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Posted: 16 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: ShelDev

Hey Pallavi;👏

wow wow wow...a horror fanfic...i love horror....
i am so looking forward to this one...already you have captured my attention...
Angad...mmm...chief detective...yummy😆
loved the first update....
looking forward to more...
pls pls PM me on this one as well...😃😃
thanks.......😊

Thanks Shel! 😳
I love scary movies too! 😆
Sure, I will pm u when I update.

Originally posted by: mar-

woooow grt part really good pls continue sooooon

Thanks, mar! I will continue tonight. 😃

Originally posted by: sweetangle04

Hi di..i m so excited...so happy that u r trying ur hands at a new genre of fan fics....i m so eager to read it..i m pretty sure...after reading so many of ur creations that this one would be no less.... 👏

Thanks shagun! 😳
Yeah, I like to try out new genres. I hope I can meet ur expectations. 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#32
love this new storyline cont soon plz!!!!!!!!👏👏👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
#33
Hopefully I will continue tonight! 😃
pallavi

Originally posted by: Angad-Kripa#1

Even though i love horror but i stil get scared. The part when Kripa saw Tina...thats the part that strated giving me creeps and more. Awesome! Plz pm me when u upadte. Thanks a lot. <3

Thanks angad-kripa#1...
Alright I will pm u when I update. 😃
pallavi
Edited by pallavi25 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: *MitiRasmalai*

Omg that was just supebbbbbbb!!!....A wonderful treat indeed.....

It really was freaky...and it was just the beginning...lol...

I hate scary movies...well I enjoy them too but whenever i think a scary part is about to come I cant help but close my eyes....Its a good thing this is a ff so i can imagine everything and read instead of having to close my eyes...haha

The beginning was awesome...with kripa helping the school girls practice for the Christmas concert......I remembered my high school practices which we did for the Christmas concerts...

I wonder what is going on....and where Tina had vanished...I am guessing that the figure which Kripa saw was actually a spirit....

Kripa seems to be a really independent girl....who likes to bee a free bird and live her life on her own terms.....

You did a fabb job in describing the scenery when kripa's car broke down till the end....but I wonder how did kripa's car come near her when she had ran quite a lot of distance while following Tina??...did Tina help her??....idk but thats was some really scary stuff....loll..

Oh so Angad is engaged...maybe you can get his fiancee to be the one who's doing all this so we can get rid of her lol....just kidding....haha...

Hmmm...I think that angad will be the cop/detective who will be in charge of this particular case😃....

Lets see how AK's first meeting goes...

Great part.....I like how ur soo innovative.....truley commendable👏....

Cant wait for the next part...continue soon and keep up the great work...



Thanks Mita!
Im glad u liked my foray into the supernatural realms! 😃
Gradually we will find out everything! Angad is in charge of the case now. 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: anitamalik

I'm hooked Pallavi!

Great Going!👏
I've always heard about how great of an FF writer you are from a lot of people! But sadly, i never got time to go and read your KYPH FF's...I will do so when I get time...I heard a lot of good things about them..and all your AK fics are on my list to read...Will read when I get time = D...
Im so happy that I'm actually not behind with this one...Im glad I spotted this..Now Im gonna check this regularly for your updates
= D
I must say Pallavi that you are a brilliant writer with an awesome imagination...I love how the story is going so far...Im scared already...Kripa was in the dark forest road, but somehow, I was getting goosebumps..LOL! Hmm...I wonder if that was really Tannu...was it a ghost or really Kripa's imgination...Hmm only time will tell!
Can't wait for Angad Khanna to meet Ms. Kripa! I loved KYPH, but I never got to read any AK fics...The only one I read was Bheegi's and it had AR and AK...I love both! LOL...
Continue soon Pallavi! Do you mind if I call you Pallu?
Love
Anita

Thanks Anita! 😳
Of couse u can call me pallu or pallu di as many do! 😃
A-K are my alltime favs....I am planning a multi starrer after AJT ends which is soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: ttimpy

i just cudn't handle Grudge................i even sat thru sumthing like Bhool Bhulaiya with my hands on my eyes and peering thru at the screen at times.....that also in theatre where i cud hear the kiddos having the time of their life....enjoying it and laughing.......gosh it was embarassing.............
i am going to love the love triangle.......pentagon...........angle though........
tc

Yes, Grudge is the scariest I have ever seen. Bhulbhulaiyya was funny more than scary! 😆
Especially Vidya growling : Ami tokay merey felbo! (I will kill you) 😆
Yeah, Love pentagon...😳
pallavi

Originally posted by: vallanki

WAW!! what a surprise!!!!!!

loved the characters and story line.
very interesting narrative...eager to read but have to wait for two days for updates...uuuffff..
one unrelated qun for this thread...r u ending AJT soon? with tragic end??

Thanks vallu!
Sorry, cant help it! I really dont have time to do daily updates like last year. 😳
AJT has a few more parts left.....ending we will find out soon. 😃
pallavi

Originally posted by: armaghan0

exciting fic really interesting loved the concept and intro

Thanks sidra! Im glad u liked it! 😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: me_iq

tragic end??
naii plzz naii pallu dii..do sumthin gud in d end lyk u always did

Dont worry, iqra! Have I ever disappointed you? 😳😉
pallavi

Originally posted by: saridena

hi pallavu di

wow exiting part di
a mystery ff cool
update soooooooooooon
luv soumya

Thanks soumya!
I will try to update this story more frequently! 😳
pallavi

Originally posted by: ashwini_k

wow pallavi, u had suprised us with new fanfic al of sudden.

Yes, the Halloween decorations all around inspired me to write this story. 😆😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
#38

Originally posted by: Mahi-lover

Uh yes! At last, my kinda story. Romance-suspence? Love it! 😃

Thanks Jake! Its good to see u here! 😃

Originally posted by: stars_shine*

love the intro and part

plz PM me when u update
continue soon

Thanks stars shine! '
Sure, i will pm u!

Originally posted by: yamnovbloom

wow pallavi anoyther FF by u really mindblowing start hmmm can't wait continue soon and PM me for updates thanks

Thanks yamini! 😳
I wanted to write something different this time.
Ok, I will pm u when I update. Ur welcome! 😃

Originally posted by: sameira-90

hey wow pallavi great into an chapter 1..
can't wait to read more..
continue soon..

Thanks sameira!
Im glad u like it!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: iqbals4ever

love this new storyline cont soon plz!!!!!!!!👏👏👏

Thanks iqbals4ever!
I am continuing ASAP! 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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THE HAUNTING.........Chapter 2

It was late in the evening. Almora P.S. was almost deserted except for the night-duty Hawaldars and half a dozen petty criminals in overnight lockup.

Angad Khanna, Special Investigator, Crime Branch of Almora Police, looked up from studying the case file he had been assigned just 2 days ago when he returned from vacation in his hometown Shimla. He smothered a yawn and stretched, extending his long arms backwards, stretching the shirt buttons across his muscular chest.

The room heater had made the small office too warm. Angad unbuttoned his shirt halfway down his chest.

RAGHU! .....he hollered in a deep baritone, summoning the hawaldar on duty.

Raghu came running: Yes, Sir Jee?

Ek cup coffee milega? ...Angad quirked an eyebrow.

Jee, Sir! Abhi laya!......Raghu scurried to fulfil his Boss's request.

Angad got up and paced the small Office room like a caged tiger. Barely leashed vitality and virile energy rippled in every movement of his tall, sinewy frame.

He was disturbed, worried! A schoolgirl missing! For 2 weeks now! Not a single trace left behind, no clues so far! To top that she was the town Mayor's niece, a truant teenager!

Was it a case of a rebellious, runaway teen? Or something more sinister? A kidnapping? No, then the Mayor would have received a ransom call by now. Did she elope with someone? No, she already had a boyfriend in town, one who had been waiting for her that day. A more ghastly possibility grazed his mind, one he didn't want to think about, that she had been abducted by a killer/rapist! He shook his head. In that case, the girl's bicycle would have been left behind..... IF she had been abducted from the road by a criminal.

His ruminations were interrupted by a high-pitched, sweet female voice from outside: Main Inspector Khurana se abhi milna chahti hoon! Yeh urgent baat hai! Aap please Inspector Khurana ko bula deejiye.

He heard the hawaldar's voice arguing with the woman: Madam, mainey kaha na, Khurana Sir ghar jaa chukey hain. Aap kal subah aayiye.

NAHIN! Main kal subah tak wait nahin kar sakti! Mujhey ABHI Khurana se baat karni hai! Aap mujhey unka phone number deejiye!....the shrill, feminine voice insisted.

Khurana! Angad stiffened, Khurana had been handling the Missing girl case so far. He stepped out of the office, thundering in his deep voice: RAGHU! Kaun hai? Kya chahiye?

He stopped short, staring incredulously at the young woman standing defiantly before the front desk. She was small and slender, but perfectly packaged with generous curves. Dressed in a tight-fitting, grey turtleneck sweater and long, black skirt, her feet encased in leather boots, she looked totally incongruous in the Police station. Her hair was pulled up into a high ponytail, accentuating her cheekbones and sharp pointed chin. A pixie face, but very pretty!

Angad shook his head, mentally blocking his male appreciation of the female intruder.

Kya chahiye aapko? ....he made his voice deeper and more authoritative.

The girl stared at him with equal awe. Lips slightly parted, dark eyes widened in surprise.

Kripa was momentarily disconcerted by the tall, brawny, ruggedly handsome man towering over her. He had sharp features, aquiline nose and the most piercing brown eyes she had ever seen! His shirt buttons were open down to his midriff, revealing smooth and well-honed pectorals.

She swallowed nervously and repeated her demand: Ex.....Excuse me, Main Inspector Khurana se baat karna chahti hoon.

What is this about? ..Angad raised his eyebrows, looking quite intimidating.

I.....I ....Kripa stammered for a moment, agitated by the tall stranger. Main wo.... Missing student ke baarey mein kuchh batana chahti hoon. Its URGENT!

Angad frowned, then smiled encouragingly: Aap mujhey bataa sakti hain! I am in charge of that case now.

Kripa was astonished at his claim. She stared with disbelief at his denim jeans, white flannel shirt open at the neck, unshaved stubble on his chin. If he was a cop, why wasn't he in police uniform ?

Angad saw her doubtful look and laughed, a deep rumble like thunder: Chehrey per mat jaiye. Im a plainclothes Policeman ! Aapney suna hoga? Detectives don't have to wear uniforms. I am Detective Angad Khanna, Special Investigator, Crime Branch. And you are....?

Kripa licked her dry lips: I am..Kripa Sharma. I teach Music at St. Mary's.

Angad stared at her wet lips, then forced his eyes upwards : And you have information about the Missing girl?

Yes, Inspector! Kripa spoke with confidence: I saw Tina just now on my way here!

WHAT!! Angad felt his hackles rise with excitement: You SAW HER?

Yes! I saw HER! .....Kripa repeated with great conviction.

Where? Where did u see her? .....Angad almost leaped towards her.

She backed a step: Jungle mein.....raastey per!

You saw her on the ROAD? In the Forest?

Haan....wo merey gaadi ke saamney thi, paidal chal rahi thi.

Kripa gave a short and precise account of what had happened after her car suddenly stalled in the middle of the road. Angad listened with rapt attention.

He frowned with sudden doubt: You called her name and she didn't stop?

Nahin! Usney mudkar bhi nahin dekha. I ran after her, but got out of breath. When I looked up, she was gone!

Hmmm! Angad thoughtfully looked her up and down. Did she imagine the whole thing? She didn't look the cuckoo type. Or even the hysterical female type? She was too young to be senile!

He expressed his doubts : Kya aapney theek dekha? Kahin aapkey aankhon ko dhoka toh nahin hua? Wo Tina hi thi?

Im Positive, Inspector! She suddenly turned impatient: Please, aap baaton mein time barbaad mat kariye. LETS GO! We HAVE to go and look for her. She might be lost, hurt, or frightened! Its so dark and scary over there. Please chaliye ABHI!.

Angad couldn't ignore the urgency in her voice: Theek hai, chaliye. Do u remember where u saw her? Kitni door hai sheher se?

Yes, I noticed the milestone in that spot. Its 13 kms from town. School ke nazdeek hai.

Okay, lets go! .Angad strode to his cabin, put on his leather jacket and yelled: RAGHU! Main baahar jaa raha hoon! Tum yahan sab sambhaal lena.

Chaliye! .he led her to his Police Jeep standing before the Thana.

Kripa was relieved that the Rambo Inspector had agreed so quickly to go to that spot where she had seen Tina. He sure was a tough guy, hard to convince. She glanced surreptitiously at his dark profile as he drove out of town towards the long stretch of evergreen forests on the way to the school.

He was aware of her eyes on him and turned suddenly: Was she your student?

Kripa was startled and looked away: Haan! Tina merey music class mein thi.

How was she? Was she a good student? I read in the case file she was a difficult kid?

Yes, .Kripa sighed. She wasn't a bad girl, but confused, troublesome. You know, teenage angst, rebellion. We have all gone through stages like that!

How did she behave in your class? Angad glanced curiously at her silhouette, noting the sharp little nose and long eyelashes.

She squirmed slightly at his perusal: She was a problem student. Poorey class ko disturb karti thi. Music theory class mein paper planes udaati thi, doosri ladkiyon ko chitthiyan phenkti thi. Music practice mein jaan bujhkar besura gaati thi. Jabkee wo achhi gaa sakti hai......but she just didn't care!

I see! Angad considered her account carefully: Iska matlab you didn't get along with her?

Kripa half-smiled : Koi bhi teacher nahin. It is very hard to manage her in class. Mujhey aksar usey class se baahar bhejna padta tha. Doosrey teachers se bhi usey detention milti thi.

Toh phir usey school ne rusticate kyun nahin kiya? ...Angad frowned, perplexed.

Kyunki uski Uncle Mayor hain. Nishant Jee School ko badi rakm donation detey hain. School ke functions mein Chief Guest bantey hain. Isliye Tina ki har galti maaf kar dee jaati hai.

Achha, toh yeh baat hai! Angad smirked slightly: The spoiled, rich brat! Aapney jab usey road per dekha, wo kya pehni huyi thi?


Wahi....hamarey school ka uniform. Brown skirt, white blouse and blazer. Kripa said matter-of-factly?.Isiliye toh mainey turant usey pehchan liya.

Lekin aapney uska chehra saamney se toh nahin dekha? Then how can u be so sure it was Tina and not some other girl? ..Angad challenged her with a smirk.

Because I know her! I know all my students from their backs ! Unkey baalon ke cut, kapdey, unki chaal, sab kuchh mujhey yaad rehta hai. I spend so much time with them u see? ......she mocked him back.

Aur Inspector Khanna, uss waqt, itney raat ko, uss jungle mein aur kaun hoga? Sirf Tina hi toh missing hai? Baaki sab ladkiyan apney gharon mein ya Hostel mein apney kamrey mein hain. Our security has been tightened like anything after Tina's disappearance!

GOOD! Im glad to hear that! Aapkey Mother Superior ko pehley hi yeh kadam uthana chahiye tha, phir Tina bhi gayab nahin hoti.

Kripa shrugged and kept quiet. She didn't want to criticize Mother Superior although she didn't agree with many of her decisions and judgements. For example, giving Tina so much leeway so far. If only they had been more vigilant before........she sighed and looked out at the dark trees rushing by.

They stopped at the 13 mile mark. Kripa craned her head, peering in the headlights: Aur thoda aagey chaliye.

The Jeep inched forward. Angad gritted his teeth with tension.

STOP! Stop right here! .....Kripa had good memory. She had noted the particular formation of trees at that exact spot: HAAN! Yahi hai wo jageh jahan mainey Tina ko paidal chaltey huey dekha.

She jumped out excitedly as soon as Angad stopped the jeep.

She ran helter-skelter, trying to peer into the darkness ahead of the Jeep headlights. Angad observed her with amused irritation mixed with investigative interest.

He hoped this wasn't a wild goose chase, that little Ms. Sharma had really seen Tina here earlier tonight.

TINAA?..TINAAA?......Kripa yelled at the top of her voice, venturing towards the dark woods, emboldened by Angad's presence behind her.

Suddenly she stopped! It was pitch dark! The headlights of Angad's Jeep had gone out. She froze in terror!

Helppp! ...she whispered and closed her eyes.

DAMN! ****! She heard Angad swear behind her as he hunted for his flashlight. GAADI KE BATTERIES KO BHI ABHI DOWN HONA THA? Yeh ho kya raha hai?

Kripa turned around fearfully. A thin sliver of moon lighted the Jeep and Angad with a faint silvery glow. She wasn't afraid anymore..... at least the Inspector was there with her. She slowly walked back towards him. He finally straightened up, triumphantly grinning, with a huge torch in his hand.

He turned it on, it was a bright, dazzling pinpoint of light.

He smiled at her frightened face: Darr gayi? Don't worry, Im here! Lets go look for her!

He led the way as they stepped off the road, into the dark woods lining the road on one side, a steep slope on the other.

They called out Tina's name loudly, slowly walking towards the pitch black gloom ahead.

Kripa moved closer to Angad as the darkness closed around them like a thick, murky cloak.

TINAA......TINAAA.....they called out in unison , then paused. Silence greeted them, punctuated by the rustle of leaves. His heavy boots crunched the dry leaves on the ground, her heels squished those same leaves with a whispery sound.

Kripa was almost clinging to Angad now, loathe to move away from his reassuring size and strength. As if he would protect her from all the terrors lurking in the dark.

Angad felt her softness pressing against his arm and smiled in the dark. Her fingers were gripping his biceps as she stuck to his side.

He drawled: Darr lagey toh yeh leejiye torch. You hold it!

Kripa loosened her tight grip on his arm and moved away: Im sorry! Its okay, you hold the torch. I will trip if I hold it.

Waisey... you can hold on to me, if it makes you feel better" His deep chuckle mocked her with a wicked undertone.

Feeling insulted, Kripa moved back a few paces, rejecting his proximity.

She followed in his footsteps, focusing on the torch-light, scanning the surroundings. Pine, Fir, and birch trees loomed above their heads, towering high in the dark sky. Their foliage prevented any moonlight from seeping down to the forest floor. An occasional snow owl hooted somewhere in the woods. The entire place was silent, eerie and frightening.

Suddenly... some soft and silky fingers brushed her ear and neck with a cool touch. She screamed.....loudly!

Angad whipped around and leaped to her side: KYA HUA? KRIPA.....MS. SHARMA? WHAT HAPPENED?

Her eyes were closed tight, heart pounding, she was shivering violently : Merey peechhey....kuchh .......kuchh hai.

Angad shone his torch and pulled out a piece of cloth from behind her, stuck in a low tree branch.

Ms. Sharma! Open your eyes! Its just a piece of cloth. Wait! A piece of cloth in the woods? This is strange!

He held up the cloth and studied it. Kripa opened her eyes cautiously and looked up.

She gasped! It was HER SCARF! TINA'S SCARF!

A multicolored silk scarf that was her favorite accessory, allowed even by the strict Nuns.

YEH USKI HAI. TINA KI HAI! ......she cried out in excitement.

Angad;s heart stopped for a moment, then lurched ahead: Iska matlab Tina yahan jungle mein aayi thi? Lekin kyun? Kahan hai wo ab?

He paled, realizing the possibility that Tina may have been abducted from this spot. That's why she had left a piece of her scarf here.

But Kripa had seen her earlier tonight! Perhaps shes hiding somewhere and deliberately left her scarf there to confuse and frighten them? Perhaps she was playing games with them? From all accounts, she was a mischievous imp! Anything could be possible!

Kripa whispered: Isska matlab Tina yahan Jungle mein hai? Yahin kahin hai?.......she looked around and shivered, terrified by the thought that the girl was alone in the forest, in the dark!

Angad's jaws tightened. He whipped out his mobile and called a number: Hello! Canine Division? Main S.I. Angad Khanna bol raha hoon! Mujhey aapkey canine unit ki sakht zaroorat hai. ......Kal subah, jitni jaldi ho sakey! Yes! ASAP! Subah 8 bajey bhej deejiye! Location note kar leejiye!

Kripa looked frightened: Canine unit? Aap kutton se search karvayengey?

Angad nodded grimly: Yes! Dogs have a better chance of finding her in this forest. Hum kab tak yahan andhon ki tarah bhataktey rahengey? The dogs will find her.....zinda ya....

Kripa blanched at the unsaid word. All the blood drained from her face. NO! That cannot be true! She had seen Tina with her own eyes, earlier this evening! How can it be?

Ohh God! Please don't let anything happen to that girl! She prayed silently.

Angad turned around and commanded: Lets go back to town. We will return early morning tomorrow!.

Lekin hum kaisey Tina ko yahan chhodkar jaa saktey hain? she protested.

His lips thinned with displeasure: Poori raat Jungle mein toh nahin reh saktey? We have to leave sometime! Or do u want us to spend the whole night here?

Something in his tone made the blood rush back to her face. This Detective was really obnoxious! How could he think of leaving this place with poor Tina still lost somewhere in the forests of the night?

Haan! She insisted stubbornly: Main yahan rehna chahti hoon.

Angad sighed in exasperation: Alright! Jaisi aapki marzi! We will camp out in the Jeep for the rest of the night.

They returned to the jeep and sat there waiting .in the dark, listening to the faint chirping of crickets, hooting of owls, and whispering of leaves in the night breeze. Kripa leaned on her backrest, closing her eyes.

Angad leaned back in his seat too. He glanced sideways, admiring her long, graceful neck, the arch of her body in restful stance. She was intensely conscious of his eyes on her, her breathing shallow and erratic as a result.

In the close confines of the car, she was equally aware of his hefty physique, his incredible maleness, the spicy scent of his cologne, the heavy sound of his breathing.

Suddenly her mobile rang, shattering the silence of the deserted road and surrounding woods.

Kripa jumped out of her skin in shock!. She took her mobile out of her purse with trembling hands.

Hello? .her voice quavered in fright.

KRIPA? .it was Aliyah, her flat-mate. WHERE THE HECK ARE YOU?

---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- pallavi
Edited by pallavi25 - 16 years ago

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