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Sai Prasanthi

@Prasanthi

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#81

Wow.. Honey.. that was too good again....keep it up!!

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Pebblez

@Pebblez

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#82

I loved it =D

....you knw what that means.....lov ya!!

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Hina

@hinz

Moderator

+ 9

Posted: 16 years ago

#83

muah ziz!

this ones beautiful
and i like it red
i knew there was one coming soon
315 re...

p.s: did u chk the comment on fb?
mast jodi hai yar hahaha still makes me laugh

Edited by hinanaziri - 16 years ago

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pickytg

@pickytg

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#84

*edit* dude im so darned a freak... was logged in from this one... and didnt realize... ahahahahah nijal patel... this has to be the most silly thing ive done... atleats for a while :D

Edited by missypatel - 16 years ago

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@spln

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#85

Bleeding heart recoloring its thin pure coat
Emotions escaping the closed chambers... took my time reading this one... to the extent that i wrote it on a paper and read it over and over while walking down to the lab... somehow... i seemed to wonder... if you really just wrote it like always without thinking much... cause there's too much chance, and even more pun... nij... how much time???... i think the closed chambers should come with its double meaning, and then im inclined to think , since you wrote it, it just came and happened and became... what it did...
Senseless mind has lost its power
Dry eyes hurting with each blinker...i know... contacts make me empathize with that feeling at a physical level... but it made me think, and again i wonder if you thought as much at all... if i could get to the stage where this line would be a a more emotional sensation...
The only ringing name in hollow bones and twirled toes
Dreams of the young lad's face with a smart stubble
Making imaginary bubbles chasing memories.. ..this was my favorite... also the one i noticed in the first read of the verse... we were in central park and we saw someone making those soap solution bubbles which chillers play with...excapt that these bubbles were humongous... like the LARGE balloon sizes... im guessing someone professional did it... didnt see who was making them just saw them in the air... and i tried to catch a couple before i realized i knew people with me... if only it had been just me.. anyways... i think i've never read a bette metaphor for chasing memories... nij... seriously... or maybe its the scene which just lit like a bulb in my head at the line... its SO perfect... those bubbles are impossible to chase you could spend forever they always burst before reaching you, or at the slightest touch... and the memories in comparison... i think this will be my third... after ivy and stallion... the unforgettable one... ... seriously ...
Its a whisper, a need, a demand, a cry...to be set free... this reminded me of something you've said more than once... you know what right... the only part of the verse which wrapped a singular meaning of it all... was it that nij???

its strange how after the dozen times i read it... more maybe... i still dont seem to have read the verse like a verse... in its big picture way i mean... its like i kept gettin g stuck on lines... i still am... my fav i told you... i was....i'll tell you... there are times i see a color, hear a line, or a tune starting to play around... or just a second of stranger encounter like a bump into someone, which triggers the play of a possible scene in my mind... several times i jot them down, more often than not i use them in my fics... and i dont if it was intentional from me or it just happened sub consciously, cause i remember you said you wrote just lose lines maybe the fact stuck in my mind without trying to make it happen... but i did for the first time read the thing as lines only... each line on its own... and they triggered scenes... randoms... ...its not my fav verse hence... cause it didnt come to me as a verse yet... but i love the thought of each line... and the bubbles... im still thinking of how befitting and ironically hence still unexplored that comparison was before i read this...

ps: will write my red soon.. i really want to... like its forming :D... after i proof read.. :)

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shriya

@shriya12

Navigator

Posted: 16 years ago

#86

wow nijal! u r doin a grt job..hw cum u never wrote a ff ..whr d u get the ideas frm girl...i mean to write such a lot one needs to think n its lik it jus came out of u..i m more impressed bcz for meatlst creating verses n tht too for so mny ppl...i m rly amazed..!! i like the way u string words to form a sentence n m specially on the lookout of ur posts at the ks blog..luv the way u threaten them..!! keep up the gud work!

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bloodline

@bloodline

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#87

I went through all of ur verses...they are simply mind blowing!
maybe u should write FF....would love to read it :)

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pickytg

@pickytg

Dazzler

Posted: 16 years ago

#88

@Prasanthi ..thanks hun...yipppeeee u liked!

@Pebbz....ahahha i know exactly what that means...*smiles*

@Hinz..muahhh!! yeh..effect..i hear... i agree! :D

@NJ....no hurries for the reply in "red" ...what u've given me already for this one....means tons...:P

@Nidha...thanks....glad you liked tis one! :)

@Shriya...its always nice to have new people appreciate stuff....sooo happpy you liked it :D trust me...ive tried writing fiction....it just..refuses to agree with me...hence i try to stick to this..in attempts for another try...soon...!!thanks for the comment ... =) you know...i got go energized reading your comment..i did blog on KS..and in a manne that i believe you like :D

@Bloodline...thanks...glad u liked them...yep yep...will try to get that pending one shot...soon! :D

@All..a new combo is up..though its very random ...erm...yeh!

cheers,

..nijaL ☺️

Edited by missypatel - 16 years ago

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Sai Prasanthi

@Prasanthi

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#89

Nijal!!! sweetheart... you are superb yaar... simple words and yet deep meaning... can't seem to enough from you... your transperant yet deep words just bowled out me...the Blue-Black one again is a magic from you... again I will say loved it... and I do not get tired say it again and again.... way to go dear... keep going...