ShraMan FF: Holding You, (C18 pg 102) - Page 32

Excellent!!!!! 👏👏👏

Just beautiful!!

Originally posted by: Nik03

Res 😆
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Unres(For Chappii 6)
Sal...🤗
Am backkk!! 😎 😆

Ok Ok...Without any bak bak...lets go to the upii!!😉
😭
It was me!!

Shravan...The Broken Soul!! 🥺
He clutched the side of his t-shirt, where his heart rested,...This gesture...It says much more than words could!!
When the pain in the heart becomes unbearable, you starts feeling it externally too!!
N in Shravan's case...It was too much for a person like him.!!


Take it away... Please, just take it away...An innocent and broken beyond repair soul is begging to take away all the pain...The pain of heartbreak that too by your loved ones.
It pinches my heart!!

Sumo's care...❤️
It all that Shravan needed...Always!!

They belong together. Be it in the hollows of the darkness or the rays of light....Soulmates!!
They are together...n thats what matters the most!!
They can face everything together being each other's support and power!!

Please, hold on to me...You know Sal,...For me it signifies much more than physical support.
It feels like Sumo is asking and begging him to take her hand and stand up...To face every difficulty and problems.
To take strength from her.
As if to assure him that She will be there with him always...Just hold onto her.
And Shravan...As if he had nothing left in him to trust anyone,...He doesnt want to believe anyone, anything.
And he was sliping into unconsciousness...Unconcious of lonliness, of depression or of Death!!

Shravan." She whispered...It felt to me as if She was calling out his name to bring him back from that darkness from where there isnt any return.
And it worked!!

Dekho main hoon Sumo, main hoon tumhare saath...Telling him that she is here with him.And will always be there, by his side.No matter what!!

Tum ho?
Chod ke to nahi jaogi."...His insecurity asking her again for an assurance, a promise...Which his mind was trying to deny and his heart to believe.
The heart n soul who was afraid to be broken again...brutally!!

Kabhi nahi....Two words...Two most important words.
They were all what he needed to come back to her.

Chale?...An extanded hand by Sumo and Shravan accepted and hold onto her and do came back.
She and her love do brought him back to life!!

his head on her torso... ❤️
Like a child found warmth and security in his mother.

Her nimble fingers checking his breathing near his nostrils...Its the fear...Fear of losing him.
Her reason to live.

his best friend wouldn't fail him....❤️❤️
N this time there will be a wife who loves him more than anything along with his best friend.
She wasnt assuring him only but herself too.

It's like something had left his body...Oh My !!
It does felt like that. His will to live n believe left ..his soul was lost.

she had lost him to all the betrayals, the hurt and the hate....You did Sumo...but not in a way that he cant return back to you. His heart was ,is and will always remain attached to his...Who will always find their way to each other.

Sumo...This girl wasnt what CV's had turned her into.
She had the same broken heart as Shravan...No one to call hers...No one to care for her, no one to keep a hand on head in a loving manner...She was all by herself!!
She had to growup...independent , earn ...Along with a debt and feeling of liability.
To live with anger in your heart may not be easy but living witg a guilt is the worst!!
Sumo had that guilt within her all along!!

Sumo-Ramnath convo...Beautiful ❤️
his head was bowed down....My heart goes out to Ramnath here too. 😕

Kuch chahiye tha, Uncle ?...When Sumo asked it to Ramnath, It felt like he was asking for his son when he said...Shravan!!😕
Father's heart wants his son back!!

the man in front of her acknowledged her for the first time....Can feel for Sumo here.She always had longed for this acknowledge.Poor Girl!!

Ramnath's apology ...Sumo understanding him...Beautiful penned down Sal❤️

After all, they were both bound by the love they had for the same person and they both had tried in their own clumsy way to protect him....So damn true!!
They both loved him with all that they had...but their ways of protecting him were wrong.
They took it all upon themselves not letting him decide for himself.

Shravan's decision of talking to his parents...His first step towards his happiness!!

The urge to connect to him was so sudden,...They got conscious around him.Isnt it natural.

perfect family photo, where he wasn't left out....Oh My God... 😭
Shravan...you didnt deserved that!!

I soo loved how you had written Shravan looking at his mother from the corner of his eyes trying not to let them notice it,...Compairing his eyes with her,...Looking at her apperence, how she looked now...❤️ ❤️
It felt like a lost child, dying to feel his parents love is looking at them with all the longing he had always within his heart.
How he looked at his parents...So damn loveddd it ❤️ ❤️
These things makes your writing more effective Sal 👏

Unn hone aapko blackmail kiya aur aap ne dobara palat ke nahi dekha...Loved how you had written it...Shravan sitting and resting his head against seat n eyes closed...So many feels...!!

Mere liye ya aapne liya ?...This is the question!!
Bang on here Sal 👏

The way Shravan let ot all out...Loved it to the core Sal...❤️
Killed it girl.
The way he bared his heart out infront of her...OMG!!
Brought tears in my eyes 😭

I so loved how Shravan asked for some time for understanding all this.
Awesome ❤️

Sumo wanted him to let out his anger, his pain...Its what he needed now!!
A confrontation,..Answers to all his questions.

Ladti, jagad thi, mujhse bolti....This is what she must have done...Atleast had tried for once...But no!!😕
You shouldnt give up without trying even once!!

Because it was easier for you to give up on me."...Ouch!!
It hurts...much more!!
No matter how much it hurts ...but it was a truth, A bitter truth that you cant deny.
Not only Sumo, Nirmala Malhotra had also given up on him ...just like that!!

My heart is torn btw Shravan and Sumo here.
I cant say who was wrong...Ofcourse Sumo was but ...Was she to this extand????
No!!
She was indebted all her life. Living like a liability isnt easy.Where evrryone wants to get rid of her.
One question always linger on my mind...
Would Ramnath Malhotra had accepted Sumo as his DIL if she would have chose Shravan at that time,...Wouldnt she again be considered as selfish girl who only thinks about herself...wouldnt she be accused of snatching her sister's happiness by doing so...Wouldnt she be compared to Nirmala Ahuja again in that situation as well for being independent, selfish woman...And most importantly would Shravan had believed her if she had told him about the bitter truth of his father???
NO!!!!
He was so much blinded by his undying faith and respect in his father.
What an irony...Sumo was bound to be blamed!!!!!
But Shravan also cant be blamed...Both were right in their places!!

How can you expect me to come towards you when you made me feel unworthy every damn time...True that!!

The two best friends who had always something to say were both at lose of words, today....So beautiful Sal ❤️ ❤️
Coz both were fighting their own battles...Kuch khud se, Kuch ek dusre se, Kuch ek dusre ke liye apne aap se...!!

Ek baar koshish ki hoti....That cant be denied!!
She should have.
N that longing was always there.

You have already lost me...Ouch!!!
It hurts badly 😭 😭

. But if I saw you hurting the way I did. I would have given up in a matter of a heartbeat....Shravan ❤️
He would have been!!...As seeing Sumo in pain was never Shravan's thing!!

main pichle das saal se tumhara intezaar kar rahi hoon...Oh Poor Sumo 😭

Their tears mingled together even though they were the cause of each other's sorrow....Beautiful one Sal 👏
Sooo beautiful❤️ ❤️

Mere liye PCT chod sakti ho...His mind wants assurance and his heart wants to believe her!!

sawal ye hai ke kya tum mujhse kabhi ye maang paoge."...They both were mystery to each other...Yet nobody knows them better than the other one...Two pieces of puzzle who are incomplete without each other...They are ShraMan and their Love!!

he couldn't hurt people he loved, he couldn't give them the taste of their own medicine, especially knowing how much it hurt and even he was able to, his conscience wouldn't leave him with the satisfaction of his deed, his guilt would keep haunting him....Oh My God!!
This is Shravan!!...Thats it!!
These lines describes Shravan ..the true inner Shravan.!!

Torn btw Heart and mind...are we Mr. Malhotra!!

Loved to see Sumo in her real Sumo avtaar❤️
Galti...Isnt it what everyone makes her feel always.

she was not allowed to break in front of him....True!!❤️
Actually she wasnt allowed to break in front of anyone..!!

ShraMan...Both in sooo much pain 😭
Both are incomplete, breaking without each other...!!

Something was broken between them and mere words wouldn't be enough to mend it....For now it is!!
But eventually they'll find their way towards each other...And this time it'll be forever!!

You my girl are a magician...Creating a magic with your words.
You have written ShraMan's pain in the best possible way buddy...Hats off to you.👏

Uff!!
I didnt know what I have written Sal...N I guess I had written enough 😆
Sorry it is very much longer 😉

Thanks for the pm buddy 😊

Loads n Loads og Love n beary 🤗 🤗
Nikka sa Nik ❤️

You always see beyond what it's written and you see the details and that makes me really happy ;)
I really need to learn to quote properly as every of your paragraphs make me smile.
I love how you interpreted the characters' emotions here.
ShraMan had so much potential sigh just trying to fulfill that in my own way.
I wish they worked more on Sumo's character, like showing her struggles would have been a great thing to do.
I think that would have come in the next episodes. Again I love it that you pinpoint details I just imagine myself in his place and that really helps.
Don't apologize for writing an OS, this matters a lot to me Nikka sa Nik 🤗

Read all in a go..

Emotional one😭

Such a long update, Sal! An amazing one.

Unresd! ! Too soon by my standards 😆 #weekend update !

Super update...was so emotional that i was shedding silent tears with shraman😭 Very beautifully narrated...and the forehead kiss was the highlight. ❤️Looking forward to your next update😊

Originally posted by: Nik03

Ressi res 😆 😆
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Finally...!!

Sal...🤗
First of all sorryyy...Am later than late 😕
Really truly sorryyy😕


Coming to the upii...
Another Mind Blowing one Sal... 👏

Pushkar n Ramnath...The duo noticing a lost Sumo...She was truly lost!!
Tired of Life...When you got tired of life, you lost the zeal to live and when life becomes a burden...there is nothing more difficult than to still live a life without life.

Pushkar...The things that you had wrote about him noticing Sumo here is just love. This was the real Pushkar and this was their relation..❤️
He was not only an admiror of her but her protector also. He was a true friend n there it seems like one.

She was a fighter but when it came to his brother, it's like she stopped functioning altogether....True that!!
When you practically live for a person, and he for some reason started hating you(or pretend)...You lost the zeal.

Malhotra's...The love and care they had for each other here...Loved it!!❤️
Always wanted to see them like this.

Sumo thinking about Shravan all the while, about the mistakes she made in the past...She did ignored Shravan and his hurt back then n now Shravan couldnt found himself to trust or believe her coz of her ignorance towards his feelings.

Ego n the lack of Interaction between them were the reasons behind the problems n trust issues that they suffered.
Had they simply talked and shared things btw themselves, they would be a happy couple by now.

Sumo was indebted all her life n that is a fact. Either way, she was to be blamed n she was bound to lose the one she loves...😕

ShraMan...these two souls were made to be broken...but only one can mend the other one.

If one would break the other was already in pieces and they lay together on the floor....Loveddd it Sal !!
Beautiful...❤️ ❤️

Loved Pushkie-Sumo Convo...❤️
It reminded her of the day, he had come to her PCT...The real Pushkar.He was the one to understand them the most n to make them understand each other.

If anyone deserved their chance at happiness, then it was the two of them, more than anyone....Beyond Beautiful Sal...❤️ ❤️
They only deserved happiness!!

What an irony..the two people who couldnt stay away from each other, who literally would found reasons to be with each other, are now afraid to face the other n to look in other's eyes.

Shravan...the stubborn soul here.
He do care for her like before, he do know her more than anybody...but didnt want to show it to her ...in a bid to hurt her or should I say, to show her that he didnt care now intentionally.!!

No matter how nonchalant she acted about it. She was really sensitive at heart....She always was n who knows it better than Shravan himself!!

. He looked at his room in the semi darkness....Back to square one...Are we??
This is from where it all started.
Beautiful Sal...❤️

He asked urgely his fingers almost touching her wrist....OMG!!
This us sheer beauty.❤️
Like a scared child wants his parants not to leave him alone with strangers

Baal banaane mein...20 min.... 🤣
This is epic one 😆

He is slowly coming around.It'll take time ofcourse.
Ramnath...It somehow hurt me too.😕

Sumo went to PCT and Shravan to misunderstand her again...😕

Umeed to yahi thi tumse...
Its not the truth Shravan...Only n only Sumo can find you in the darkness n only she possesses the power to take you out of it too.

He stepped back and her hand fell limply at her side, reminding her, her position in his life....Ouch!!...It hurts.

This was another kind of hurt, when home was not home anymore....n its the most dreaded one.

The diif in views of them about their childhood...For Sumo, her childhood wasnt perfect but was a happy one until Shravan left and for Shravan, it was always unhappy n became unbearable after Sumo's betrayal.

They kept looking ahead. Even in the silence, the thumping of their hearts mingled, to become one. In that moment, just standing next to each other, in their own shell, where they were completely exposed. Parts of their broken hearts were mended....Loved it all to the core ❤️ ❤️

Aap ne aap se ladna parta hai. Har waqt. Samne wale ko samajhna parta hai,...Soo true.
Beautifully penned down Sal 👏
Holding grudges kills...True that!!

So soo true!!

Shravan's insecurities, his incapability to forgive even though his heart wanted to...His reasons were so apt.
N Sumo...She said all that Shravan badly needed at that time...That he need not to forgive now...Its the will that he wanted to forgive is important not the pace...Beautifully penned down buddy... 👏

We are imperfect people Shravan, kabhi kabhi pyaar jatane main ghalti kardete hain. But we all have our own clumsy way to express it, even though we fail most of the time....Its the most apt way to make him understand and to us as viewers too.Nailed it here girl. 👏

Shravan wanted to know the reason why Sumo did all that for him n Sumo here is right that whatever she will say, he'll assume what he wanted to no matter what.
N it hurts the most when person you loves the most doesnt acknowledge your reasons n make a sarcastic comment on it...Isnt what shravan does n will do too??

Both are captivated by their own ghosts of insecurities...but their love is much more deep n strong to fight all odds n it will!!

They were both hurt beyond measure and once again silence conquered it all....This time it has.But that time will be there when their love conquer all...And that will happen soon...Real soon!!

All in all a Mind blowing upii Sal...Hats off to you girl for writing in so much depth 👏
Loved it immensely ❤️

Thanks for the pm n do cont soon 😊
Loads of Love n 🤗
Nikka sa Nik ❤️

Pushkar was the best character ever I wanted to see more of him, alas ! The duo Sumo-Pushkar was the best, every time I read comments I realize the potential and if only we were given time.

I remember in the beginning of the story someone wanted to see Sumo realizing her mistakes here we are 😆
That's the way thing they didn't talk or when one of them tried to something or the other kept happening.
You and Tabby really have the eye for detail, yes it was back to square one !
He asked urgely his fingers almost touching her wrist.. Remember episode 5 when she is about to wake up Nanaji and he almost touches her wrist so many feels ❤️
I am happy those lines had an impact 😃
Thank you so much Nikka sa Nik 🤗
My Sunday is made ;)