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sanjh

@nisisanjh

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Posted: 16 years ago

#11

I really didnt expect this ....i was quite shocked to read .. tumne aisi concept sochi n wrote with such an ease ... brilliant ..simply brilliant..yea...love story shall start..rightooo..

I liked whn they realised n confessed that they were actually selfish n were trying to give bahanas to live ..they way they said ke they dont have kids or prtnr ..n without them their family wont face any big problm ..the practicality n reality that too whn they were abt to die ..it was suprb... n den whn their souls were talking ... U knw BHoomi, i was actually wondrng.. r they really dead? n den undrstood wat u tring to show ... grt effort ... keep writting this way ... love u...

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: nisisanjh

I really didnt expect this ....i was quite shocked to read .. tumne aisi concept sochi n wrote with such an ease ... brilliant ..simply brilliant..yea...love story shall start..rightooo..

I liked whn they realised n confessed that they were actually selfish n were trying to give bahanas to live ..they way they said ke they dont have kids or prtnr ..n without them their family wont face any big problm ..the practicality n reality that too whn they were abt to die ..it was suprb... n den whn their souls were talking ... U knw BHoomi, i was actually wondrng.. r they really dead? n den undrstood wat u tring to show ... grt effort ... keep writting this way ... love u...

Hi Sara dear.... So u didnt expect this na... it shocked u.. and u were wonderign yeh Bhoomi ne aisa concept kyun socha....😉... luv u for makign me feel that it worked... actually eveyrtime i read someone sayign reality mey kuch aur hota hai.. why happy endings always.. i alwyas felt that readers shoudl have a sense of hope if they r reading my story.. as a reader even i want ti.. i may nto be able to take if everythign is destroyed int he end... somewhere u want happiness to see in the story.. with such a mindset i felt how can i write a story with ending where the couple die.... and from here the story conceptualised ...

U liked that part feels great... sometiems we cna give the silliest reason to say.ab nahi..for anything.. not only death fro any thing whcih we cant agree .. and that human.. it takes time to say and feel the reality...and most of the people say the right things in the most serious situations when they were least expected to... people becoem strogn at tiems which they never imagined to... Yup the souls talking. that how I wanted the title banner in negative a bit ghost feeling😉.. am doubly happy that u liked it so much dear... i was pretty nervous with this story.. luv u lots dear.... u have encouraged me so much.... so muhc.. these stories r urs as mcuh mine..

Bhoomi

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Daebak

@Daebak

Trailblazer

+ 7

Posted: 16 years ago

#13

Hey omggg.........This story was like unbelievable........I read it 2-3 times over ki maine kuch ulta to nahi padha........They died😭 and only they died.......God is not soo mean that they were the only unselfish ones praying for others and god saved everyone but them !!

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: togepe30
Hey omggg.........This story was like unbelievable........I read it 2-3 times over ki maine kuch ulta to nahi padha........They died😭 and only they died.......God is not soo mean that they were the only unselfish ones praying for others and god saved everyone but them !!

HI Vandu, oooh u were said reading that they died.. and feelign How GOd can be like this..why they were the only who prayed for others..n all... actually this story is mroe into the fact that when we r alive and the want inside us for certain things is dead how death also doesnt seem big but the life which we lived with that dead feelign inside is what makes us feel really bad...

Hey ya they died and its weird why only they and one more person..but its many times seen in reality the most harmless peole tend to looss things they didnt deserve to... may be God plans things in a differnt way na... hope the story didnt bug u done dear... luv u ...tc

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@spln

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+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#15

hey bhoomi um here at long last to leave my comments....loved the concept of the story hun....n u have this wonderful simplicity in ur writing it portrays even the best n hardest of messages in the simplest yet obvious ways....it was a gret piece, best part, it came in a go dint have to wait for the updates...looking forward to whatever u treat us with next!!!

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: spln
hey bhoomi um here at long last to leave my comments....loved the concept of the story hun....n u have this wonderful simplicity in ur writing it portrays even the best n hardest of messages in the simplest yet obvious ways....it was a gret piece, best part, it came in a go dint have to wait for the updates...looking forward to whatever u treat us with next!!!

Hi Naseem....

So at last u read and so nice to know U liked teh concept.. actually the concept was somethign in mind mind and wanted to show it throguh this story without makign it very dull or sobbing types.. soemthign whcih shoudlnt make u cry btu smile and wonder... and think abt it...

So glad to get a thought over on it by u... that the simplicity with wich i write (and thats as i find it the easiest way to write😆) .. So u enjoyed reading as it came in a go and didnt have to wait... oh ho.. I have written dozen's of short stories and with the paitenc level in me.. u will find my updates to be really qucik...😉..

Naseen u r lookign forward to whatever I treat (u think its such fun ) heheheh or torture u with more.. lets see when my grey brain cells start workign on some thing else...

tc... luv u

Bhomi

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Kritika

@rajeevskitu

Explorer

Posted: 16 years ago

#17

😭........... bhoomi!!!!!!! u really killed them?? ...........naaaaaahhhhhhiiiiiii!! now i understand y u said i won't read ny of ur stories anymore😕......... comeon now!! first of all there r many depressing things in the whole world......... do u have to kills the main leads here also😭😡.......

but i liked the last statement (how much ever i tried to ignore it i cudn't😆)........ " Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." ........ i think this is absolutely rite though.......

btw, i won't stop reading ur ff's e1 if u give heartattacks like these u see😉 ........ so now that it is clear that i'll read ur ff's u better take care of the following things-----

1) no killings🤢

2) no "fire" accidents😛

3) no saas-bahu khichdi😆 .........

see wot "demanding" n "faithful" reders u have😆😉............

just kidding......

though i was a little sad that they died, mayb it was necessary for the msg u gave😕 ...... i hope they RIP🥱 ........

chalo then will read raaj kumar ayan atleast now😆 (don't hit me now!!😕 )

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@spln

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 16 years ago

#18

bhoomi theres something about the banner i wanted to ask hun..have u heard of the artist called DIWAN MANNA???just wondering...teme if u have 😃

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: rajeevskitu
😭........... bhoomi!!!!!!! u really killed them?? ...........naaaaaahhhhhhiiiiiii!! now i understand y u said i won't read ny of ur stories anymore😕......... comeon now!! first of all there r many depressing things in the whole world......... do u have to kills the main leads here also😭😡.......

but i liked the last statement (how much ever i tried to ignore it i cudn't😆)........ " Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." ........ i think this is absolutely rite though.......

btw, i won't stop reading ur ff's e1 if u give heartattacks like these u see😉 ........ so now that it is clear that i'll read ur ff's u better take care of the following things-----

1) no killings🤢

2) no "fire" accidents😛

3) no saas-bahu khichdi😆 .........

see wot "demanding" n "faithful" reders u have😆😉............

just kidding......

though i was a little sad that they died, mayb it was necessary for the msg u gave😕 ...... i hope they RIP🥱 ........

chalo then will read raaj kumar ayan atleast now😆 (don't hit me now!!😕 )

Hi Kitu dear.... so finally u read this one... yup I am also similar to U.. I usually dont like any ending which doesnt give some hope to the readers.. a depressed soul makes u wonder why did u read it.. anyways.. this was something i tried and felt the end line will not make anyone loose hope but hope for soemthing ....

ya th eline line and the whole story was based on it.. as i already have commented replyign to few.. that the whole thing of living without anything to live for.. makes u wonder if thats enough.. am so glad Kittu that u liked the last line.. usually these r the jinx of the story which i have continued writing espcially in my short stories..

hey u have putforward some guidlines for me.. while writing. ahhah waise my brian doesnt work.. my heart works and heart doesnt listen to anyone but the thoughts which erupt so hope my heart follows ur heart.. so the story which will be comign next willl be as u want.. may be.. ahha.. waise u didnt mention little more romance.. i mean in this story there was actually no romance.. and I was thinking whos gone read it ..?? hopefully i will try to make my next short story different n more itnerestign than this one..but hopefully not the similar lines so u chill.. no saas bahu i have already written one on saas bahu fight a cut eon though...lol..

Rajkumar aryan.. areey read karlena.. i write that one in a day .. looooooooong back..gosh its a bit borign in the start i warn u....😆if u feel sleepy give me the credit.. 😃..

tc..catch u soon..

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 16 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: spln
bhoomi theres something about the banner i wanted to ask hun..have u heard of the artist called DIWAN MANNA???just wondering...teme if u have 😃

Hi Naseem,

Diwan Manna???? Nope.. i havnt.. but after hearing it from u I better know it.. do tell me haan....😃

to tell.. about this whole banner making.. thsi is the second banner i made.. when i wanted a banner for the first time for Zindagi - ek safar.. i had soem great snaps and lines to merge.. i wrote in the help for banner in this section and so many banners were made while i was the first one askign and thanked them for uputtign up the link for banners needed... they didnt.help my query..... My story was finished in 15 days..and i got very ticked.. then i learnt little photoshop and made my first Banner for 'Together by chance'.. and this one..is the second..

do tell me who this Diwan Manna is?

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