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maarushkaa

@maarushkaa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: bricka.tiwari
nice dear... I luvd it... Update plzzz nxt chappy soon maru

tysm 😳😳

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maarushkaa

@maarushkaa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: ban18
Raghav's mom wants to stay in an indian house. My house door is open for them. I won't mind serving chai-nashta to her hot-hot son.😎
Raghav at kalpana's place, high-fun drama is waiting for the readers.😉 Raghav gonna turn his nose up at everything and kalpi gonna punch prem in the nose😆 waise i liked his opinion regarding his mom nd sister's drama queen nature.😆
And i like the title-the day you came.but i want a more charming one.😉

hahahah ..rishu ...Agar Kalpi ki baat na hoti toh tere ghar pe pohchne se pehle main uss hot-hot son ko apne ghar pe leke aati ..u see story meri hai toh mujhe kuch faayda toh hona chahiye na !! 😉😉

Accha chal thik hai ...hot-hot son part 2 aka Sammy ko tere ghar pe bhej dungi ...chalega ??

But hot-hot son part 1 is mine uspe dore daalne ki koshish bhi na kariyo 😆😆

high-fun drama ?? This warning's exclusively for u ...dont keep high expectations atleast with this regard. Fun post ke baap ke saamne hum kuch nahi !! 😉

hmmm ..i am yet surfing my brain for an apt & catchy title 😃

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maarushkaa

@maarushkaa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: vyshuu..
Resss

Unres..
Heyylooo mariee..
Seems lyk u r in full form huh.. 😉
Raghav n kalpi r gonna stay under the same roof.. den it ll be superrr intrestng to read..!! Nyc n diifrnt concept.. im already lykng it.. 😃 and dnt wry its jus intruductn ryt.. so its gud dat u gave a detail of all the characters.. hwver frm next on it ll be more on ragna nlyyy naa.. 😉 and abt rohish.. I guess RRVMI's effect dat u cant imagine pakhya in dat char.. 😆 and as always kalpi-rohish bondng s good.. so dis tym will raghav ll knw dat rohish is her brother lol 😆 jus kiddng..
So the last part.. dey bumped into each other..? 😛 then toh fytng shuru hojayega.. im excited to read more.. hw ragna ll be able to bear each other under the same roof..?! Hw dey ll cum closer.. and anyways raghav ll be thankng her mom later fr makng him stay in a home instead of hotel.. then he ll lykng mumbai too.. 😆
And title.. the day u came.. dat sounds good.. 😊 😉

full form ??

ragna under the same roof ..yup i wud try my best to make it interesting !!

hAahaah..iddhar bhi i show that Raghav doesnt know Rohish ..then the readers are sure to doubt my originality. Dont u worry ...not even a single scene would be a repeat from RRVSMI ...its an all new ragna with different incidents happening i their lives ...uss baat ki kami kaha hai mere khuraafati dimaag mein ?😆😆

Raghav thanking his mom ...yeah i did make a note of it vashu. I didnt have it in ma mind but it sounds gr8. & mumbai se pyaar toh main usko karvaake rahungi ...how dare he come to my city & speak ill about it ??😆😆

title ..i am yet in my thinking mode

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maarushkaa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: Cinderella81
Awesome shot Maruskhaa kya tum koi boring event mein thi jab yeh dhamakedaar shot likha waiting for next shot.
I liked the title " the day u come"

lol ..event toh nahi ...but yes ..main bohuuuttt zyyaaaddaaa bored thi when this story came to my mind & i strted penning it down 😃😃

Ty for the title review ! Shall keep ur opinion in mind

Edited by mariee - 11 years ago