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..Amrita..

@..Amrita..

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

awesome...awesome...awesome...brilliantly written...viren's too caring loving him...finally they got theit life...their soul their zaara...lovely & superb update...was missing u aly...

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Maridda

@Maridda

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

Hey amazing work. Loved the concept, the way you portrayed their emotions and the new side of Jeevika. Poor Viren and the Vadheras. The line "he brought the life of theirs to the worlds of his" was so beautiful. The OS had a beautiful ending and the name Zaara, it's just so beautiful. I'm sorry I keep saying loved and beautiful over and over but it really is.
Marissa :)

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Maridda

@Maridda

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

Also could you please pm your index and future works. Would love to read them!
Marissa :)

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Mehak

@MehakGera

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

ossm super ossm
just cant believe it ... it was so adorable update...just lovedcit so much
i am in love with dis os
it is actually sumthing out of d world

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karpagam rajendran

@Kryanian08

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

I simply loved it!!!! Awesome work yaar!!!! :))

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Amii

@Amii90

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

Okay finally I have gotten myself to sit down and comment on long due posts of yours!!!

One thing I have noticed with your work is its simplicity which works like a gem and intrigues the reader such like one myself! In this OS for instance, the plot is something we have read or seen on tv million times but every person brings their own touch to it and you did just that! Descriptive narration, detailed facts, realistic dialogues - all of this makes it a fresh read!!!! Brilliantly executed and special mention to the last half of the OS- Superb! The way you articulated the emotions of Jeevika scared being a "new" mother and then of both Viren and Jeevika overwhelmed with newly parental title was just flawless!!!

Superb work as always and apologies for late replies but honestly I don't go on the forum as much thus miss such good posts but now I will be keeping tabs of it! :)

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Srinanti Bhattacharya

@srinuvirika

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

this is amazing!! omg it was funny, kinda sad at the end, and it had every type of emotions in this! loved it!!

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Charu

@-Charu-

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

LOOK WHOSE BACK?

ITS ALY!

WOAAA!

YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW HOW HAPPY I'M READING THIS THE FIRST THING IN THE MORNING!
THIS OS GAVE A PERFECT START TO MY DAY...

THANKUU!

AND I LOVE YOU FOR THAT! ❤️

OKAY SO COMING BACK!

FIRST OF ALL THE NAME!

ZAARA!

OMG!~

THE NAME IS WAY TOOO PERFECT!

BEAUTIFUL SELECTION...

MY POOR VIREN! GOING THROUGH SO SO SO MUCH...

SHE'S EVEN PULLING HIS HAIR! 🤣🤣

BUT THAT'S ALRIGHT COZ JEEVIKA IS GIVING HIM THE BIGGEST GIFT! "HE'LL BE A DAD"

LOVED THE WAY JEEVIKA WAS SETTING HER MIND TO SCOLD HIM AND HE IS NOT BOTHERED BY THE LANGUAGE SHE SPEAKS BCOZ ITS HIS HABIT NOW! 🤣
AND VIRMAN CHECKING ON HER THAT "VOLCANO" EXPOLDED OR NOT!

BEAUTIFUL!

THIS WAS THE BEST PART!

NOW COMES THE CONTRACTION PART!

POOR JEEVIKA IS GOING THROUGH SOO MUCH PAIN!

AWWW MY BABY 😭

I LOVED THE PART IN WHICH VIREN WAS GUILTY FOR NOT BEING THERE FOR HER WHEN SHE NEEDED AND i LOVED THE DIALOGUE THE MOST WAS:

"VIRENJI, I NEED YOUUU"

AWWW

BEYOND BEAUTIFUL!

AND WHEN SHE SPOKE "I never want to sleep with you again" BELIEVE ME THIS WAS A CHERRY ON THE TOP!

HAHAHA I COULD REALLY IMAGINE VIREN'S STATE OF EXPRESSIONS 🤣

I LOVED THE WAY, VIREN WAS ALL CALM AND COMPOSED AND WAS ACTING PRACTICALLY THAN GOING HYPER! THIS MAN HAS THE CHARMS TO TURN ANYONE ON!!

😉

THIS WAS JUST ADORABLE!!!!!!

INFRONT OF THE DOCTOR, JEEVIKA SHOWING HERSELF CALM BUT AFTER SHE TOOK AN EXIT SHE IS DANGEROUS DUDE! HAHAHA SHE IS BUGGING HER LOVELY VIREN JI EVEN IF IT MENT PULLING HIS HAIR! 🤣

FABULOUS WAS VIREN AND ZAARA'S IMMEDIATE BOND THAT HE IS TALKING TO HER AS IF SHE'LL UNDERSTAND.,... AWWW

AND THAT SHORT YET ROMANTIC KISS WAS SUPERB!

YOU'RE THE BEST YOU SHOULD KNOW THAT!

👍🏼 KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! 👏

I LOVE YOU!❤️