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orion23

@orion23

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: Safire

Oh,NO!! You can't do this😭

Well I did...

It was how I had imagined this OS..

Don't read if it hurts too much..

Stay with the happy one😳

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Spandana

@sptrno

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#32

This a bit different from your other writings but still so beautiful & emotional love it hun...

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bmegha

@bmegha

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#33

you made me cry by writing this story, so please don't write a sad story its request otherwise its a beautiful story but i like happy ending.

and seriously your a good writer you write fabulously story.

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Safire

@Safire

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Not so happy ending!!!!

That was it!!!! Zoya,you marvelled it👏 This one was way more beautiful than the happy ending one!!! most emotional!!! Usually i don't cry while reading, but today you get the credit for making me cry!!!!!

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Nik03

@Nik03

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

When i see ur update , i was in dilemma whether to read it or not coz am very sensitive n emotional...but then i was like no will read it as i dont want to miss ur writting
N damn!!!!u made me cry literally 😭
Even though shravan was dead in d end of story but still i felt like he was there in every scene with his sumo 😕 ...
i cant n havent read a sad story before coz i cant handle it...but i really loved this one👍🏼
Loved ur note at d end..sooo true 😊
Superb!!! 👏
A big hug 🤗
Love
Nik

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vimikrao

@vimikrao

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#36

lovely OS Zoya...
yesterday one OS & today another one...if we get daily like this we r the most happiest reader of forum...

in the show after this bachelor party Shravan has came know that Nirmala is Aditya's foster mother...but here we got something different here Shraman's confession was superb...

keep writing

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_anukulgr8

@_anukulgr8

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#37

Res
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Unress

Finally..IF ne permission de diya...
So as I was saying tere is update ne mujhe rula he diya...😭
I dont cry on reading emotional stories(self control karti hu..😆)
par aaj toh tumne mera self control ka chakna chuur kar diya...😆
Kya update tha yaar...Sad story...😭
Sacch tumhari baat nahi maani maine tissue box lene ki aur pachta rahi hun...😃
And that dialogue creation of urs...Hayye...Sahi tha and totally true...👏
Coming to the update...It was heart-wrenching..💔
when she confessed to him I was like..Wow ..Awesome..Love u Sumo...
But that crash..🤢🤢It just made me numb...
It took me sometime to come out of the trance..wipe my eyes and start reading again...
It was totally awesome...👏
Tum ruk jao jaate jaate, sajhde mai jhuk jaaon.."

"Ek baar keh do ruk jao, sau baar ruk jaoon.."Haaye...Isne toh mere selfcontrol ke tukde tukde kar dale...😭

Jab bhi thandi hawa tumhare baalon ko sehlaye, samjh lena mai hoon. Jab bhi barish ki boon tumhe chooaye, ah.. samjh lena mai hoon. Jab dhoop kuch zyada tez ho, samjh lena mai hoon. Jab mujhe mehsoos karna chaho, apne dil par haath rakhna, dhadkano mai mai hi miloonga. Awesome lines..Felt the pain in them...😭
and the last...those children...that was so cute...Shravan was not there n still sumo was happy...talking with his picha...that was so beautiful
Agar saach kahu toh ye jo ending ka para tha na..ye maine bohot pehle imagine kiya tha...like when I saw EDKV first..
All in all..It was a sad, heart wrenching, beautiful, marvelous,...M out of words..
*I can predict that aftr readin the above line tumhare maan me aayega ki inna likhne ke baad bhi m sayin m out of words..*🤣
Par kya karu..Jitna likhu utna kam hai...
Loved it n enjoyed it totally...
Do come up with new ideas soon..(as always)😳
Love,
ANU😊

Edited by anukulgr8 - 8 years ago

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pal655

@pal655

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#38

I couldn't complete the whole is as I choked because I was crying as hell and I have so many things to say so even cant just res. But it is beautiful and hell emotional. O god. But as we know love never ends. Truly explained in this piece. Kudos to you zoya di

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Riana

@-AnnieQueen-

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#39

Zoya love 🤗
Such a beautiful OS
I am not a fan of sad endings and I completely get what you are trying to say
But still happy endings give hope you know
And to live we need hope a lot of them
Enough of it
I'll talk about the not so happy one first
It was beyond emotional and tragic
I would never want ShraMan to end like that
But still it was painfully beautiful
And the happy one
I also have a complaint about this one Zoya
I was expecting a love making scene at the end :/
But it wasn't there:(
Koi na ending toh acchi thi
But still I would loved a love making scene 😆
Keep writing more
Love you bro 😃