Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed

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castile

@castile

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Posted: 8 years ago

#491

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'...mil gayi manzil mujhe' ❤️

That's on of my favorite songs 😳
It was so apt for this chapter!
Coming to the chapter...
One big 🤗 from me!
Only Vakil Babu can make everyone this anxious! 😆
But it is also true that he does everything in extreme 😕
'...clearly everyone is in no mood for pleasantries' 😆
Bhai shakal dekhi hai apni?! 🤣
JK!! (Waise dekhi hai hum ne bhi... Shakal I mean! 🤪 I am a good girl! #NaAsanskariThoughts #BaeBegesToDiffer )

On a serious note...
Hating really does not get us anywhere 😔
Its the easy way out and also very damaging too...
Not just for that individual experiencing it but also for others, especially those who love him...
'I would gladly go back into the hell, cause it's familiar, it's home' 💔
My heart broke when he said that 🥺
But since this is Shravan and that too in Your alternate ending, he just had to go and say...
'But now, I have another life attached to me...' ❤️
You do some of the best balancing acts with emotions 👏 😆
Ramu Kaka and Nimmo...bless you!
#BharatMilaap 👍🏼
And now we are talking Lambu!!
Let's get shadi ready!! 🤬 🥳
#ShraMan #ShaadiSwag 😎 🤪
Pushkar and his #PushpdentSmile 😃 🤣
Just loved the ShraMan moment there!
'My wife'
'...that's between me and my wife!' 😉
Yes! He can get married in a pair of tracks! 😆
#FirstHandExperience #WeKnowBetter
Naanaji and 'punishment' go a long way back...!
#SlaysterReturns 😎
"Ladka ladki na, hum husband aur wife hai." 😆
Could you get anymore adorable than this Mr. Malhotra?! 😳
'Yep' 😃
And here comes...
Mr. Shravan Sulking Malhotra!
Just loved the whole convo there... ❤️
Pandit bacch gaya!! 😛
(Preekar ki shaadi walla Pandit? Jisko Maya har promo me maarti hai? )
Shravan has indeed won Nanu's beloved grandchild...he would loose any bazzis happily for that! 😳
Maamiji's eyes!! 🐷
Sumo!! Kya kaata tha? Shravan?! 🤣
And off we go with the 'heart attack' again! 😛 😉
Haan Shravan! Yeh pagal tumhare hi hisse likhi thi! 😆
Pushpa and her M.I.A. brain! 🤣
God bless Shravan!
But OMFG!!
What was with the 'touching' 'checking' 'swelling'?!! 🤣
But then he says...
'Meri dhakkan'
Zoya back to balancing!! Who's complaining? None!
Then back to 'swelling badh jaayegi' 🤪
The Chronicles of the Memory Box!!
'...aa jao...' and '...aa gaye'
The 'speed-breaker' was 🤣
Mr.Shravan Beshram Malhotra is so delicious! 😳
Pity we didn't get to see him onscreen! 😕
Motu and Lambu returns! 😳
This should be named the 'Returns' chapter!! 😆 So many things made a come back!
Jokes apart...
They are married. Finally!

Zoya, many people have said this already but can I say too?!
You are one gem of a writer!
Continue and waiting for the Epilogue 😳

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sapphire3

@sapphire3

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Posted: 8 years ago

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So sorry I kept you waiting ...you know na I'm a slow reader 😆
You dedicated this chapter to us (Baki mitragan bhi hain na 😆 )
Thank you so much 🤗

Shravan Malhotra has the biggest heart in this world .
How easily he forgave them 😛 ...though I still don't like Nimmo but Maa to maa hi hoti hai na 😳
Loved how sumo stopped him from admitting his faults ...his izzat was now hers 😳 .

Nanu our very own aloknath 😆 decided to separate the love birds till wedding 😆
Uff!! Ye zaalim zamana 😆

Aww vakeel babu is all sulking now that his sumo is in TK 😆
He is too cute 😳

Massacre in bhaiya's Raaj 🤣

Shraman almost gave a mini heart attack to mamiji 😆 our lalita pawar 😆

"Kya kata tha jo tum aaise dekh rahe the, aaise"
🤣 🤣 inhe bahut janne ki chull machi thi 😆
Chod do bechare bacho akela lekin kyun puri movie ki story jo janni hai inhe.

Shravan is so besharam 😆 he admitted that he gave her a hickey 😆
Poor sumo 😆 ..sati savitri image ki to lag gyi 😆

Shravu faked a back pain and Sumo fell for it 😆
Kasam se dhakkan hai ye ladki 😆

Heart attack 🤣 ...sumo tu sach me dilayegi ek ladke ko 😆

Swelling ...ahem ahem 😉
Sumo is not tubelight she is fused bulb 😆 ...preeti ki sangati ka asar hai 😆

He apologised for bachelor's night fiasco and sumo forgave him❤️

Apki nazaron ne samjha is a very beautiful song, loved how you used it here

Finally he get see the memory box, the letter, cards movie tickets 😊
I always sumo to show him all these stuffs to him herself. Not that he found it accidently .
I got my wish 😛

Woh pyaar tha tumhara, yeh pyaar hai mera. Tumne hazron wajhe di hai mujhe tumse pyaar karneki, par ek bhi wajhe nahi di ke mai tumse pyaar na karoon. Aur ab doobara kabhi bhi yeh kaha ke tum kaabil nahi mere toh mujhe mere pyaar par shaq hone lagega."
Again seetiyan taaliyan for dialgoues!!
I've said it earlier again I'm saying you are the best dialogue writer ever

The sangeet mehendi haldi ceremony was ❤️
Shraman playing photo shoto was too cute especially their captions 😳
Finally the most awaited wedding happens .
Was it good enough?
Sawal hi galat hai malik...good wood chodiye its beyond awesome 👏 👏
Super duper hit hai ji ye toh!
Love you loads ❤️

P.s.- Its the longest comment I've ever written 😆
I think longer than the previous one 😳

P.p.s- @afsana tum finally malik ko mil hi gayi janu 😳

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Suruchi

@sheeluneelu

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Posted: 8 years ago

#493

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I'll read tomorrow :-)

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Firstly Am very sorry for being so late...very busy week n weakness yet not over

Secondly I'm not going to comment on depth of chapter as it was somthing I can only feel ...and truly it's great feeling...amazing I'm loving it .

Zoya u have absolutely brilliant mind

You have written a fantastic story for us n have given your precious time for writing it. I'm so thankful to u for giving beautiful memory .

Loads of love🤗

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Flibbertigibbet

@Flibbertigibbet

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Posted: 8 years ago

#494

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Toh zoya ji,

Baat kuch aisi hai...

KI AAP NE HUMEIN KUCH KEHNE KE LAAYAQ HI NAHI CHORHAAA!

* a million squishy hugs from thia best friend*

FEELS WALI COMPLETE DEATH HAI YE!

You can not imagine my facial expressions as i read it. I couldnt understand them myself. Let's just say we would have needed saucers to hold my eyes which were ready to fall out their sockets.

I WILL MARRY SHRAVAN IN BAGGY PJs. I will marry shravan wearing coconuts and banana leaves if he wants XD

Honestly, your posts are like the stock market. I keep investing and my investment keeps growing with every word!

*dreaamyy eyeddd*

I GOT SO DAMN FLUSTERRRED OH LORD HELP MY SOUL SHRAVAN MALHOTRA SHIRTLESS EVEN IN TEXT DOES THINGS THAT SHOULD NOT HAPPEN.

#myheartisswelling #withlove #nothingelse #yougutterdimaagh

I am serious! I would feel less shy if i actually walked in on a couple like that XD

Mamiji gets to see more action than we do?!?! XD

Damnnn shravaannn you so naughtyyy #halkathunk #chichoracharmer #

I actually blushed XD

"Aapki nazron ne samjha"

Khatam. Barqaas biryani. Ghar jao. Hoagya tamasha. BAJGAYA BAND FLIBB KE FEELS KA.

THAT SONG IS ULTIMATE <3 It's one of my favourites. Why you murder me so? *ugly cries*

Preeti is so goldfish. Can we distract her and push her off a cliff so i can marry pushkar? Because shravan is kinda taken. :/

#eknahidujasahi

I love this sumo. This sumo is life.

I love their emotional scene. Beautifully written. Dil pe haath rakhkke padhi mai. Naito melt hojata tha.

Damnnn they getting proper marrieddd.

I AM DANCING IN THAT BARAAT. Add "chubby girl doing marfa beside ghodhi" in the update XD that's me XD

In true dakhani words, kya maut chapter tha!! Ababbabababaaah!!! Jaan ibraheem level ki dhoom macha diye!

ASTOUNDINGLY BEAUTIFUL WORK ZOYA! I dont have enough words left in my vocabulary to find nea and new words to say to you.

Only worda left are: cheeq maar angaar update! Aisich barsate raho qayamat! XD

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pal655

@pal655

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Zoya di 🤗 .
Happy Diwali to you. Have great year ahead.
Sorry for the late reply 😭 . Exam coming next week so i was in the zombie mode.
After seeing the length of your post which has out run the India forum's comment limit 😃 , I thought I will right a long comment but this exam And my net sucks . So will finish it quickly.
Wow my favourite chapter. Such a nice and longgg update . Wow the longer,the better.
I have always wanted yo see them getting married in this way. And as I have said that this ss will fulfil all my dreams about shraman so you did. Ok this is another chapter I read twice and still I can read it a couple of times more very easily.

The way shravan handled the situation with his family, I really think that was really nicely thought and written 😃 . Aww our shravan is a sweetheart 😳 .
Uff finally liking and mamiji 😆 . You know why 😉 . She know a lot about jawan khoon haan. Ofcourse three children and after preeti dabbu tells us how romantic she is 😉 .
Love bites in the kitchen. Shravan Said "Maine kaata"really 🤣 🤣. I am still laughing.
Uff shravan Malhotra cant get his hands of his wife for even few days. They will surely end up making beautiful babies soon 😆 .
All functions elaborate . I love your sumo much more than the original sumo. She is much better.

And the memory box makes a grand entry . Kudos to for that .
Ok now lets talk about my favourite part . It was ofcourse the memory box scene. 👏 . That depicts both of their relationship and deep feelings very well.

And the favourite dialogue was ofcourse from our sassy Malhotra. "ok main aaj raat manage kar loonga phir tum kal raat manage kar Lena" 😉 😃 . Wow. Well waiting to see how sumo manages. They are so much in need .

And most importantly thanks for sending me a pm to update this comment. It meant a lot di . Thanks.

So it was a outstanding chapter m you are the writer of the season no doubt 👏 .

With that I will end. Tada. Stay healthy and happy
Much love-priya

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nith125

@nith125

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#496

Res 😊 as usual 😉

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Zoya, your writing is love ❤️ seriously !

There were so many feels to this one, my expressions kept changing throughout. My Sumo is back and how 😃

If I were to list out things that I loved, the first would be the fact that Shravan said he needed time to forgive his parents... Thank you for that, plus the fact that Nirmala does't have to live in Delhi (It is such a relief to me, I could never accept the show one), it is not like she materialised out of thin air. That is just one of the highlights.

I loved the "Back is in the back" and all of Shravan's cute antics. They both have to make up for lost time 😊

Memory box got to see light finally 😉 Beautifully done ! It was seen by the person who was meant to see it. It might sound weird, but I think Shravan needs to see something physical to reiterate the fact that Sumo loved him and waited for him all these years. It is not about "proof" or anything, there is more to it, I don't know how exactly to put it though but in a lot of ways it will change the way he looks at his life in general. See, I think that Shravan irrespective of being a successful lawyer never considered him a success, because inside he felt Sumo had rejected him. I felt that he cried and it was needed, those emotions needed an outlet. I am going overboard here and am going to quote "The Poison Tree" (William Blake) , but I am sparing you the whole poem

"I was angry with my friend;

I told my wrath, my wrath did end.

I was angry with my foe:

I told it not, my wrath did grow.

And I waterd it in fears,

Night & morning with my tears:

And I sunned it with smiles,

And with soft deceitful wiles. "

The issue was that Shravan was so hurt that he started considering his "friend" a"foe" and he couldn't do it, in the end it was he who ate the poison apple, the fruit of his own tree. He kept feeding it with so many lies. The seed has to be removed and years of pain do not vanish. Healing is not magic and the letter and those cards will go a long way. Looks like I made the point 😉 which I set out to make 😆. No more analysis I promise.

In short, this is a masterpiece 👏 . I consider myself very lucky to have read it. Not many can do justice to the ending and you are doing it exceptionally well.

P.S 1 : Something about the word limit was 🤣

P.S 2: Thank you for putting me back on my cloud again , my writing had (ironically) caused me to fall out of it 😉

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Reshma Ahmed

@Perpetuity

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Posted: 8 years ago

#497

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Mere paas bolne ko sachme kuch v nhi. Tu na perfection ko v complex de rhi hai. This is MINDBOGGLINGLY PERFECT. The song ❤️ I got teary eyed when ShraMan descended the stairs hand in hand letting everyone know that they will be together in whatever is to come. That was ❤️ The haemorrhage has certainly done something to Shravan ha. Bnda kya khul gya hai. Not that anyone's complaining ☺️ Aur finally meri entry v ho gyi 😳 And OMFG! Shravan put me in his pocket *dead*
But seriously the way you write ShraMan scenes, it's just perfect. Be it intense, comedy, nok-jhok. And their wedding Those messages ❤️ One more wish fulfilled 🤗
The mamiji scene was 🤣 Kaash hum hote waha ☺️
You know you are just breaking your own record of awesomeness. Thanks a lot for giving us this. OUR EDKV ❤️
And you just dedicated this awesomeness to us 🤗 I just can't thank you enough for this. Love ya yaar. Love ya loads and loads 🤗 I feel extrmly blessed

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Fatiha

@Brainbox1999

Beginner

Posted: 8 years ago

#498

JUST LOVED THIS SO SO SO MUCH!! You're amazing. Loved the dancing bits and the cutesy ShraMan bits and oh god the texting *SWOONS* :D Lots of love, Fatiha

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orion23

@orion23

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: Brainbox1999
JUST LOVED THIS SO SO SO MUCH!! You're amazing. Loved the dancing bits and the cutesy ShraMan bits and oh god the texting *SWOONS* :D Lots of love, Fatiha

First of all, your name!

It's so unique! I love it!

And I'm so glad you loved it!

Thank you so much!!

😛