The attack - OS (part 5-pg 15 18/2/13)

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Kryan4ever

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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

WOW that is acctually amazing !

loved the last bit , hunt you down and kill you !

LOVE VIREN !!

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HayatM

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Posted: 12 years ago

#42

Wow! Thanks for continuing and for the pm!:)

Amazing update! Love the part where virat feltthat viren was picking up the fight to
feel the physical pain. Poor viren feel helpless. Love how u describe each situation. Could imagine it in my head.

Do continue:) woule love to read morw

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--Iqra--

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Brilliant! Loved the update! Thanks for the PM!

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Aashima

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Posted: 12 years ago

#44

aww it's really lovely :)

Thanks for the pm and how dare i could ignore this os :)

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vishwa patel

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Posted: 12 years ago

#45

just amazing!! loved it!!

loved hw u described viren's pain n helplessness!!

thanx for pm

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..Amrita..

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Posted: 12 years ago

#46

you potrayed viren's emotions very well & finally viren found that stupid

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Surbhi Jain

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Posted: 12 years ago

#47

its a good story
i liked it
continue soon
pm me plz
😊 😊 😊
👏 👏 👏

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shine123

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Posted: 12 years ago

#48

amazing update...

Viren's frustration for not being able to do anything

virat's caring attitude and the special room ...nicely written

then jeevika moving on and Viren and manvi with her ...

then Viren's anger seeing the attacker ...was so natural ...

Thnx 4 d pm...:)

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urmil

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Posted: 12 years ago

#49

firstly i would like to thank u for continuing this os...u have brilliantally potrayed viren's helplessness and his anger...keep on updating it...thnx for pm

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-Pj-

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Posted: 12 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: nobo

First of all, am glad you continue it as This story was promising :)
Viren's frustration...the fact that he himself is a Lawyer who had taught people not to take law in Their hands just frustrates him further. Neither can he punish him himself nor Is able to do so by law...
& to top that Jeevika's insecurities haunting him ...wonderfully penned

Jeevika's moving on, Manvi & Viren being there for her, Virat's caring attitude, bros's spl room...minute but meaningful things & awesomely described
& finally the anger to see the culprit roaming freely while their lives changed upside down...
Beautiful update ...

Lolz I almost typed Splendid in the end & then was like yeah the girl is ryt...ROFL

Splendid, dude I don't even say that.
Thanks Priya for appreciating this story and thinking it has some promise to it. I know I said I wasn't going to continue it but in the end I came up with something to extend it.

I'm glad you liked the different things in this update. I guess this one was more about Viren dealing with it. His legal frustrations but also that helplessness of not being able to do what he promised and wished.

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