My heartbeat - epilogue pg68 - 01/03 - Page 45

Originally posted by: chahat4u

Oh wow, finally the truth is out. I love the way you show emotions and their intensity.Kalpi's anger and hurt, Raghav's repentance and guilt, care for Kalpi everything. But most importantly the love between them which they haven't voiced out yet. It's become so interesting now.😃

Originally posted by: priya_remix

Oh fuzzz!!!!Thank you for bringing this face off sooner!!!!

Loved that Raghav finally confronted Neetu and Neetu was under the impression that Raghav knew the baby was his and Kalpi's when he told her he knew the truth!!!!

Whereas he was talking about the baby not being his and Pakhi's!

Poor Kalpi!!! She has been carrying her own child and has yet not been aware of it!!!

What a feeling that must be? She will go through an emotional storm when she comes to know of the truth! Though she will be glad but the fact that all this while she was thinking it was Pakhi's baby but when she will know it is hers and Raghav's what will happen to her?

Will it be too much for her to handle and what about Raghav? He will be so guilty for doubting her!!!

OMG fuzzz you always evoke these strange emotions that are so complex in nature!!!! Waiting for you to complete the update!

Originally posted by: GUYCAN

Angel please forgive me for what I'm about to do 😆😆...My humble apologies You know your an amazing, talented , awesome writer 😉😉

For some reasons I'm not able to connect with the last 3 chapters of this FF dunno if I'm going cookoo BUT I feel the storyline is been rushed not fully explain ...the thoughts & emotions of each characters ...I know you had to change the original storyline ...For some reasons ...After reading I wasn't satisfied I felt something is missing ...Ahhh I'm not able to fully explain ...After reading all your FF's I don't feel this is your style 😳😳...Once again not to offend you in any way ...

Originally posted by: angelpureness

Don't apologise. This because I never got to give the build up towards this in earlier chapters. I had wanted to delve in their feelings for each other before they married. Where she would have just been a surrogate and Pakhi would have been in the picture. Nobody would have found out what Neetu did.

After giving birth, Kalpi would have found out first, she would leave. Ragav has a battle within his wife and kid vs Kalpi. He does not let Kamla maa go coz then he has hope she will come back... He looks out for her without her knowing.

Pakhi would have her own battle, she thought a child would bring Ragav back to her, but that does not happen. I think the child will be two hen everyone old have found out that she isn't Ragav's and Kalpi's. Ragav and Pakhi divorce, she stays for her child, who is her life. She moves on in life.

Then I was gonna bring in some office scenes, he hires her by having someone else front as the boss. ... This was the gist of my plot.

Originally posted by: angelpureness

@guycan.

You didn't offend me. I prefer honest feedback over sugar coated feedback. It is only then that I can improve.