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pickytg

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Posted: 16 years ago

#41

reserve!! damn!! **edited**

dam ya!! but for d gud!! tht was sooooooo unexpected..lke a total bouncer bt juss a betrayal of d word!! does dt mkie sense?? lol!! i luved it!! it was totally wacko!! mkes me wonder...do i really koe u...cuz tis part defin unbelivable dt it cme from u!! ( dtz a compliment!!..i koe ur a better accepter..bt m a hard goner wit dem ;) )

okaaa d part!!...ummm...lets start wit ritu-atul-RIDZ..scene..tht did give out a lot...yet ntn(i luv dt line...u n nj bth do dt..all d time!!)..dtz a sexy kidz nme..m sure ive heard bfr bt for sum reason..it juss didnt sound tis gud ten...i was wonderin...tryna catch d meanin in betwn d lines...n i soooo cudnt...yaar cudnt u hve been a lil easy on us readers!!lol..rahul-muskaan scene..hmm tey r fightin..m doesnt lke him..cuz hes bein too ovbious...d fight continues...bt wit a dift angel..i c!! niicceeeee!!!..atul-minnie...okay it took me a while 2 picture her image..bt i still dnt c it..bt shes defin taller n more sensible...bas dtz it..atul-minnie...aahh i like it...cuz watever reason it is..d better for armaan...luv dt abt tem its lke...all r tryna protect n tke better care of him....oooohhh I LUV DT!!..bt its still a mystery..i still c armaan on d bed..wearin those yellow hosp robes..bt i still dnt c hiz face..dnt..:(!!

ahhah yehh!! i tld nj yest..dt deja vu..it was almost lke i was part of d scene..lke i was ter bt mybe wearin HPz invisible coat..or smg!!weird!!

d whole nute house..crazy fragile self world....i luv all dt..its new n fits lke a puzzle!! :)

again..luved d update..stilll dazed...its so not u..atleast nt a part of u dt i m aware of...bt hell like i rote...open d book 2 learn...guess mes doin d same..!! :D

315 =)
nij

ps..do check pardes 2 later...nw dt ive resd it..ill mke use of it!! lol

Edited by missypatel - 16 years ago

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Hina

@hinz

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Posted: 16 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: ania_91
reserved~~~~~~~
HINAA it sounds soo awesome....will be back to read....reserving this spot for now....:D

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wow!! splendid, awesome, creative and just really really cool 😛...hehe...i loved it hina! thanks so much ania this ff is so different from pardes ...hehe the dialogues were so mature and suited perfectly to the characters....feel so bad for Armaan ... awww am getting the feeling that the reason for his illness is somehow connected to Ridhimma hmm may be....but i'll be more than glad if it isn't...hmmm ok looks like Atul knows Armaan...aha the person he was refering to left off an instinctive feeling that it might be Armaan...well great job .....thanks hun

ps: the vm was really nice too....yet sad.....hmmm is it to give any hints of Armaan's past? yeh kind of lolz

you know, it's one of the longest comments i've ever left on an ff....hehe.. aww i'm honoured yar,thanks for the lovely comments,hope you like the first part

love

Hina

okay okay....its time for mui to stop...lolz

tc.

ania =)

Originally posted by: simran1285

hmmmmmmmm now this is interesting, Armi mad and Ridz (has to be Ridz) betrayed him, lolz not really but how did muski find out these little details?? aha the suspense begins

I guess this means Anji and Ridz are not related, please update soon this is very intriguing!!

thanks for the excitement simmi,just posted part one,hope it maks u feel atleast a bit betta

Edited by hinanaziri - 16 years ago

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Hina

@hinz

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Posted: 16 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: arluver15
Hey Hina Wow new concept i loved it It seemes very very interesting to me i m gald that u have wrot this its something new thnxs luv nruti

hey nruti,

thanks for liking the concept hun

means a lot

hope u continue liking this fic

lov

Hina

Originally posted by: bollywoodqueen5
amazing intro...cant wait till you continue the story

thanks hun,hope u like part 1

Originally posted by: chillingal16

hey hinna di..

loved the intro...

what happened to armaan..

why is he in there?

continue soon pls..

hey hun,thanks for the excitement and interest in the fic

hope u like part 1

Edited by hinanaziri - 16 years ago

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angullgrl91

@angullgrl91

Inactive

Posted: 16 years ago

#44

ooh.interesting fan fic!

im excited to read more!

can u pm me when u cont again? thanks :)

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simran1285

@simran1285

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#45

Hina - I hope that's right, ok now where do I start, I am at a loss of words and let me you tell that rarely happens with me. Yes I even posses the awful Muski laugh, but back to the point.

Atul sounds so well how should I put...grown up I mean its a complete contrast from the Atul of DMG; except of course the love for plants. Minnie sounds so shrewd and mature, I just couldn't picture a little girl, oh but love love loved her quick bonding with Atul it was unexpected I mean it was not the norm; Minnie is usually seen with Ridz or Armi so this was new and actually very nice.

Rahul-Muski have become the evergreen cute couple for me, and wow Rahul as the excessive talker; it's actually feasable. Anji seems sweet and I also liked her bond with Muski as well, another contrast from the show and what we're used to.

Ridz seems a mystery, actually the whole situation with Armi-Ridz is a mystery, I hope you solve it for us soon. Aaron hmm very western, atleast that bit was obvious, infact that seemed to be the only obvious factor. I guess as Atul is to Armi, Ritu is to Ridz; very intersting.

so have I bored you enough? but last thing I love how everything is so detailed, I could picture everything even the expression Rahul might have when he ranted. Great Update Hina will definitely await the next one.

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Hina

@hinz

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Posted: 16 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: meow23
reservd...
wil cum on sat n comment... (serious story.. bt plzz contd .. don't stop it half way..)

yar Lakky,me will wait

and plz dont make my weakness public

😆😆😆

sorry yeh,I will update Pardes tomorrow hopefully

gud luck wid the exams

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Hina

@hinz

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Posted: 16 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: missypatel
reserved!! :( mera intezaar nahi kiyaaaaaaaaaaa!!!! LMAO,is baar kiya yar,sorry about pichli bar
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hmmm didnt i already tell yaaaa...luved it!!
muskaans curiosity..anjiez concern...atulz secret care and d patient in talks...let him sleepin for a while!! ahah!! lmao...and d story frm a 3rd personz view...awesome!!!👏
grt one hini....update jaldi se!!!!likhooooooo abhii!!

315 :)
nij~

Aww nij

u know u'r comments make me smile and laugh sometimes

thanks for the motivation and liking

yeh the third persons view is something new,well i did try before with addictive but this one feels diff

hoping u all will like

cheers nij

luv ya nutter

Originally posted by: missypatel
hini...finally watched yur vm...i watched it mute in skool bfr lol!! lol i cud totally expect that from u

but aah luved it!!ya yaaa hez nt bewaffa ...i koe!!!! hez a darlin..he never does ntn...yeh right ,u been chatting to Jia a bit too much ,eh?
its always d girl..cuz wen guys like armaan fall in luv....tey literally get jinxed...ahhahhh!! i wud koe ;)!! haha yeh u wud know LMAO

updated ma comment too...incase u dunno...lol!! thanks honey

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Edited by hinanaziri - 16 years ago

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Anita Malik

@anitamalik

Stunner

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Posted: 16 years ago

#48

Finally found time to read the first part..YAY!

Okay so did I tell you how much I am loving this? If I didn't let me repeat it again for you...I LOVE it Hina! Your doing a fab job with it! I love the simplicity with which you describe every single thing..It is awesome!

Loved how you showed Muskaan's mood being upset due to that case..I'm totally able to feel for her since I know how hard it is to get something of your mind once it gets in there...

Rahul is a sweetheart! I can totally tell!

You've like sketched an awesome persona of Atul! I loved it...Him and Minnie interaction was like "awww" So cute! Hina, you did a fab job with the first part...I'm positive the rest are going to be just as good!

" Its ok Mr.Joshi, I can be funny at times, no wonder I'm here ...the fragile world outside couldn't handle a crazy me so here I am.... well lets forget me for now... who are you here to see?...I'm sure you're not a new entrant to this nut house ,and if you are ,you seem a little overdressed for rehab....,haha I'm sorry for being such a nuisance,you must be a visitor right?..." Atul couldn't keep a straight face at her remark on his appearance...
"yes I am Minnie...I'm here to see my friend Ammy....Armaan Malik ??? do you know him? "

LOL...You couldn't help add something nuttery now could you Hina?Aww I loved the lines Hina! Minnie had amazing dialogues..

I think Ritu and Riddhi are connected in someway...hmmmmmmmmmm..Aaron? Endless possibilities coming in my mind...

Update soon! Lovely update!

Love ya

Anita

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Hina

@hinz

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Posted: 16 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: ttimpy
sad stories make me sad......i dont like to see armaaan in a sorry state of mind.............sob sob...........im sure u have sumthing up ur sleeve...............get going gal....lets see what u update..........lolzzzzzz

Aww timpy,dont be sad,hope u like what i did with him in part one

sorry if u'r disappointed ,thanks for the comment hun

Originally posted by: Catwoman
Wow paagal premee landed in Surrey hehehe

great intro.....

Love Kat

haha Kat yeh the pagal premee had to come Surrey,my county beckoned him

thanks Kat

Originally posted by: SuhaniSonia
Wow! Really nice intro. Different story.
Please continue soon.

thanks Sonia,hope u like it further

Originally posted by: Jodubai
Awesome Intro Hina di!!!!
Poor Arman in mental khana, think he is the friend Atul was talking about

Hopefully Muski will be able to dig into his past

take care

ps: I am reading pardes now, will comment soon, but sad as there is no Ridz in there but Tamz

thanks Jo,glad u liked the intro and

yeh hopefully osm eof your questions will be answered i the first part

take your time wid pardes,i'll b eupdating the next part on it tom

Edited by hinanaziri - 16 years ago

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Hina

@hinz

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Posted: 16 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: krati.mehra

OMG...this is like gr8...has me hooked...

Armaan in rehab??? like are you serious...hehe...k k...ya so hes in rehab and i don't see riddz nywhere...muski worried...hmmm...Atul's mysterious friend...WOW...Wat starting...so many mysteries...i can't wait to read more...

Plssss update this soon and the other ones as well...i hv not read all of them...wil read them today i guess....but loving this and Pardes as well...these are the only two i read...haha...

kk....loved this one...and looking forward to more..

Love ya

Kratz

luv u too Kratz

thanks for liking the intro,got u hav eso mnay questions for me

i duno half the answers yet lolz ,

thanks for reeading both my fics,these ar ethe current two i'm updating anyway

i'll let u know when i revive my other two too 😆

cheers Kratz hun