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Posted: 13 years ago
#71
All I have to say to you, your writing skills and your story is...PERFECTION. 😳

I usually don't have the patience to go through most FFs (my laziness brings out the worst of me) but guess what?! I read the whole thing in a single go...and...I'M CRAVING FOR MORE!!! 😳 I'm going to read it a second time to pass the wait time but DUDE, YOU'RE BRILLIANT!!!! 👍🏼

Absolutely LOVED the characters and the depth in every relationship!!! THIS is the Viren and Jeevika (especially Jeevika) that I'm waiting to see on-screen as well...it felt like you fulfilled my wishes pertaining to the show while reading. 😛 The assertive, aggressive, no-nonsense Jeevika who shuts everyone out of her life (except dear sister, of course) to take care of Manvi...the frustrated, confused, helpless Viren who loves his wife immensely but can't take care of her...and of course, their intriguing equation. All the parts were simply AMAZING, but a special shout out to the last 2 parts...my heart was in my mouth while reading them. I was picturing it all happening...Virika's argument, Jeevika staring at the pool of blood, Virat telling Manvi she has to be okay for her Di...so poignant!

Sorry for being so repetitive...but DUDE, YOU'RE BRILLIANT!!!! 😳 LOVED every sentence of it!!! I'd totally send this to Sid M and the crew with a special note..."Dear EHM crew, we want to see this. Please and thank you!! Love, your selfish fans. 😛"

Can't believe that the next part is the last part 😔 Sincerely hope that the surprise is a 2000000 part extension to this 😛 Thank you SO much for sending me the link...would have missed out on such a beautiful piece of work! Can't wait for the next part!!! <3
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Posted: 13 years ago
#72

Well guys this is the final part,, I've kept it short and sweet, (well not that sweet.) I will not ramble on now as I have made a comment at the end. ENJOY :D

Part Seven

As the boys headed back to Maanvi's room, Viren wondered how he would tell Jeevika about Maanvi's state. As he peered into her room he saw that Jeevika sitting by her side, holding her hand as she lay unconscious. How could he talk to her alone and let her know? This wasn't the time to hiding the facts.

Quietly they walked in, Jeevika looked up and noticed that both their eyes were red and that Virat seemed to be hiding away from her. As she looked at Viren, he lightly smiled at her. He wanted to tell her the truth, but how?

Jeevika rose, kissing her baby on the forehead. She walked over to Viren, looked in straight in the eye and asked him, what he knew. Unable to hide this any longer, Viren narrated the doctor's conclusions.

Jeevika felt weak and held on to the bed for support. Viren quickly grabbed her by the shoulders, as he was worried she might collapse. Adamant that there was something they could do, she argued with the boys about the next step in treatment. She couldn't give up, not now, not ever.

Without anyone noticing, Maanvi had woken up; a light cough startled them all. Dropping their conversation, they focused all their attention on her. As she looked up, she saw the people who meant the world to her. She knew about her state, even without them telling her.

She took Jeevika's hand "Di, it's fine." trying to hold back her tears Jeevika tried reassuring Maanvi.

"No Maanu, I'll do something, we will find a way, we have come too far to give up now. I'll give you my kidney, hell I'll give you my entire life. I'm..."

Slowly Maanvi reached out for Jeevika's hand, Maanvi was taking long deep breaths, and in a quiet voice she spoke

"Di, enough. I know that you will fight the world for me and will happily sacrifice everything, but we can't beat this." Jeevika crawled into bed with Maanvi,

"It's ok, it really is. I don't want you to give me your kidney," she tapped Jeevika hands "listen Di. I love you and will love you until time ends, but this is it. We fought, you fought but now it's over, and I want to spend this time with the ones that I love. You, Virat and Jiju.

Jiju?" she whispered, Viren stepped forward and took her hand and gazed at both his wife and sister-in-law in the bed.

"Jiju, you know you are the best Jiju right, and the perfect match for my sister. I know I affected your marriage – I guess that is the understatement of the year, but you never gave up. In your marriage and in Di..." She took both their hands and joined them together.

"Take care of her will you." With those short sweet words, Viren couldn't hold back his tears anymore, they streamed down his cheek. He crouched down beside the bed and hugged them. Virat stood there, in the sidelines watching his family break down as they were losing Maanvi.

In a slow deep breath Maanvi signalled Virat, "Virat?? Did you know that you were my partner? In every context of the word, I only wished that it didn't have to end here. You have ... been there for everything. Just remember to have to fun, I've turned you into someone who is too serious- laugh, have fun and enjoy yourself." As he bent down to kiss her, she murmured I love you. He finally heard those words, he always knew she felt the same and now neither of them had any regrets.

She turned and looked at her sister, who was laying beside her in her bed. She brushed her fingers across her face, "Di, just remember that you once had a sister, who loved you more than she loved herself. And never think you did not do enough, you left no stone unturned for me."

As she looked at them all she remembered all the moments that she shared. The flashbacks of her life seem to run before her eyes. She remembered the times she cried on the shoulders of her Jiju and the memories of teasing him about her Di.

She remembered her first meeting and the moment she realised that she was in love with Virat. She laughed at the memories of their fights and make-ups. She wished she had become his bride and borne his children.

Finally and never lastly, she remembered all the moments she shared with her Di. From childhood to today, from the fights to the hugs, from Ganga ghat to her wedding day. She had always found heaven in her sister's arms, and she felt lucky- lucky to die in the arms of her saviour.

Well guys that is the end of this SS. I hope you all have enjoyed it and will not kill me for the ending. It was not my intention for Maanvi to die when I started it but it ended up this way. I want to thank you for taking the time to read my story and for all your comments. They have truly encouraged me to write more for this story, just because of all your appreciation. Hopefully, if I ever get creative again, I will write an OS or possibly another SS. I'll Pm you all, and will comment greatly on each of your final comments- that is only if you wish to comment.

Anyway guys I said I had a surprise for you all, with is in my following post.

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Posted: 13 years ago
#73
My surprise to you all is three Vms. I had hoped to base them around my SS, but as we have not had such scenes it was a tad difficult. ENJOY

1. Jeevika- In her struggle to keeping her relations with both Viren and Maanvi and how she like all of us are not all perfect.

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fcwBPQweG4c&feature=plcp[/YOUTUBE]

2. Maanvi and Jeevika - the good and not so good moments

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v62TUz-i8Gg&feature=youtu.be[/YOUTUBE]


3. Maanvi Jeevika Viren- Their love and where their priorities lies.

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T7nnzNRRQY0&feature=youtu.be[/YOUTUBE]

Edited by -Pj- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#74
'wish granted?? :o "
i wish maine kuch aur maanga hota..🤣

thanks pooja

Res. for comment... i'll be back ;)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#75

absolutely brilliant one of the best stories i have read superb

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Posted: 13 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

absolutely brilliant one of the best stories i have read superb


Thank you so much, that you took the time and read my story. I am glad that you enjoyed the read 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#77
I love you and will love you until time ends, but this is it. We fought, you fought but now it's over, and I want to spend this time with the ones that I love.

this is sheer beauty...if i ever get to see this on screen i'll cry buckets u know...
the ending was something i dream for ehm though...it'll make the show an unforgettable experience...
the SS was a piece of brilliance...loved it to the core.

n thanx a looot for the vm's .. JM vm's are a rarity.. loved 'em😛
Edited by ita_04 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#78
Wow! Honestly I don't know what to say! I must tell you that I love what you have done with Viren and Virat's character in your short story, I loved Viren's depth and I could palpate Virat's pain and agony. I wish oh how I wish that the writers of the show could do justice to these characters like you do!
Take a bow! Thank you for letting us enjoy your writing and I hope that you continue 😊

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Posted: 13 years ago
#79
Bravo...brilliant 👏 I loved the line 'J crawled into bed' reminds me of the kuch kuch hota hain scene. I'm glad you ended it with M dying but would have liked to see J die too...but super writing...liked the balance and also a sensible Viren unlike the current one :) pls keep writing...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: ita_04

I love you and will love you until time ends, but this is it. We fought, you fought but now it's over, and I want to spend this time with the ones that I love.

this is sheer beauty...if i ever get to see this on screen i'll cry buckets u know...
the ending was something i dream for ehm though...it'll make the show an unforgettable experience...
the SS was a piece of brilliance...loved it to the core.

n thanx a looot for the vm's .. JM vm's are a rarity.. loved 'em😛


Thanks so much for reading the SS and loving it to the core. 😛 If we do ever see anything like this, I'm sure I will be crying with you. Could just imagine Nia and Krystle now. Glad you enjoyed the Vms 😊

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