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Posted: 8 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: Sb1185



Chunna and zeherili chiriya! Mast naam hai re baba! 😆


haas kya rhi ho...chalo beta gi shru ho jao...apna bhi tu nickie batao..hum tu bara has rhi ho😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
#62

Originally posted by: Sunain


haas kya rhi ho...chalo beta gi shru ho jao...apna bhi tu nickie batao..hum tu bara has rhi ho😉

+1 Naina... Chalo juju.. Shuru HO jaoo... Eager to kno ur funky n fantastic nickies 😃😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
#63
Hey! Thanks for the PM!
Really loved the story conceptualisation. It very beautiful and poignant.

Update soon!😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: anukulgr8

+1 Naina... Chalo juju.. Shuru HO jaoo... Eager to kno ur funky n fantastic nickies 😃😆


I have only one nickname! Quite an embarrassing one! Bunny! Yes thy name is Bunny! 😵
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Posted: 8 years ago
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hey fellows... when will u ipdate next part dear ... waitinggg
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: mariajamal

hey fellows... when will u ipdate next part dear ... waitinggg


Will update soon sweets, working on Destined, after that, it will be updated! Be patient plsss... 🤗
Edited by Sb1185 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sb1185


I have only one nickname! Quite an embarrassing one! Bunny! Yes thy name is Bunny! 😵


arey...pagal larki itna cutoo nickie tu hai..Bunny.
pata hai Maa meray chota bhai ko khargoosh bolati hain aur mein jealous hoti hon aur tumhein sab bunny bolatay tu embarass hoti ho
tumhara tu pata nhi mjhy tu yaa nickie bindas laga😉
Edited by Sunain - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hiii... Alll... Again I have come with an another crap... The last part of shackles! I was a bit doubtful about this... As it's a love story with a twist, but the love and support it got from you all, it's overwhelming! Though I guess many of you has already predicted, what is the problem with Suman. Let me tell you, you are close enough but not totally!

Ok.. Let's started then... And yes.. This part is for girlgunjan. Thank you sweets, for your lovely pm. I am literally overwhelmed!

It will be from Suman's POV.


Warning: Some parts of this chapter might be mentally disturbing!

Last part

Why I didn't tell him anything, when he came to see me first time! Now that we were married, I knew I had deceived him; I knew the way he behaved today, wasn't his fault! He couldn't take it anymore! I knew I should tell him the reason, but I couldn't, how could I, what would he think of me, about my family!

I was almost half asleep then I heard a thud! I got up from the bed, and saw him. Yes, he was drunk! He wasn't even able to stand properly...
"Shravan... " I felt really bad for him, again I knew, I was the reason behind this... I tried to help..

But he shoved me hard! "Paas nahin aana!" His rudeness, hurt!

"Please Shravan, let me help you.."

"Help! " he fumbled!

I didn't know what to do! The man of his height, his physique, was not so easy handle! "Shravan... ."

"Stop taking my name like that! You didn't want to marry me haan! " He stumbled on the carpet, and landed on floor!

"Shravan.. " I rushed towards him..

"I am ok... I am ok.. .isse badi badi thokre lagi hain mujhe!..."

He looked at me with those big light brown eyes, accusing me of ruining his life; so much pain, so much agony flashed in those eyes.. ."You don't like me.. .tum mujhse keh sakti thi.. .na... Main nahin karta tumse shaadi!"

What could I say.. "Please shravan hum subah baat karein!"

"Subah!"...he tried to get up...but couldn't.. ."Subah hogi Suman?" he barked a laugh! "Suman..yeh naam... .Shravan k sath really goes well nahin! But Suman to kabhi shravan ke sath thi hi nahin! "

"Shravan I. ..."

He sat on the ground, resting his head on the side table closing his eyes... "You know, when I saw you first time in that red saree, I thought... " suddenly his eyes searched mine... "Your eyes... " then he hold my face... And said...

"Her big brown eyes had
Mesmerized him for as
Long as he could
Remember and whether
She knew it or not, he
Would do anything she
Asked so long as she
Gazed those eyes upon
Him."


For a whole minute, I couldn't breath! His face so close to mine, his eyes, fixed upon my face...I leaned without thinking! He instantly grabbed my lips with his.. And mumbled.. ."I love you.. Suman I love you... "

I didn't know when that innocent kiss had become the passionate one! He kissed me with all the love, passion, hunger; I felt feverish! His hands slid to my neck, to my shoulders, to my waist! My softness were crushing into his hard body.. .he growled, and tighten his arms around me! I know I couldn't resist him anymore!

But suddenly something flickered in my mind! I opened my eyes.. .I saw Shravan in my arms.. .clutching me, kissing the crook of my neck. ."NO" .I pushed and I ran away leaving him flabbergasted!

Again and again and again... How many times...I would hurt him...what was his fault! I would tell him.. .everything! He already hated me! Let him hate me more, but I would not hurt him anymore by my doings!

*****
I couldn't enter the room that night; I didn't have the nerve! I spent the remaining hours of that night in the lawn.

"Arre beta tum yahan is waqt"

"Woh mummy ji main di se baat kar rahi thi... "

"Ok... Achcha suno.. Aj main aur tumhare papa dinner bahar karenge...ek dinner meeting hai.. Aur pushkar ka koi dost aa raha hai US se to woh bhi bahar hi hoga! Tum aur Shravan dinner kar lena.. Wait mat karna... Ab chalo fresh ho jao aur breakfast karlo.. ."

"Ji.. Main Shravan ko bhi bulake lati hoon.. ."

"Woh to office chala gaya.. Tumhe nahin pata.. "

Why would he tell me.. "nahin, woh main phone pe busy thi shayad.. Isiliye.. "

"ok... Jaldi ana beta..."

Then and there I called him up... But no answer! He was avoiding me.. The way I reacted last night, what else he could! But I dialed his number again.. .again no answer... "Please Shravan, talk to me once.. ." I mumbled!

The whole day had passed, I had dialed his number umpteen times, but no answer!

It was eleven in the night.. Shravan had come home nearly one hour ago! He didn't even bother to look at me!

I was waiting for him to come down for dinner! Bahadur kaka came and told me.. "Shravan baba dinner karke aye hain.. Unhone kaha aapko batane ke liye! " He was doing everything, to avoid me! But I had decided, today I would tell him everything.

There he was standing in the balcony.. "Shravan... " his whole body stiffened! "Shravan... Can we talk please... " Niether he answered nor he turned around! I knew this was my last chance... He didn't walk away.. Then he might had given me a chance!

"Main dus saal ki thi.. It was my cousin's marriage! So all of us went to Mumbai...shaadi ke din baki saare bachchon k sathe main hide seek khel rahi thi... So I hid into a room, behind the curtains..." I closed my eyes.. .I was going to face the biggest fear of my life... The biggest incident of my life, which had changed me altogether! "I heard a sound...I peeped around the curtains. ..." I knew my breaths were now out of control; My sentences were all incoherent! But I had to continue! "I saw them. A man and a woman! I couldn't see their face that time... But I knew the voices! My bhaiya and bhabhi.. Shravan I have a brother, an elder brother, Shashank! ..we all hid this from your family... ."

This time shravan turned...he looked at me..."You don't have to tell, if you are in this much pain... .Suman.. " ...I laughed! He still cared!

I looked at his eyes.. ." Shashank bhaiya and sunita bhabhi.. .they were arguing on something...'you are drunk shashank, I will talk to you when you are sober! For now let me go.. ." Bhabhi tried to open the door.. But bhaiya pulled her and said she should not forget that she was his wife! He had all the rights...suddenly he grabbed her hair and pushed her on the bed...bhabhi screamed so hard shravan...so much pain... Then bhaiya was on all over her body.. .slapping her, torturing her, as if he was some kind of animal... I still can hear bhabhi's those muffled screams... She was pleading Shravan, but bhaiya was relentless! After satisfying his need...he left bhabhi there...naked...covered with bruises and blood lots of blood...I saw it all Shravan! I came out and bhabhi saw me... The amount of humiliation, mortification I saw in her eyes... I can't even describe that to you...there were no tears in her eyes shravan...the way she was staring, as if she was dead! I didnt know what to do... To my astonishment she stood up and put her clothes on, and she walked out of that room!" I looked at him... He was gripping the railing of that balcony so hard,that it would have crumbled if it was not made of iron! "Next minute I heard, someone's voice...Sunita bhabi ...she had jumped from the roof Shravan! She died Shravan...and I. .."I was sobbing now, crouched over myself, "Shravan... " I was saying his name, over and over again, my voice ragged, emerging somewhere from my chest! I needed the strength to continue... Shravan hesitated... "Suman... It's ok... You dont need to say... "...

But I had to finish! "Everyone was stunned, to see bhabhi like this. Someone started making stories...I just couldn't take that anymore, I went to maa and papa and told... told everything! You know shravan papa ne kya kaha...he said, isme kya badi baat hai! Pati tha uska! Pati patni mein zabardasti kaisa! He supported bhaiya Shravan! Because of his son, his daughter in law died but he didn't care at all! Maa ne bhi kuch nahin bola... Pati aur patni ka rishta kya sirf yehi hota hai... Usidin maine soch liya ki I will never get married! I can't be second sunita bhabhi!!"

"But where is your bhaiya... I didn't see him in our marriage! " Shravan sighed!

"Sunita bhabhi ke ghar walo ne case kar diya tha.. Physical and mental torture ka! Kyunki marital rape is not counted as an offense! bhaiya ko saza mili 7 saal ka! But after that 7 years we never heard from him! He never came back! We don't talk about this, that's why we didn't tell you all about this. "

"I'm sorry," I said, looking up, my face contorted. "I'm sorry. I can't ..."...He lifted his arms a couple of inches, but hesitation was clear in his eyes.. "It's ok Suman... It's ok! Just breath ok... " his voice was calm, reassuring! I stretched my hand and hold his...

. His face, inches from mine, was etched with worry. I closed my eyes and interwined my fingers with his, felt the warmth of his hand as something comforting. I felt his eyes on me, and wished he wouldn't look. My hands wouldn't stop trembling, and my stomach felt as if it were made of a million knots.

"Shravan, please hug me..." only thing I could manage to say...he took me into his arms... I cried then. Not sobbing, this time. The tears left me silently, and told me something else was leaving me. Guilt. Fear. A few other things I hadn't yet found words for. I leant my head gently on his chest and he tilted his head until it rested on my head...

"Shravan. ..."

"hmmm"

"Mere liye wait karoge... "

"Umrabhar... "

His arms tightened around me! I never felt this much secure in my whole life!

"tumhe poetry bahut pasand hai.. ..hai na..."

I felt him smile... .

"Kuch sunaoge... "

He sighed,
"Jab jab dard ka baadal chhaya
Jab gham ka saya lehraaya
Jab aansoo palkon tak aaya
Jab yeh tanha dil ghabraaya
Hum ne dil ko yeh samjhaya
Dil aakhir tu kyun rota hai?
Duniya mein yun hi hota hai"

He held my face into his caressing hand and made me see into his eyes...

"Yeh jo gehre sannate hain
Waqt ne sabko hi baante hain
Thoda gham hai sabka qissa
Thodi dhoop hai sabka hissa
Aankh teri bekaar hi nam hai
Har pal ek naya mausam hai
Kyun tu aise pal khota hai
Dil aakhir tu kyun rota hai..."


Ok... This is it... I hope its not too much to handle! Let me know whether you liked it or not.

Last poetry was taken from the movie zindegi na milegi dobara.


Edited by Sb1185 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#69
RES
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UNRESS

Sorry juju...mai zyada late ho gaye...Shorrie...*puppy eyes* Really shorry yaar...
Hope tunne maaf kar diya hoga...Agar nahi toh once again sorry...😳
Coming to the update...Don't u dare call it a crap.😡..inna aacha chapter ko crap kaise keh sakti hai tu yaar...Sacchi..This was the best...👏
I juz waana hug u for giving us this beautiful TS...Plz plz plz epilogue dedena...Mai mere jholi phelakar tumse epilogue ke bhek mangti hu😆😆...#dramaqueenme... Plz epilogue dedo...
This update was marvelous...outstanding and I sholud say one pf the masterpieces of urs...
Shravan ka ghussa bhi jayaz tha...
Sumo's past..OOOMMMGGG.🥺..I juz couldn't believe mah eyes...I had never in the wildest of my dreams thought of this...It was juz beyond prediction...Darkest of all...I juz had goosebumps when I read that part...
Intimate moment..❤️ Shravan juz couldn't control his emotions...
Sumo ka daar..Her feeling about marriage..I totally agree with that...jab bachpan mey isa incident ho tab puri life toh impact rehta he hai...Savita bhabi..That was heartbreaking..🥺I was also holding my desk so hard ke agar woh metal ki nahi hoti toh it would have cramped...that was truly heartbreaking..💔
Shravan understood her so well and comported her too...Saacha pyaar..❤️
Poetry...Beautiful choice...I was juz singing it throughout...😊
Over all it was one of the best dark stories I have ever read.👏...Plz do write more...
Aur ha plz plz plz epilogue dedo...warna turn this into a FF or SS...ur choice😉
Luv ya...🤗
Love,
ANU😳

Edited by anukulgr8 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#70
Res
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Unres

Bunnyyy...!!!!!!🤗
WHT A MASTER PIECE THT WAS!!!
Incredible...Mindblasting...Phenomenal...jitni tafreef karon kam hi hogi..it was tht much.
You literally stole my heart...loved it to core!❤️
Beautifully penned...without any dout.
Dont u even dare to call it crap...😡...its the most beautiful TS i got from you😳i literally want more...srsly...i wish k tum issey SS mein turn kardo...please.....yar it was damn damn damn Amazing...n the thought of its ending makes me 😭...tu kya plzzz tum issey agay continue kar sakti ho..plzzz literally begging u.I knw u'll nail it as a SS too ur plot is worth reading...chalo agar SS nhi tu ek acha sa lenghty sa epilogue hi day do*puppy eyes**pouting*
please do give it a thought.

coming back to upiii...
haah..In the begining i really felt bad for Shravan😭
His outburst👏
Their passionate moment❤️
Poetry was❤️..apt choice😉
thn her distancing herself from him made me😒
OMG!!!Suman's past 😲😭...really pity her...wakai..men n their virility😡...their mentality is so low.Poor bhabhi😔
She was literally crunching every second she recalled tht moment n tht time she felt only Shravan can console her...n obviously he did😊
He assured her tht he'll always be ther for her n wil wait for her.Seemed she started trusting him n was taking a step closer to him n so was going to give a chance to their mairrage...after all she had suffered through an agonising torment.
I believe Shravan will help her recover soon😳

wel i just loved it...i just love dark stories n so this one stole my heart...made me emotional too but loved it alot!
n han the poetry at the end...apt choice dear...was icing on the cake😉
please meri request par ghor zaroor farmana😳
hope to see u soon😃
Love u soo much🤗
till thn..


Take Care!
Chunna/Lalchi❤️
Edited by Sunain - 8 years ago

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