SS: The Suhaag Raat of Broken Dreams (An apology and a new start p.43)

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Sarcy

@Sarcy

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 9 years ago

#191

A sinking feeling of betrayal caught in his throat. How could she let Zorawar touch that aanchal. 🤣

Indravadhan is the cutest jealous king around!

The way he was trying to convince Sona (read, Himself 😉) of his actions was just hilarious! I like how Gayatri's presence affects him more than Sona's absence now. Quite a change from where we started. Zorawar is very easy to like and I would like to see more substance to his character (which I am sure you do have in mind ahead), because right now, it is only his presence that is affecting Indravadhan but it would be good to see Zorawar doing things. And, I have a feeling that conversations between Indravadhan and Zorawar would be quite interesting to read! 😉

P.S: I absolutely agree with the author's note. The amount of trouble that writers go through to get something for their readers is not appreciated by many, I feel. The sad thing is, there aren't enough comments even when writers are as open to criticism as they are to praise. While I loved this show from Day 1, I joined this forum especially to write! However, the response wasn't very heartening so I am not inclined to write anymore. Hence, I can totally understand what you feel!

--Edited--

Congratulations on winning SS of the week! Totally well deserved! 👍🏼

Edited by -Sarcy- - 9 years ago

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BelleFilleDD

@BelleFilleDD

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Posted: 9 years ago

#192

Omg Rana is sooo jealous😆 he is not paying any attention to what his associates were telling him about Ameerkot . He is only seeing red that Gayatri is freely roaming with Zora and her aanchal caught in a plant was removed by him . Zora following her like a puppy and its irritating the hell out of Rana . Best part was how Rana wanted to be a part of their conversation but Gayatri's gestures made it clear that he was not invited . Even Gayatri is fond of kittens like him but he never knew that but Zora knows this detail about his wife . To add to the last misery his doubts got confirmed by Zora's mother that he did like Gayatri but due to Kundli rumor she could not agree with his wish . Zora and Gayatri admitting female college students👏 and I also loved Gayatri declining Rana to go with him on horse ride😉 as she was busy with Zora😆

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Dedoo

@Dedoo

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#193

Aww I love this jealous ranaji..n also strong hot headed gayatri..is ranaji falling in love with gayatri..thanks for taking out time to write this awesome story..I always wait for weekends for new updates..

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Shailaja

@shailusri1983

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#194

The way you bring out the finer nuances in Raga's relationship is really wonderful. There are many occasions where I have felt your take on the events in the show and the characters was better than the actual show. Ranaji is suffering the pangs of a hopeless jealousy. He has burnt all his chances with Gayatri by his initial behavior after marriage. Now he actually wants to know her better and spend more time with her but she is not ready to give him another chance to toy with and break her heart.

Don't give up writing for the few who read and don't respond. Write for the many like me who love reading your work. I am also writing a FF here and know how it feels when you get very few responses or likes despite all the hard work you put up. But don't let that deter your creativity.

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abba12

@abba12

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 9 years ago

#195

How could she let zora touch her aanchal 😆 and how zora knows more of her childhood cute stories .. Ahahhh !! Rana g is so very jealous and with time possessive 😎

And he didn't tell his cat's name :-P

Gayatri seems to know what rana g will ask and she had her servant answer all his questions ..

So zora too liked gayatri .. N what I don't want is zora turning negative .. I like his character :-P

And thanks for adding date

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-Lehar-

@-Lehar-

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#196

Poor ranaji Gayatri giving him tough time...ranaji was surely jealous with gayatri and zora...so zorawn had feelings for gayatri but his mother didn't approved because of gayatri unlucky tag...

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Anotherstar

@Anotherstar

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#197

loved the part ranaji is so jealous

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softy

@softy

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#198

very nice update dear

it's very entertaining to see ranaji healous, he deserves that after all

like gayatri's attitude

I hope we could see same story in serial also

looking forward for the next update

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kdsubs

@kdsubs

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#199

Congratulations Mary! Well deserved recommendation / recognition in the NL.

Irreverent Gayatri and an immature Rana. Hmm. Interesting role reversal. I like the core of strength in this Gayatri. Many-a-time the sudden irreverence and feistiness hides a deep hurt. And Gayatri has reason enough to hurt. Looking forward to how you uncover the layers.

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Tia

@tes_v1

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 9 years ago

#200

Your updates never fail to make me laugh! And as long as they are, they always fail to be long enough for me. 😛 But kudos to you for all the efforts you put in. Usually, we have stories written from the perspective of the lady than the man, and this one is different. Not that I am complaining but would it be possible to ask, for once, to want to see Gayatri's feelings? Like Gayatri being affected by something that Indravadhan does - in a positive way, of course? It would be a novel thing in this story. 😃

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