ShraMan FF: Holding You, (C18 pg 102) - Page 50

Originally posted by: KitkitMkb

I am so glad you liked this one because I really enjoyed writing it!
I loved it !!


For the longest time I didn't know how to start the chapter so one day while jogging, I got the idea. I feel that we all have a little bit of Shravan inside of us, because he was so real!
N I must say what a start!!

Exactly...There is a Shravan in all of us!


There is more of Shravan understanding Sumo and vice versa in chapter 10 ;)
Ok...Then am more excited for it😳


Basically I love characters with real flaws and my favorite kind of acne is when a character realizes his mistakes!
The same reason why I love EDKV and ShraMan so much.Every character was flawed and every negative character was grey shaded.

When character realises his/her mistakes ...it surely gives you a bittersweet feeling!!


Your analysis is bang on!
Thank you ji!!


I absolutely love writing their scenes, what they gave us onscreen was so beautiful, it inspires to write. One of my favorite bit ❤️

True that!!


I would have love fro see this transition developing onscreen how they would be awkward at the smallest touches, but deep down they would be so affected.

Sigh!!

You have explained it so beautifully that I can only nod my head yes. 😆

LOL!!

Everyone seemed to have liked this moment ❤️

Coz this is so beautiful re!!

Nanu is❤️

He sure is!!

This is what made them so real and relatable!

Cant agree more bro!!

These lines are so so beautiful!!❤️

Haina?

I like them too!!

You have no idea how happy this OS of your has made me 😆

More than happy to know that!!😳

If there is one thing I really, really wanted to see on EDKV then it was as a forehead kiss, I just find the gesture so pure and beautiful 💔

I loveee forehead kisses ya!!

And like always you pinpoint the details, your comments are a writer's delight!

Aww thank you so much Sal 🤗

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Love and sunshine !! The beginning was pure bliss !!</font>

Socho agar ye nazara haar din dekhne ko milta ;)

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Aditya is a necessary evil !! Just when I was thinking he has faded,, he is back and boom! !</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Suman deserved that closure but without this concealment !!</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And like I always say,, ShraMan are the villain of their story... Aditya is merely a prop !!</font>

Exactly, they are!

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Trust is a touchstone of every relationship and somehow they always fall short of it,, then...now and I hope not forever! !</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">In an attempt not to hurt each other or rather protect one another from some unpleasant situation they end doing stuff which not only hurts the other but shakes their beliefs!!</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Will they ever be able to understand each other! !😭</font>

You have explained the basis of trust so beautifully and yes they will! ❤️

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And the Lejha,, no lessons learned it seems !! I understand their personalities are strong but..!! Soo blunt and hasty !!</font>

[B]I know the lehja has changed but there has been some changes, Shravan doesn't get mad all of a sudden, he waits and analyses and the most important thing he trusts her when he says "She must have a reason to do this." But don't worry the lehja wil also change ;)

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I hope ring doesn't meet the same fate as the letter... No lamba intezaar !!</font>

No lamba intezar I promise!

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">By the way that 'Bye Mrs. Malhotra' was...😃</font>

❤️

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Out beyond ideas of right doing and wrong doing there is a field. I hope they meet there. #ShraMan !!</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Amazing piece of writing! !👏</font>

Originally posted by: Nik03

Sal🤗

Thank you for the special mention bro!!

For chap 9...

One of your finest writing Sal...This chap is special in a unique way.

You have no idea how much I loved it ❤️

I am glad you liked it because this one wasn't even planned in the first place!

Shravan and his room.

What a change...what a description I must say Sal👏

The room which reminded him of the hard times he had spend with Sumo, the pain of not being able to express his love nor to feel her love, the pain of his wish to see her go away but couldnt be able to let her at any cost, the pain of feel alone even being with her all the time...The pain of being with her yet so far from her.

There were really few episodes where Shravan was truly happy and I really wanted to see this, so just fulfilling my dreams!

Now it gave him the solace that he wanted and moreover needed badly, even when she was not present there physically!!

He slept with her scent...so beautiful!

Every damn lil detail was fantastically written Sal!!

This is something he would have done in my mind :)

Now comes Shravan-Nirmala scene.

One of the best ones Sal!

Killed it here girl!

Nirmala was never a mother for me.This is not what a mother does to her own son no matter what happens.A mother can fight the world for her child , not against him.And now she is showing her so called love by asking him permission to go and be with her son or should I say her real son in every way..Bulls**t !!

Nirmala is a character that cannot be redeemed because her actions are solely hers. This was something she could have done in the future but Shravan will realize in the coming chapters that he does not need his mother as much as he thinks he does.

He wanted to be the hand they reached out to, when they stumbled not the shackles on their feet. He wanted them to look up at him with a smile, not down at their shoes.he was merely asking for a place in all these people's hearts, which was rightly his.

I am asking for love not pity

And you said it all Sal...you said it all!!👏

This feel is the worst.

I love it when you quote lines!

That chashmish...I cant get that picture of that innocent soul out of mind who was wronged time and again.That person never found solace and never found all the happiness he deserved.

Nirmala you did chose Aditya over Shravan before and you did it again.You left that selfless soul to cry before and you did that again.You were wrong before and you are wrong again.You were never a mother to Shravan and you arent now n never will be.You never deserved him and nor do you now.I hated you before and I hate you more now!!

Shravan's heart was really made to be broken ...time and again!!

I so loved how you show him turning his face away from her.first not to let her see his tears and then not to see her going away from him again!!❤️
This is exactly why Nirmala cannot be forgiven, a mother can't do that to her own child and then come back like a flower as if nothing ever happened.

Sumo-Shravan Convo!!

Again I'll say...You slayed it girl👏

This is what we needed to see, this is what should have happened, this is what ShraMan needed...ever!!❤️

Shravan's wait and restlessness and Sumo's happiness to see him is written beyond beautiful!

They bickered, they joked , they smiled, they felt relief...They felt alive!!

Best friends are back to be best friends❤️

Shravan who was thinking negatively before sounded happy and positive just with the mere presence of Sumo. Such is their Love!❤️

I so loved that Sumo showed her haq there.Shravan always wanted that, he always needed that!

Emerald earings...Lil scene but beautiful one ❤️

This is another unfulfilled dream.

How do I help you, if you don't let me be there for you

Second favorite line from the chapter ;)

Loved it so much Sal ❤️

This Sumo ...This is the Sumo!!

It's not the fact that she paid for them that pricked him it was the memories that came along.

MG!!

It was something that had described Shravan and his inner feeling , his inner fear in the most beautiful way❤️

Whole convo was of another level!

Sumo's way of conversing ...her defending women in her own way...Shravan to listen and understanding...him expressing his insecurity...her cute gesture...the kiss on palm...Them clearing out every misunderstanding and letting it all out...supporting each other took my heart away ❤️

I am really happy that you liked it when I was writing it I wondered if it even made sense, if I did justice to Sumo's explanations and Shravan's insecurities.

Their start as friends👏

They needed it more now than becoming a couple in love.It was their friendship that introduced them to love and it was the friendship that strengthen it so much that even they couldnt ignore it no matter how hard they tried!!

Lastly their hug...Aww!!

I loved every word, every feel of it❤️

Killed it Sal!!

This is what I love the most about them, their friendship.❤️

Chatting ...haaye

Finally Sumo would be home!

MM scene is also one of the best ones😆

Teen baatein chachi ji

Swag Malhotra.😎

Kya jawab diya hai...Dil le liye re ❤️

Sassy Malhotra is my favorite Malhotra!

Sumo was there and she listened...Oh My My!!

I love it when something like this happens.It gives one a real assurance that the other believes you, respects you and loves you the way you are in a true sense.

Sooo loved how you have described Sumo's feelings after listening to this...Her talk to her mother❤️

He defended her, he had taken a stand for her. Something nobody had done for her in all those years.

aaj pehli bhar koi mujhse khush huwa hai

Oh My!!😭

This Sumo...the vulnerable one...the real one!!

Damn loved it soo much Sal.

The ending...the hug and most importantly...

I'll always fight for you.
My favorite dialogue!❤️

❤️ ❤️

It was perfect Sal👏

Touched me deeply...each and every scene and dialogue ...killer!!

Take a🤗for it!!

Keep it up my girl!!

Love you🤗

Nikka sa Nik

Originally posted by: KitkitMkb

@Bold, I am in love with your comments I can't wait for you to catch up with the next Thank you so much
🤗

Originally posted by: Nik03

<font color="#ff6600">@Bold I would have today but guests came unnoticed so.</font>

<font color="#ff6600">I'll be there tom.</font>

<font color="#ff6600">N am glad you liked them and no need to thank me Sal.You are giving us amazing updates so thats the least I could do as a reader na😊</font>

<font color="#ff6600">Love ya🤗</font>

Originally posted by: reshmanair356

Totally down and sick but couldn't stop myself from commenting.

Kya huwa? Take some good rest and eat healthy!

The only ones who could ever bring Shraman down was they themselves. .Ramnath could only propose, Aditya could only try and her parents debt could only pose a danger.
They are the vilains of their own story, like everyone so aptly says it.

.it was their excess of love and absolute lack of trust that always drew the daggers across their hearts.

Wish Shravan could ask why. .wish Suman would explain in advance why.

Don't worry they'll start asking the right questions, now ;)

Even the strongest feelings expire when ignored and taken for granted. It's only love that's unconditional. ..trust and respect are not...they are always at a price.

Word.

Hoping they learn to live with each other now that they know they can't live without each other.

This is so ShraMan!

Beautiful piece Sal. .your pen types magic😃

Originally posted by: KitkitMkb

I looove uninvited guests 😆
Read it when you can ;)
I love you too 🤗

Originally posted by: Nik03

I dont like them much Bro.

Read it. I'll comment as soon as I can.

😊

Originally posted by: deltadawn

"Agar ye haqeeqat hai to meri kaise ho sakti hai..." that line sums up his state of mind still😭

Sal and sensible go hand in hand ye to mai kehti rehti hoon.

I was waiting for you. Sensible to main hamesha se hi thi. 😆

So this update took me from a warm smile to biting my nails at its own leisurely pace. And twice I let my heart break at the helplessness of those two.

These lines of yours make me feel that I was able to write what I wanted :D

Its a thin line - friendship and love especially when your best friend is not just your long awaited love but also your spouse.

Rebuilding the friendship is happening well cause no one is in a rush nor is there an expectation in the end. You are my friend and I need you to trust me. I will be there for you always. Its seems to be settling in.

Rebuilding the friendship is an easy one for them because it's basically the core of their relationship.

But building the relationship of spouses who claim to have been in love with each other forever. They are miles away from it. And you depict it so wisely and so well.

I have years of observation in the matter 😆

This is a relationship study !! Each glance, each touch is a slow and calculated measure moving ahead.

Sumo , this one I love. Absolutely. She has an existence apart from Shravan which probably makes life much more tolerable in times like these. Her stand to lose all things which might connect her to Aditya. I respect that. But once again, she let the friend in her fall behind the wife. The wife/lover knows how the husband will react and shields without thinking. Also she needs to read a bit about Murphy's Law !

This is a flaw I share with her, hiding things from people in order to protect them let's hope that she and I both learn from our mistakes!
I also need to read about the Murphy's law. My list of books is never ending. 😆

Shravan, as adorably sad he is not even believing if her caress is true or a dream, is struggling within his chains. And you describe it so so well.

I actually feel bad for Shravan, because sometimes I feel that this a character that hasn't been understood by people because they only keep in count his reactions and not why he reacts like this.

I can only imagine his state of mind and it depresses me to be there. To want to trust and give in and let go and start afresh but in the end land up facing a bunch of lies.

This. Shravan never failed to surprise me when it came to give second chances. He is always so giving in his relationship despite what everyone does to him, he was the first to propose friendship even though he had been betrayed, he was ready to confess even though he had trust issues.

Even a casual conversation between two people you have tried so hard to keep on opposite poles of the planet can cut like a knife.

The end as I said broke my heart also because I had Shravan in my head at one time and Sumo in the next and from both of their POVs I feel like I am drowning.

All credit to you😊It was a beautiful death that my heart suffered. Rejoice my beautiful writer.

*Smiles wide.*

P.S.- my husband who despises EDKV and everything related to it because of my overindulgence, came across this update and said... it wasnt half bad.

I am so going to take this as a compliment :D

I raise my hands to the almighty " hey bhagwan thank you ki Sal ka sensible update khula tha aur mera apna nahi."😆

I am sure if you make him read any of your stories he will be a proud hubby ;)