Once Upon A Bards Verse! - Page 21

Bright in the darkness of the night
Hidden safe in the day's white clouds
Masked for the world that stares
Veiled shyly, fearful of the ignited wants
My full smile humoring your sparkling eyes.

Sometimes, i need to hold you close
Sinking in my own lustful desires,
Asking for a crack in my cocoon
Crowning my mistakes with life's single choice
Breathing the greenery of the wrong side
And Sometimes, i must let you go...



Finished reading a novel which i think shall be remembered by me as one of the best reads of my reading span :P This verse is broken, unfinished and abstract but it is the way it has come to be formed.

aaaaah nijal! say, what should i bestow my utter thankfulness to, that brought your 'versing' talent out again? watever it is, im glad it did...i guess, reading something from you after a long time, it just perked me up :P you know where i got my versing talents from, huh! :P

You say it's a broken, unfinished piece...i think its one of your most complete ones...there's a finality in every line, and try as i might, i cant think of words more associated to them..i wonder what the book actually meant to you, for you to write so about it...i think, in my verses (most of them) and a lot of yours, the lines i mostly like the best are the ending ones...

Sometimes, I must let you go....that is so ironical to the whole setting of the verse, and still my favorite line...i dont knw wat context you wrote that in, but i think it's the hardest thing to do, letting go...precisely and only because that thing/person/watever means so much...its like a part of yourself...and well! loved the verse nij, not my favorite...duznt even come close, but it holds an intensity um unable to distinguish for now...hoga kabhi to!

nonsense bol ree main...but yeah, um glad tu ne likha yeh! ab jab kabhi koi aur inspiration mile to please :D nawazish kerna!

lovya! :D

you better be knowing who!

i had this SUPER hunch that yo were gonna verse on veil... like such a random thought, that i didn't sit upon anyways... and here u are!!

its a pretty picture u paint - para 1 - and cause i actually went checked out he reviews before reading the verse - as i told u - i could see the girl ...

and although it seems like the obv thing to pick, the first and last line of para 2 are like this ideal prologue - epilogue combination for spelling the tale ... actuall, correcting on ur note, i think this wasn't disjointed at all .. and magenta was the right color- i did think her on the cover, didn't i say!

its good - i think im glad it doesn't wound into hard deciphering at all - just there and straight - like the book, i suppose :)

~ spln, signing off!

Heyyyy nijaL !! :D :D

@missypatel: great stuff!!

was curious, do you plan to continue with the DMG story like verse?

best,

(S.L.)

PRATHI!!! YOU ROCK!!! Muah Muah Muah!!!

- can't believe A) u remembered B) actually did it..

and yes -

Bin tere kya hai jeena....

nij tu kidar yar,tuje bada hi miss karte loga idar IF par :)
ita time nakko lagana ,aja na....


thanks Pras :)

-hinz