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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Tonight was different. She looked exhausted like she was tired of life, like she had fought with all her resources without getting rewarded and he could see the longing in her eyes when her gaze lingered on the empty seat next to her.Nothing to hold on to... #hurt #hopelessness

Had he eaten ? The thought just made her already poor appetite vanish...🤗

The situation slowly dawning on her... finally! That outburst was needed to make her realise the gravity of her acts...she had been ruthless if I may say so..!!
Shravan can't be blamed if he thinks she choose ever damm thing other him !! She had knowingly or unknowingly !!

No matter how much he denies, she had seen it in his eyes, he could never hurt her without hurting himself, like their hearts were bound by a force... sometimes even more!!
<font color="#333333" face="Roboto, sans-serif">Trying to do something with all ur might,,yet finding urself lacking!! #inherent #incapability!!</font>

It reminded her of the day, he had come to her PCT, claiming that Shravan and her were beyond 'just friends'and now she realized how different were her equations with all these people and how messed up their lives had become... pushkie at its best..! Another character which was lost in transit!

No matter how nonchalant she acted about it. She was really sensitive at heart... #Sumo !

So this how it felt. Loneliness. He looked at his room in the semi darkness. He wouldn't wake up to the soft humming of her song, the left side of his bed would always be cold. The bathroom would not be filled with her citrus scent anymore. The cupboard would be filled only with his clothes, with colors she found bland. His room would be empty, once again like its owner... reminds me of chapter one... back to where it started !!

She knew him too well, to believe that he was asleep. He had always one leg out of the duvet and he always slept on his left side, she could tell he was awake with the way he had turned his head to the right side and how stiff his posture looked...🤗
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"Shravan." It was a mere whisper, almost felt like a peace offering in the darkness of the night, like a ray of hope. #trying...He wanted to get up and engulf her in his arms but then what ? What was the next step ? #sceptical!

"Main pichle das saal se tumhara intezaar kar rahi hoon." One line with a innumerable emotions !
Shravan is like,I trust you but I don't trust myself enough!

"I am sorry Sumo, I am really sorry." His fingers tugged the lone strand behind her ear, which hid her beautiful face from him, not daring to go further... this soo ShraManish..!

Janaab is testing her !! Koi nai!! We know the outcome! !

The realization made her look away...😳
Bickering! ! Taras gaye to see them like this! ! Gives me hope,, it's a glimpse of future!
She stepped back as if she was on fire and he immediately felt the lose..!😳

<font color="#333333" face="Roboto, sans-serif">Knock! #timings😲</font>

Their smiles widened when they saw him awkwardly standing, it was his way to welcome her ...aww!
"Kahan jaa rahi ho ?" He asked urgely his fingers almost touching her wrist...💔
And he wanted her to leave the room a while ago! !

He smiled, his first genuine smile in months...! Goes with the readers too !😉
She had done it again. She had again chose something else over him...

"Kyon, kya hogaya hai ?" She stepped closer to him, her hand almost touching his arm, he stepped back and her hand fell limply at her side, reminding her, her position in his life.💔

"Bachpan kitna asaan huwa karta tha." She said, smiling fondly, remembering their childhood.

He chuckled in return. "Humare liye to kabhi nahi tha." That's the moment their eyes met, regret and longing visible in the eyes of the other. He was the first to tear his gaze away...
This reminds me,,every flashback Shravan used to have was so full of pain...Sumo's used to be so full of fondness!! Same event,,both of them carried a different aspect of it with them..!
"I am losing my mind here." He held his head and let out a cry of frustration. She instinstively reached out to him and held his hands into hers, to prevent him from hurting himself.
"Hey, look up talk to me, please don't hurt yourself." She had started crying, unaware to herself.❤️

Their Conservation! ! Desire to making everything simple and inability to do so! Killing!

"Ghar chalo." They walked next to each other, hundred scenarios in mind... ditto for us!

<font color="#333333" face="Roboto, sans-serif">Superb update!</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Roboto, sans-serif">Sorry for being late lateef!😳</font>



Both of them being bhukkads imagine them not eating 😆
That outburst was necessary to show her that he is more hurt than angry.
Pushkar was the captain of the ship !
Indeed back to square one ;)
I love their subtle romance, like holding hands and all a change from those never ending eye locks.
Tabby, thank you so much for always reading the lines and for seeing what I try to do. The difference of pov about their childhood thank you for seeing it 😃
Take this you 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: amks2016

Finally got here 😕

What an emotional update Saleha 👏 I'm in love with the way u deal with the emotional and intense narration .. the words the scene etc are all superb 👍🏼

Their is so much pain and bitterness in Shravan and Sumo is the only healer for him .. his insecurities and securities are eased only by her .. what an beautiful mess this is .. seriously kudos to mr jha for these characters the story and all the forum writers who put so much life and emotions .. each in their own way !!

They like twinning rope whr they meet and are pulled apart and meet again :)

Waiting for the story to progress 😳



And I am in love with you guys' comments 😆
The writers of this forum are the bomb ;)
Thank you so much for this, means a lot to me 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

Res

Deepti, ek comment and dekho aa gayi!!!😉😆

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">How how...Do you do it. Mesmerizing one. So many things to say, so many emotions.</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Shravan in PCT ❤️n💔</font>
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<font color="#0000cc" face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2">Ramnath😭👏</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">The collision❤️</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">He was mesmerized by her😃😳</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Tugging the little finger❤️</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Sumo thinking of their children🤗</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">The box🥺</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">The letters😭</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">The question spoken and unspoken😒</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">The swing⭐️</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Sumo's monologue😆</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">The forehead kiss❤️</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Still want to say so many things, but now I am little high on emotions, I'll be back with more elaborate comment later.</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Love ya for writing this.🤗</font>


You kind of summed up the update ;)
By the way it's the second time that you are first ;)
Thank your for the highlights and will wait for the detailed comment , love hearing from you always !
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: deltadawn

Level of happiness was taken for a roller coaster ride.😆

Mind is coming out of its numbness.My neck hurts because it was turned sideways into the laptop for god knows how long. But its all fine. Because you are worth it.😃


A journey of an update.

From trying to find solace in staying away, lashing out, getting answers to finally stumbling into her most cherished memories and getting her and more than her, getting himself back.

Slow progression is the key and you showed it so well. He was actually receptive of the advice, the events was such a positive part of your update. worth pondering over as well. Are we receptive when we have reached the edge? If we are, wouldn't it be easier to redeem ourselves.


Ramnath Malhotra is still the father I adored. When he was able to tell a straightforward fact to his son. making him cross question his own behavior rather showing him how to stand in her place and see from there.

Nanu...❤️

Dabbu the cupid who wanted his rubic's cube. the memory box a reflection of her own heart. A simple facade on the outside with a lifetime of love hidden within its bland cardboard exterior.

Sal aaj to tumne fir dil jeet liya.😃

The holding of pinky fingers I am smiling wide at it. Its the simplest gesture , yet so real, fits so perfectly with the Shraman we knew. Shy, Introverts, no PDA.

this is my person and I am not letting go. - all it takes to prove it to that person is a reassuring touch.😊

Understanding Sumo...broke my heart.

In the world of debt and favors, he was the only one she could call her own.😭

I thought I was all out of love, that I could wash it out of my heart with the memory of your betrayal.
But it makes me breathe, runs through my veins washes away every sin yours and mine instead.

I am filled with love today Sal. Just because of you 🤗. Totally worth the wait.😊


Deepti is back with the looong comments 🤗

Ramnath Malhotra is still the father I adored. this character is so layered and there is so much scope to it that you kind of understand him and for me he will always be better than Nirmala bec use he at least tried to understand Shravan. I truly love this duo ❤️

The holding of pinky fingers I am smiling wide at it. Its the simplest gesture , yet so real, fits so perfectly with the Shraman we knew. Shy, Introverts, no PDA. This is ShraMan, beautiful and yet had their own charm.

The last lines so so beautiful and so apt <3
Thank you for making me smile 😃
Yeh lo 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Shukriya 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Itssanjh



I have never had any elder sister Sal i am the only girl child of my family, and Deepti is the perfect one. That's why, I nag her the most, I annoy her the most ( at least I try). And of course I love her the most (here).

Unressed.


You guys are too cute 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Montai17

Wow,Saleha wow. It's because of you I joined IF. And truly it's worth it.


I am no good with comments,so I won't try.

In one word, amazing.

But the letters, CVS just ruined another great scene, another brilliant performance. I was never a fan of Nikita when it comes to emotional scenes. If it were given to Namik , he would have...(sigh).

Again a lovely update.


Nikita was really good in some emotional scenes like when Sumo goes to her mother's house or when Shravan agrees for the engagement but I agree with you Namik takes the cake ! It's because of his acting that I am able to write.
Thank you so much Swarupa ;)
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

awesome chapter
loved it
continue soon


Thank you Pinky !
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Posted: 8 years ago
amzing dear and beautiful penned.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Sal..I have always held you in awe as writer, and today you have just accentuated my regards for you.
It felt as if you were residing inside Shravan , as if it was being narrated by him. How else do you explain such picturesque description of what he was going through in every scene?

His dilemma, his agony, his anger, his contempt, his love. .every possible feeling of his was narrated with such accuracy that as a reader I felt like I was there with him, when he jogged, when he spoke to his dad, when he held her little finger, when he read those letters, when he gave her the parting forehead kiss.

The holding of the pinky fingers for me was symbolic as well. .that he was willing to take a small start towards their relationship but it was still a log way from holding the whole hand, a long way still from the ultimately fulfilling and simple relationship that she dreamt of with him.

Preeti and Pushkar entered the wedlock with no major expectations, like you walk into a theatre to watch a movie by a new director, you are willing to give him the benefit of doubt, you are willing to overlook his flaws in direction and even the onus of the end result is on you and not him..if you liked the movie, it was your brilliant decision to watch it and if you don't it was your silly mindless thought of giving the director a chance. Suman and Shravan on the other hand were bogged down by expectations. .Like a Karan Johar movie on poverty ...you never expect it..so you won't like it for sure.

The whole Tiwari killa scene was so heart touching, his discovery of the letters and his relief at knowing that she missed him as much .

This was not just a beautiful chapter Sal...it was phenomenal!!!

Like I said. ..you are awe worthy girl!



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