Sardi ki Dhoop - OS - Page 5

I am tonguetied Deepti...!!!🤗
This was totally spellbounding...❤️🤗
Every poem was just tooo good...!!!👏

so so sososooo lovely !! u wrote this with exactly the time they met after 10 years, that is same time our show started and again completed with the same time after one year, which is in real too😳 it makes this more meaningful...amazing work

Res because I have to write a detailed comment for this one...

kudos to you deltadawn dii👍🏼

Your writeup made me cry literally... 😭
A tight 🤗 to you for this Deepti...!!
It really really touched my soul...❤️ ❤️
For me this is your best one...Doesnt means that others arent good, they all are awesome but this one is much much more special...❤️

I dont know from where to start coz I loved each n every WORD of it...I do!!
But I'll say all I want to no matter how long it becomes...!!

Sardi ki dhoop...Is title ko ek nayi pehchaan di hai tumne Deepti...!!
Pictures ke peeche shayari... 😳
Wow..!!...Really unique idea..!!


Sardi ki dhoop...kyu mujhe pyaar aata hai
It reminded me of the epi where Shravan said it to Sumo.The smile on his face n love in his eyes...❤️

Pyaar kar ke tumse apne dil ka aashiyana jala diya,
Fir bhi khaakh hui dhadkano me tumhara naam sunai deta hai
Sooo beautiful...!!...The depth of the words ... 👏
No matter what happens ,the love Shravan had for Sumo was embedded within him and how hard he might have tried , he cant part ways with it.

Lagta tha pyaar na sahi dosti ke liye pukar loge ek baar.
Loved it!!...Shravan's yearning ... 😭 ...Beautiful!!❤️

Fir se apni chuppi me tujhse baate karne lagta hoon.
More yearning...more pain!!
When you try to forget someone but how can you when all you can think is about her only...even in your lonliness,you talk to her, think about her!!.

Hazaaro dafa dekha hai chaand ko badalte hue,
Uske har roop ki aadat hai ab.
Aaj mere chaand ko dekha hai pehli baar,
Itna badla badla sa par mayoos sa kyu hai,
Kahi meri tarah tumhara dil bhi intezaar me to nahi?
These lines gives me a lil relief...a lil peace...a lil happiness!!..Coz Shravan sounded lil happy!!
Mera Chaand...❤️

Ya fir tumhara dard hi itna mera hai ki bas jaan ke saath hi jayega.
You know how touching these lines are?!!...Specially tumhaara dard hi itna mera hai..❤️
Shravan's love...deeper than any ocean, Pure than Purity itself!!

Meri kashti ko hi zid hai bikharne ki tere haatho har din.
😭
No matter how much he tried , he cant hate her.N how much his love destroyed him, he cant stop loving her..!!

Aaj dekho, wohi barsaat hai, wahi baadal bhi
Par tum nahi ho kahi ...
Tum jaise hi bewafa mere saare mausam lagte hain aajkal.
He missed her every damn sec.Everything related to her made him miss her more.Everything that involved Sumo anywhere,Shravan's mind,heart was attached there never to part ,to made him miss her more n hate himself for that!!

Kyu nahi saanse le sakta mai, jaise auro ki chalti hain... asaani se.
😭
It is soo painful...so hurtful!!...Shravan suffered so much pain there every moment with no one to console ,to love!!

Inko pyaar hi aata hai bas is bewafa tasveer pe.
It was your love Shravan...!!
So loved them Deepti...❤️

Na Sardi ki dhoop ho tum...pyar hi aata hai.
Same shayari..but with diff lyrics...Coz of diff in feelings after exactly ten years!!...
Thought Deepti... 👏

Haar lagti hai kyu lekin fir se wo aansuo ki ladi...
Kyu fir se jakhmi sa baitha hoon tumhari tasveer lekar haatho me
Jis sukoon ke liye kiya ye sab, mila to dard hi!!
Loved it ❤️

Tumhe mil gayi hai dosti shayad
Mera humraaz mil gaya hai fir se mujhe
It gave me a happy feeling , a relief Deepti just like Shravan must have felt at that time...❤️
Beautifully written... 👏

Os ki boonde jo chali gayi thi kal dhoop sekne,
Dekho aaj fir se aa rahi hain apni pattiyo se milne...
You know how beautiful these lines are...just feels like am reading an established Shayar's shayari... 👏
They are that much beautiful...❤️

Dil todna kabhi mera bhi dil tumse seekhe
When we as an audience, felt soo much pain n dissapointment after seeing this epi, We can easily make out how deeply it must have hurted Shravan who came to confess but got hurt in return!!
Lovely...❤️

Dua me haath tere uth nahi rahe
Meri nazre jhuki hain unke bebasi ke bojh tale
😭
The connection Shravan's heart had with Sumo's is incredible...!!
The guilt ridden Shravan...plus pain of seeing his love in that condition.Beautifully penned down ya...❤️ ❤️

Chaand ki roshni mil jaati hai fir ek muddat ke baat,
Junoon bhara ishq bhi milta hai aisi hi shiddat ke baad
Tumhari has saas, har dhadkan har shikan se waakif hona chahoon mai har pal
Tumhari julfo ke saaye me hi rehna chahoon mai har pal
Jab paas ho tab chaah badhe, jab duur ho tab bhi lage aas paas ho
Ye kaisi manzil hai ishq bhi, ki pyaare lagte hain itne lambe raaste...
Tum sach kehti thi...Mil jaate hain dil jo bane,Ek duje ke vaaste
I couldnt stop myself to mention it whole...I just couldnt!!
Not only Sumo,I was also crying from the very start Deepti!!
This last Shayari...I cant explain in words how much I loved it!!...How beautiful it is!! ❤️

Shravan came to Sumo n soo soo lovingly said that he cant erase those sad ones coz Sumo ki pics kharab ho jaayengi...How can someone be this loving...!!
Its YOUR Shravan Deepi..!!
Loved how Sumo confessed at last...❤️...Shravan's heart is really really big n forgiving with not an ounce of hatred!!


You slayed it ...Its a very small compliment for you Deepti!
Dil le liya yaar...❤️ ❤️
Publish your works...Seriously!!...N I'll be the first one of your readers to buy it!! 😳
I know maine pura puraan likh diya hai...But I couldnt stop myself...Sorry 😛
DEEPEST DEEPTI!!...Yes you are!!

Thanks a ton for writing it and for the pm... 😊
Loads n Loads n Loads of Love n tons of 🤗 your way ya!!
Nikka Sa Nik... 😆

Originally posted by: deltadawn

thanks Reeba.

yeah I tried 😛 glad you liked the OS. 😊

Like!!!!!! Correction dear I just loved it... Thankyou so much for writing such beautiful OS. English k sath-2 Hindi me b tumhari writing bht achi hai dear... Keep it up

Originally posted by: anukulgr8

I am tonguetied Deepti...!!!🤗
This was totally spellbounding...❤️🤗
Every poem was just tooo good...!!!👏

Originally posted by: sweksha

this is one of best oneshot I have ever read...those beautiful blue lines is successfully showing shravan's inner feeling of these 10 years...awesome work dear...

Originally posted by: ReebaS

Like!!!!!! Correction dear I just loved it... Thankyou so much for writing such beautiful OS. English k sath-2 Hindi me b tumhari writing bht achi hai dear... Keep it up

Originally posted by: Sonai_02

So beautiful. Very awesome 👏