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Posted: 8 years ago
#41
Lub...just read both the parts...and
My heart literally skipped a beat...OMG m speechless!!!
FANTABULOUS,MINDBLASTING,STUPENDOUS!!!👏👏
Jitni tareef ki jaay kum hai srsly.
Beautifully Penned!!..U nailed it for sure..👍🏼
Loved it!❤️Loved it!❤️Loved it!❤️
oohh the how can i miss ur version of tittle song...bang on!!
Loved it!❤️...each stanza held so much emotions which directely touched my heart.
Trust me u r a phenomenal writer..plz plz plz continue this one please *puppy eyes**pouts*
I wud love to read more of it...
Cvs nay tu kachra hi kiya story line ka..Thank God we got you an excellent replacement for them.😉
Love yaa🤗



Take Care!
Sunain.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: ArpitaSingh1806

<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">girl, believe me when i say this, agar yeh ending cvs bhi kar dete to edkv would have been on top on that month, na itna khichta na itni buri tarah se end hota, this is utterly beatiful, for heavens sake pls write more, im buddying you, and then you send me a pm of what ever you write, plllsss*puppy eyes.</font>

<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">love</font>
<font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">Arpita😆</font>

Thank you so much Arpita. I'm flattered. Means a lot. Thanks for buddying me. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
#43
aww this was so beautiful love it!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#44
Hi everyone, first of all thank so you so much. I never thought of being appreciated this much by all you amazing writers and readers. Upon request I decided to move my story forward and make it to SS. I was and still reluctant of this but then I thought let's try it, hope I don't disappoint you. This is relatively a small part, as I am still figuring out the story ahead. I have included the scene which Namik narrated in his last Periscope chat. Let me know, if you like it. Please leave me a honest feedback, even if you don't like it. Thanks again. Here you go...

Chapter- 3



"Sumo" hmmm...
So gayi kya?
Nahi... Kyun nahi? "Kal tumse door hone ke gham se neend nahi aa rahi thi, aaj tumhare mil Jane ki khushi me neend nahi aa rahi".
Shravan smiled as he hugged her more close while she was sitting in his arms. Her head on his chest listening to his heartbeat.
"Shravan I never thought it would possible for us to be together after all that happened between us", ab kabhi bhi Mujhse door mat Jana, chahe kuch bhi ho jaye"
"Kabhi bhi door nahi honga, tum janti ho humne apni ego ke chalte kitne lamhe barbaad kar diye, wo moments jo hum ek saath bita sakte the, jis me hum dono khush reh sakte the, bahut khoobsoorat yaadein bana sakte the, wo humne ladte ladte nikaal diye sirf apni ego ke chalte, kabhi tumhari aur aksar meri. Lekin ab maine decide kar liya ke ab main ego ko hum dono ke beech nahi aane doonga. Kyunki Shravan apni Sumo ke bina adhoora hai."

Sumo smiled as tears brimming from her eyes, Sumo bhi apne Shravan ke bina adhoori hai. Main bhi vaada Karti hoon ke hamare beech kisi ki bhi jagah nahi, ego ki to bilkul nahi.
Lekin ek ki jagah hamesha hogi hamare beech...
Woh kya??
Kiss ki.. And he captures her lips again making her gasp. Both passionately kiss until they run out of breath.
Bol kar nahi kar sakte the!!!
"Nahi, tum nahi janti Sumo, kitne kuch Kehne aur kitne kuch Karen ko tarsa hoon main, ab aur nahi, tum meri ho aur main jab chahe tumhe kiss karunga. Hamesha tayyar rehna", he winked placing another kiss on her cheek.

"Shravan" woh sab chodo,
"I'm hungry".
"Me too, because you burn a lot of calories when you kiss"
Shravan!! she whacked him. "You can't think anything else right now, I'm hungry because...
"Because you didn't eat anything all day", he completed for her, and no one cared about you.
"It's not like that, wedding is such a big responsibility and everyone was busy". "Busy doing what Sumo? You managed everything by yourself as if Preeti's wedding was your responsibility, but no one of cared about you.
They do Shravan and besides I'm not a baby.
"You are to me, no one ever pampered you Sumo, but I promise you are and always be the center of my world" I will give you all the happiness you deserve.
I know Shravan and I'm happy only when you are with me.

It's 4 am what do we do now, I'm hungry and we are locked in here.
Don't worry you'll get your food delivered right here. He makes a call, "Shravan baba sab theekh hai na? Aap ne Kaise..., Ramu kaka aap zara ek plate khana basement me lekar aayiye please. "Abhi le kar aata hoon".

"Kis ne band kar diya tha aapko Shravan baba? khana main table pe lagadoon kya? Nahi kaka aap jayiye, main theek hoon"

"Let's go eat outside Shravan", no let's stay here he stops her. I never liked this basement this much before as of now, this has become my favorite place now. The darkest night of my life converted into the brightest ever in this basement. Suman smiles.

Shravan spoons the food and gives her a bite, she smiles with wet eyes taking the first bite. They both feed each other with all the love they have for one another.

Now? She asks him, "door is open",
Do you want to go? she nods in negative. Then just think the door is still locked, I'll drop you home before everyone is awake. Suman sits down with Shravan in his arms with her head on his chest. Close your eyes Sumo, I'll wake you up in an hour he says. She nods and within minutes dozes off to sleep with a smile crept on her face.

Shravan holds her tight and thinks about his Dad. "I never expected this from you Papa, but now no one can take my Sumo away from me".

He watches her sleep and thinks of the night he was peeking from behind the book, then remembers Aditya announcing his wedding with Sumo and closes his eyes in frustration.

"Who could have closed the door, although I have no complains, I still need to find out who did it and why". He kisses her head with a content smile he had in years...


Edited by LubSha - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#45
Res

I'm getting ready for my exam and after reading this I have a smile on my face!! I feel so light!! Thank you!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: Castile2

Res

I'm getting ready for my exam and after reading this I have a smile on my face!! I feel so light!! Thank you!!

Thank you so much Cas. All the very best for your exam.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#47
wow... nice update
i loved the way you included the dialogues.. and that kitna kuch kehne ko wala dialogue also 😊

Converting this into SS.. well that is a pretty good decision...!!! 🤗

Thank You 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
#48
Wooo. It is turned into an ss. Whaa. What a story. Aisa kuch tv par dekhne KO milta to game chain milta. Amazing yaar.ok after reading the update I realised u have include that cut scenes narrated by Namik in the periscope chat.
Edited by pal655 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#49
In between my assignment... I am reading this one! Thank you.. For writing this...it made me happy.. Now I can concentrate more...shravu.. Is such a sweetheart! Now ramu kaka ki band bajegi! 😆..love you.. And keep writing...🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
#50
Kash ye sab series Mai dekh pate.
Badly missing it
Nice update continue soon

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