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Posted: 8 years ago
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That was lovely Lubna👏... N heartbreaking also... Bechara Shravan...
That song 😭 first line of that song juz made my cry... It depicted Shravu so well... Its my fav song too...
Par meko Aur thoda padhna tha yaar... Plz Update soon...
Do PM me if possible...
Love,
ANU 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#12
Wow awesome.
Your words bring to life what we missed on the show...

Brilliant... Waiting for the update...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Amazing piece...
Bewda Shravan so restles... running away from the situation... Ramanath he is getting on my nerves... Uff...

I hope Shraman try to resolve their problems... & come together... I just hate this bewda Shravan... I want romantic Shravan...

Continue soon


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Posted: 8 years ago
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lovely update. poor shravan baby is in so much of pain and bechari sumo has no choice. please sab theek kardo. i want a happy shappy shraman.
update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: anukulgr8

That was lovely Lubna👏... N heartbreaking also... Bechara Shravan...

That song😭first line of that song juz made my cry... It depicted Shravu so well... Its my fav song too...
Par meko Aur thoda padhna tha yaar... Plz Update soon...
Do PM me if possible...
Love,
ANU😳

Thanks Anu, I know, this song goes so well with Shravan. Sorry couldn't send the pm, but I'm going to update the next part in the morning itself, its a little past 4 am here, and I will definitely pm you.

Lubna.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vimikrao

Amazing piece...

Bewda Shravan so restles... running away from the situation... Ramanath he is getting on my nerves... Uff...

I hope Shraman try to resolve their problems... & come together... I just hate this bewda Shravan... I want romantic Shravan...

Continue soon


I think you will like this Shravan in the next part. I'll update in few hours from now. Thank you so much for commenting.

Lubna.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: maddy_edkv

lovely update. poor shravan baby is in so much of pain and bechari sumo has no choice. please sab theek kardo. i want a happy shappy shraman.

update soon

Thanks Maddy, you won't be disappointed.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Beautifully penned👏👏 waiting for next eagerly😉
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Originally posted by: Namiksfan

Beautifully penned👏👏 waiting for next eagerly😉

Thanks a lot. So glad you like it. Will update it today for sure.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hi guys, I'm back with the second part of my SS. Thanks for the comments and the likes. I know you guys are expecting something real good, I really hope I do justice to it. As promised I have my version of EDKV tiltle song in this part. Please leave me feedback for what you like the most and what you did'nt, it will help me to improve. Also let me know if you like my version of the title track.Thanks again.


Chapter - 2


Shravan was boxing with his bleeding hand when the power turned off, he just want to hurt himself till he doesn't feel any pain. He kneels on the floor thinking his life have become dark and there is no hope of any light from any where.


Just then Suman enters with the candle, she sees him kneeling down on the floor.


Shravan!! she screams. He's just surprised to see her and can't even react. He is stunned looking at her, she looked so beautiful in that red lehenga that he was mesmerised, and in this dim light of the candle, her face glows like thousand fire flies. His heart skips a beat. She was here, his only hope of light, his sunshine. She pulls him up and takes his gloves out, he looks at her all worried then he trances back to reality, he pulls his hand away from her upwards hitting her forehead and dropping her maang tika in the process.


"What are you doing here, go away, I don't need you or your help"

"I know you don't need me, I'll leave after I bandage your hand" says Suman trying to hold his hand back. He moves away.


"Your fiance would not like it"

"I don't care"

"Oh yes Miss Suman Tiwari doesn't care about anyone" he moves his hand pushing her again.


Just then the light comes back, he looks at her, her forehead filled with his blood, he doesn't know what to say. He stares at her, "what's wrong" she questions.

"You have blood on your forehead", he saying trying to wipe it off, but she stops him. It's OK I'll clean it later she says.

"Ab bilkul hilna mat, jab tak main bandage nahi kar deti", this time Shravan listens. He watches her intently as she takes off glass shards from his hand with the tweezer one by one as some are deep in the skin as he started boxing after hurting himself.

"Does she care about me? He thinks.This is my last chance to ever know or even be close to her. He pulls a bit in pain, she gets worried and looks at him, he sees pain in it, a very familiar one, just like his. But then why is she doing this?


Back in the house, Aditya is surprised that Suman was not there. He calls her on the phone, but her phone rings on the couch behind him. Vandy says maybe Suman left, she was asking for the driver. She winks to Kamini.


"You go and rest now Aditya, you can meet your fianc in the morning" teased Kamini.

He smiles and goes to the guest room.


"Job done Mummy ji", smiles Vandy indicating Suman was in the basement and she locked the door from outside. She also calls Tiwari Killa to inform Suman will be back in the morning.


Shravan looks at Suman as he's confused, watching her so closely, she doesn't look happy. If she want to marry Aditya, why her eyes speak otherwise. He remembers when Preeti's wedding was fixed, she was so happy that her face said it all. But Sumo looks far from happy. I need to find out.


"Done. Don't hurt yourself again"

"Why do you care"

"You are my best friend, at least for me you still are"

"Then why did you hide something so big from your friend"

"What did I hide"

"That you love Aditya"

"I don't lo... It was very sudden. I don't want to talk about it"

Was she saying she doesn't love Aditya. Then why is she marrying him.


She turns around to leave. "Damn!! What do I do now, I need my answers".

"Would you not dance with me" he grabbed her hand and turned her around crashing her into his chest. I will be gone tomorrow.


Shravan!!! She gasped as he hold her bare waist trying hard not to melt down. "Mujhe dance nahi karna Shravan", I'm tired. I need to go, she said while walking towards the door. Shravan was upset. She looked back once before reaching the door. She tried to open it but it was locked from outside. Door is locked she said, a small smile crept on his face that he instantly changed into a frown. He tried to open the door hoping it's really locked from outside.

I think Kamal ji had locked it before leaving for his home said Shravan in a cheeky sound.

My phone is outside, do you have your phone?

"No, it's in the car".

Let's keep knocking and calling for help, someone might hear us.

I think everyone must be sleeping except Pushkar and Preeti, only if you want to disturb them then go ahead.

Suman gulped. What do we do now? She started sweating now.

Let's Dance

"I don't want to", "but I do",

Shravan!! Chodo Mujhe, "why do you just dance with Aditya now"? You don't like anyone else coming close to you anymore, not even me?

He wanted to get a reaction from her

He pulled her hard towards himself, she came crashing into him, then he pushed her away.

This was so overwhelming for her, her emotions, his proximity, her wedding decision, nanu's health, Aditya forcing to confess and on top of this she had not eaten anything all day, all this made her dizzy and when he pulled her back again she felt dizzy and just collapsed in his arms.

Sumo!! He screamed as she was slipping down from his hands but he managed to lift her up before she could fall.

"I'm sorry Sumo, sab meri wajah se hua, Sumo please uth jao"

He put her down and sprinkled some water on her face, she looked pale as if she had not eaten or slept for days. He picked her up in her arms and sat down on the floor. He remembered her accident, and days after that and that made him panic.

Sumo!! Sumo!! Please aankhen kholo.

She moved a bit and as she opened her eyes, she saw Shravan looking down her with so much worry and pain. He found helplessness in her eyes. She closed them again to regain some strength as she is going to loose him forever. He hugged her and kissed her head.

I cannot let her go. One thing's for sure, she is not happy, but what is she hiding and why?



Why did you leave your phone Suman? I miss you so much, blushed Aditya thinking about Suman when he remembered her phone. He checked her phone only to shock himself. He just found her pics with Shravan, there were no other pics in her phone, not even his selfie that he sent today. Did she delete his pic? He questioned himself. They look so much at ease with each other, I never saw them like this before. He now knew they both were more than best friends, and also the reason for her not to confess.


Shravan was getting more worried now. "Should I take her to the hospital now or wait" he thought as he was getting restless by each passing second. Just then she opened her eyes, that brought a smile on his face. Suman knew he must been worried the whole time.


"I'm sorry" she said trying to free herself from his hold.

"Are you OK" he asked moving and making her sit next to him. She just nodded in reply. He gave her the bottle, she drank some.

"What happened to you, looks like you have burdened yourself with everyone's responsibilities with Preeti's wedding, with Nanu's health, PCT and now your own wedding with Aditya", her eyes that were lowered snapped up as he said that and then turned around. You don't look happy with this alliance. "I'm happy" she shot back. Aditya is a nice guy. If you say so..smirked Shravan. He was expecting this. He knows her very well. "I just need to make her talk".


Ok tell me about Aditya Suman, how is he? When did this happen? Suman gulped, she didn't know what say.

"How do we get out of here? She asked instead.

We have to wait till morning.


Let's play a game, snapped Shravan.

What!! Game now? We are stuck here Shravan and you are thinking of playing game now, do something and let us out from here.

Why?? Don't you trust me? Or are you afraid that your fianc might not be happy knowing you spent a night in this basement with me?

It's nothing like that, and I'm not scared of anyone.

Bang on!!!

Then let's play a game instead of getting bored, maybe the last one for two of us. She looked at him with pain in her eyes. He saw that.

What game?

I will ask you 3 questions and you will answer it honestly.

She stood up in a jiffy, "I don't want to play this game", knowing very well where this could lead.

I played it when you asked me, now it's my turn to decide.

Ok fine, but I get to ask you 3 questions as well.

Of course!!

I'll go first since it's my idea.


"Why did you take PCT papers from Aditya"?

I had to.

Because you decided to marry him?

No. Because he gave an offer I couldn't say no to. Shravan looked confused, "I rejected it when he just gave me PCT back, but then he gave me a list of investors that were ready to invest in PCT. He gave me a business offer with good profit sharing agreement, I had to take it, so many people's life is associated with the business and besides...

Besides??

I thought you gave the papers to Aditya, trying to help me indirectly"

Something dawned on him, "she thought I gave him the papers to help her".

There was a silence for few minutes


Why did you break our friendship? Was it that easy for you?

Shravan didn't know what to say, now that he know why she did it.

No it wasn't easy. Aditya told me that you took papers from him, after you rejected to take it from me and Papa. You wouldn't talk to me, and suddenly Aditya became so important for you that you let him buy PCT for you. I'm sorry Sumo...

It's Ok. I'm over it.

No you're not. I won't let you, he thought.


Why are you marrying Aditya? It's clear that you don't love him. She didn't say anything for couple of minutes. Sumo!!

For Nanu. Shravan was relieved with the answer. There is something very important that you should know Shravan, Aditya is Nirmala Aunty's son.

Shravan's expression changed into anger as he heard her name, he punched the wall and winced in pain as he was already hurt on that hand.

Shravan!! She rushed to him, holding his hand.

Since when did you know about this?

Yesterday morning, she came to see Nanu after the attack, she got Aditya's proposal for me and because Nanu was worried for my marriage he agreed right away.

Shravan couldn't believe it, his own mom was the reason he is loosing his love, his life forever.

And you agreed?

I had to. Nanu was not taking any medication until I said yes.

Suddenly Shravan felt bad. She had a reason for everything she did and he was just speculating everything.


Did you ever love someone? He asked her right away. She tried to walk away but he pulled her wrist and stopped her. I don't want to play this game anymore and besides its not your turn.

"I don't care. I don't play by the rules anymore. I want my answers now".

Tell me did you ever love someone?

Yes!!!

If it's not Aditya then who???

I gave you the answer, I don't want to talk about it.

She tried to get off of his grip, but he pinned her to the wall.

Aaj nahi Sumo!!! Aaj nahi!!

Mujhe apne har sawal ka jawab chahiye aaj.

Us din cafe pe kyun nahi aayi? Kyun avoid kar rahi ho us din se?

Kya hua Sumo, sab theek tha na, phir achanak.

Kya kar diya Maine aisa, kisi ne kuch kaha kya, she stopped figiting hearing this, and it dawned on him, he remembered his Dad's smirk when he was talking to Sumo. Papa??.

She looked at him, stunned. He got his answer now.

She lowered her eyes again.

Tell me who did you love Sumo?

Why should I tell you, did you tell me whom did you love?

If I tell you, will you tell me? He said in husky tone close to her ear.

Suman gulped

"It's too late for it now just like you moved on, I moved on too"


Who is this S for? Don't tell me that you love yourself the most like you did before, because if that was the case you wouldn't have agreed to marry someone you don't love. It's definitely not you and clearly you haven't moved on either.

Have you??? She asked.

I thought I did but let me get this straight Miss Suman Tiwari, I was never over with you, I am not over with and will never be over with you...

Matlab??

Matlab I Love You Miss Suman Tiwari!!!!, always have and always will till my last breath. She closed her eyes just to sink in what he said. He smiled.

Open your eyes Sumo. No!!!

I don't want to open my eyes. What if it's a dream? He hold her chin and made her look up. It's not.

Shravan!!! She tried to say something, he put his finger on her lips. Let me finish today.

I'm very sorry for the way I behaved with you for the last few days, but I was jealous Sumo, I was loosing you right before my eyes and was not able to do anything. You were avoiding me and that was killing me inside. You were and are the only one I loved and who could keep me sane. Will you forgive me?

She smiled. I already did.

Ok now tell me who is the S for?

It's for you, always have. Why?? He asked pulling her more closer as he wanted to hear those words from her.

She looked straight into his eyes, because I Love You!! Loved you since you left me 10 years ago.

He hugged her as tight as he could just repeating I love you as many times as he could, she hugged him and responded in same way.

They broke the hug and looked at each other and smiled.

Suddenly Suman was quite. I'm scared Shravan". You don't have to, I will set things right.

Do you trust me? "With my life"

Then stay in my life because for me there is no life without you.

He held her face with both hands, slowly bent down and kissed her eyes.


Aankhon me bankar khawab tum rehna sada yunhi

Dil ki har dhadkan se tum milna sada yunhi

Ke phir juda na ho kabhi tere mere raaaste

Mil jane de dil jo bane Ek Duje Ke Vaaaste...


He then kissed her forehead, then her cheeks and then stopped for her to open her eyes,she smiled and lowered her eyes. He hold her chin and lift her face with tears in his eyes. Shravan!! She questioned?

I don't want to live those days again, promise me you would never leave me alone.

I promise...



Tumse hua jo door to tadpa hoon har ek dum

Tere Milne se mile sab zakhmon ko marham

Ab doonga Jane na tumhe, main apni panaahon se

Mil hi Gaye dil jo bane Ek Duje Ke Vaaaste...


And I promise to always take care you of you and never leave you alone Sumo.

What about your flight in the morning? I'll cancel it right now, he got his phone out.


What??? Did you think I will loose the only chance I had to be with you, he replied kissing her cheek again. "I'm glad you didn't", Suman chuckled. I sent a message to Rakeshji to cancel my ticket.

While he put his phone back, he found the pendant, he got it out.

What's this? All my love, he replied and put it in her neck. I got this for you 10 years. She looked at him with all the love she had, he came closer bent down and kissed her lips. Her heart skipped a beat but then started beating double time. He paused to see her reaction, all flushed, he took her lips again passionately this time, like they were both ready for it. They have been longing for this and the way they both kissed was as if reminding each other how much they wanted this forever.


Finally they stopped to breath. Both smiled with their forehead still together. Sumo marry me right now, he said.

How can we marry now? She asked still panting.

Look I filled your forehead with my blood even though it was accidental, then I put this chain in your neck, we just have to take pheras, we can take it around the candle here, he said still holding her hand.


You've lost it!! Whacked Sumo. It doesn't happen this way. I want a proper wedding with all the rituals. But first how do we convince Nanu?

You leave that on me, I know Nanaji will understand, and I'm not going to take any chance, I will talk to Nanaji in the morning itself. He loves me. He will agree.


I know we have a lot clear but let's not worry about it now. Just sit with me in my arms. I'm never letting to go again. Do you get it my would be wife?

Of course I do would be husband...

...


Finally done!!! How was it guys. I know its kinda lenghty, but I wanted to cover everything. This was in my mind since PreeKar wedding, but didnt think of penning it down. But I'm glad I did. This did me a confidence to write more. So don't be surprised if I'm back with yet another story. I want to keep trying till I'm good at it. So bear with me guys.Thank you so much for all the comments.



Edited by LubSha - 8 years ago

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