An untold lie- Viren and Jeevika (updated 1/4pg10) - Page 3

Originally posted by: Virika-luv

Awesome update.

Loved it so much,im just speechless.
Such beautifully written.
Thanx 4 d pm

Your welcome for the pm. Glad you liked it. I still don't know if speechless is a good thing or bad. Thanks for liking the style it was written.

Originally posted by: EHMMBH-lover

And you say you weren't sure about posting this? Its amazing! Yes, its very different from our original Virika but its nice to see a different side of them. I got a very hollywood feel while reading it but it was really nice to imagine a working Jeevika who has a lot more to say than the ehmmbh one. I would want to know the reason soon btw. It was fab!👍🏼

I was suppose to put a disclaimer up but I forgot to way that it is this Viren and Jeevika and unlike the ones in the show. Maybe traits will come out but there different just with the same name. It was just very different that putting it up I wasn't too confident.

You and Neha have mentioned a Hollywood theme. But not sure how to take that. I always have Jeevika working if possible. She's been a teacher in one SS like in the show. However this time it was different plus she speaks up for herself.

OMG..

awesome one

Originally posted by: Virika11

How can you say it was terrible???

It was just awesome ... I loved it so much

Well done

I thought and think the concept is not that great. Hence why I used the eyes terrible. Glad that you liked this very different Viren and Jeevika.

Originally posted by: ktloversera

First of all. I don't think it is terribly written.

Yes! I do feel , it is something totally opposite the plot and characters but still it turned out to be good.

I cannot imagine a drunk Viren being rude to jeevika nor can i imagine jeevika being married before.

This is because the charachter Viren and Jeevika can never be like this.Somewhat it is their speciality.

Coming to the story.

Quite interesting but tbh i got confused in the end.

I really think you should continue and reveal about her past so that i can clear my doubts.

Brilliantly penned .

I should have a disclaimer nay edit or put it on the next part. As this Viren and Jeevika and different from the original from the show in all respects.
I think I have got Viren or other character in anything I write. Don't know what it is with alcohol but...

I intend to finish it off. The ending was a dissuasion that leads them falling to their instincts. Yet for one they thought it was forgiveness for the other it was them not fighting that impulse. Which is why the morning showed different emotions.

Originally posted by: aasma1

wooow this is a different story, i like it plz continue and pm me.. xxx

Originally posted by: aa_mnhs

I really like the plot, and found the characterisation very interesting. Lets see how the story moves and im pretty sure you'll keep us gripped :) please do update soon...
Love
Sarah

Originally posted by: vishwa94

very well-written...amazing

very different concept...found it interesting

Originally posted by: divyabhallax

are you going to continue seen as though you have let it on a cliffhanger