelam - Anand - Nandini scene, is was so cute!

They all share such a good raport with eachother.

and neelam fixing her dad's tie, was really sweet, the entire family are so loving and caring towards eachother.

Loved how they tease eachother as well.

Aww poor Adi, he was missing his family, i felt so bad for him.

But it was nice to see him have a good rapport with neelam's family. Aww, glad you liked it! I really enjoyed writing the scene.

Overall Awesome chapter!

keep it up! ⭐️

Thanks!

Originally posted by: togepe30
Gosh !! I hope Samira doesnt have any incurable deadly disease ! Not even close...don't worry! 😊
I wanna read more on Samira and Rehaan ....Zeenat is sooo ridiculous !! I know, isn't she? Will try to have some nice Samira-Rehaan scenes in the upcoming chapters...

Continue soonerrr !!

Your wish is my command!

Luv,

Vandu

Thank you so much Vandu!

Originally posted by: hazel94

Hey wowww u updated looks loong =]

The next one is even longer!

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time?

Excellant! 👏 Loved the hand touch and the way you described it. Its nice that Neelam is getting to know and understand Aditya more Thanks! Yes...it's a slowly developing relationship...

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?

Wooow this was unexpected. He did the right thing by dumping Zeenat. She was too possessive and didnt trust Rehaan. I felt sorry for him when she accussed him of sleeping with Emily. Argghh dont like Zeenat Me neither. 😡

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?

I seriously have no idea, no lie. I think Samira is ill or something. But im afraid that this might creat problems between Adi and Zaid coz Zaid didnt tell Adi. will this affect the Rehaan and Samira's relationship too?? Answer coming up soon!

4. What did you think of the chapter?

Awesome! 👏 👏 👏

Very well written and described!

The karan-Deepali scene at the beginning was so cute, Deeepali and Karan's little fights are so adorable. looks like Rehaan is gonna play cupid for them.

I wonder what Todd is up too. Hina is gonna crack that code or maybe in trouble because of Todd. Im eager for more Karan and Deepali. excited about the secret between Zaid and Samira.

Eagerly waiting for your next update

Thanks so much Hazel!

Originally posted by: ShaFiLICIOUS

Questions:

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time? (I really hope so)

YES U DID i love how his hand touch her hand..so sweet and tht now bcuz of him she will believe in her self much more!...! more scene with them please! Woohoo! 🥳 I'm glad you enjoyed it!

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?

YES I WAS LEFT WITH A SHOCK EXPRESSION AND MY MOUTH WAS OPEN! wow zeenat wass thinking soo low..and i felt soo bad for him...he gave up his gal friends his free time and spend it with her..and all shw was thinking was getting jealous...i feel bad for him..relationships like that never work out if 1 is faithful and the other 1 is thinking very low! im glad he over with her! and now he need to get over thinking about her..!

Agree with you 100%...she didn't deserve him at all...

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?

hmmm i have lots in my mind but wont say anything as yet..! all i can say is tht i think samira probably tried to hurt her self or something or she might have had an accident or was stressing over something.! i hope it not tht serious!

Hmm...your guesses are a little closer than everyone elses! 😉

4. What did you think of the chapter?

this chapter was full of suprises!..

Karan and Deepali finally agreed on something... then there was Zaid and adi - adi found something fishy - then there was rehaan tellin ghis story- well said - and then there was hina and todd in the same floor and hina was a bit afraid or scare and about tht - and then samira - she had mention what had happen years ago and tht she can take care of her self - which goes back to what adi had scene and questioned zaid about but zaid made something up - and then adi n neelam well though and said scene- love it very much!

Overall the chapter was well said and the things that happen was good!

awesome work rabia di

do update soon!

- Fiona

Thanks Fiona! Will do...

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Rabia

@SuhanaSafar

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#266

Originally posted by: -anamika-
OMG! Rabia! This was genius! You're such an amazing author!

Aww Anamika...itni bhi tareef mat karo...kahin mujhe khud par ghuroor na aa jaaye. 😉

You're doing such a wonderful job of incorporating every couple equally throughout the story. There was a sufficient amount of friction between Karan and Deepali, and their story is coming along quite intriguingly.

They're a lot of fun to write about...

Ah! I've been DYING to find out about Zeenat. I could just picture Rehaan working hard to convince his girlfriend's father that he is sincere, honest, and trustworthy. "Most caring and devotional boyfriend"? That's my Rehaan! :D I want to give him a big hug and say, "It's okay!"

Excuse me? Did you just say "my Rehaan." If he belongs to anyone besides Samira, that would be me! Lol..jk!

Adi and Neelam were adorable. I know you satisfied MANY of the couple's fans. ;) Yay!

Rabia, you are THE MOST AMAZING FAN FICTION WRITER I HAVE EVER SEEN! Honestly, your characters are realistic, yet slightly bigger-than-life (If only I met a guy like Rehaan). The story is logical, interesting, entertaining, yet you never lose sight of your culmination. I can't even begin to express how much I adore this story!

Omg yaar! You're seriously going to give me a complex...thanks so much for the wonderful comments! 🤗

Originally posted by: angel_1692

Questions:

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time? (I really hope so)
U surely did a better job with them....i loved the way adi came to Neelam's house to help her out..and Neelam's parents too were cute.. Great! I'm so glad you liked that part...It was fun to write as well...

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?

yup surely...it was shocking...bechara rehaan...he was irritated with zeenat..he even spoke to her father and in turn...its gud rehaan left her...but zeenat is still following him..poor champ... Yea, tough situation. Rehaan deserves better.

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?

i think samira surely has some disease..but i hope it's not something serious...or she tried to hurt herself when her cousin died...dont know...u know it better... You'll know in just a bit!

4. What did you think of the chapter?
The Chapter was good i loved Neelam and Aditya....i eagerly want to know what is wrong with amrita...overall the chapter was very good full of surprises....loved karan and deepali too.....
the way u express ur characters and write their story is really fantastic..continue soon

Love
Anshika

Thanks Anshika!

Originally posted by: debby
Hey Rabia!
Hope you are having a more relaxed time now :) Definitely! In fact, this module is so straightforward, that I hardly feel like I'm in med school...
Wonderful update may I say, if you trust me it isnt for cliche's sake. Thanks Debby! It means a lot from such a gifted writer.

Deepali Karan can never go wrong.. you never let them either. ;) Thoroughly enjoyed the scene! Yay! I'll try to continue giving them great scenes so you won't be disappointed when there are chapters without Karan...
Zeenat's insecurities were well portrayed and I can u'stand how Rehaan must have felt with her. I am troubled about Samira though... hope you'll more throw more light on that soon. Coming up in just a bit!

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time? (I really hope so)
Wait, does this mean you didnt do as good a job the previous time? SG may not be my favourite telly couple but the way you write any character is amazing. Let me quote Adi -"If you wrote it, I am sure its great." :D Aww! You're so sweet....I just feel that it's hard to write a romantic scene and still be as subtle as necessary with characers like Adi and Neelam....

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?
No.. not too much.. I had expected some kind of a past.. But Zeenat's character was well explored. I hadnt expected quite those shades. I'm glad it was interesting...

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?
I will reserve my comments on that until later.. LOL Afraid to be wrong? Lol...j/k 😆

4. What did you think of the chapter?
Like I say, you always write well. I am never disappointed with a chapter. Thank you!

Keep it up Rabia! :)

Originally posted by: mz.jess
Sorrry don't have time for a lengthy reply! No worries!
But just loved the chapter! Thank you!!

The best scene was karan and deepalis!

Their so cute together! Despite the sarcasm and rudeness?

and i was glad to read the mention of aisha, i hope her and yusuf's part comes soon! I'm trying to make it as soon as possible...I'm almost certain it will be Chapter 12.

and this zeenat seems like a freak, haha poor rehaaan! Lol! That she is...
but great work! keeep it up! Thanks Jess! 😃

Originally posted by: Anhdara13
Rabia, I'm in love with this FF. I read it before, but never commented, but now, now I absolutely have to. Aww, thanks so much Radz for commenting!

Firstly, I love the realism in all the characters, and the developments already showing. The relationships you have created are so real, and so in depth, and meaningful. The way you write has woven magic.
I'm glad you can appreciate the steady growth of characters and gradual development of relationships...I was afraid that readers would find the story too slow...

Now, to the questions. I've always liked the way you've written Adi-Neelam, it's very realistic, the burgeoning friendship and attraction between them. Neelam seems the type that takes time to fully get close to someone, especially a male someone, so this interaction, with the hesitance and awkwardness on her side is all the more endearing. Because their relationship is realistic, they are the hardest couple to write about...but it's very satisfying to complete a scene of theirs and be happy with it.

I honestly expected something more for Rehaan-Zaanat's story. Like, because of the promise he made to her dad, she cheated on him? But this makes more sense really. I think Rehaan would have been more shattered and less approachable if she had cheated on him. I don't like her, and I cannot wait for a Samaira-Zeenat confrontation!

Based on your response to this question and the next one...I think you expect events to be a little more dramatic than they end up being...but that makes sense. Considering the circumstances, it's understandable for those possibilities to be the first to come to mind...that's what we usually see in movies and on shows. But my goal is to surprise everyone by always choosing realistic but unexpected conclusions to my mysteries....

I personally think Aamir wasn't the only one in the family with cancer. That may partially be why Samaira so passionately wants to become a doctor? She lost her cousin to the disease and she may lose herself to it. That bit where she looked into the mirror and saw the subtle changes makes me think she went into remission, but the cancer may be coming back. It's intriguing, and I'm sure whatever happens will be worth the wait.

Great conjecture...and I'm sure that would lead to some gripping plot development. However, the true answer is not quite that extreme. I hope it doesn't disappoint you.

I loved this chapter. You write so well. The Deepali-Karan scene was awesome. I think you write them superbly. Rehaan will see the sparks first I think, not just the chemistry, but maybe later the potential for so much more than just dance partners between them. I like the development there. Very well-done.

Rehaan has definitely been the one bringing them together so far...and when sparks will fly, he will be the first to see them, because he's skilled at recognizing things like this...

I also really like how you're handling everyone's reactions to the whole accident and the Todd thing. I'm guessing he's dealing in drugs? And Hina's going to get entagled somehow, though I hope she shares things with one of her friends first so that they'll be there for her and to fight for her.

Drugs is right! It will be an interesting situation...but it will take a while to develop. At this point, Hina has absolutely no idea what she saw...

Rabia, I hope you know how spectacular your work is, and you keep writing.

*edit add*

Please add me to the PM list!

Of course!

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Love,
Radz

Thanks again!

Originally posted by: Taniak
Soo sorry for not commenting for such a loong time!! But awesome, awesome! chapter loved it!! 😃 It's okay hun! Thanks for reading...

Sorry for the very short comment, but just wanted you to kow that i'm still reading.. kabhi kabhi thodi der ho jati hai but i still read .😉 No worries!!

Tania

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Rabia

@SuhanaSafar

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Posted: 15 years ago

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Two and a half weeks, baby! 🥳 And an extra long chapter! Am I forgiven for past tardiness now? I promise I will try to be more prompt, both in posting updates and responding to comments. So, this chapter is fun-filled with a lot of group interaction...not so much couple interaction, but there will be tons of that in future chapters. Samira's secret is revealed. I have a feeling some of you won't like the revelation due to the way this disorder is generally perceived, but honestly, this is how I always planned it. It won't really be a big deal at this time because she'll overcome it pretty quickly, but it'll cause more complications in the future. Another point...this chapter is suppose to take place 6 weeks after the previous one, and you will notice some changes in Neelam related to increased confidence. Don't panic! I'm not changing Neelam's character...she might be a little more confident (especially when she's with this group of friends that she has known for several months now) but she's still the same simple, quiet, family-oriented girl. Neelam can never become a Hina! Wow...my justifications are becoming an essay. I better wrap up now. Final point about this chapter: I hope you love the last couple scenes as much as I do!

Just a hint as to where the story will go from here. The next chapter will include the South Asian Society's Culture Show, including Rehaan's dance (meaning a definite Karan-Deepali scene). Also, some characters will head off to Boston for Thanksgiving break. The chapter after that will be set mostly in Boston and will finally formally introduce Yusuf and Aisha! I might also introduce Aditya's cousin Vishal. Alright...now for the chapter...

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Recap

Rehaan assigns extra practice sessions for Deepali and Karan, much to their annoyance. At the practice session, he convinces them to try to increase their eye contact. Zaid shares an album of childhood photos with Aditya. Upon coming across a photo of his cousin Aamir, he tells Aditya that he died of leukemia at a young age. Aditya is suprised to find a picture of a very frail looking Samira, but Zaid avoids the topic. Rehaan reflects on his relationship with Zeenat. She had been difficult to deal with due to her mood swings and misdirected anger, but Rehaan stuck by her through it all. What finally caused him to end the relationship was her insinuation that he was sleeping with another girl. Samira is upset about her conversation with Zaid. She feels that he should trust her to take care of herself. But looking into a mirror, she suddenly realizes that there is reason for concern. Hina sees a transaction occur between Todd Mitchell and one of her floormates, which makes her suspicious. Aditya goes over to Neelam's house to help her with her presentation. Neelam and her parents share some sweet moments together and Aditya shares some light conversations with them. After the parents leave for a party, Aditya convinces Neelam that she needs believe in herself to deliver a good presentation. Neelam finds Aditya's encouraging words to be uplifting.

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Chapter 10: The Sky is the Limit

The next six weeks were generally uneventful. Zaid and Hina completed and submitted their applications for the Excellence in Engineering internship, Neelam's presentations were steadily improving with Aditya's help, and Rehaan and his dancing troupe had now become occupied with costume selection and getting oriented with the stage where their final performance would take place. Despite her realization that Zaid's apprehensions about her were not unfounded, Samira was still attempting to play down her problem, hoping it would resolve without any outside intervention. She was striving to control the situation on her own but was finding it more and more difficult with each passing day. Zaid was still nervous for her but decided not to mention anything for a while in fear of another irate response denying that anything was wrong.

On a clear, moderately windy Saturday in early November, Aditya and Deepali's hang gliding fantasies finally became a reality. Eager to witness how different the open fields at this hang gliding site were from the lush woodlands of central Florida, Rehaan readily consented to join them. Aditya challenged Hina to come along and compete with Deepali and him to see which beginner would have the smoothest flight. As he had expected, Hina couldn't say no to competition. Even after numerous appeals by Deepali, the response from Neelam, Zaid and Samira remained a firm 'no', but they agreed to come along as spectators.

That morning, Samira arrived at Zaid and Aditya's apartment a little early, hoping they would have some extra napkins that she could add to the snack basket she had prepared for the trip. Just as she raised her hand to knock on their front door, it flew open and Aditya almost ran into her on his way out.

"Whoa, sorry," he said, reflexively, backing away slightly and tightening his grip on the International Relations textbook in his hands. "Oh, hi Munchkin."

"Good morning Adi," she answered. "I hope you're not bringing that book with you today. Exams mein to abhi kaafi waqt hai."

Aditya assumed a serious tone. "Samira, you of all people should understand that we, as students of this prestigious institution, should uphold the highest standards. And that includes reading and studying every day in order to broaden our minds." Seeing her bewildered expression, he couldn't keep a straight face. "Tum abhi tak mujhe itna bhi nahin pehchaanti?" he said with a laugh.

Samira shook her head but was unable to conceal her smile. "Whatever. I'm gullible, okay?"

"That you are," he grinned. "I'm dropping this book off at a classmate's house. She needs to borrow it because she misplaced hers. Abhi dus minute main aata hoon, and then we can leave."

"Sounds good. Bhaiya kahaan hain?"

Aditya sighed. "Main usko teen baar jaga chuka hoon. Now it's your turn." And with that he headed down the hallway towards the elevator.

Entering the apartment, Samira set her basket down on the kitchen table and walked to Zaid's room. Finding the door halfway open, she glanced inside. Zaid was awake, but he was still sitting in his bed, rubbing his eyes sleepily.

"Bhaiya, aap abhi tak tayyaar hain huwe?" Samira inquired as she walked into the room.

Her brother looked up at her, startled. "Oh, hi Samira. Abhi bas do minute mein tayyaar ho jaaoonga."

Samira took a seat on the edge of his bed, facing him. "You better hurry. Aapko naashta bhi to karna hoga."

Zaid's sleepy eyes suddenly became alert, as if he had just remembered something important. "Tumne to naashta kar liya, na? You went to the dining hall this morning?"

She could see the concern in his eyes and she knew exactly why. "Haan, Bhaiya. Rehaan was at the dining hall with me. You can ask him if you want."

"I believe you," he replied. "But did you eat enough? Agar kuch aur khaana ho to bataa do. I can make something for you."

Samira stared at him silently, her expression unreadable.

"Kya hua, Samira?" Zaid asked.

Abruptly, Samira leaned toward Zaid and hugged him tightly, resting her head against his shoulder. Surprised and confused, Zaid slowly put his arms around her, returning the hug.

"Are you okay?" he questioned even more troubled than before.

Samira lifted her head and broke away from him. There was no sign of tears, only a slightly distressed expression on her face. "I'm fine," she answered after a moment, drawing her lips into a half smile.

"Then what was that hug for?"

Samira lowered her gaze. "Because you care about me so much."

"Samira," Zaid began, looking into her eyes meaningfully. "Of course I care about you. Main tumhaara bhai hoon. That's why I...I don't want anything to happen to you."

"Main jaanti hoon Bhaiya. And, you were right about everything. I wonder why it took me so long to realize it when the signs were so clear. At my birthday party, Deepali said that I would look better if I gained a few pounds, and I just ignored her. You noticed that my meal card had too many points remaining, indicating that I was skipping meals, and I just denied that it was a problem. But then one day, it all just clicked. Now I know that this is exactly the same as when I was 11. Lekin Bhaiya, main kya karoon? My mind knows that I'm underweight, because that's what everyone tells me, but when I look in the mirror, that's not what I see. Whenever I see myself, I'm overcome with the fear of gaining weight, and then...I just don't feel like eating. I know it's completely irrational, but I can't help it."

Zaid reached out his hand and squeezed Samira's shoulder understandingly. He was proud of her for having the courage to admit this because he knew that it wasn't easy for her. Samira prided herself on being rational, practical, and above all, in full control of her every action and reaction. And unfortunately, because of her disorder, she was finding it difficult to honestly apply any of these descriptions to herself. Seven years ago, a few months after their cousin Aamir had succumbed to leukemia, Zaid had noticed for the first time that Samira was eating a lot less than usual. He and his parents secretly tracked her eating habits and appearance for a few weeks and once they were convinced that something was very wrong, they took her to a doctor who specialized in eating disorders. It was he who informed them that Samira was afflicted with anorexia nervosa, a disorder characterized by low weight and distortion of body image. The doctor suggested that Samira had always been predisposed to developing this disorder, but her best friend's death had served as a trigger. After nearly a year of medications and psychotherapy, Samira's body weight finally returned to the healthy range, though she never ceased to be exceptionally small for her age. Since then, her weight remained stable, and Zaid never suspected that the disorder could possibly return -- that is, until that day a couple months ago when he saw the points on her meal card.

Zaid gave Samira a reassuring look. "Dekho, main samajhta hoon ke yeh tumhaare liye kitna mushkil hai, but you have to believe me that your perception of yourself is completely inaccurate, and that perception is what you need to overcome."

"I...I really want to," Samira responded softly. "The last thing I want is to have to go to the psychiatrist again, but...it's just so hard."

"Tum akeli nahin ho, Samira. I'm always here for you. I'll help you monitor your eating. And whenever it's gets difficult, you can come talk to me, and I'll remind you once again why this is so important. And, don't worry. Main is baare mein kisi se kuch nahin kahoonga. Mummy aur Papa se bhi nahin."

Samira stayed silent for a moment. "You think I can reverse this?" she finally asked.

"Of course. I've always believed in you, and I always will."

Samira gave him a slight smile, feeling herself reassured by his optimism.

"Sab theek ho jaayega," Zaid said to her. He put an arm around her and kissed her forehead. "Main hoon na tumhaare saath?" After a few moments of silence, he withdrew his arm. "I should get ready now. Adi will be back any minute."

As she watched Zaid leave the room, Samira heaved a sigh of relief. She was finally confident that she would be okay.

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Neelam was in the kitchen placing sandwiches, potato salad and fresh-out-of-the-oven brownies into paper bags, when Deepali came bounding down the stairs and went straight to the living room window. After taking a glance outside, she walked sullenly into the kitchen.

"Hina's not here yet," Deepali uttered with a sigh as she began helping her sister by cleaning the kitchen counters.

Neelam smiled at her. "Relax Deeps. Woh aa jaayegi. There are still a few minutes remaining until ten."

"Yeah, I know," Deepali replied, glancing at the oven clock. "I'm just so excited. I can't wait until we get to the sky diving club and I'm finally strapped into that glider! Yaad hai Neelam, main bachpan mein bhi kaha karti thi ke main ek din hawaaon mein udna chaahti hoon." She spread her arms out dramatically.

Recalling the memory, Neelam grinned. "Achchhi tarah se yaad hai, but I never expected you to harbor the same desires as an adult."

Deepali gazed dreamily at the blue sky outside the kitchen window as she stood at the sink. "Why should our dreams change as we grow up? My childhood dreams are still alive. Aaj bhi wohi sapna hai, wohi asha hai. You know..." Turning to Neelam with a glint in her eyes, she broke into song.

...chand taaron ko chhoone ki asha

aasmaanon mein udne ki asha

With a laugh, Neelam joined her in singing the rest of the chorus. The sisters sang in unison and swayed merrily as they finished cleaning the kitchen.

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dil hai chhota sa, chhoti si asha

masti bhare mann ki bholi si asha

chand taaron ko chhoone ki asha

aasmaanon mein udne ki asha

Deepali caught sight of their mother standing in the doorway of the room, grinning as she listened to the two of them singing. Walking up to her, Deepali took her hands and pulled her into kitchen. Then she proceeded to dance with her as the three of them crooned one of the stanzas.

mahek jaaoon main aaj to aise

phool bhagiya mein mehke hain jaise

baadalon ki main odhoon chunariya

jhoom jaaoon main banke baawariya

apni choti mein bandh loon duniya

Taking the dupatta from around her mother's shoulders, Deepali waltzed around the kitchen, letting it fly out behind her.

dil hai chhota sa, chhoti si asha

masti bhare mann ki bholi si asha

chand taaron ko chhoone ki asha

aasmaanon mein udne ki asha

They were having a blast and would have continued singing, but the ring of Neelam's phone interrupted them. Hina had arrived and was parked in front of their house.

"Have fun girls!" their mother said, pulling her dupatta out of Deepali's hands and as she and Neelam headed out the front door. "And please remember to take pictures."

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It was just past noon by the time the seven friends arrived at the Redwing Hang Gliding Club in central New Jersey. The distance should not have taken them more than an hour, but having some extra time on their hands, they had made a stop in Camden early in their trip, treating themselves to ice cream and admiring the scenic waterfront overlooking the Delaware River.

Once inside Redwing, the group spread a sheet in a shaded expanse of grass and settled down to eat lunch. Between Neelam's delicious preparations and Samira's carefully selected snacks, they had plenty of options. Zaid filled a plate with a little of everything and handed it to Samira with a look that indicated that he wanted to see it empty before the picnic was over.

"The Thanksgiving break plans are all set," Hina informed Samira, as they ate. "A close family friend of ours lives in Boston with his wife and two-year-old son. We can stay at their place while we're in town, plus they'll be hosting a Thanksgiving dinner on Thursday night. Yusuf bhai to aayenge hi. We'll also invite Aisha to the dinner, aur wahin hum un dono ki mulaqaat karva denge."

"Are you sure we can stay at your family friend's house the whole time?" Samira asked. "I wouldn't want to intrude on someone's hospitality."

"Aisi koyi baat nahin hai," Hina reassured her. "We all grew up in the same neighborhood in Hyderabad. Junaid bhai is practically like another older brother to me. Aur unka ghar bhi bahut bada hai. In fact, they were telling me to bring a big group so we can have an awesome after-party on Thursday once all the older guests have left. So, the invitation is still open for all of you." She looked around at everyone.

"That sounds like fun," Neelam commented, "but Thanksgiving dinner is a tradition at our house."

"Yeah, I don't think our dad would be very happy if anyone other than Neelam cooked the meal that day," Deepali added.

Hina frowned in disappointment. "All right then. How about you, Adi?"

Aditya was pleasantly surprised by the sincerity of Hina's invitation, but he had to decline as well. His cousin Vishal, whom he had lived with for the three years following his parents' death, was interviewing for a Ph.D. position at Penn the Wednesday just before Thanksgiving and would be staying in town for the rest of the week.

"Rehaan, tum to aaoge na?" Samira asked. "I rememeber you saying that you're not going home for Thanksgiving."

Rehaan looked skeptical. Hina, Zaid and Samira were going for a reason, and he didn't want to feel like the outsider who tagged along.

"You should come, Rehaan," Hina pressed. "Bahut mazaa aayega. And I know Junaid bhai and his wife would be interested to meet you since they absolutely love to dance."

Rehaan smiled. "Okay. I'll come."

Samira was overjoyed at Rehaan's response. They had both been exceptionally busy for the last few weeks and she hadn't had the opportunity to have a proper conversation with him. This trip would give them plenty of time to catch up.

"Only one week left until the South Asia Society culture show," Zaid changed the subject. "Are you excited, Rehaan?"

"More like nervous," Rehaan answered. "Itni mehnat ke baad bhi agar hum Hindi Film Dance se behtar nahin kar paaye to..."

"Stop worrying, Rehaan," Deepali sighed. "Humaara aur HFD ka koyi muqabla hi nahin. I'm 100% positive that no one can match your choreography. I just wish you were actually performing. You would totally blow them away."

"Why did you choose to only choreograph the show and not dance in it?" Aditya inquired.

Rehaan hesitated for a moment. Yet again, a topic that he would prefer avoiding. "I fractured a rib over the summer," he finally replied, hoping that no one would ask him the circumstances of his accident. "I'm pretty sure it's healed by now, but I didn't want to take any chances. I'll dance next semester."

"Then you can replace Karan as the lead dancer and make my life a little easier," Deepali said. Getting up from her seat, she walked over to where the drinks were to pour herself some juice.

"You should probably replace the lead female dancer too," Aditya said with a smirk. "I'm sure you can find someone more graceful." Aditya had attended one of the dance rehearsals and knew perfectly well that it was close to impossible to find anyone more graceful than Deepali. Still, he couldn't resist the chance to mess with her.

Forgetting about her juice, Deepali stood up from her kneeling position, and turned to glare at Aditya who happened to be sitting right next to where she was standing. "Kya kaha aapne?" she asked.

"Jo aapne suna," Aditya answered cheekily.

"I am not graceful? Why don't we have a dance-off right now and I can teach you a little something."

Aditya didn't miss a beat. "I'm sorry. I don't compete with amateurs."

Drawing in an exaggerated gasp of outrage, Deepali crossed her arms in front of her. "You better take that back."

"What will you do if I don't?"

"I'll..." Deepali thought for a moment. "I'll take your hat." Grabbing the black and red Houston Rockets cap from his head, she ran until she was a safe distance away.

"Hey!" Adi reacted. He narrowed his eyes at Deepali, and she responded by putting on his hat. "Okay fine," he said with a sigh. "You're the queen of gracefulness and the empress of elegance. Now can I have my hat back?"

"Come and get it."

As he slowly stood up, no one noticed him reach into the cooler next to him. He approached Deepali slowly with one hand behind his back.

"Catch, Zaid," Deepali shouted, and she threw the hat to Zaid just before Aditya could get it from her. She turned to give Aditya a smug grin. Without warning, Aditya reached behind her and dropped a handful of ice cubes down the back of her shirt. She let out a shriek as she felt the chill. Aditya grinned at her vindictively, then turned and ran.

"Adi, I'm going to kill you," Deepali yelled, chasing him.

They ran two circles around the sheet, where everyone else was seated, watching them and laughing. Finally Aditya dropped down next to Neelam and attempted to hide behind her, gripping her shoulders from behind. Deepali ran towards them, but Neelam motioned for to stop.

"Deeps, tum wahin ruk jaao." she said, gesturing with her hand.

Deepali was stunned. "Neelam! He poured ice down my back. Tum usko kyoon bacha rahi ho?"

Confident that he had been saved from Deepali's wrath, Aditya stuck his tongue out at her from over Neelam's shoulder.

"Main kisi ko nahin bacha rahi," Neelam replied. Turning abruptly, she raised the water bottle in her hand and poured half of it down Aditya's back. Aditya's mouth fell open in sheer surprise.

Everyone stared silently for a couple seconds, and then burst out laughing, except for Aditya who remained wide-eyed.

"I did not see that coming," Hina said between giggles.

Deepali dropped down next to Neelam, chuckling gleefully. "How perfect was that!"

"Nice work Neelam." Zaid gave her a high five. "Tumne to Adi ko hairaan kar diya. Kyoon Adi? Ab koyi jawaab nahin?"

Aditya felt his wet back. "Ab kya kahoon? Dost dost na raha." He sighed exaggeratedly as he glanced at Neelam.

"Dosti to humein nibhaani aati hai, but my first preference always goes to my sister," Neelam replied, putting her arms around Deepali, who was right in front of her. Deepali grinned with satisfaction and completed her revenge by sticking her tongue out at Aditya.

"Zyaada khush hone ki koyi zaroorat nahin hai," Aditya said to Deepali. "Tumhein to main baad mein dekhloonga." Getting up, he snatched his hat from Zaid and walked to the other side of the sheet, sitting down next to Samira.

"Don't be so upset, Adi," Samira said, putting her hand on his shoulder and grinning slyly. "You had to meet your match one day." (*clarification: The word 'match' here refers to someone who has similar skills/abilities, not a romantic match)

"Chup!" Adi whispered back, causing everyone to start laughing again. This time, Aditya joined in, accepting his defeat graciously.

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An hour later, Aditya, Rehaan, Deepali and Hina made their way toward the gliders where they would receive training for their flight, while Zaid, Samira and Neelam stayed behind.

As the three of them sat, watching their friends getting strapped to the gliders in the distance, Samira turned to Neelam. "Neelam, has there been some drastic change in your life recently?" she asked.

Neelam gave her a perplexed look. "What do you mean?"

"Tum kuch din se badli badli si lag rahi ho. You know...happier, more cheerful, more confident."

"Not to mention more cunning," Zaid added. "I never expected you to be able to trick Adi like that."

"Exactly!" Samira exclaimed. "And you're wearing pink! I've never seen you wear any color except for white and black before today. Kuch to zaroor hua hai."

Neelam glanced down at her new shirt. Granted it was one of lightest possible shades of pink, but it was still very different from her usual attire. "I can't say much about the shirt," she said. "Maybe my preferences are changing. But as far as everything else goes...Kuch din pehle kisi ne mujhse kaha tha ke mujhe khud par yaqeen hona chaahiye, that I should approach everything I do with confidence. I'm just following that advice."

"That is some truly valuable advice," Samira replied. She noticed Zaid's thoughtful expression. "Kya baat hai, Bhaiya?"

"Kuch nahin. I was just thinking that I should follow that advice too. There's something I've wanted to do for a while, but I haven't had the confidence to go through with it."

"Achcha? And what is that?"

"Phir kabhi bataoonga," Zaid replied, turning slightly pink.

No need Bhaiya, Samira thought to herself, I think I have a pretty good guess.

A few minutes later, Neelam shielded her eyes from the sunlight and glanced up at the sky. Spotting the silhouettes of four gliders, she quickly grabbed her camera and jumped to her feet.

"They're in the air!" she said to Samira and Zaid excitedly. "I'm going to try and get a better view where the sun isn't in my eyes. You should come too."

As she ran off, Samira turned to Zaid. "Chalen?"

Zaid shook his head. "Tum jaao. I can't even look."

Samira found Neelam on the other side of the field, snapping pictures eagerly. "Zaid nahin aaya?" Neelam asked, as she fought to keep the wind from blowing her hair in her face.

"His fear of heights is a little excessive," Samira responded.

"But it's not him who's up there."

Samira shrugged. "I know. I guess he just really cares about the four people that are up there." Just like he cares about everyone he knows, she thought to herself. She was starting to appreciate her brother more and more.

They watched the gliders in silence for a while as Neelam continued to take pictures.

"You know," Samira said. "I never thought I'd say this, but hang gliding looks like a lot of fun."

Neelam nodded in agreement. "It sure does."

"Agli baar main bhi jaaoongi. You should come too."

Neelam raised her eyebrows. "Samira, I may have gotten a little more confident lately, lekin main abhi itni bahadur bhi nahin hoon. Look, I got goosebumps just thinking about it."

Samira laughed. "Maybe by the time we graduate."

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When Neelam had maxed out her camera's memory card, she and Samira went back and joined Zaid once again. As they waited for their friends' flight to end, the three of them talked about one of the most recent readings for their Indian American Identity class.

Finally, Zaid caught sight of Aditya, Deepali, Rehaan and Hina heading towards them from a distance. He was just about to inform Samira and Neelam of this, when he noticed something and did a double take. Hina wasn't walking on her own. Rehaan and Aditya were holding her up. Zaid's worst nightmare appeared to have come true.

"You guys, Hina's hurt." This was all Zaid could say before he sprang up and began running towards the approaching figures.

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"You know, an injury automatically disqualifies you from the Best First-Time Flight contest," Aditya said to Hina as he and Rehaan helped her to a bench where she took a seat. Rolling up the leg of her jeans, Hina examined her ankle.

"Which means I won," Deepali declared.

Aditya snickered in reply, "I don't think so."

"Tum dono bas bhi karo," Rehaan reproached them. "We have an injured person here."

"Thanks Rehaan," Hina said, "but it's okay. It's just a sprained ankle. Aur waise bhi, I am so not disqualified! I was better than both of you in everything except the landing."

Before anyone could retaliate, Zaid arrived and came to a stop next to Rehaan. "Are you okay, Hina?" he asked, panting. A few moments later, Samira and Neelam had joined them as well.

"I'm fine," Hina replied. "I just sprained my ankle while landing."

"Do you need anything?" Zaid inquired with concern. "Main tumhaare liye cooler se ice leke aaoon?"

"Nahin Zaid, but I would really appreciate it if you would sit here with me for a while."

"Of course," Zaid replied, dropping down next to her.

Hina turned to the rest of the group. "You guys should head back. All our stuff is unattended. Main thodi der mein Zaid ke saath aa jaaoongi."

Everyone had comprehended what Hina's intentions were, but except for Aditya's secret wink at Samira, no one showed any sign of it. Without protest, they all left, leaving Zaid and Hina to talk in privacy.

As soon as they were gone, Zaid turned to Hina again. "Are you sure you're okay?"

"Kitni baar poochhoge, Zaid?" she questioned with a grin.

"Jab tak mujhe tasalli nahin hoti," he replied. Getting up from the bench, he bent down and examined her ankle. It was already a little swollen. "It looks painful. Kaafi dard ho raha hoga, na?" He looked up at her.

Staring into his eyes, she smiled slightly. "Ab nahin."

Rising, Zaid sat back down next to her. They were both quiet for a few moments.

"You care about me a lot, don't you Zaid?" Hina asked suddenly. Without raising his gaze, Zaid nodded. "Kyoon? she asked as a follow up question.

Unsure how to approach the question, Zaid stayed silent, his eyes shifting nervously as he tried to come up with a response. Hina giggled at his predicament. Slowly leaning towards him, she kissed his cheek, even more tenderly than she had on that night six weeks ago, in front of her apartment building.

"Abhi kuch kehne ki zaroorat nahin hai," she whispered. "Lekin ek din to kehna hi padega."

Zaid's heart pounded in his chest as she finally moved away again.

"Chalen?" Hina asked, slowly rising from her seat. Nodding, Zaid stood up as well. Hina held onto his arm and took one unsteady step forward.

"Ek second," Zaid spoke up. "Mujhe tumse kuch kehna hai."

She turned towards him, at first in surprise, but then in anticipation of what he was going to say. They were now face-to-face. and her hand was still gripping his forearm. Slowly, he moved his arm back towards himself until her hand was in his.

Suddenly it all seemed a lot easier. Without any further hesitation, Zaid articulated the words that he has been longing to share with her for so long. "I love you, Hina."

Time seemed to come to a standstill. Zaid was certain that the wind was still blowing and the birds were still chirping around him, but all he could hear was his own racing heartbeat and Hina's gentle breathing as she stared into his eyes. Then as abruptly as it had come on, the spell lifted as Hina flashed her dazzling smile at him and his heart skipped a beat.

"Itni si baat kehne mein itni der kyoon laga di?" she asked.

This question seemed like a positive sign, but Zaid didn't want to jump to any conclusions. "Main darr gaya tha," he said softly. "Mujhe laga ke agar tumhaari taraf se jawaab 'na' huwa, to main seh nahin paaoonga."

"Main tumhen 'na' kaise keh sakti hoon?" Hina replied, squeezing his hand.

Definitely a positive sign, Zaid thought to himself as his face lit up in a smile.

Before he knew it, she had flung her arms around his neck, and he stood there, her curls blowing gently into his face and his arms wrapped tightly around her waist hardly daring to believe what had just happened.

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When Zaid and Hina finally joined the rest of the group, they sat down silently, and attempted to avoid all the knowing glances.

"Are you planning on telling us what just happened," Deepali asked, "or are you waiting for us to start commenting?"

"Why?" Hina asked, pretending to be completely oblivious to the discussion. "What happened?" Zaid had a similar feigned look of confusion on his face.

Aditya shook his head with a grin, and sang two lines of a song in a soft low tone. "Aise bhole ban kar hain baithe jaise koyi baat nahin. Sab kuch nazar aa raha hai, din hai yeh raat nahin."

Hina glanced over her shoulder at Zaid, who was sitting behind her, and they both beamed at one another.

"Well, if you must know," Zaid began, "I suppose this will spell it out for you." He put his arms around Hina and, for the first time, kissed her softly on the cheek. Everyone cheered for them.

"It's about time," Rehaan commented.

"I think this calls for a toast," Samira suggested. She and Neelam proceeded to fill paper cups with Pepsi and give them to everyone.

"To Zaid and Hina," Aditya said, raising his cup. "May they always be this happy."

"Cheers," everyone else replied and they all took a sip from their cup. Then, lowering the cups, they exchanged glances, and burst out laughing for the third time that day.

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Edited by SuhanaSafar - 15 years ago

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Aradhna

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+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#268

Rabia, I love the little jump you had, shows the development so well.

Can I first tell you how happy I am that Zaid told Hina how he felt? And that she feels the same? I think they're really cute together. And I love how the friends tease them, and how they are together. This group of friends is more a family than just a group of schoolmates. They're one another's supports. It's wonderful to read a relationship so tight.

Hmm, so my guess was way off with Samaira's secret, but the anorexia angle is written very well. And very understandble point of view. I love the fact that she doesn't deny that she has a problem, but rather, is relieved to have her brother there for her. I hope, as her friends may find out, they're equally there for her. I think they will be. It's a realistic angle, especially for someone who loves to have a handle on things like Samaira does.

Neelam's burgeoning confidence is astounding. And oh so wonderfully written! Her ease and openness with her friends is very well-written, though I'm pretty sure she'd never dump a glass of water over just anyone. She's not that out-going and bold. She'd do it to Adi because he's her friend, and to maybe some of the other guys in the group, because they're that close. But no one else. Same with how frank and comfortable with them. I love it!

And is Adi already feeling something for Neelam? Seems like Samaira may be spotting something there!

What accident was Rehaan in? Something to do with Zeenat? Did I miss something there?

I am so looking forward to Deepali and Karan interaction next part! And I'm glad Adi and Hina are becoming friends. Especially considering that Hina is now with Adi's best friend. Yusof and Aisha next bit as well? I cannot wait!

Love,
Radz

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saher

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Posted: 15 years ago

#269

Awesome update dear V.well written keep writing n keep rocking:)

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Hiba Aijaz

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Posted: 15 years ago

#270

Questions:

1. Did I do a better job with Adi-Neelam this time? (I really hope so)

yeah..........it waz superb.............n a bit touching!!!

2. Did Rehaan's story surprise you?

i dont believe this.............(sorry to use the word)but zeenat is so characterless n close minded......

3. What do you think Samira and Zaid's secret is?

i think samira had suffered alot after aamir's death,,,,,,,,,,,,maybe some disease or something

4. What did you think of the chapter?

it waz as usual superb n touchin n a bit surprising with the rehaan and aditya-samira-zaid part.....

sorry 4 commenting late on the 9th chapter

about the 10th one it was touching to see the brother-sister bond and im running out of words to express my feelings about their relationship n i liked the simple confession of the lovebirds

KEEP IT UP!!!!!!!!!

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