Shraman ff- Destined thread 3 chapter 28 updated @page 17 (26/11/17) - Page 6

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Posted: 8 years ago
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beautifully penned...
awesome...
loved it...
thanx for pm...😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi Sanjh ..
Hope u r doing fine ..
Congo for a new thread & thanku for giving such a rocking update .. I just love "DESTINED"

kuch pyaar kuch takraar .. 😉
Finally she knows the reality of her friend Aditya;he's a sick pervert ..
Its definite for Sumo to panic with the idea of accident .. Can't bear the same pain twice ..

Shravan was bouncing that she was fully covered .. So possessive , protective hubby 👏😆

Aditya is a lunatic really ..

Is Shravan shot or Is Sumo shot ? 😲

Update soon .. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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What just happened? That was such a cliffhanger! But, I think I did guess right. Let that be.
"You still care for me?"
The line was so touching.

An interesting update. Can't wait for the next.

Nuts
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Next update kab milega...waiting..waiting 😃 😊
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hello sanjh ji hum aapko ye avgat karane aaye Hai ki ye Jo *destined* naamk sundar katha Hai Wo aapke he dwara rachit Hai...ek saptaah se bhi adhik samay ho gya Hai aapne is kahta ka aage kaa adhyaay prastut Nahi kiya Hai...kripya kar aage ke bhag prastut karne me or wilanb naa kare...hum sabhi pathak vyakul Hai aapki katha ke pathan hetu...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Intaha ho gai, intazaar ki
Aai na kuchh khabar, tere update ki
we are waiting 😉



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Posted: 8 years ago
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Okay so I know that I am terribly late, won't even dare to apologise for the delay. Straight to business here.
This chapter clearly has to my favourite one ranking only after the confession part, this was a confession of sorts as well..Sumo's confession to herself that there's only one guy she might ever love and be concerned about.

I'm so relieved that she finally has learnt the truth of Aditya's character.

Shravan bouncing looking at her attire was cute.

But Yeh kya. ..Goli chal gayi dhaayan?????

Saas atki hai Sanjh...a quick update please!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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So this res was for thanks giving ( literally) . I have some spare time, so thought, would thank you all who have commented.
@vinu: remember he said the same thing to Pushkar! Now you will see lot more of their moments. Let's see what happens!
Thank you again for commenting.


@mayu: 😆true! But now, again he is coming over Sony, so...
Yaa they surely knows. Next update is already up. Thank you for liking it.


@Nadeeka: thank you so much.


@Sonai: hello my Bengali bae, I hope next update padke, you will be fine..😉. yup, I am fine now! But exams!!! Arghhh I hate it! Thank you for commenting. Onek valobasha! 😃


@iamknown2u: oh my God! Lovely username btw! Very dramatic, your mind seems more dramatic than mine!😉 thank you for commenting.



@lavanya: thank you so much for liking the Chapter. Hope you will like the next chapter too.



@Lubna: thank you so much! You are always very kind to me! It means a lot.



@faith: nothing to worry about!




@joyness: thank you so much! It means a lot.


@pinky: thank you so much.


@eva:. Read all 25, and yet you survived, and again demanding a new update! More power to you girl! Thank you for reading this FF,I thought u never would.



@jerry: thank you so much!


@reeba: main tumhari jaan le lungi, to tumhara hone Wala pati mujhe maar dalega! Shravan k security guards nahin Hai! But he is in the parking lot so office mein to Hai hi! Thank you so much. Love ya lot.



@Deepti: haina haina! We love to check him out!!! 😆 bhikhari gun Kahan se laya, pata chalega! BTW thank you for commenting.


@priety: Shravan ko kabhi kuch nahin hoga! Hero hai na! Thank you, for reading it.



@shaggy: your comments always made me smile. Let's see aage Kya hota Hai! Thank you so much for commenting.



@spandana: Pushkar bhaisahab ki timing Humesha ghalat waqt pe hi hota Hai! Kya karein ab! BTW Thankyou so much for liking it.


@shrujani: nothing will happen to Shravan, akhir hero Hai yaar. Thank you so much for commenting.


@_Eternity_ : thank so much for liking it.



@sujatha-4: thank you so much dear! It means a lot.



@sayma.afraz.ahi: you don't used to, but now that you have started, then be kanjus, and please keep commenting. Thank you so much for liking the story! I am really glad that you liked it this much.


@arshuaar: thank you so much!


@adi: thank you so much, for liking Destined this much. You have no idea, how much your comments means to me.


@nuts: what you have guessed! Will be waiting to know.


@reshma: Thank you so much for liking this chapter. I was waiting for you to comment.



Thank you all for commenting, it means a lot to me. Thank you again.



Edited by Itssanjh - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello, late much! But hope you all understand, this might be the last update this month! Finals are nearby! So will not be able to log in regularly. Chalo enough of my bakbak! Here comes the next chapter.

And yes this is the high time we get Shravan's POV.




Chapter 26



"Shravannn" all I could hear her!

My vision hazed, I could feel her, holding tightly on me, saying "kuch nahin hoga tumhe kuch nahin! "

"Sumooo" I wanted to say I never loved anyone this much, but I couldn't, my tongue seemed dry, as if it was glued with my teeth.

"Shravan...Shravan..." I felt something soft and warm around me, it was her, I sniffed, all I want to remember her scent, it was so peaceful, that I closed my eyes,








" Shravan .. Shravan...Sona nahin...Sona nahin!" A little nudge, was I sleeping! I blinked my eyes, but couldn't see anything, but I could smell something rasty, salty, and with that, of course her smell, I smiled, 'sumooo' I opened my mouth but again my tongue didn't move.

"Pushkar..." She was afraid. For me.

" Tu chinta mat Kar, sab thik hoga! Bhaiya ko kuch nahin hoga!" I again opened my mouth, my Sumo was in pain, but this rythmic, bobbing was making me more dizzy, and my eyelids gave in!



"But Dr why is he still unconscious!" Papa asked.The voice came to me like he was talking from miles away.

"You have to be patient Mr Malhotra, your son is unconscious because of the medicines and anesthesia! Please don't panic, he is out of danger!" A cold and detached voice said.

"You have no idea Dr, hum isse aise ekbar dekh chuke Hain...Firse..." Maa, she sounded so broken, but why! Why! Why couldn't I remember anything!

"Bhaiya will be fine, aap donon Kya baatein leke baith Gaye! Please..." Pushkar, my brother. I tried to open my eyes, but my eyelids protested profusely! I dozed off again!







I woke up disoriented with the urge to go somewhere and to do something. But what! I could feel, my muscles getting tensed, as if I was in middle of a...a fight! Fight! Aditya!

Suddenly I was hyper tensed, "Sumooo" I shouted, while trying to get up. But felt an excruciating pain on my chest, the pain, I could never imagined, to exist! My head spun, I almost bounced back to my bed.

" Shravannn...Kya Kar rahe ho!" Sumo came almost running towards me.

"Sumo..Woh Aditya..."

" Police pakad k le Gaye usse, tum abhi yeh sab baatein mat socho please! Hum baad mein baat karenge okay! Sab thik Hai, sab safe Hai, tum bass..." She patted my forehead, as if to check my temperature, "Wait, let me tell everyone, ki tumhe honsh aa Gaya!" She pressed a button on the wall. The nurse might had been waiting outside, she immediately came inside.

She checked all the monitors, and said, "Aap thoda shant rahiye Mr Malhotra! Main Dr ko bukati hoon!"

"Bahut dard ho raha hai?" Sumo asked stroking her finger on my right arm. Again the pain, which was subsided by sudden remembrance of Aditya, made a severe come back.

Ten seconds passed, and then twenty and thirty, and finally the pain started to pull back like the tide going out. I took a deep breath and again, the pain retorted to it.

"How bad?" I asked to her, who seemed in more pain than mine.

She sighed, "two broken ribs, we are just lucky enough that the bullet didn't hit your heart or lungs! Bullet ko nikal diya Dr ne operation karke, par couldn't do anything to your ribs. It will take time."

"Hmmm" I didn't know, that broken ribs could be so painful, it was painful even when breathing! I looked at her, dark circles were more prominent on her pale face. "Kab se ho yahan?"


" Jabse tum ho!" She rolled her eyes, even with this tired face, she looked beautiful!

"Main kabse hoon?"

" Parso se ho! Do din tak behosh the!"

"Sorry"

" For what, behosh rehne k liye?" She laughed!

" No" I didn't know I was holding my breath, I released, and again the pain came back like a violent beast, I closed my eyes, hoping for the pain to sleep again, " tumko itna pareshan karne k liye!"

"Maa Papa ki haalat mujhse dekha nahin jaa raha Hai! Bahut mushkil se un donon ko ghar veja Hai aaj. Aur Pushkar, woh pagal kuch bolta nahin, par uski halat shayad..."

"Aur tum?" I cut her short, looking at her, and she flinched!

"Main thik hoon! Main itni jaldi darti nahin,woh bhi aise choti choti baat pe!"


I knew she was lying, I knew she was just putting her brave face in front of me! But still...But still I wanted to hear, that she was worried for me, I wanted to hear, that Al least for a second she feared of loosing me! In support of my thoughts, my heart drummed in my chest, and the monitors started beeping violently!

"Shravannn" she looked at the monitors and then at me, " please...Your heart..."

"You love to play with it.."

"Shravan I..." Her lower lip trembled, "I..."

"Bhaiyaaa" Pushkar entered the room, almost ripping the door of it's frame.

I laughed, wrong entry, wrong timing!

Again this tiny movement, tickled the pain up from it's sleep! I gritted my teeth, this would be tougher than I thought!

" Bhaiya...Offf! You have no idea Kya biti hai humpe! Dr ne kaha tha aap out of danger ho, par firbhi ekbar Phirse..." he stopped, and instantly I know, he was talking about last time. Both of us looked at Suman.

" Aap donon baatein Karo main thodi der baad aati hoon! " She got up, " aur Pushkar baatein Matlab jyada nahin okay!"

"Haan meri Maa, tu bhi jaa kuch khaa le...In do dinon mein tune biscuit aur paani k eleawa kuch nahin khaya-piya!"


"What! Sumo! Yeh Pushkar Kya keh raha hai!" She never really maintained her diet!

"Yeh humesha bada chada k bolta hai! Maine khaya, usse nahin pata!"









"Aditya?"

"Police custody mein hai! Court ne usse, custody mein rakhne ko kaha hai, no bail grunted! " He gritted his teeth, " agar aapko kuch ho gaya hota na bhaiya, maar hi deta main usse!"

"Chill chote chill! Waise mujhe sirf goli lagna yaad Hai, uske baad ka kuch..." I tried hard to remember, but..."waise tu wahan pahuncha kaise?"

"Areee bhaiya, Sumo, jo haina...Kuch Kam nahin Hai! Pata nahin kaise aapko khinch liya ya for dhakka de Diya, isiliye goli sirf left side pe lagi! Warna..." He sighed, "sumo na hoti us waqt to...Aur uske baad bhi, she never left you, even OT mein bhi woh thi aapke saath!"

"Kaise! OT mein usko allow kisne Kya!" I was really surprised!

"Bhaiya woh Sumo Hai, pata nahin Dr ko Kya patti padai, Dr bhi maan gaye! " He laughed!

"Hmmm" I knew it, she still cared for me!






I had to convince Maa, that it wasn't really hurt that bad, the amount of tears she had shed, I didn't have the courage to show her the pain I was going through! Papa didn't say much, but only stared, with all his relief, his love for me. But the problem was with Sumo. She seemed very much uncomfortable around my parents, she was just cordial.








"Sponge bath time!" The nurse said with an irritating tone. Though it was embarrassing but somehow it made me feel pity, looking at the nurse's face, it would be very much irritating, to see other people's junk, that too regularly, and manier times.

But I had fun, watching Sumo's reaction, her eyes popped, she wanted to protest, but couldn't, "main bahar jaati hoon.." she said.

"You can stay Mrs Malhotra, you are his wife, you can even help me!" Nurse said, might be looking at my stature!

Through out the procedure, I kept looking at Sumo, who almost cringed, when, the nurse's hand slided to my most intimate part to clean, and to change the catheter! Sumo turned her face and kept staring actually glaring at the watch hanging on the wall! I smiled in my head, I would had killed if anyone had touched her like this! Over obsessed me!

Sumo seemed visibly uncomfortable, but for me, it reminded me of that days when I was all broken, my bad days, the same situation, same me. Only difference was I didn't have Alisha by my side.

I sighed, my face might be contorted because of the pain, "slowly Mr Malhotra, your ribs are really not in a good position, to bear all this!" The nurse pointed. She checked the monitors, and again turned to me, "easy..." Then she looked at Sumo, "Mrs Malhotra, don't let him be excited, emotionally or physically!"










"What!" She asked, irritated!


"Nothing, you seemed annoyed!" I chuckled.

"Why would I be!"

Some more push, I knew Sumo would react!

"Nahin mujhe laga, tumhe jalan ho rahi Hai! I mean nurse se!"

"Please Shravan, please! Mujhe usse jalne ki koi zaroorat nahin hai." She said with a straight face."waise bhi, woh necessary tha! Nurse aur Doctors se kya jalna!"

"Main to jalta!"

"Matlab?"

"Agar bhagwan na Kare tum mere jagah pe hoti, to main tumhe kisi aur ko shayad choone na Diya hota doctors k eleawa!" I whispered, closing my eyes.

I heard a loud sigh, which made me smile.



So this is it. I know this is very short! But trust me , not getting enough time to write. Finals are starting from 25th. So...if its possible ,will update the next part. Or you all have to wait till next month.

PS Sorry , Couldn't Reply to all your comments! But I read it all! Thank you so much, for liking this FF this much!
PPS please ignore all the typos, and other mistakes, only had 1 hour to write.
Sweksha, sweety pie, don't be angry for this short update.




Edited by Itssanjh - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mai first...!!!
Unbelieveable...!!!
I saw the Pm and it was sent 5 mins ago toh laga ke abhi tak do teen REsses aa gaye honge...pura update padha and still kuch nahi tha..😃aaj toh meri lottery lag gayi😆😆
Loooved the update...!!!!
Sumo OT mey bhi uske saath...!!!👏⭐️❤️
Nurse scene😆😆
25th se exams...All the best..!!!👍🏼Updates ki koi jaldi nahi...thik se padhiyo and update when you are free...We'll wait😃😃
Love ya..🤗
ANU😳
Edited by ZehriliChidiya - 8 years ago

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