RNBJ-sk pg83(epilogue) pg84(new ff) - Page 3

K bass bhagne hi jaati hai ki iss baar right moment mein s holds her hand

s-aaj tumhe to main chodunga nahi!

k-aaaaaaaaa chodo mujhe gunde mawaali kahin ke!!!!!!!!!!!

S ke ka haath madodta hai

s-achcha main gunda mawali tu kya no. 1 gundi !

tabhi k wo apni ande wali baalti uthake saare ande s ke saar pe maarke maaya ke saath bhaag nikalti hai

aur bhaagte hue says

k-abb aaya naa maaza, bada aaya tha hero banne, bann gaya naa zero [giglin]

s is fumin

s-damn! sh*t!!!!!!

iss kiss eke baad s goes to abroad 4 some work

aur kuch dino mein hi-

k-kyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa????????????? ,ujhe yahan se jaana hoga???????? BILKUL NAHI! Yahi mera ghar hai main yahan se kahin nahi jaungi!

Father-kashish ur 18 now, & yahan ka ye hi rule hai ki aft 18 gals have to leave the orphanage

k-mujhe nahi pata aap rule change kardo, make the age 19

f-aur jab tu 19 ki hogi tab?

k-tab 20 kar dena [k zidd kar rahi hai ,zara zara ro bhi rahi hai]

f-aisa nahi hota bachch,tuje kal jaan ahai,dheere dheere dekhna wahan mann bhi lagne lagega, sab thik ho jaega. Garewals bohot achche log hain. Bohot bade log hain, wahan tuje zyada kaam bhi nahi, maid ka kaam hai bass

k-par mujhe to ye sab kaam aata hi nahi

f-nahi aata to seekh lena, khub , lagan se mehnat se mann lagake sikhna

kehke father goes

k-[mann mein] haan kaam to main aisa karungi, ki ye log do din mein mujhe wapas orphanage bhej denge

haha

superb part.......................kashish kuch ziyada he childish hai yar....................con't soon

Abb k comes to the garewal mansion

Wahan pe usko pehnne ke lie maid ki cute si dress di jaati hai that's a cute mini frock & she ries 2 braids jisse she looks lik a Barbie doll

There r other many maids of her agae & older , there is daisy aunty who is the main cook, a butler & a gal who has become her good frnd is shakuntala, par k calls her shanky

K ki mom is gud, so gud ki k jo galti delibearately karne jaati hai usko bhi wo nazar andaaz kar deti hai, jisse k ka uss ghar se jaane ka sapna dhara ka dhara reh jaata hai

She didn't interact with dad much par she doesn't lik him much as whenever she went to him or something he was very rude & insulting

Abb k ko s ki mom se baaki sab maid se pata lagta hai k imam ka beta aa raha hai , islie uske lie sab tip-top hona chahie, wo kuch hi dino mein aa jaega, aur unke saamne sab perfect lagnaa chahie, warna he is very gusse wala kinds

K thinks ki yahi mera mauka hai aise hi main iss ghar se bahar nikal jaungi, I jst hav to annoy tht richie rich

haha great part

sorry was busy earlier. so cldnt comment. Being festival time also was unwell for over a week.

the fic is becoming interesting. now wat wl kash do lets see and sujal reaction wen he sees her. waiting for more

wow belina ver interesting ab meri bakwas tipni

sujal

very interesting character as of now i love his atitude and style and his fun with kashish

kashish

i tottaly like me i love this charac she diff frm all ur other stories

overall an awsome start

my rattin 8.5

scope 4 imp hai ab kaha tum hi analyse karo

gr8 job cont all ur ff soon

nahi jyoti bhul se bhi apni tippanii ko bakwas kaha to. its mind blowing khush ho gai main. thanku. bata naa yaar kahan hai scope of improvement plzzzzzzzz

thanxs 2 cute samrah, tanasha & golu also, 4 commentin. coz hopeless hoke ki comment nahi milte main to likhna chodne wali thi

love u all muuuuuuuuaaaaaahhhhhhhh

abb ghar ke saare log kahin bahar gae hain, raat ka time hai

so, mauka dekhkaar k pintu ko bula leti hai

pintu is a 8 yr old kid , who also lives in the orphanage, aur k loves him a lot, usko bilkul apna chotta bhai maanti

to ghar mein koi hota nahi to mauka dekhkaar k bula leti hai pintu ko

pintu comes-

p-aur kaisi ho didi? kaisa hai naya ghar? i miss u so much !

k-wo sab chod tu, pehle to wish u a veryyyyyyyyyyy happy bday [bday means jab bhi orphanage walo ko pintu mila tha] { she kisses pinto on his cheeks}

p-thanku didi, aapke bina kuch bhi achcha nahi lagta!

k-dont worry , main kal hi yahan se nikal jaungi. kal aane wale hain mr richi rich, matlab madam ke so called khadus bete , aab uske lie achche intezaam maine aaj se hi kar rakhe hain, wo aega hamari mehmaan nawazi ke maaze lega, aur uske badle mujhe azaadi milegi, kyunki ussi pal mujhe nikal dega. main yahan se out aur hamesha tere paas!

p-to didi wo kal subah aane wala hai to aap to kal hi chutogi yahan se , par mera bday to aaj hai, hum kaise manaye, aapko to yahan se nikalne ki permission nahi

k-arre permission chahie bhi kisko, hum tera bday yahin manaenge. kabhi manaya hai bday itniiiiii badi jagah

p-nahi

k-to iss baar manaenge naa

p-paar kaise?

k-2 min mein aise

k jaake full volume mein music on kar deti hai, aur khane ka jo bhi saamaan hota hai kitchen mein sab le aati hai

abb dono k & pinto dance kar rahe hain, full on masti mein, volume full karke, full on dhamaal karke

kabhi sofe pe chad rahe hain, kabhi table pe, full djama chaukdi macha rahe hain

par udhar, s is entering the house main gates

& hears loud music

he wonders whts happening, whts going on

actually s ko kal subah aana tha, par uski ek meeting cancel ho gai to he took a prev flight bina kisi ko batae he wanted to come to surprise his mumma

abb as s enters the sonund of music gets louder & louder

he enters aur hall mein he is astonished thunder struck, baffled by the sight

uske saamne wohi shaitaan hamesha paange lene wali ladki hai tht too in a maid's uniform & with her thr is a small kid, aur dono pure ghar mein dhamachaukdi machaate hue mazze se masti se naach rahe hain

thodi der to he is dumb struck then he guesses ki she must be the gal who was taken to the home as the new maid, par ye sab ho kya raha hai, uske hi ghar mein wo bhi

s-[in stern manly voice] stop all this, now!

abb k & pintu r shocked to hear the voice

they turn & for a moment they freeze seein s thr

s walks & switches off the music

& looks at both intensely

k realises tht this tht same guy, jispe ande maare the

k-tum!!!!!!!! wht r u doing here?????? kya karne aaye ho yahan??????? chori karne?????? chor uchakke kahinke [kamar mein haath daalke]

s-[smirks] ye ghar...mera hai..mera sujal garewal ka...garewal family ka bada beta..garewal industries ka mallik aur veena garewal's son!

k ke eyes pop out in surprise , she realises ki yehi wo shaks hai jo yahan ka ultimate boss hai madam ka beta yehi hai

k-par..par..tum..aap..to kal...

s-kya mujhe apne ghar mein aane ke lie ijazat ki zaraurat hai?

k-[k zara baukhla gai hai]..naa...

s-nahi naa..to bass..hmm...gaurd jao jaake iss bachche ko chod aao

gaurd goes taking pintu

s walks to his room